From 3c06bf443bb2c698b7ef5e9a35999ba68e4a8fe4 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Fri, 28 Dec 2018 19:12:04 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 001/124] Add Makusu's story --- comic/{miniajax => makkusu(part-1)}/readme.md | 5 ++--- 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-) rename comic/{miniajax => makkusu(part-1)}/readme.md (95%) diff --git a/comic/miniajax/readme.md b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md similarity index 95% rename from comic/miniajax/readme.md rename to comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md index e6b4bc9..5bf9817 100644 --- a/comic/miniajax/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md @@ -36,9 +36,7 @@ ## Act 1 -- Leona selects Jax to join her Kyshumu is angry that she didn't invite her own sister - -- Leona Invites Minia to join the CyberOps Kyshumu is angry that she didn't invite her own fiance +Airiona is found outside the home of Makkusu ### 1. Ordinary World - Minia is hated among cybervators no one would team up with her even her own sister as it seems that she only cares about making money and nothing more. Jax is the only one that excepts and decides to work with her @@ -92,6 +90,7 @@ Avis is accused of being a cyvolter and is killed by Kyshumu ### 9. Reward (Seizing The Sword) Minia is Given Avis' Cyber.Beast and replaces him ## Act 3 +Makkusu Fights Jax in the championships ### 10. The Road Back ### 11. Resurrection ### 12. Return With The Elixir From 1521dc94a78e2f24f892ab65fe96963cf0bf6c8b Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 8 Jan 2019 21:03:35 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 002/124] Changed to Makkusu outline --- comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md | 109 ++++++++++++++------------------ 1 file changed, 48 insertions(+), 61 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md index 5bf9817..06d533a 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md @@ -1,4 +1,4 @@ -# Cyber.Beast(miniajax) outline +# Cyber.Beast(Makkusu) outline ## Brainstorm - Roles @@ -34,63 +34,50 @@ - Minia discovers who eclipse is or reveals that she already knows -## Act 1 - -Airiona is found outside the home of Makkusu -### 1. Ordinary World -- Minia is hated among cybervators no one would team up with her even her own sister as it seems that she only cares about making money and nothing more. Jax is the only one that excepts and decides to work with her - -### 2. Call To Adventure -### 3. Refusal Of The Call -- Minia initially rejects the CyberOps and wants to focus on earning money for her family but finds a far more enticing goal upon learning the Cyvolters are looking to change the world in favor of citizens -### 4. Meeting The Mentor -- Minia Teams up with Xenos in the CNS and is given the code name Airiona as a Cyvolter - -## Act 2 - -### 5. Crossing The Threshold -- Minia attempts to fight a Cyber.Beast in space stealing Avis' Cyber.Beast to do so -### 6. Tests, Allies, Enemies -- After falling on the appartment of Makkusu she becomes his personal cybervator steping in to protect him from his bully Akia dispite enforcement being unecessary - -- Makkusu recognizes Minia - - Makkusu: hey arent you the Cybervator everyone calls Meania you don't seem all that mean - - Minia(yelling): It's Minia I hate that name - - Makkusu: ha ha ha. Ok - -- Upon Minia leaving - Makkusu: See ya later Minia - - Minia:(scowlling) it’s Minia - - Makkusu: Myy Nia - - Minia:(scowling with head tilted to the right)Nooo, Mih nee ah. - - Makkusu: nope I found you so know your My Nia - - Minia:(she laughs/giggles loudly and rolls eyes with head up transitioning from scowling) ok fine - - Xenos(half smiling): well, It's better than Meania - - Minia: hey! I told you not to call me that - - Minia: weeell that's beacuse you're [special/different] - - Makkusu: how so? - - Minia: -### 7. Approach To The Inmost Cave -- Minia suggests enlisting Makkusu as a cyvolter -### 8. Ordeal -Avis is accused of being a cyvolter and is killed by Kyshumu -### 9. Reward (Seizing The Sword) -Minia is Given Avis' Cyber.Beast and replaces him -## Act 3 -Makkusu Fights Jax in the championships -### 10. The Road Back -### 11. Resurrection -### 12. Return With The Elixir +## Arc 1 +### Act 1 + 1. Ordinary World + Makkusu watches Championships + Alex Wins the Championships + Xenos loses the Championships + Kyshumu Wins the Championships + 2. Call To Adventure + Makkusu Applies to be a Cybervator + 3. Refusal Of The Call + Makkusu is rejected + 4. Meeting The Mentor + Airiona is found + Makkusu is given a cyberbeast +### Act 2 + 5. Crossing The Threshold + Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace + The 22? championships is going on + Makkusu trains his body + 6. Tests, Allies, Enemies + Minia teams up with Makkusu + Makkusu helps someone + Makkusu loses to jax + Makkusu looks ahead to see who his team may be + Minia helps Makkusu who is bullied + 7. Approach To The Inmost Cave + Makkusu might not have enough points + Some one he helped before allows him to compete + Makkusu is seen outside of cyberspacae + Alex becomes chief + Makkusu works on his new tech + 8. Ordeal + Kyshumu announces that citizens cant compete + 9. Reward (Seizing The Sword) + Makkusu uses his tech to compete + Makkusu team is formed + 10. The Road Back + Alex allows Makkusu to compete with BluNet + An ultimatum/wager is purposed for Makkusu +### Act 3 + 11. Resurrection + Makkusu fights Jax + Max suggests a line up change + 12. Return With The Elixir + Makkusu wins/loses championship + Cyvolters are teased/revealed + The CNS is shut down? \ No newline at end of file From 7aaf91e23545f11abbe214ee103416e4fa85d04f Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 8 Jan 2019 21:29:35 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 003/124] changed formating --- comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md | 86 ++++++++++++++++----------------- 1 file changed, 43 insertions(+), 43 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md index 06d533a..c9e7da0 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md @@ -36,48 +36,48 @@ ## Arc 1 ### Act 1 - 1. Ordinary World - Makkusu watches Championships - Alex Wins the Championships - Xenos loses the Championships - Kyshumu Wins the Championships - 2. Call To Adventure - Makkusu Applies to be a Cybervator - 3. Refusal Of The Call - Makkusu is rejected - 4. Meeting The Mentor - Airiona is found - Makkusu is given a cyberbeast +1. Ordinary World + - Makkusu watches Championships + Alex Wins the Championships + Xenos loses the Championships + Kyshumu Wins the Championships +2. Call To Adventure + - Makkusu Applies to be a Cybervator +3. Refusal Of The Call + - Makkusu is rejected +4. Meeting The Mentor + - Airiona is found + - Makkusu is given a cyberbeast ### Act 2 - 5. Crossing The Threshold - Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace - The 22? championships is going on - Makkusu trains his body - 6. Tests, Allies, Enemies - Minia teams up with Makkusu - Makkusu helps someone - Makkusu loses to jax - Makkusu looks ahead to see who his team may be - Minia helps Makkusu who is bullied - 7. Approach To The Inmost Cave - Makkusu might not have enough points - Some one he helped before allows him to compete - Makkusu is seen outside of cyberspacae - Alex becomes chief - Makkusu works on his new tech - 8. Ordeal - Kyshumu announces that citizens cant compete - 9. Reward (Seizing The Sword) - Makkusu uses his tech to compete - Makkusu team is formed - 10. The Road Back - Alex allows Makkusu to compete with BluNet - An ultimatum/wager is purposed for Makkusu +5. Crossing The Threshold + - Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace + - The 22? championships is going on + - Makkusu trains his body +6. Tests, Allies, Enemies + - Minia teams up with Makkusu + - Makkusu helps someone + - Makkusu loses to jax + - Makkusu looks ahead to see who his team may be + - Minia helps Makkusu who is bullied +7. Approach To The Inmost Cave + - Makkusu might not have enough points + - Some one he helped before allows him to compete + - Makkusu is seen outside of cyberspacae + - Alex becomes chief + - Makkusu works on his new tech +8. Ordeal + - Kyshumu announces that citizens cant compete +9. Reward (Seizing The Sword) + - Makkusu uses his tech to compete + - Makkusu team is formed +10. The Road Back + - Alex allows Makkusu to compete with BluNet + - An ultimatum/wager is purposed for Makkusu ### Act 3 - 11. Resurrection - Makkusu fights Jax - Max suggests a line up change - 12. Return With The Elixir - Makkusu wins/loses championship - Cyvolters are teased/revealed - The CNS is shut down? \ No newline at end of file +11. Resurrection + - Makkusu fights Jax + Max suggests a line up change +12. Return With The Elixir + - Makkusu wins/loses championship + - Cyvolters are teased/revealed + - The CNS is shut down? \ No newline at end of file From f955754049da2f82500ef9a560258da0f6db0d8b Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 8 Jan 2019 21:31:46 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 004/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md | 60 ++++++++++++++++----------------- 1 file changed, 30 insertions(+), 30 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md index c9e7da0..5c78d8a 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md @@ -35,49 +35,49 @@ - Minia discovers who eclipse is or reveals that she already knows ## Arc 1 -### Act 1 -1. Ordinary World - - Makkusu watches Championships +###Act 1 +1. rdinary World +- Makkusu watches Championships Alex Wins the Championships Xenos loses the Championships Kyshumu Wins the Championships 2. Call To Adventure - - Makkusu Applies to be a Cybervator +- Makkusu Applies to be a Cybervator 3. Refusal Of The Call - - Makkusu is rejected +- Makkusu is rejected 4. Meeting The Mentor - - Airiona is found - - Makkusu is given a cyberbeast -### Act 2 +- Airiona is found +- Makkusu is given a cyberbeast +###Act 2 5. Crossing The Threshold - - Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace - - The 22? championships is going on - - Makkusu trains his body +- Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace +- The 22? championships is going on +- Makkusu trains his body 6. Tests, Allies, Enemies - - Minia teams up with Makkusu - - Makkusu helps someone - - Makkusu loses to jax - - Makkusu looks ahead to see who his team may be - - Minia helps Makkusu who is bullied +- Minia teams up with Makkusu +- Makkusu helps someone +- Makkusu loses to jax +- Makkusu looks ahead to see who his team may be +- Minia helps Makkusu who is bullied 7. Approach To The Inmost Cave - - Makkusu might not have enough points - - Some one he helped before allows him to compete - - Makkusu is seen outside of cyberspacae - - Alex becomes chief - - Makkusu works on his new tech +- Makkusu might not have enough points +- Some one he helped before allows him to compete +- Makkusu is seen outside of cyberspacae +- Alex becomes chief +- Makkusu works on his new tech 8. Ordeal - - Kyshumu announces that citizens cant compete +- Kyshumu announces that citizens cant compete 9. Reward (Seizing The Sword) - - Makkusu uses his tech to compete - - Makkusu team is formed +- Makkusu uses his tech to compete +- Makkusu team is formed 10. The Road Back - - Alex allows Makkusu to compete with BluNet - - An ultimatum/wager is purposed for Makkusu +- Alex allows Makkusu to compete with BluNet +- An ultimatum/wager is purposed for Makkusu ### Act 3 11. Resurrection - - Makkusu fights Jax +- Makkusu fights Jax Max suggests a line up change 12. Return With The Elixir - - Makkusu wins/loses championship - - Cyvolters are teased/revealed - - The CNS is shut down? \ No newline at end of file +- Makkusu wins/loses championship +- Cyvolters are teased/revealed +- The CNS is shut down? \ No newline at end of file From 74a0adcfd71089ec9368e4d5b5adb065d4f3088f Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 8 Jan 2019 21:33:13 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 005/124] Revert "Update readme.md" This reverts commit f955754049da2f82500ef9a560258da0f6db0d8b. --- comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md | 60 ++++++++++++++++----------------- 1 file changed, 30 insertions(+), 30 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md index 5c78d8a..c9e7da0 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md @@ -35,49 +35,49 @@ - Minia discovers who eclipse is or reveals that she already knows ## Arc 1 -###Act 1 -1. rdinary World -- Makkusu watches Championships +### Act 1 +1. Ordinary World + - Makkusu watches Championships Alex Wins the Championships Xenos loses the Championships Kyshumu Wins the Championships 2. Call To Adventure -- Makkusu Applies to be a Cybervator + - Makkusu Applies to be a Cybervator 3. Refusal Of The Call -- Makkusu is rejected + - Makkusu is rejected 4. Meeting The Mentor -- Airiona is found -- Makkusu is given a cyberbeast -###Act 2 + - Airiona is found + - Makkusu is given a cyberbeast +### Act 2 5. Crossing The Threshold -- Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace -- The 22? championships is going on -- Makkusu trains his body + - Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace + - The 22? championships is going on + - Makkusu trains his body 6. Tests, Allies, Enemies -- Minia teams up with Makkusu -- Makkusu helps someone -- Makkusu loses to jax -- Makkusu looks ahead to see who his team may be -- Minia helps Makkusu who is bullied + - Minia teams up with Makkusu + - Makkusu helps someone + - Makkusu loses to jax + - Makkusu looks ahead to see who his team may be + - Minia helps Makkusu who is bullied 7. Approach To The Inmost Cave -- Makkusu might not have enough points -- Some one he helped before allows him to compete -- Makkusu is seen outside of cyberspacae -- Alex becomes chief -- Makkusu works on his new tech + - Makkusu might not have enough points + - Some one he helped before allows him to compete + - Makkusu is seen outside of cyberspacae + - Alex becomes chief + - Makkusu works on his new tech 8. Ordeal -- Kyshumu announces that citizens cant compete + - Kyshumu announces that citizens cant compete 9. Reward (Seizing The Sword) -- Makkusu uses his tech to compete -- Makkusu team is formed + - Makkusu uses his tech to compete + - Makkusu team is formed 10. The Road Back -- Alex allows Makkusu to compete with BluNet -- An ultimatum/wager is purposed for Makkusu + - Alex allows Makkusu to compete with BluNet + - An ultimatum/wager is purposed for Makkusu ### Act 3 11. Resurrection -- Makkusu fights Jax + - Makkusu fights Jax Max suggests a line up change 12. Return With The Elixir -- Makkusu wins/loses championship -- Cyvolters are teased/revealed -- The CNS is shut down? \ No newline at end of file + - Makkusu wins/loses championship + - Cyvolters are teased/revealed + - The CNS is shut down? \ No newline at end of file From 87ec1ad0be6ef34a8f339a29b8f11504d4cdb3bd Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 8 Jan 2019 21:43:35 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 006/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md | 9 ++++++--- 1 file changed, 6 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md index c9e7da0..b7494f4 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md @@ -38,9 +38,12 @@ ### Act 1 1. Ordinary World - Makkusu watches Championships - Alex Wins the Championships - Xenos loses the Championships - Kyshumu Wins the Championships + - Alex Wins the Championships + After Alex wins a fan of the other team runs up to him(maybe a younger Makkusu) and says I don't like you any more. + + Alex is asked by a reporter what he will do know that he won. He says he will become chief + - Xenos loses the Championships + - Kyshumu Wins the Championships 2. Call To Adventure - Makkusu Applies to be a Cybervator 3. Refusal Of The Call From db146132559391be5fb0503e297c43ea699ae3b5 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 8 Jan 2019 21:44:45 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 007/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md | 5 +++-- 1 file changed, 3 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md index b7494f4..8d89d27 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md @@ -39,9 +39,10 @@ 1. Ordinary World - Makkusu watches Championships - Alex Wins the Championships - After Alex wins a fan of the other team runs up to him(maybe a younger Makkusu) and says I don't like you any more. - Alex is asked by a reporter what he will do know that he won. He says he will become chief + After Alex wins a fan of the other team runs up to him(maybe a younger Makkusu) and says I don't like you any more. + + Alex is asked by a reporter what he will do know that he won. He says he will become chief - Xenos loses the Championships - Kyshumu Wins the Championships 2. Call To Adventure From 59ab655be7b2db55cf5c45146d7922817c9c0cc0 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 8 Jan 2019 21:49:18 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 008/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md | 3 +-- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 2 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md index 8d89d27..0aaee50 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md @@ -38,8 +38,7 @@ ### Act 1 1. Ordinary World - Makkusu watches Championships - - Alex Wins the Championships - + - **Alex Wins the Championships** After Alex wins a fan of the other team runs up to him(maybe a younger Makkusu) and says I don't like you any more. Alex is asked by a reporter what he will do know that he won. He says he will become chief From c4263672640e3827e0a5451cd13b80aafc991136 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 8 Jan 2019 21:51:07 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 009/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md | 3 ++- 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md index 0aaee50..582c3e0 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md @@ -38,7 +38,8 @@ ### Act 1 1. Ordinary World - Makkusu watches Championships - - **Alex Wins the Championships** + - **Alex Wins the Championships** + After Alex wins a fan of the other team runs up to him(maybe a younger Makkusu) and says I don't like you any more. Alex is asked by a reporter what he will do know that he won. He says he will become chief From 9a363beeb54a01abe6e0e7bf9f3b979b48f2bdc8 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 9 Jan 2019 08:01:47 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 010/124] Added event descriptions --- comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md | 73 ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++--- 1 file changed, 67 insertions(+), 6 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md index 582c3e0..d7671c3 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md @@ -43,8 +43,16 @@ After Alex wins a fan of the other team runs up to him(maybe a younger Makkusu) and says I don't like you any more. Alex is asked by a reporter what he will do know that he won. He says he will become chief - - Xenos loses the Championships - - Kyshumu Wins the Championships + + - **Xenos loses the Championships** + **Shown as a early flash back:** + After Xenos loses and Makkusu who is fan of him runs up to him(maybe a younger Makkusu) and says I don't like you any more. + - **Kyshumu Wins the Championships** + + After Kyshumu wins a fan of the other team runs up to him(maybe a younger Makkusu) and says I don't like you any more. + + Kyshumu is asked by a reporter what he will do know that he won. He says he will become chief + 2. Call To Adventure - Makkusu Applies to be a Cybervator 3. Refusal Of The Call @@ -57,31 +65,84 @@ - Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace - The 22? championships is going on - Makkusu trains his body + + Expecting to be in the tournament he trains his body and ignores his doubters + 6. Tests, Allies, Enemies - Minia teams up with Makkusu + + Mina is no longer paired with her sister Leona as she has decided to team up with Jax who has yet to find a pair. + + This leads Mina to find and pair up with Makkusu. + - Makkusu helps someone - Makkusu loses to jax - Makkusu looks ahead to see who his team may be + + This team consists of Minia and Jax + - Minia helps Makkusu who is bullied + 7. Approach To The Inmost Cave - Makkusu might not have enough points - Some one he helped before allows him to compete - - Makkusu is seen outside of cyberspacae + + The person either resigns or give him on fight that he needs to be ranked high enough to joins as they don't need them (thunora?) + + - Makkusu is seen outside of cyberspace + + Makkusu has not been seen out side of cyberspace for a while but when we see him he now has hair on his head and no longer has a fat belly. + - Alex becomes chief - Makkusu works on his new tech 8. Ordeal - Kyshumu announces that citizens cant compete + + He suggest that it is to dangerous and not having armor they are more likely to be killed and that they cant regrow limbs like a real cybervator + 9. Reward (Seizing The Sword) - Makkusu uses his tech to compete - - Makkusu team is formed + - Makkusu's team is formed + + Makkusu(back up green/white) Ace Harmony(red/blue) Knilla(black) Airiona/Minia(green) Xenos 10. The Road Back - Alex allows Makkusu to compete with BluNet + + Alex has been newly elected as the Chief of BluNet + - An ultimatum/wager is purposed for Makkusu + + With Makkusu joining ReNet Kyshumu tells the CNS/NRA that no Citizen should be allowed to compete in the CNS. + + They discuss the possibility of angering the citizens if they don't let him compete citing the decrease in ReNet stock as an example. + + Alex makes a ultimatum suggesting that a citizen is unlikely to win the championships--If Makkusu loses no Citizen will be allowed to compete in the CNS again. + + Someones says and if he wins + + Alex is about to say something + + Kyshumu(interrupts): He won't. I'll make sure of it. + + some: With al due respect sir you can't compete in the championships any more you're the chief. + + Kyhsumu: I know that I can't but my wife can + + :She's been retired for years!? + + Kyshumu(angry):Fine! ### Act 3 11. Resurrection - Makkusu fights Jax - Max suggests a line up change + -Max suggests a line up change + + Mina is changed from the blue to the green position + + Harmony goes from red to blue after being calmed or Xenos take Blue 12. Return With The Elixir - Makkusu wins/loses championship + + If Makkusu wins it is because Tomasina lets him or is distracted by the fact that he looks/feels familiar + - Cyvolters are teased/revealed - - The CNS is shut down? \ No newline at end of file + - The CNS is shut down? From eed3433892cf6f3ede0402b5299c94198896c8fa Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 9 Jan 2019 08:09:59 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 011/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md | 28 +--------------------------- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 27 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md index d7671c3..8762b10 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md @@ -6,33 +6,7 @@ - Handlers/Cornerman/crew: Makkusu? - Fan: Makkusu - Cybervator: Minia, Jax - - **CyberOps** - does that dirty work that no one else could or would do to maintain the world order. Missions are assigned in level dependent on how much they are trust. - - level 1: Throwing matches to maximse profits and maintain perceived competitiveness to keep fans happy and to make sure weaelth is properly destributed - - level 2: Cheating also to maximse profits and maintain perceived competitiveness - - level 3: Killing Cyber.Beast knowing that which are former cybervators - - level 4: killing cybervators/citizens that may disrupt order (only 12 cybervators are at this level at one time) - - Xenos however does the opposite and chooses cybervators that will hesitate to complete these missions whivh is why Minia and not Jax is selected to join the CyberOps. - - Cyvolters - - - -- Minia joins the cyvolters after Kyshumu kills Avis and uses the name Airiona - -- Minia Joins the Cyvolters replacing Avis - -- Jax and Minia fight in space sending Minia crashing on Makkusu's appartment - -- Minia learns that the Cyber.Beast she is assigned to kill are former Cybervators and learning so is a test of her loyalty/trustworthyness - -- Makkusu goes from being a fan to cyberops handler for minia/Makkusu becomes the first citzen to a handler for a cybervator in the CNS - -- Minia discovers who eclipse is or reveals that she already knows + - Chief: Kyshumu, Alex ## Arc 1 ### Act 1 From 82034fc5b606fa876c08ce97cc970b62472c88a1 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 9 Jan 2019 13:04:20 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 012/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md | 43 ++++++++++++++++++++------------- 1 file changed, 26 insertions(+), 17 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md index 8762b10..fe0456d 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md @@ -33,7 +33,7 @@ - Makkusu is rejected 4. Meeting The Mentor - Airiona is found - - Makkusu is given a cyberbeast + - Makkusu is given a cyberbeast and invited to be a cybervator ### Act 2 5. Crossing The Threshold - Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace @@ -42,37 +42,46 @@ Expecting to be in the tournament he trains his body and ignores his doubters -6. Tests, Allies, Enemies - - Minia teams up with Makkusu +6. Tests, Allies, Enemies + - Makkusu helps someone in cyberspace - Mina is no longer paired with her sister Leona as she has decided to team up with Jax who has yet to find a pair. - - This leads Mina to find and pair up with Makkusu. - - - Makkusu helps someone + he has develop a reputation for being an alturistic cybervator not just help others but in terms of giving money unlike other cybervators he gives 70% or more of his earnings to fans + - Makkusu looks ahead to see who his team may be if he earns a spot + + This team consists of Minia and Jax - Makkusu loses to jax - - Makkusu looks ahead to see who his team may be + + - Makkusu is seen outside of cyberspace - This team consists of Minia and Jax + Makkusu has not been seen out side of cyberspace for a while but when we see him he now has hair on his head and no longer has a fat belly. + - Minia fights Airiona in cyberspace + - Mini falls in the backyard of Makkusu + - Makkusu learns that Airiona is a cyvolter and he may have been helping them +7. Approach To The Inmost Cave - Minia helps Makkusu who is bullied -7. Approach To The Inmost Cave + Akia tells haha look at Makkusu trying to get buff you think that just because you are geting in shape you will become a cybervator. lets see what you got. + + It aperars like he might stand up for his self but he doesn't - Makkusu might not have enough points - - Some one he helped before allows him to compete + - Someone he helped before allows him to compete The person either resigns or give him on fight that he needs to be ranked high enough to joins as they don't need them (thunora?) - - Makkusu is seen outside of cyberspace - - Makkusu has not been seen out side of cyberspace for a while but when we see him he now has hair on his head and no longer has a fat belly. + - Alex becomes chief - Makkusu works on his new tech 8. Ordeal - - Kyshumu announces that citizens cant compete + - Citzens are now offically allowed to compete + + All of the citzen who has become cybervators up until now to prevent this citins will be allowed to join the CNS. this is done to prevent them from joining the cybervators just so that they can join the CNS. - He suggest that it is to dangerous and not having armor they are more likely to be killed and that they cant regrow limbs like a real cybervator + - Kyshumu announces that citizens shouldn't compete + + He suggest that it is too dangerous and not having armor they are more likely to be killed and that they can't regrow limbs like a real cybervator + 9. Reward (Seizing The Sword) - Makkusu uses his tech to compete From 1f22422fae69d46d712e73f78d1e3ed7076d1122 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 9 Jan 2019 15:23:37 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 013/124] Update readme.md Expanded on the beggings of Minia and Makkusu's relationship and it cause and effect on driving the plot. --- comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md | 30 +++++++++++++++++++++++------- 1 file changed, 23 insertions(+), 7 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md index fe0456d..b218070 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md @@ -5,7 +5,7 @@ - Broadcaster/Commentator : Spike, Makkusu? - Handlers/Cornerman/crew: Makkusu? - Fan: Makkusu - - Cybervator: Minia, Jax + - Cybervator: Minia, Jax, Airiona, Xenos, Ace, Harmony - Chief: Kyshumu, Alex ## Arc 1 @@ -57,8 +57,20 @@ - Minia fights Airiona in cyberspace - Mini falls in the backyard of Makkusu + + Makkusu asks what happend Minia tells him that she is not supposed to tell him but because he saved her that he will tell him. She insist that he does not tell anyone because if word gets out she will be in trouble + + - Makkusu tells a worried Spike what happen + + it is placed on the news Minia teleports to Makkusu enraged that he told + - Makkusu learns that Airiona is a cyvolter and he may have been helping them 7. Approach To The Inmost Cave + - Makkusu finds old cyber.tech + + Makkusu realizes that even if he makes it into the tournament he won't be of much help since he can't go into a BurstDrive mode. + + He finds a hole in the ground left by Minia in it is old cyber.tech this is just what he needs to compete on even grounds - Minia helps Makkusu who is bullied Akia tells haha look at Makkusu trying to get buff you think that just because you are geting in shape you will become a cybervator. lets see what you got. @@ -67,7 +79,7 @@ - Makkusu might not have enough points - Someone he helped before allows him to compete - The person either resigns or give him on fight that he needs to be ranked high enough to joins as they don't need them (thunora?) + The person either resigns or give him the fight that he needs to be ranked high enough to joins as they don't need them (thunora?) @@ -76,7 +88,7 @@ 8. Ordeal - Citzens are now offically allowed to compete - All of the citzen who has become cybervators up until now to prevent this citins will be allowed to join the CNS. this is done to prevent them from joining the cybervators just so that they can join the CNS. + All of the citzen who has become cybervators up until now to prevent this citizens will be allowed to join the CNS. this is done to prevent them from joining the cybervators just so that they can join the CNS. - Kyshumu announces that citizens shouldn't compete @@ -87,8 +99,12 @@ - Makkusu uses his tech to compete - Makkusu's team is formed - Makkusu(back up green/white) Ace Harmony(red/blue) Knilla(black) Airiona/Minia(green) Xenos + Makkusu(back up green/white) Ace Harmony(red/blue) Knilla(black) ~~Airiona~~(green) Xenos + - Makkusu gets to talk to his opponets Minia and Jax Before the tournament + + he asks Minia what happened to her shirt 10. The Road Back + - Alex allows Makkusu to compete with BluNet Alex has been newly elected as the Chief of BluNet @@ -101,13 +117,13 @@ Alex makes a ultimatum suggesting that a citizen is unlikely to win the championships--If Makkusu loses no Citizen will be allowed to compete in the CNS again. - Someones says and if he wins + :and if he wins Alex is about to say something Kyshumu(interrupts): He won't. I'll make sure of it. - some: With al due respect sir you can't compete in the championships any more you're the chief. + : With al due respect sir you can't compete in the championships any more you're the chief. Kyhsumu: I know that I can't but my wife can @@ -127,5 +143,5 @@ If Makkusu wins it is because Tomasina lets him or is distracted by the fact that he looks/feels familiar - - Cyvolters are teased/revealed + - Cyvolters are revealed - The CNS is shut down? From a58a23d905a7638a6a2432a6e6de6c89c8e1aaf2 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 9 Jan 2019 15:24:22 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 014/124] Rename comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md to comic/makkusu/readme.md --- comic/{makkusu(part-1) => makkusu}/readme.md | 0 1 file changed, 0 insertions(+), 0 deletions(-) rename comic/{makkusu(part-1) => makkusu}/readme.md (100%) diff --git a/comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md similarity index 100% rename from comic/makkusu(part-1)/readme.md rename to comic/makkusu/readme.md From f5fd43fe8f9fc73a53fa3b34ff11c21834177745 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 9 Jan 2019 16:30:05 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 015/124] Added episode estimates --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 39 +++++++++++++++++++++++++-------------- 1 file changed, 25 insertions(+), 14 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index b218070..6158098 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -10,7 +10,8 @@ ## Arc 1 ### Act 1 -1. Ordinary World +1. **Ordinary World**
+Episodes: 1 - Makkusu watches Championships - **Alex Wins the Championships** @@ -27,22 +28,27 @@ Kyshumu is asked by a reporter what he will do know that he won. He says he will become chief -2. Call To Adventure +2. **Call To Adventure**
+Episodes: 2 - Makkusu Applies to be a Cybervator -3. Refusal Of The Call +3. **Refusal Of The Call**
+Episodes: 3 - Makkusu is rejected -4. Meeting The Mentor +4. **Meeting The Mentor**
+Episodes: 4, 5 - Airiona is found - Makkusu is given a cyberbeast and invited to be a cybervator ### Act 2 -5. Crossing The Threshold +5. **Crossing The Threshold**
+Episodes: 6, 7, 8, 9 - Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace - The 22? championships is going on - Makkusu trains his body Expecting to be in the tournament he trains his body and ignores his doubters -6. Tests, Allies, Enemies +6. **Tests, Allies, Enemies**
+Episodes: 9, 10, 11, 12 - Makkusu helps someone in cyberspace he has develop a reputation for being an alturistic cybervator not just help others but in terms of giving money unlike other cybervators he gives 70% or more of his earnings to fans @@ -65,7 +71,8 @@ it is placed on the news Minia teleports to Makkusu enraged that he told - Makkusu learns that Airiona is a cyvolter and he may have been helping them -7. Approach To The Inmost Cave +7. **Approach To The Inmost Cave**
+Episodes: 13, 14 - Makkusu finds old cyber.tech Makkusu realizes that even if he makes it into the tournament he won't be of much help since he can't go into a BurstDrive mode. @@ -75,7 +82,7 @@ Akia tells haha look at Makkusu trying to get buff you think that just because you are geting in shape you will become a cybervator. lets see what you got. - It aperars like he might stand up for his self but he doesn't + It appears like he might stand up for his self but he doesn't - Makkusu might not have enough points - Someone he helped before allows him to compete @@ -85,7 +92,8 @@ - Alex becomes chief - Makkusu works on his new tech -8. Ordeal +8. **Ordeal**
+Episodes: 15 - Citzens are now offically allowed to compete All of the citzen who has become cybervators up until now to prevent this citizens will be allowed to join the CNS. this is done to prevent them from joining the cybervators just so that they can join the CNS. @@ -95,7 +103,8 @@ He suggest that it is too dangerous and not having armor they are more likely to be killed and that they can't regrow limbs like a real cybervator -9. Reward (Seizing The Sword) +9. **Reward (Seizing The Sword)**
+Episodes: 16 - Makkusu uses his tech to compete - Makkusu's team is formed @@ -103,8 +112,8 @@ - Makkusu gets to talk to his opponets Minia and Jax Before the tournament he asks Minia what happened to her shirt -10. The Road Back - +10. **The Road Back**
+Episodes: 17, 18, 19 - Alex allows Makkusu to compete with BluNet Alex has been newly elected as the Chief of BluNet @@ -131,14 +140,16 @@ Kyshumu(angry):Fine! ### Act 3 -11. Resurrection +11. **Resurrection**
+Episodes: 20, 21 - Makkusu fights Jax -Max suggests a line up change Mina is changed from the blue to the green position Harmony goes from red to blue after being calmed or Xenos take Blue -12. Return With The Elixir +12. **Return With The Elixir**
+Episodes: 22 - Makkusu wins/loses championship If Makkusu wins it is because Tomasina lets him or is distracted by the fact that he looks/feels familiar From 59786c1e326a06128afc38e07bb62e2ce9ad26c3 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 9 Jan 2019 16:32:11 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 016/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 6158098..4c56760 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -1,6 +1,6 @@ # Cyber.Beast(Makkusu) outline ## Brainstorm - +- Episodes: 22-27 - Roles - Broadcaster/Commentator : Spike, Makkusu? - Handlers/Cornerman/crew: Makkusu? From accdca782499c2d0e9631960014c76698f2b65c0 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 9 Jan 2019 16:39:28 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 017/124] Create episode 1 outline --- comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md | 4 ++++ 1 file changed, 4 insertions(+) create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..d562321 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md @@ -0,0 +1,4 @@ +# Episode 1 Outline +Intro +Support +Transition From b64df8e36c0f2104ac67beb1c2dbdc2736b7f80a Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 9 Jan 2019 22:27:06 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 018/124] Change Episode format Episode one will contest of both the Ordinary World and Call To Adventure. This way the main character is more properly introduced --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 4 ++-- 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 4c56760..700c77e 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -29,10 +29,10 @@ Episodes: 1 Kyshumu is asked by a reporter what he will do know that he won. He says he will become chief 2. **Call To Adventure**
-Episodes: 2 +Episodes: 1 - Makkusu Applies to be a Cybervator 3. **Refusal Of The Call**
-Episodes: 3 +Episodes: 2,3 - Makkusu is rejected 4. **Meeting The Mentor**
Episodes: 4, 5 From ecc1ad91af542edd244a2efbc3a9535e1950eb98 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 9 Jan 2019 23:01:24 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 019/124] Update outline --- comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md | 29 ++++++++++++++++++++++++++--- 1 file changed, 26 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md index d562321..cc6dbb8 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md @@ -1,4 +1,27 @@ # Episode 1 Outline -Intro -Support -Transition +## Act 1 +The ending of CNS Championships is shown. An 8 year old Makkusu is shown watching as a fan + +## Act 2 +After the Match + +**Makkusu:** Hey mister hey mister + +*Tomasina/Xenos/Kyshumu Turns around preparing to give n interview* + +**Makkusu:** I don't like you anymore + +**Tomasina/Xenos/Kyshumu:** What did I do + +**Makkusu's Gurdian**(*pulling Makkusu away*)/**Akia**(*jumping in front of Makkusu*): he he Makkusu's upset because you lost/beat his favorite cybervator + +**Makkusu:** Just you wait when I'm old enough I'm gonna be a better Cybervator than even you + +**Tomasina/Kyshumu/Xenos** (*rubs the top of his head*): Ha ha ha. I'll be waiting. + +10 years later Makkusu is now old enough to compete in the CNS + +Makkusu is teased about being delusional trying become a cybervator when he doesn't even have a tail + +## Act 3 +Makkusu starts to have doubts but submits his application regardless From 0a122089b4456a37c0b91cbe7fd776a39f9e94ff Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 9 Jan 2019 23:06:53 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 020/124] Created an alternate Act 3 --- comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md | 12 +++++++++++- 1 file changed, 11 insertions(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md index cc6dbb8..da0d297 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md @@ -19,9 +19,19 @@ After the Match **Tomasina/Kyshumu/Xenos** (*rubs the top of his head*): Ha ha ha. I'll be waiting. + + +## Act 3 10 years later Makkusu is now old enough to compete in the CNS Makkusu is teased about being delusional trying become a cybervator when he doesn't even have a tail -## Act 3 Makkusu starts to have doubts but submits his application regardless +
+ +10 years later Makkusu is now old enough to compete in the CNS + +Makkusu submits his application to become a Cybervator + +Makkusu is teased about being delusional trying become a cybervator when he doesn't even have a tail + From 9863050132f62dc73011fc384341292cb40106cf Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Thu, 10 Jan 2019 08:41:16 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 021/124] Fixed Typo --- comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md index da0d297..aa97941 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md @@ -7,7 +7,7 @@ After the Match **Makkusu:** Hey mister hey mister -*Tomasina/Xenos/Kyshumu Turns around preparing to give n interview* +*Tomasina/Xenos/Kyshumu Turns around preparing to give him an autograph* **Makkusu:** I don't like you anymore From ac775f76c2d89c186b444bd48ceb514790563df6 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Thu, 10 Jan 2019 09:04:14 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 022/124] Add page estimates for each act --- comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md | 6 ++++++ 1 file changed, 6 insertions(+) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md index aa97941..42723b6 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md @@ -1,8 +1,12 @@ # Episode 1 Outline ## Act 1 +Pages: 1, 2, 3 + The ending of CNS Championships is shown. An 8 year old Makkusu is shown watching as a fan ## Act 2 +Pages: 4, 5, 6, 7 + After the Match **Makkusu:** Hey mister hey mister @@ -22,6 +26,8 @@ After the Match ## Act 3 +Pages: 8, 9, 10 + 10 years later Makkusu is now old enough to compete in the CNS Makkusu is teased about being delusional trying become a cybervator when he doesn't even have a tail From d2e19220079e166945311221cdce4f20dc94a0ff Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Thu, 10 Jan 2019 12:47:03 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 023/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md | 1 + 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md index 42723b6..5e979ea 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md @@ -8,6 +8,7 @@ The ending of CNS Championships is shown. An 8 year old Makkusu is shown watchin Pages: 4, 5, 6, 7 After the Match +*The back of Xenos/Kyshumu/Tomasina is shown a losing the reader to see their tail* **Makkusu:** Hey mister hey mister From 649ed6bc20f2738e37cec778f9f673fd2c2172d1 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Thu, 10 Jan 2019 16:36:34 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 024/124] Choose having the cybervator lose This will allow this event to foreshadow the CNS being rigid --- comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md | 10 +++++----- 1 file changed, 5 insertions(+), 5 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md index 5e979ea..e7b7844 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md @@ -8,21 +8,21 @@ The ending of CNS Championships is shown. An 8 year old Makkusu is shown watchin Pages: 4, 5, 6, 7 After the Match -*The back of Xenos/Kyshumu/Tomasina is shown a losing the reader to see their tail* +*The back of Xenos/Tomasina is shown a losing the reader to see their tail* **Makkusu:** Hey mister hey mister -*Tomasina/Xenos/Kyshumu Turns around preparing to give him an autograph* +*Tomasina/Xenos Turns around preparing to give him an autograph* **Makkusu:** I don't like you anymore -**Tomasina/Xenos/Kyshumu:** What did I do +**Tomasina/Xenos:** What did I do -**Makkusu's Gurdian**(*pulling Makkusu away*)/**Akia**(*jumping in front of Makkusu*): he he Makkusu's upset because you lost/beat his favorite cybervator +**Makkusu's Gurdian**(*pulling Makkusu away*)/**Akia**(*jumping in front of Makkusu*): he he Makkusu's upset because you lost **Makkusu:** Just you wait when I'm old enough I'm gonna be a better Cybervator than even you -**Tomasina/Kyshumu/Xenos** (*rubs the top of his head*): Ha ha ha. I'll be waiting. +**Tomasina/Xenos** (*rubs the top of his head*): Ha ha ha. I'll be waiting. From 07712051c5fd59dab3dbcbdc37b16b96394a6774 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sat, 12 Jan 2019 09:05:24 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 025/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 6 +++++- 1 file changed, 5 insertions(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 700c77e..2f1fbff 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -37,6 +37,10 @@ Episodes: 2,3 4. **Meeting The Mentor**
Episodes: 4, 5 - Airiona is found + - Makkusu uses this opportunity to test his Cyber.Beast controler using Airiona's Cyber.Beast + - Maybe with out her permission. In which case Airiona comes up behind him creating the poisiblty of punishment + - Airiona is excited about his creation + - Makkusu is given a cyberbeast and invited to be a cybervator ### Act 2 5. **Crossing The Threshold**
@@ -77,7 +81,7 @@ Episodes: 13, 14 Makkusu realizes that even if he makes it into the tournament he won't be of much help since he can't go into a BurstDrive mode. - He finds a hole in the ground left by Minia in it is old cyber.tech this is just what he needs to compete on even grounds + He finds a hole in the ground left by Minia in it is old cyber.tech this is just what he needs to compete on even grounds (exposition opportunity) - Minia helps Makkusu who is bullied Akia tells haha look at Makkusu trying to get buff you think that just because you are geting in shape you will become a cybervator. lets see what you got. From 7e794d70dd5b2d80777256909ca3fd3097a505e2 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sat, 12 Jan 2019 10:44:52 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 026/124] Added cyvolter plot points --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 23 ++++++++++++++++------- 1 file changed, 16 insertions(+), 7 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 2f1fbff..1e50418 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -53,6 +53,8 @@ Episodes: 6, 7, 8, 9 6. **Tests, Allies, Enemies**
Episodes: 9, 10, 11, 12 + - The Cyvolters are teased as a mysterious group of Cybervators that has been capturing/stealing the satellites the house Cyber.Beast. It is revealed to be something that has been going on for a while now. + - Makkusu helps someone in cyberspace he has develop a reputation for being an alturistic cybervator not just help others but in terms of giving money unlike other cybervators he gives 70% or more of his earnings to fans @@ -76,7 +78,10 @@ Episodes: 9, 10, 11, 12 - Makkusu learns that Airiona is a cyvolter and he may have been helping them 7. **Approach To The Inmost Cave**
-Episodes: 13, 14 +Episodes: 13, 14, 15 + + - More citizens are now competing in the CNS league thanks to the Cyvolters destrubting the tech that Makkusu made + - Makkusu finds old cyber.tech Makkusu realizes that even if he makes it into the tournament he won't be of much help since he can't go into a BurstDrive mode. @@ -97,7 +102,7 @@ Episodes: 13, 14 - Alex becomes chief - Makkusu works on his new tech 8. **Ordeal**
-Episodes: 15 +Episodes: 16 - Citzens are now offically allowed to compete All of the citzen who has become cybervators up until now to prevent this citizens will be allowed to join the CNS. this is done to prevent them from joining the cybervators just so that they can join the CNS. @@ -108,8 +113,14 @@ Episodes: 15 9. **Reward (Seizing The Sword)**
-Episodes: 16 +Episodes: 17 + + - Alex allows Makkusu to compete with BluNet + + Alex has been newly elected as the Chief of BluNet + - Makkusu uses his tech to compete + - Makkusu's team is formed Makkusu(back up green/white) Ace Harmony(red/blue) Knilla(black) ~~Airiona~~(green) Xenos @@ -117,10 +128,8 @@ Episodes: 16 he asks Minia what happened to her shirt 10. **The Road Back**
-Episodes: 17, 18, 19 - - Alex allows Makkusu to compete with BluNet - - Alex has been newly elected as the Chief of BluNet +Episodes: 18, 19 + - An ultimatum/wager is purposed for Makkusu From c5c1265b089d663dd0d035473d5067cc85a14ef3 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sat, 12 Jan 2019 15:20:31 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 027/124] Connect the Cyvolter subplot to the main plot --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 38 ++++++++++++++++++++++++-------------- 1 file changed, 24 insertions(+), 14 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 1e50418..695d24c 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -7,7 +7,13 @@ - Fan: Makkusu - Cybervator: Minia, Jax, Airiona, Xenos, Ace, Harmony - Chief: Kyshumu, Alex - +- Minia is traded to BluNet by Leona which is all over the news. + - Kyshumu is enraged as this is right before the hub she is traded to becomes a Cyvolter hub. He then realizes this is the perfect opportuity to ensure Makkusu loses he tells her to throw the match. This leaves Minia conflicted because she does not want to see Makkusu fail. + - During the match it appears that she is doing just what her father wanted as performs poorly during her match. It turn out that this is not the case. She has been trying her best but does she not want to hurt her opponet hampering her abilities. + - Airiona tells Makkusu that Minia is sabatoging them. Makkusu(he was voted team captain despite not starting) then suggests that Minia be removed from her Blue position. Airiona is happy thinking Minia is being bench--however Makkusu benchs Airiona instead who is visibly upset. Someone asks then who will take the Blue/White position (Hamony/Xenos/Avis can't or wont). + Makkusu: well then I guess Air... + Airiona/Xenos: You should Makkusu. It will be the perfect chance to show everyone what you're capable of. + - They begin to make a historic comeback but their efforts fall short as the deficit Minia creating was to great to overcome ## Arc 1 ### Act 1 1. **Ordinary World**
@@ -45,7 +51,7 @@ Episodes: 4, 5 ### Act 2 5. **Crossing The Threshold**
Episodes: 6, 7, 8, 9 - - Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace + - Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace. He assumes that because Airiiona and Minia are teammates that he is a ReNet Cybervator - The 22? championships is going on - Makkusu trains his body @@ -76,7 +82,7 @@ Episodes: 9, 10, 11, 12 it is placed on the news Minia teleports to Makkusu enraged that he told - - Makkusu learns that Airiona is a cyvolter and he may have been helping them + - Makkusu learns that Airiona is a cyvolter and he may have been helped them 7. **Approach To The Inmost Cave**
Episodes: 13, 14, 15 @@ -103,11 +109,13 @@ Episodes: 13, 14, 15 - Makkusu works on his new tech 8. **Ordeal**
Episodes: 16 - - Citzens are now offically allowed to compete + - The NRA are against allowing citizens to participate in the CNS using unsanctioned Cyber.Beast distributed by the Cyvolters. They hold a metting to discuss this with the CNS. + + - Not only does the CNS ignore their complaints offically recgonize the Cyvolters allowing citizens to compete in the league. But beacuse they don't have a hub the can't compete in the championships. Their reasoning is that the primary mission of the CNS is to distribute wealth amoung the citzens and this furthers that agenda. All of the citzen who has become cybervators up until now to prevent this citizens will be allowed to join the CNS. this is done to prevent them from joining the cybervators just so that they can join the CNS. - - Kyshumu announces that citizens shouldn't compete + - Adding insult to injury the CNS request that both ReNet and BluNet gives up one hub to the Cyvolters so they can compete. This angers Kyshumu who yells that citizens shouldn't compete he treatens to pull ReNet out of the CNS He suggest that it is too dangerous and not having armor they are more likely to be killed and that they can't regrow limbs like a real cybervator @@ -115,11 +123,14 @@ Episodes: 16 9. **Reward (Seizing The Sword)**
Episodes: 17 - - Alex allows Makkusu to compete with BluNet + - Alex has been newly elected as the Chief of BluNet + + - Alex tells the NRA that both Citizens and Cybervators has taken a liking to Makkusu and that their no telling how they might respond if they don't let him compete. They discuss the possibility of angering the citizens if they don't let him compete citing the decrease in ReNet stock as an example. + + - Alex allows Makkusu to compete with BluNet or offers up Kassiea/Xenos' hub allowing Makkusu to compete - Alex has been newly elected as the Chief of BluNet - - Makkusu uses his tech to compete + - Makkusu uses his tech to compete in the CNS championships - Makkusu's team is formed @@ -135,35 +146,34 @@ Episodes: 18, 19 With Makkusu joining ReNet Kyshumu tells the CNS/NRA that no Citizen should be allowed to compete in the CNS. - They discuss the possibility of angering the citizens if they don't let him compete citing the decrease in ReNet stock as an example. - Alex makes a ultimatum suggesting that a citizen is unlikely to win the championships--If Makkusu loses no Citizen will be allowed to compete in the CNS again. + Kyshumu(angry):Fine! + :and if he wins Alex is about to say something Kyshumu(interrupts): He won't. I'll make sure of it. - : With al due respect sir you can't compete in the championships any more you're the chief. + : With all due respect sir you can't compete in the championships any more you're the chief. Kyhsumu: I know that I can't but my wife can :She's been retired for years!? - Kyshumu(angry):Fine! ### Act 3 11. **Resurrection**
Episodes: 20, 21 - Makkusu fights Jax - -Max suggests a line up change + - Max suggests a line up change. Mina is changed from the blue to the green position Harmony goes from red to blue after being calmed or Xenos take Blue 12. **Return With The Elixir**
Episodes: 22 - - Makkusu wins/loses championship + - Makkusu wins/loses(do to the unforseen random nature of Jax) championship If Makkusu wins it is because Tomasina lets him or is distracted by the fact that he looks/feels familiar From 421d974e3c77591067dbaaed5d167668a6f005ad Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sat, 12 Jan 2019 16:06:43 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 028/124] Update Makkusu's team - Created a depth chart table and added Cybervators to Makkusu's team - Removed the dialogue between Mina and Makkusu since they are now on the same team --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 15 ++++++++++----- 1 file changed, 10 insertions(+), 5 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 695d24c..a57fdfc 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -7,6 +7,7 @@ - Fan: Makkusu - Cybervator: Minia, Jax, Airiona, Xenos, Ace, Harmony - Chief: Kyshumu, Alex +- This is Xenos' last season before he anounces his retirement - Minia is traded to BluNet by Leona which is all over the news. - Kyshumu is enraged as this is right before the hub she is traded to becomes a Cyvolter hub. He then realizes this is the perfect opportuity to ensure Makkusu loses he tells her to throw the match. This leaves Minia conflicted because she does not want to see Makkusu fail. - During the match it appears that she is doing just what her father wanted as performs poorly during her match. It turn out that this is not the case. She has been trying her best but does she not want to hurt her opponet hampering her abilities. @@ -134,10 +135,14 @@ Episodes: 17 - Makkusu's team is formed - Makkusu(back up green/white) Ace Harmony(red/blue) Knilla(black) ~~Airiona~~(green) Xenos - - Makkusu gets to talk to his opponets Minia and Jax Before the tournament - - he asks Minia what happened to her shirt + | Position | First | Second | Third | Fourth | + |----------|---------|--------------|-------|--------| + | Red | Harmony | Aarock | | | + | Green | Airiona | Makkusu | | | + | Blue | Minia | Xenos | | | + | Black | Knilla | Avis? | | | + | White | Ace | Avis/Makkusu | | | + 10. **The Road Back**
Episodes: 18, 19 @@ -162,7 +167,7 @@ Episodes: 18, 19 :She's been retired for years!? -### Act 3 +### Act 3 11. **Resurrection**
Episodes: 20, 21 - Makkusu fights Jax From fb590e71cacac183a224a7e57196a3a225c8c2cb Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sat, 12 Jan 2019 16:25:06 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 029/124] Made Xenos the leader of the Cyvolters --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 7 +++++-- 1 file changed, 5 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index a57fdfc..dca660f 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -142,6 +142,8 @@ Episodes: 17 | Blue | Minia | Xenos | | | | Black | Knilla | Avis? | | | | White | Ace | Avis/Makkusu | | | + + - Harmony attacks Makkusu who tries to introduce his self a nearly kills him but she stops which surprises Ace 10. **The Road Back**
Episodes: 18, 19 @@ -181,6 +183,7 @@ Episodes: 22 - Makkusu wins/loses(do to the unforseen random nature of Jax) championship If Makkusu wins it is because Tomasina lets him or is distracted by the fact that he looks/feels familiar - - - Cyvolters are revealed + + - Xenos retires from the CNS league and annouces that he will lead the Cyvolters + - Cyvolters intentions are revealed - The CNS is shut down? From 685e2c80950e30e62c77ae58ecf9064d63b10a22 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sat, 12 Jan 2019 16:57:45 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 030/124] Add episode link --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 6 +++--- 1 file changed, 3 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index dca660f..cf2864f 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -2,7 +2,7 @@ ## Brainstorm - Episodes: 22-27 - Roles - - Broadcaster/Commentator : Spike, Makkusu? + - Broadcaster/Commentator: Spike, Makkusu? - Handlers/Cornerman/crew: Makkusu? - Fan: Makkusu - Cybervator: Minia, Jax, Airiona, Xenos, Ace, Harmony @@ -18,7 +18,7 @@ ## Arc 1 ### Act 1 1. **Ordinary World**
-Episodes: 1 +Episodes: [1](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-1) - Makkusu watches Championships - **Alex Wins the Championships** @@ -36,7 +36,7 @@ Episodes: 1 Kyshumu is asked by a reporter what he will do know that he won. He says he will become chief 2. **Call To Adventure**
-Episodes: 1 +Episodes: [1](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-1) - Makkusu Applies to be a Cybervator 3. **Refusal Of The Call**
Episodes: 2,3 From 99fc4f6fa7cd17e6e8b8fcdd2dc4cef9eb61bf88 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sat, 12 Jan 2019 17:07:13 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 031/124] Choose lose as it adds to the plot --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 17 ++++------------- 1 file changed, 4 insertions(+), 13 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index cf2864f..3ee3542 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -11,7 +11,7 @@ - Minia is traded to BluNet by Leona which is all over the news. - Kyshumu is enraged as this is right before the hub she is traded to becomes a Cyvolter hub. He then realizes this is the perfect opportuity to ensure Makkusu loses he tells her to throw the match. This leaves Minia conflicted because she does not want to see Makkusu fail. - During the match it appears that she is doing just what her father wanted as performs poorly during her match. It turn out that this is not the case. She has been trying her best but does she not want to hurt her opponet hampering her abilities. - - Airiona tells Makkusu that Minia is sabatoging them. Makkusu(he was voted team captain despite not starting) then suggests that Minia be removed from her Blue position. Airiona is happy thinking Minia is being bench--however Makkusu benchs Airiona instead who is visibly upset. Someone asks then who will take the Blue/White position (Hamony/Xenos/Avis can't or wont). + - Airiona tells Makkusu that Minia is sabatoging them. Makkusu(he was voted team captain despite not starting) then suggests that Minia be removed from her Blue position. Airiona is happy thinking Minia is being bench--however Makkusu benchs Airiona instead who is visibly upset. Someone asks then who will take the Blue/White position (Harmony/Xenos(maybe injured)/Avis can't or wont). Makkusu: well then I guess Air... Airiona/Xenos: You should Makkusu. It will be the perfect chance to show everyone what you're capable of. - They begin to make a historic comeback but their efforts fall short as the deficit Minia creating was to great to overcome @@ -20,20 +20,11 @@ 1. **Ordinary World**
Episodes: [1](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-1) - Makkusu watches Championships - - **Alex Wins the Championships** - - After Alex wins a fan of the other team runs up to him(maybe a younger Makkusu) and says I don't like you any more. - - Alex is asked by a reporter what he will do know that he won. He says he will become chief - - - **Xenos loses the Championships** - **Shown as a early flash back:** + + - **Xenos/Tomasina loses the Championships** + **Shown as an early flash back:** After Xenos loses and Makkusu who is fan of him runs up to him(maybe a younger Makkusu) and says I don't like you any more. - - **Kyshumu Wins the Championships** - - After Kyshumu wins a fan of the other team runs up to him(maybe a younger Makkusu) and says I don't like you any more. - Kyshumu is asked by a reporter what he will do know that he won. He says he will become chief 2. **Call To Adventure**
Episodes: [1](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-1) From 1a4d51d846e48deb13785e5f9e5752224b19e5a8 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sat, 12 Jan 2019 17:31:03 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 032/124] Update readme.md - Added Jax's team - Gave a reason for Leona trading Minia --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 15 +++++++++++++-- 1 file changed, 13 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 3ee3542..71f1a11 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -9,6 +9,7 @@ - Chief: Kyshumu, Alex - This is Xenos' last season before he anounces his retirement - Minia is traded to BluNet by Leona which is all over the news. + - Minia would've been starting over Leona had she not been traded. - Kyshumu is enraged as this is right before the hub she is traded to becomes a Cyvolter hub. He then realizes this is the perfect opportuity to ensure Makkusu loses he tells her to throw the match. This leaves Minia conflicted because she does not want to see Makkusu fail. - During the match it appears that she is doing just what her father wanted as performs poorly during her match. It turn out that this is not the case. She has been trying her best but does she not want to hurt her opponet hampering her abilities. - Airiona tells Makkusu that Minia is sabatoging them. Makkusu(he was voted team captain despite not starting) then suggests that Minia be removed from her Blue position. Airiona is happy thinking Minia is being bench--however Makkusu benchs Airiona instead who is visibly upset. Someone asks then who will take the Blue/White position (Harmony/Xenos(maybe injured)/Avis can't or wont). @@ -131,8 +132,18 @@ Episodes: 17 | Red | Harmony | Aarock | | | | Green | Airiona | Makkusu | | | | Blue | Minia | Xenos | | | - | Black | Knilla | Avis? | | | - | White | Ace | Avis/Makkusu | | | + | Black | Knilla | Avis?/Echo | | | + | White | Ace | Avis/Makkusu | | | + + - Jax's team + + | Position | First | Second | Third | Fourth | + |----------|---------|--------------|-------|--------| + | Red | Jax | | | | + | Green | Leona | Tomasina | | | + | Blue | Leona? | | | | + | Black | Jax | | | | + | White | Thunora | | | | - Harmony attacks Makkusu who tries to introduce his self a nearly kills him but she stops which surprises Ace From 0d7bc3b053f8660d47bcf40192f02246a0fb5b66 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sat, 12 Jan 2019 21:00:43 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 033/124] Update readme.md - Added character development for Airiona - Provide a reason for Xenos become a leader of the cyvolters --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 37 ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++----- 1 file changed, 32 insertions(+), 5 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 71f1a11..6a15cc2 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -6,16 +6,38 @@ - Handlers/Cornerman/crew: Makkusu? - Fan: Makkusu - Cybervator: Minia, Jax, Airiona, Xenos, Ace, Harmony - - Chief: Kyshumu, Alex + - Chief: Kyshumu, Alex + - This is Xenos' last season before he anounces his retirement + + - Xenos gives a retirement speach before declaring himself the leader of the Cyvolters (maybe save this for next season) + + Xenos: I want the future to be a world were there are no distincions between citzen and cybervator one in which everyone is a cybervator in their on right. + + Xenos: Up to this point Cyvolters has not had a leader. Because of this they have done some things I am not proud. many if which goes against the vision/values of the Cyvolter. Without a leader the Cyvolters will become nothing more than an organization resembling a chicken without a head. + + Xenos: + + Right now There are 4 types of cyvolters + + The malicious type that just like finding people to take down the worst of them all. + + The type that doesn't want to look like the bad guy so they attack others to prove that they are not bad + + The one that has reformed and feels it is their duty to fix/save others. This type that does not want others to attack you so they prefer to warn you of repercussions + + Then there ones that follows(majority) the crowd doing what seems to be what's cool. This type is easily embarrassed and just wants others to fit in + + Xenos: From this moment forward I will the lead the Cyvolters. Change can happen, has happened and, will happen. + - Minia is traded to BluNet by Leona which is all over the news. - Minia would've been starting over Leona had she not been traded. - - Kyshumu is enraged as this is right before the hub she is traded to becomes a Cyvolter hub. He then realizes this is the perfect opportuity to ensure Makkusu loses he tells her to throw the match. This leaves Minia conflicted because she does not want to see Makkusu fail. + - Kyshumu is enraged as this is right before the hub she is traded to becomes a Cyvolter hub. He then realizes this is the perfect opportuity to ensure Makkusu loses -- he tells her to throw the match. This leaves Minia conflicted because she does not want to see Makkusu fail. - During the match it appears that she is doing just what her father wanted as performs poorly during her match. It turn out that this is not the case. She has been trying her best but does she not want to hurt her opponet hampering her abilities. - Airiona tells Makkusu that Minia is sabatoging them. Makkusu(he was voted team captain despite not starting) then suggests that Minia be removed from her Blue position. Airiona is happy thinking Minia is being bench--however Makkusu benchs Airiona instead who is visibly upset. Someone asks then who will take the Blue/White position (Harmony/Xenos(maybe injured)/Avis can't or wont). Makkusu: well then I guess Air... Airiona/Xenos: You should Makkusu. It will be the perfect chance to show everyone what you're capable of. - - They begin to make a historic comeback but their efforts fall short as the deficit Minia creating was to great to overcome + - They begin to make/orchestrate a historic comeback but their efforts fall short as the deficit Minia creating was to great to overcome ## Arc 1 ### Act 1 1. **Ordinary World**
@@ -39,12 +61,16 @@ Episodes: 4, 5 - Makkusu uses this opportunity to test his Cyber.Beast controler using Airiona's Cyber.Beast - Maybe with out her permission. In which case Airiona comes up behind him creating the poisiblty of punishment - Airiona is excited about his creation + Airiona: Wow you're smart + Makkusu: Not really I just most are combined ideas from real scientist to put ideas together to come up with a new one + - Makkusu is given a cyberbeast and invited to be a cybervator ### Act 2 5. **Crossing The Threshold**
Episodes: 6, 7, 8, 9 - Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace. He assumes that because Airiiona and Minia are teammates that he is a ReNet Cybervator + - Makkusu develops Airiona's character as he gets her to not only help other citzens in cyberspace but Cybervarors as well - The 22? championships is going on - Makkusu trains his body @@ -102,7 +128,7 @@ Episodes: 13, 14, 15 - Makkusu works on his new tech 8. **Ordeal**
Episodes: 16 - - The NRA are against allowing citizens to participate in the CNS using unsanctioned Cyber.Beast distributed by the Cyvolters. They hold a metting to discuss this with the CNS. + - The NRA are against allowing citizens to participate in the CNS using unsanctioned Cyber.Beast distributed by the Cyvolters. They hold a metting to discuss this with the CNS. The CNS tells them that is not their place to be decide rather someone should legaly be allowed to compete. - Not only does the CNS ignore their complaints offically recgonize the Cyvolters allowing citizens to compete in the league. But beacuse they don't have a hub the can't compete in the championships. Their reasoning is that the primary mission of the CNS is to distribute wealth amoung the citzens and this furthers that agenda. @@ -186,6 +212,7 @@ Episodes: 22 If Makkusu wins it is because Tomasina lets him or is distracted by the fact that he looks/feels familiar - - Xenos retires from the CNS league and annouces that he will lead the Cyvolters + - Xenos retires from the CNS league + - Cyvolters intentions are revealed - The CNS is shut down? From 438f4ea84610d02de79702f7afab78c6ecfe5b9e Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sat, 12 Jan 2019 22:13:23 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 034/124] Added brainstorm notes for second season --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 6 ++++++ 1 file changed, 6 insertions(+) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 6a15cc2..77ad431 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -38,6 +38,12 @@ Makkusu: well then I guess Air... Airiona/Xenos: You should Makkusu. It will be the perfect chance to show everyone what you're capable of. - They begin to make/orchestrate a historic comeback but their efforts fall short as the deficit Minia creating was to great to overcome + +- In the second season the cyvolters is now considered the Citizens league begin to do a type of initiation or point system in which Cybervators(not citizens) must attack "bad" cybervators inorder to become a Cyvolter -- it is a rule created by Cybervators. + - Since anyone can be a Cyvolter they are doing whatever they want and claim to be apart of the Cyvolters, because of this the Cyvolters realize they need a leader to lay a framework and places that duty upon Xenos. + - Airiona is upset by the way the other cyvolter are acting + - This event Airiona strengthens her belief that the majority of of Cybervators are stupid. Xenos tells her that it actually mob mentality and selfish preservation that cause people to act this way. people don't want to be alone so they follow what they may think is the masses no matter how wrong it maybe to protect their self + ## Arc 1 ### Act 1 1. **Ordinary World**
From b0c371a4f6c0b91cc83a744cb007443024bfaa78 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sun, 13 Jan 2019 08:31:38 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 035/124] Update readme.md - Add dialogue between Makkusu and Airiona - Add Exposition for technological history - Made the citizens responsible for the Cyvolters behavior to develop Airiona's character and to advance the plot --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 48 ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++----------- 1 file changed, 36 insertions(+), 12 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 77ad431..7e1ea9c 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -10,7 +10,7 @@ - This is Xenos' last season before he anounces his retirement - - Xenos gives a retirement speach before declaring himself the leader of the Cyvolters (maybe save this for next season) + - Xenos gives a retirement speech before declaring himself the leader of the Cyvolters (maybe save this for next season) Xenos: I want the future to be a world were there are no distincions between citzen and cybervator one in which everyone is a cybervator in their on right. @@ -39,10 +39,13 @@ Airiona/Xenos: You should Makkusu. It will be the perfect chance to show everyone what you're capable of. - They begin to make/orchestrate a historic comeback but their efforts fall short as the deficit Minia creating was to great to overcome -- In the second season the cyvolters is now considered the Citizens league begin to do a type of initiation or point system in which Cybervators(not citizens) must attack "bad" cybervators inorder to become a Cyvolter -- it is a rule created by Cybervators. +- In the second season years later the cyvolters is now considered the Citizens league begin to do a type of initiation or point system in which Cybervators(not citizens) must attack "bad" cybervators inorder to become a Cyvolter -- it is a rule created by Citizens. + - The cyvolters increase in sizes has become a detriment to their initial values - Since anyone can be a Cyvolter they are doing whatever they want and claim to be apart of the Cyvolters, because of this the Cyvolters realize they need a leader to lay a framework and places that duty upon Xenos. - - Airiona is upset by the way the other cyvolter are acting - - This event Airiona strengthens her belief that the majority of of Cybervators are stupid. Xenos tells her that it actually mob mentality and selfish preservation that cause people to act this way. people don't want to be alone so they follow what they may think is the masses no matter how wrong it maybe to protect their self + - Airiona is upset by the way the other cyvolter are acting she realizes that citizens can be just as bad as cybervator + - This changes Airiona strengthens belief that the majority of of Cybervators are stupid instead all humans are. Xenos tells her that it actually mob mentality and selfish preservation that cause people to act this way. people don't want to be alone so they follow what they may think is the masses no matter how wrong it maybe to protect their self + +- Makkusu's alturism becomes contagious and eventually becomes the basis for the Cyvolters identity ## Arc 1 ### Act 1 @@ -67,16 +70,29 @@ Episodes: 4, 5 - Makkusu uses this opportunity to test his Cyber.Beast controler using Airiona's Cyber.Beast - Maybe with out her permission. In which case Airiona comes up behind him creating the poisiblty of punishment - Airiona is excited about his creation - Airiona: Wow you're smart + + Airiona: Wow you're smart + + Airiona: you see, you were able to make the csd and controler because unilike others he doesn't rely on cyber.beast to code he does is on as society does not have the skills they once did + Makkusu: Not really I just most are combined ideas from real scientist to put ideas together to come up with a new one - + + No unlike most scientist who have become singular focused and don't combined ideas from others you put ideas together to come up with a new one - Makkusu is given a cyberbeast and invited to be a cybervator ### Act 2 5. **Crossing The Threshold**
Episodes: 6, 7, 8, 9 - - Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace. He assumes that because Airiiona and Minia are teammates that he is a ReNet Cybervator - - Makkusu develops Airiona's character as he gets her to not only help other citzens in cyberspace but Cybervarors as well + - Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace. He assumes that because Airiona and Minia are teammates that he is a ReNet Cybervator + + Airiona: It’s nice to be around someone smarter than me for a change especially when it is a citizen(minia is smart but does not enough confidence to exercise it) + + Makkusu: But aren't you a cybervator + + Airiona: yea but my family isn’t, and your a perfect example that the distribution of money is misplaced citizen do all of the work while cybervator gets majority of revenue from your work even though they are only one percent of the population. But we’re gonna change all of that. + + - Makkusu develops Airiona's character as he gets her to not only help other citzens in cyberspace but Cybervarors as well. + They help them mostly by teaming up with ReNet, BluNet, and Cyvolter Cybervators that are being out numbered - The 22? championships is going on - Makkusu trains his body @@ -91,8 +107,9 @@ Episodes: 9, 10, 11, 12 he has develop a reputation for being an alturistic cybervator not just help others but in terms of giving money unlike other cybervators he gives 70% or more of his earnings to fans - Makkusu looks ahead to see who his team may be if he earns a spot - This team consists of Minia and Jax - Makkusu loses to jax + + This team consists of Minia and Jax - Makkusu is seen outside of cyberspace @@ -117,7 +134,9 @@ Episodes: 13, 14, 15 Makkusu realizes that even if he makes it into the tournament he won't be of much help since he can't go into a BurstDrive mode. - He finds a hole in the ground left by Minia in it is old cyber.tech this is just what he needs to compete on even grounds (exposition opportunity) + He finds a hole in the ground left by Minia in it is old cyber.tech this is just what he needs to compete on even grounds (exposition opportunity): + + Earlier in the Cyber world history they used robots and somewhat bulky exosuits they even had space ships. this technology was lost after cybervators took over. Many would say that it halted their growth as Cybervator instead relied on cyber tech - Minia helps Makkusu who is bullied Akia tells haha look at Makkusu trying to get buff you think that just because you are geting in shape you will become a cybervator. lets see what you got. @@ -152,11 +171,16 @@ Episodes: 17 - Alex tells the NRA that both Citizens and Cybervators has taken a liking to Makkusu and that their no telling how they might respond if they don't let him compete. They discuss the possibility of angering the citizens if they don't let him compete citing the decrease in ReNet stock as an example. - - Alex allows Makkusu to compete with BluNet or offers up Kassiea/Xenos' hub allowing Makkusu to compete - + - Alex allows Makkusu to compete with BluNet or offers up Kassiea/Xenos' hub allowing Makkusu to compete - Makkusu uses his tech to compete in the CNS championships + Arionona: Wow I thought what you made before was incredble how did you create this stuff + + Makkusu: I didn't make it. Its I made from tech that I found under my house(the hole Minia/Airiona created). A lot of it was unfinished All I did was make a few modifications + + Airiona: This must be the(tech lost to time) lost technology from thousands of years ago Xenos was telling. Haha who Cybervators realy are a ~~cancer~~(find new word) to the world + - Makkusu's team is formed | Position | First | Second | Third | Fourth | From 2782c4201e27fcfa091d450bddcfb928bdde8772 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sun, 13 Jan 2019 09:01:36 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 036/124] Added scene to show Makkusu's altruism spreading --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 17 ++++++++++++++++- 1 file changed, 16 insertions(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 7e1ea9c..ec8b99e 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -45,7 +45,22 @@ - Airiona is upset by the way the other cyvolter are acting she realizes that citizens can be just as bad as cybervator - This changes Airiona strengthens belief that the majority of of Cybervators are stupid instead all humans are. Xenos tells her that it actually mob mentality and selfish preservation that cause people to act this way. people don't want to be alone so they follow what they may think is the masses no matter how wrong it maybe to protect their self -- Makkusu's alturism becomes contagious and eventually becomes the basis for the Cyvolters identity +- Makkusu's alturism becomes contagious and eventually becomes the basis for the Cyvolters identity at this point Makkusu either accepts or realize that he is a Cyvolter + + Makkusu is about to mine cyber.beast or fight another cybervator alone He spots a girl that waves at him but he doesn't know who she is so he he casually ignores her + + Later he gets into some trouble and is saved by her. As she pick him up and carries him out of harm's way + + Girl: She says hi again + + Makkusu: wait aren't you(showing image of her waving) + + Girl: Yep I knew you were a cyvolter the moment I saw you. It would be a disgrace if I didn't -- my cyber.beast is a bear/shark after all. Us cyvolter have to stick together ya know + + Makkusu: wait so you know who each AND EVERY cyvolter is + + Girl: Don’t woorry I won't tell + ## Arc 1 ### Act 1 From 4539d7fe095ee332f19950239de4542ef0e05243 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sun, 13 Jan 2019 17:58:17 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 037/124] Update readme.md + additional possible plot point variations. --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 6 +++++- 1 file changed, 5 insertions(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index ec8b99e..44729c0 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -16,6 +16,8 @@ Xenos: Up to this point Cyvolters has not had a leader. Because of this they have done some things I am not proud. many if which goes against the vision/values of the Cyvolter. Without a leader the Cyvolters will become nothing more than an organization resembling a chicken without a head. + It may be better if this show by using each person as an example rather than told { + Xenos: Right now There are 4 types of cyvolters @@ -27,6 +29,8 @@ The one that has reformed and feels it is their duty to fix/save others. This type that does not want others to attack you so they prefer to warn you of repercussions Then there ones that follows(majority) the crowd doing what seems to be what's cool. This type is easily embarrassed and just wants others to fit in + + } Xenos: From this moment forward I will the lead the Cyvolters. Change can happen, has happened and, will happen. @@ -45,7 +49,7 @@ - Airiona is upset by the way the other cyvolter are acting she realizes that citizens can be just as bad as cybervator - This changes Airiona strengthens belief that the majority of of Cybervators are stupid instead all humans are. Xenos tells her that it actually mob mentality and selfish preservation that cause people to act this way. people don't want to be alone so they follow what they may think is the masses no matter how wrong it maybe to protect their self -- Makkusu's alturism becomes contagious and eventually becomes the basis for the Cyvolters identity at this point Makkusu either accepts or realize that he is a Cyvolter +- Makkusu's alturism becomes contagious and eventually becomes the basis for the Cyvolters identity at this point Makkusu either accepts or realize that he is a Cyvolter or she is shown helping another cyvolter Makkusu is about to mine cyber.beast or fight another cybervator alone He spots a girl that waves at him but he doesn't know who she is so he he casually ignores her From afb879fa91d08ca711e4475d56de4efba82d77be Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sun, 13 Jan 2019 22:53:44 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 038/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 27 ++++++++++++++++++++++++--- 1 file changed, 24 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 44729c0..160bf4e 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -65,7 +65,7 @@ Girl: Don’t woorry I won't tell - +Upon ## Arc 1 ### Act 1 1. **Ordinary World**
@@ -94,10 +94,20 @@ Episodes: 4, 5 Airiona: you see, you were able to make the csd and controler because unilike others he doesn't rely on cyber.beast to code he does is on as society does not have the skills they once did + Makkusu tells her that it is some thing he made a long time ago when had dreams of becoming a cybervator + Makkusu: Not really I just most are combined ideas from real scientist to put ideas together to come up with a new one No unlike most scientist who have become singular focused and don't combined ideas from others you put ideas together to come up with a new one - + + + + - Makkusu tends to the injured Airiona fixing her CSD which allows her to heal. she encourages him to try again and that she will give word to her superiours to give him a chance + + - Makkusu customized his CSD to have a talking Ai which he calls torrey + + - She tells him maybe with your cyber.beast controler I'll be able to see you in cyberspace one day + - Makkusu is given a cyberbeast and invited to be a cybervator ### Act 2 5. **Crossing The Threshold**
@@ -135,6 +145,9 @@ Episodes: 9, 10, 11, 12 Makkusu has not been seen out side of cyberspace for a while but when we see him he now has hair on his head and no longer has a fat belly. - Minia fights Airiona in cyberspace + + - Now having a Cyber.Beast Makkusu has customized his CSD to have a hologram of a dog/bird + - Mini falls in the backyard of Makkusu Makkusu asks what happend Minia tells him that she is not supposed to tell him but because he saved her that he will tell him. She insist that he does not tell anyone because if word gets out she will be in trouble @@ -156,8 +169,16 @@ Episodes: 13, 14, 15 He finds a hole in the ground left by Minia in it is old cyber.tech this is just what he needs to compete on even grounds (exposition opportunity): Earlier in the Cyber world history they used robots and somewhat bulky exosuits they even had space ships. this technology was lost after cybervators took over. Many would say that it halted their growth as Cybervator instead relied on cyber tech + + What he learns contradicts common knowledge as history has be rewritten + + - History is written by the losers as they write the history they are able to shape the perceived realty of their victors the future generation that sees this history will judge their current leaders based on the past villain like winners and the reasons the current system is place by this and will rise and over throw them or even an outside party may take them down based on this history much like the Mongols (http://scholars-stage.blogspot.com/2016/11/history-is-written-by-losers.html) + - Minia helps Makkusu who is bullied - + Makkusu is watching a CNS broadcast while at the gym and is wearing headphones maybe visor headphones + + Makkusu uses his UBI credit to become the sponser of the cheapest cybervator he could find. Akia/Spike tells him he spent more money than he can make in a year as he buys majority of her stock shares in credit. He does not know how much money he has made as a cybervator an maybe doesnt even know he is a cybervator. + Akia tells haha look at Makkusu trying to get buff you think that just because you are geting in shape you will become a cybervator. lets see what you got. It appears like he might stand up for his self but he doesn't From 9f7bad040d78f17cc353c21655c4207e0d370a42 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Mon, 14 Jan 2019 09:02:22 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 039/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 3 ++- 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 160bf4e..3ecf460 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -65,7 +65,8 @@ Girl: Don’t woorry I won't tell -Upon +- Max or someone that max helps someone or max saying its is solely for the purpose making him a stronger opponent strong enough to be a challenge for him in the future + ## Arc 1 ### Act 1 1. **Ordinary World**
From 57ad2b0d86efc06ebea57cbf2dc22d98ffe9fca6 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Mon, 14 Jan 2019 12:09:22 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 040/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 3 ++- 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 3ecf460..78da1ad 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -31,7 +31,8 @@ Then there ones that follows(majority) the crowd doing what seems to be what's cool. This type is easily embarrassed and just wants others to fit in } - + if(they win) Xenos: even though we lost today I wont give up on helping the Cyvolters mission of creating a world with equal opportunity for all. We have technolgy but sometime socity needs that final push + Xenos: From this moment forward I will the lead the Cyvolters. Change can happen, has happened and, will happen. - Minia is traded to BluNet by Leona which is all over the news. From a60b3b51f98f7d1402b2997cf473fb3640d55056 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Mon, 14 Jan 2019 22:11:40 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 041/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 15 +++++++++++++++ 1 file changed, 15 insertions(+) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 78da1ad..f823358 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -221,6 +221,17 @@ Episodes: 17 Makkusu: I didn't make it. Its I made from tech that I found under my house(the hole Minia/Airiona created). A lot of it was unfinished All I did was make a few modifications + Makkusu: I call it an Elimter. Normally a cyber.beast would be able to synergize with a cybervator thanks to thier tail. Since everbody including cybervators evovled from plants I used a plant to act as the cyber.beast[1](https://www.msn.com/en-us/news/technology/mit-researchers-create-a-robot-houseplant-that-moves-on-its-own/ar-BBQxhMh),[2]( https://www.theverge.com/2018/7/12/17563688/robot-plant-hybrid-hexa-vincross-succulent ). + + :so you are basicly sending commands to a beserk cyber.beast a green/black cybervator. So it basicly makes you like a Xybrid. + other.person: what how. + + Max: + + other.person: you just hyperlinked to me with out a fist bump. + + Max: no I did, during the fight(geting blood) / I did it using the right vibration frequency + Airiona: This must be the(tech lost to time) lost technology from thousands of years ago Xenos was telling. Haha who Cybervators realy are a ~~cancer~~(find new word) to the world - Makkusu's team is formed @@ -275,6 +286,10 @@ Episodes: 20, 21 - Makkusu fights Jax - Max suggests a line up change. + When Minia subs for Xenos max is at to read her mind. He learns that the reason she doesn't do well as a blue style fighter is not lack of skill and imagination but rather a matter of mind set. + + + Minia thinks to much particularly the well being of her opponent and is too passive when fighting Mina is changed from the blue to the green position Harmony goes from red to blue after being calmed or Xenos take Blue From f45b7e2197c0ee4c925292a0b5c7370930b15705 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Mon, 14 Jan 2019 22:36:27 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 042/124] Fixed formatting and changed hyperlink --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 4 ++-- 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index f823358..a078c56 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -221,12 +221,12 @@ Episodes: 17 Makkusu: I didn't make it. Its I made from tech that I found under my house(the hole Minia/Airiona created). A lot of it was unfinished All I did was make a few modifications - Makkusu: I call it an Elimter. Normally a cyber.beast would be able to synergize with a cybervator thanks to thier tail. Since everbody including cybervators evovled from plants I used a plant to act as the cyber.beast[1](https://www.msn.com/en-us/news/technology/mit-researchers-create-a-robot-houseplant-that-moves-on-its-own/ar-BBQxhMh),[2]( https://www.theverge.com/2018/7/12/17563688/robot-plant-hybrid-hexa-vincross-succulent ). + Makkusu: I call it an Elimter. Normally a cyber.beast would be able to synergize with a cybervator thanks to thier tail. Since everbody including cybervators evovled from plants I used a plant to act as the cyber.beast[1](https://www.engadget.com/2018/12/05/mit-researchers-create-a-robot-houseplant-that-moves-on-its-own/),[2]( https://www.theverge.com/2018/7/12/17563688/robot-plant-hybrid-hexa-vincross-succulent ). :so you are basicly sending commands to a beserk cyber.beast a green/black cybervator. So it basicly makes you like a Xybrid. other.person: what how. - Max: + Max: < Well you see I can also hyperlink with other cybervator see what they are thinking and send comands as well. > other.person: you just hyperlinked to me with out a fist bump. From 252c9d6695f1c1c059192627e2c860ff268a1d66 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 15 Jan 2019 08:50:33 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 043/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 11 ++++++++++- 1 file changed, 10 insertions(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index a078c56..bfe7fa2 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -102,7 +102,7 @@ Episodes: 4, 5 No unlike most scientist who have become singular focused and don't combined ideas from others you put ideas together to come up with a new one - + - S/He talks about how citizens can’t become cybervators because they dont a tail which means they can synergise. With the device he made anyone will be able to use a cyberbeast in cyberspace even though they still won’t be able to become cybervators since they still won’t be able to go into burtdrive - Makkusu tends to the injured Airiona fixing her CSD which allows her to heal. she encourages him to try again and that she will give word to her superiours to give him a chance @@ -111,6 +111,15 @@ Episodes: 4, 5 - She tells him maybe with your cyber.beast controler I'll be able to see you in cyberspace one day - Makkusu is given a cyberbeast and invited to be a cybervator + - Makkusu takes the cyber.beast given to him by Xenos/Airiona inviting him to join the Cyvolters which he in excitement misread as cybervators + - Airiona sends the invite to which Xenos scolds her because he wanted to trick him into joining. As he know he would never join knowing that it is the Cyvolters. + + **Airiona(Scowling):** so you wanted to trick him?! right after she says this to their suprise they get a message accepting the invite. + + They immediately or eventually realize that he does not know who they are. + + **Xenos:** I guess it worked out in our favor after all + ### Act 2 5. **Crossing The Threshold**
Episodes: 6, 7, 8, 9 From def3cbc0c8d480fa8d5cc2bff782ceefe5e15d7c Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 16 Jan 2019 05:53:38 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 044/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 28 ++++++++++++++++------------ 1 file changed, 16 insertions(+), 12 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index bfe7fa2..bee2481 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -51,22 +51,26 @@ - This changes Airiona strengthens belief that the majority of of Cybervators are stupid instead all humans are. Xenos tells her that it actually mob mentality and selfish preservation that cause people to act this way. people don't want to be alone so they follow what they may think is the masses no matter how wrong it maybe to protect their self - Makkusu's alturism becomes contagious and eventually becomes the basis for the Cyvolters identity at this point Makkusu either accepts or realize that he is a Cyvolter or she is shown helping another cyvolter - - Makkusu is about to mine cyber.beast or fight another cybervator alone He spots a girl that waves at him but he doesn't know who she is so he he casually ignores her - - Later he gets into some trouble and is saved by her. As she pick him up and carries him out of harm's way - Girl: She says hi again - - Makkusu: wait aren't you(showing image of her waving) - - Girl: Yep I knew you were a cyvolter the moment I saw you. It would be a disgrace if I didn't -- my cyber.beast is a bear/shark after all. Us cyvolter have to stick together ya know + - Max or someone that max helps someone or max saying its is solely for the purpose making him a stronger opponent strong enough to be a challenge for him in the future + + - Someone joins forces with Makusu because they want the chance to fight someone even stronger than that protagonist in hopes of climbing up in ranking - Makkusu: wait so you know who each AND EVERY cyvolter is + - Makkusu is about to mine cyber.beast or fight another cybervator alone He spots a girl that waves at him but he doesn't know who she is so he he casually ignores her - Girl: Don’t woorry I won't tell + Later he gets into some trouble and is saved by her. As she pick him up and carries him out of harm's way + + Girl: She says hi again + + Makkusu: wait aren't you(showing image of her waving) + + Girl: Yep I knew you were a cyvolter the moment I saw you. It would be a disgrace if I didn't -- my cyber.beast is a bear/shark after all. Us cyvolter have to stick together ya know + + Makkusu: wait so you know who each AND EVERY cyvolter is + + Girl: Don’t woorry I won't tell + -- Max or someone that max helps someone or max saying its is solely for the purpose making him a stronger opponent strong enough to be a challenge for him in the future ## Arc 1 ### Act 1 From 90973af627987b79830ee0b274a0b296da508d85 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 16 Jan 2019 09:03:27 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 045/124] Update readme.md - Added more details of Makkusu getting bullied - Added commentary for CNS match of the Alex subplot - Added commentary for Makkusu's final match - Added a decision point for Makkusu --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 35 ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++--- 1 file changed, 32 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index bee2481..a186f35 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -134,10 +134,22 @@ Episodes: 6, 7, 8, 9 Makkusu: But aren't you a cybervator Airiona: yea but my family isn’t, and your a perfect example that the distribution of money is misplaced citizen do all of the work while cybervator gets majority of revenue from your work even though they are only one percent of the population. But we’re gonna change all of that. + + - Makkusu and maybe Minia lose their first ranked/unranked fight and prepare for a second. An announcer is either surprised that he even has a fan and laughs at the fact the he only has one fan probably because ever saw his first fight in which he did terrible. Spike is that only fan + - Spike wanted him to join his company which is secretly helping the cyvolter orginization. + + After constantly losing Spike offers to make Makkusu a co-owner at the same time the cyvolters/cybervators send him an invite who tells him that he is a white/green type and doesnt have the affinty to be a broadcaster? spike responds we could use a white type like you especaily one so knowledgable about... Makkusu cuts him off turning him down thinking he is on the path to becoming a cybervator(Makkusu later accepts the request after the CNS championships but maybe it is to late). He tells him that he wants to succed on his own merrit. + + Spike tells him that he has tallents that should not be wasted and pasive agressivelly puts down cybervators in general pointing out the cons. he also tells him that he should not put the on a pedstal like he is worshiping them. + + He tells Makkusu to give it another shot but he shouldnt wait on an uncertainty forever - Makkusu develops Airiona's character as he gets her to not only help other citzens in cyberspace but Cybervarors as well. They help them mostly by teaming up with ReNet, BluNet, and Cyvolter Cybervators that are being out numbered - - The 22? championships is going on + - The 21st? championships is going on + + The announcer talks about how team Miniajax has not won a championship match since becoming a Cybervator and that she is a disappointment as a Xybrid Cybervator and will likely lose against Ace and Alex who might be retiring after this fight as he might become the next BluNet cheif. + - Makkusu trains his body Expecting to be in the tournament he trains his body and ignores his doubters @@ -194,9 +206,12 @@ Episodes: 13, 14, 15 Makkusu uses his UBI credit to become the sponser of the cheapest cybervator he could find. Akia/Spike tells him he spent more money than he can make in a year as he buys majority of her stock shares in credit. He does not know how much money he has made as a cybervator an maybe doesnt even know he is a cybervator. - Akia tells haha look at Makkusu trying to get buff you think that just because you are geting in shape you will become a cybervator. lets see what you got. + - It appears like he might stand up for his self but he doesn't + Makkusu is getting bullied first they verbally abuse him. Akia tells haha look at Makkusu trying to get buff you think that just because you are geting in shape you will become a cybervator. lets see what you got. They then begin pushing him at this point the alert system on his CSD turns yellow or orange at which point the CSD says the threat level and ask Makkusu if he would like assistance he says no. one of the bullies Akia his it turned orange/yellow the leader then says don't worry the Cybervators will only come if it turns red or Makkusu asks for help which he says would never happen. + + It appears like he might stand up for his self but he doesn't. Just as Makkusu is pushed or about to be pushed to the ground Minia appears the bullies run away. After they run away Makkusu ask what are you doing here and shes say i'm your Nia remember. Minia asks Makkusu if he is alright to which he replies that he is fine and that they are just bullies and tells her thanks but that he didn't need her help and that it never reached level red and she says she just happened to notice it rising and decided to intervene on her own “and besides I was bored anyway” + - Makkusu might not have enough points - Someone he helped before allows him to compete @@ -292,6 +307,20 @@ Episodes: 18, 19 Kyhsumu: I know that I can't but my wife can :She's been retired for years!? +- Championship commentary + + **Panel 1:** + This years class of cybervators displayed their breathtaking speed, backbreaking/bone crushing strength and unique abilities that defy belief. This is the moment when cybervators gets the opportunity to fulfill their hopes and their family dreams. + + **Panel 2:** + And as they prepare to take this stage they will follow in the the footsteps of so many cybervators, + + **Panel 3:** + some of which stepped into greatness(Kyshumu) the moment they became cybervators + + **Panel 4:** + others grew into their greatness(Xenos). + ### Act 3 11. **Resurrection**
From 34e71894bc23118d97e83cfabc76411c26ff87a4 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 16 Jan 2019 12:01:55 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 046/124] Update readme.md - added a reason to spikes persuasion of Makkusu making it more realistic. - added discription of Makkusu's room to further what his character is like --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 7 ++++--- 1 file changed, 4 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index a186f35..56c0c7c 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -87,11 +87,12 @@ Episodes: [1](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makk Episodes: [1](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-1) - Makkusu Applies to be a Cybervator 3. **Refusal Of The Call**
-Episodes: 2,3 +Episodes: 2 - Makkusu is rejected 4. **Meeting The Mentor**
-Episodes: 4, 5 +Episodes: 3, 4, 5 - Airiona is found + - The reader sees the inside of Makkusu’s room which has posters and cybervator Fandom items everywhere - Makkusu uses this opportunity to test his Cyber.Beast controler using Airiona's Cyber.Beast - Maybe with out her permission. In which case Airiona comes up behind him creating the poisiblty of punishment - Airiona is excited about his creation @@ -138,7 +139,7 @@ Episodes: 6, 7, 8, 9 - Makkusu and maybe Minia lose their first ranked/unranked fight and prepare for a second. An announcer is either surprised that he even has a fan and laughs at the fact the he only has one fan probably because ever saw his first fight in which he did terrible. Spike is that only fan - Spike wanted him to join his company which is secretly helping the cyvolter orginization. - After constantly losing Spike offers to make Makkusu a co-owner at the same time the cyvolters/cybervators send him an invite who tells him that he is a white/green type and doesnt have the affinty to be a broadcaster? spike responds we could use a white type like you especaily one so knowledgable about... Makkusu cuts him off turning him down thinking he is on the path to becoming a cybervator(Makkusu later accepts the request after the CNS championships but maybe it is to late). He tells him that he wants to succed on his own merrit. + After constantly losing Spike offers to make Makkusu a co-owner or employee since he will be able to pursue is passion in a more realstic manner. Makkusu tells him that he is a white/green type and doesnt have the affinty to be a broadcaster? spike responds we could use a white type like you especaily one so knowledgable about... Makkusu cuts him off turning him down thinking he is on the path to becoming a cybervator(Makkusu later accepts the request after the CNS championships but maybe it is to late). He tells him that he wants to succed on his own merrit. Spike tells him that he has tallents that should not be wasted and pasive agressivelly puts down cybervators in general pointing out the cons. he also tells him that he should not put the on a pedstal like he is worshiping them. From 6752c2db8c1fad9555151d2a4a0f9db1b70313ed Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 16 Jan 2019 13:09:26 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 047/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md | 4 ++++ 1 file changed, 4 insertions(+) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md index e7b7844..bc11064 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md @@ -31,6 +31,10 @@ Pages: 8, 9, 10 10 years later Makkusu is now old enough to compete in the CNS +Makkusu is seen sleeping on a train. He is awakened by spike or his CSD + 1. Spike: Hey Makkusu he get up isn't this your stop + 1. CSD: \*Beep Beep\* Rise and shine Makkusu you have arrived at your destination + Makkusu is teased about being delusional trying become a cybervator when he doesn't even have a tail Makkusu starts to have doubts but submits his application regardless From 8c58d1bead90f32f36d228e9d77a5f57f0f0df61 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 16 Jan 2019 15:42:34 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 048/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md | 6 +++--- 1 file changed, 3 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md index bc11064..25c34a5 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md @@ -32,10 +32,10 @@ Pages: 8, 9, 10 10 years later Makkusu is now old enough to compete in the CNS Makkusu is seen sleeping on a train. He is awakened by spike or his CSD - 1. Spike: Hey Makkusu he get up isn't this your stop - 1. CSD: \*Beep Beep\* Rise and shine Makkusu you have arrived at your destination + 1. Spike: Hey Makkusu hey get up isn't this your stop + 1. CSD: \*Beep Beep Beep\* Rise and shine Makkusu you have arrived at your destination -Makkusu is teased about being delusional trying become a cybervator when he doesn't even have a tail +Makkusu is teased about being delusional for trying to become a cybervator when he doesn't even have a tail Makkusu starts to have doubts but submits his application regardless
From 3ad47a42241f578752d0402ed2afc14d0362748a Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 16 Jan 2019 16:34:48 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 049/124] Create readme.md --- comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md | 1 + 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+) create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..8b13789 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md @@ -0,0 +1 @@ + From 0aeeeef5ede720be8182382b80209003cdb5a390 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 16 Jan 2019 23:17:29 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 050/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md | 5 ++++- 1 file changed, 4 insertions(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md index 8b13789..e65006e 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md @@ -1 +1,4 @@ - +## Episode 2 Outline +### Act 1 +### Act 2 +### Act 3 From ccff9f71e0ed6f7983deb3dca116fecb39f1a3df Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Thu, 17 Jan 2019 15:07:41 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 051/124] Update readme.md - gave Makkusu a trump card which also heightens the stakes --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 22 ++++++++++++---------- 1 file changed, 12 insertions(+), 10 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 56c0c7c..8aa2abb 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -34,15 +34,6 @@ if(they win) Xenos: even though we lost today I wont give up on helping the Cyvolters mission of creating a world with equal opportunity for all. We have technolgy but sometime socity needs that final push Xenos: From this moment forward I will the lead the Cyvolters. Change can happen, has happened and, will happen. - -- Minia is traded to BluNet by Leona which is all over the news. - - Minia would've been starting over Leona had she not been traded. - - Kyshumu is enraged as this is right before the hub she is traded to becomes a Cyvolter hub. He then realizes this is the perfect opportuity to ensure Makkusu loses -- he tells her to throw the match. This leaves Minia conflicted because she does not want to see Makkusu fail. - - During the match it appears that she is doing just what her father wanted as performs poorly during her match. It turn out that this is not the case. She has been trying her best but does she not want to hurt her opponet hampering her abilities. - - Airiona tells Makkusu that Minia is sabatoging them. Makkusu(he was voted team captain despite not starting) then suggests that Minia be removed from her Blue position. Airiona is happy thinking Minia is being bench--however Makkusu benchs Airiona instead who is visibly upset. Someone asks then who will take the Blue/White position (Harmony/Xenos(maybe injured)/Avis can't or wont). - Makkusu: well then I guess Air... - Airiona/Xenos: You should Makkusu. It will be the perfect chance to show everyone what you're capable of. - - They begin to make/orchestrate a historic comeback but their efforts fall short as the deficit Minia creating was to great to overcome - In the second season years later the cyvolters is now considered the Citizens league begin to do a type of initiation or point system in which Cybervators(not citizens) must attack "bad" cybervators inorder to become a Cyvolter -- it is a rule created by Citizens. - The cyvolters increase in sizes has become a detriment to their initial values @@ -243,6 +234,10 @@ Episodes: 17 - Alex tells the NRA that both Citizens and Cybervators has taken a liking to Makkusu and that their no telling how they might respond if they don't let him compete. They discuss the possibility of angering the citizens if they don't let him compete citing the decrease in ReNet stock as an example. - Alex allows Makkusu to compete with BluNet or offers up Kassiea/Xenos' hub allowing Makkusu to compete + +- Minia is traded to BluNet by Leona which is all over the news. + - Minia would've been starting over Leona had she not been traded. + - Kyshumu is enraged as this is right before the hub she is traded to becomes a Cyvolter hub. He then realizes this is the perfect opportuity to ensure Makkusu loses -- he tells her to throw the match. This leaves Minia conflicted because she does not want to see Makkusu fail. - Makkusu uses his tech to compete in the CNS championships @@ -322,7 +317,12 @@ Episodes: 18, 19 **Panel 4:** others grew into their greatness(Xenos). - +- Xenos gets injured and gets a limb or two cut off and Avis is missing + - During the match it appears that Minia is doing just what her father wanted(throwing the match) as she performs poorly during her match. It turns out that this is not the case. She has been trying her best but does she not want to hurt her opponet hampering her abilities. + - Airiona tells Makkusu that Minia is sabatoging them. Makkusu(he was voted team captain despite not starting) then suggests that Minia be removed from her Blue position. Airiona is happy thinking Minia is being bench--however Makkusu benchs Airiona instead who is visibly upset. Someone asks then who will take the Blue/White position (Harmony(can't)/Xenos(injured)/Avis (missing)). + Makkusu: well then I guess Air... + Airiona/Xenos: You should Makkusu. It will be the perfect chance to show everyone what you're capable of. + - They begin to make/orchestrate a historic comeback but their efforts fall short as the deficit Minia creating was to great to overcome ### Act 3 11. **Resurrection**
Episodes: 20, 21 @@ -338,6 +338,8 @@ Episodes: 20, 21 Harmony goes from red to blue after being calmed or Xenos take Blue 12. **Return With The Elixir**
Episodes: 22 + - Makkusu uses his trump card utilizing the energy bean he ate earlier this allows him to partially synergize with the cost of depleting all of his energy with the risk of killing him. + - Makkusu wins/loses(do to the unforseen random nature of Jax) championship If Makkusu wins it is because Tomasina lets him or is distracted by the fact that he looks/feels familiar From 925396a5e63fc2f329a7d147c32aafe85599b579 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Thu, 17 Jan 2019 23:07:06 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 052/124] Update readme.md Added possible scene to demonstrate how much of upstream battle Makkusu must undertake --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 4 +++- 1 file changed, 3 insertions(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 8aa2abb..f66f41d 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -7,7 +7,9 @@ - Fan: Makkusu - Cybervator: Minia, Jax, Airiona, Xenos, Ace, Harmony - Chief: Kyshumu, Alex - + + - Makkusu is laughed at by a broadcaster maybe Akia for the fact that sure he may have managed to become a highly ranked Cybervator but does not have an Tail let alone his missing arm and leg(s) so how does he expect to doing anything with out being able to go into burst drive mode. + - This is Xenos' last season before he anounces his retirement - Xenos gives a retirement speech before declaring himself the leader of the Cyvolters (maybe save this for next season) From 85bf868657486c4ab3a0fbb0e51882a3847b5d46 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sat, 19 Jan 2019 12:53:25 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 053/124] Update readme.md Using Xenos rather than Tomasina for this scene provides more leeway for potential future story developments. --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index f66f41d..36f2c3e 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -71,7 +71,7 @@ Episodes: [1](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-1) - Makkusu watches Championships - - **Xenos/Tomasina loses the Championships** + - **Xenos loses the Championships** **Shown as an early flash back:** After Xenos loses and Makkusu who is fan of him runs up to him(maybe a younger Makkusu) and says I don't like you any more. From a301cfb012605ea5d937fbb5fc2a0114fe0fd5ae Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sat, 19 Jan 2019 17:57:31 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 054/124] Update readme.md Added detail for dialogue to for shadow future events --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 4 ++-- 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 36f2c3e..ad5e683 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -167,7 +167,7 @@ Episodes: 9, 10, 11, 12 - Minia fights Airiona in cyberspace - - Now having a Cyber.Beast Makkusu has customized his CSD to have a hologram of a dog/bird + - Now having a Cyber.Beast Makkusu has customized his CSD to have a hologram of a bird(owl?) - Mini falls in the backyard of Makkusu @@ -175,7 +175,7 @@ Episodes: 9, 10, 11, 12 - Makkusu tells a worried Spike what happen - it is placed on the news Minia teleports to Makkusu enraged that he told + it is placed on the news Minia teleports to Makkusu enraged that he told. He is seen taking a shower and is wearing his headband/glasses Minia asks him why he wears even while in the shower. He tells her that it is a keepsake from his parents that he doesnt want to lose. - Makkusu learns that Airiona is a cyvolter and he may have been helped them 7. **Approach To The Inmost Cave**
From a83563667738485d26e68e5a64bb889b671a9cb2 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sun, 20 Jan 2019 19:19:46 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 055/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 6 +++--- 1 file changed, 3 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 8aa2abb..4e2211c 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -138,13 +138,13 @@ Episodes: 6, 7, 8, 9 - Makkusu develops Airiona's character as he gets her to not only help other citzens in cyberspace but Cybervarors as well. They help them mostly by teaming up with ReNet, BluNet, and Cyvolter Cybervators that are being out numbered - - The 21st? championships is going on + - The 22?.3 championships is going on The announcer talks about how team Miniajax has not won a championship match since becoming a Cybervator and that she is a disappointment as a Xybrid Cybervator and will likely lose against Ace and Alex who might be retiring after this fight as he might become the next BluNet cheif. - - Makkusu trains his body + - Makkusu trained his body - Expecting to be in the tournament he trains his body and ignores his doubters + Expecting to be in the tournament he trained his body and ignores his doubters 6. **Tests, Allies, Enemies**
Episodes: 9, 10, 11, 12 From 3f3cdd57ad6c5334eafa9da7943cee1b0f4d0dfa Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sun, 20 Jan 2019 20:19:39 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 056/124] Update readme.md - Choose to use Makkusu guardian and Xenos as the losing Cybervator as it leaves open more potential plot points. --- comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md | 12 ++++++------ 1 file changed, 6 insertions(+), 6 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md index 25c34a5..f3d229a 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md @@ -8,28 +8,28 @@ The ending of CNS Championships is shown. An 8 year old Makkusu is shown watchin Pages: 4, 5, 6, 7 After the Match -*The back of Xenos/Tomasina is shown a losing the reader to see their tail* +*The back of Xenos is shown a losing the reader to see their tail* **Makkusu:** Hey mister hey mister -*Tomasina/Xenos Turns around preparing to give him an autograph* +*Xenos Turns around with a smile preparing to give him an autograph* **Makkusu:** I don't like you anymore -**Tomasina/Xenos:** What did I do +**Xenos:** What did I do -**Makkusu's Gurdian**(*pulling Makkusu away*)/**Akia**(*jumping in front of Makkusu*): he he Makkusu's upset because you lost +**Makkusu's Gurdian**(*pulling Makkusu away*): Makkusu's upset because you lost **Makkusu:** Just you wait when I'm old enough I'm gonna be a better Cybervator than even you -**Tomasina/Xenos** (*rubs the top of his head*): Ha ha ha. I'll be waiting. +**Xenos** (*rubs the top of his head*): Ha ha ha. Okay. I'll be waiting. ## Act 3 Pages: 8, 9, 10 -10 years later Makkusu is now old enough to compete in the CNS +12 years later Makkusu is now old enough to compete in the CNS Makkusu is seen sleeping on a train. He is awakened by spike or his CSD 1. Spike: Hey Makkusu hey get up isn't this your stop From 6a4f7b164919af28d1ad6608f9303cb0edbe1c56 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Mon, 21 Jan 2019 14:04:20 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 057/124] Changeed so the cyvolters the is reason Mina falls - The reason Mina falls on Makkusu house is now that the satellite was tampered with. This made it so that the events in which Makkusu finding an injured Mina becomes connected to the tournament. This will make the order of events more compact and improves the flow of the story. - No longer needed to force an Airiona and Minia fight so that has been removed(sometimes you need to leave something in the story you know is forced with the hope of coming up with something better. Every part of a story can't be perfect) --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 34 +++++++++++++++++++++------------- 1 file changed, 21 insertions(+), 13 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index b15ab4d..2c7e658 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -129,7 +129,7 @@ Episodes: 6, 7, 8, 9 Airiona: yea but my family isn’t, and your a perfect example that the distribution of money is misplaced citizen do all of the work while cybervator gets majority of revenue from your work even though they are only one percent of the population. But we’re gonna change all of that. - - Makkusu and maybe Minia lose their first ranked/unranked fight and prepare for a second. An announcer is either surprised that he even has a fan and laughs at the fact the he only has one fan probably because ever saw his first fight in which he did terrible. Spike is that only fan + - Makkusu and maybe Airiona lose their first ranked/unranked fight and prepare for a second. An announcer is either surprised that he even has a fan and laughs at the fact the he only has one fan probably because ever saw his first fight in which he did terrible. Spike is that only fan - Spike wanted him to join his company which is secretly helping the cyvolter orginization. After constantly losing Spike offers to make Makkusu a co-owner or employee since he will be able to pursue is passion in a more realstic manner. Makkusu tells him that he is a white/green type and doesnt have the affinty to be a broadcaster? spike responds we could use a white type like you especaily one so knowledgable about... Makkusu cuts him off turning him down thinking he is on the path to becoming a cybervator(Makkusu later accepts the request after the CNS championships but maybe it is to late). He tells him that he wants to succed on his own merrit. @@ -140,17 +140,35 @@ Episodes: 6, 7, 8, 9 - Makkusu develops Airiona's character as he gets her to not only help other citzens in cyberspace but Cybervarors as well. They help them mostly by teaming up with ReNet, BluNet, and Cyvolter Cybervators that are being out numbered - - The 22?.3 championships is going on - The announcer talks about how team Miniajax has not won a championship match since becoming a Cybervator and that she is a disappointment as a Xybrid Cybervator and will likely lose against Ace and Alex who might be retiring after this fight as he might become the next BluNet cheif. - Makkusu trained his body Expecting to be in the tournament he trained his body and ignores his doubters + + - The 22?.3 championships is going on + The announcer talks about how team Miniajax has not won a championship match since becoming a Cybervator and that she is a disappointment as a Xybrid Cybervator and will likely lose against Ace and Alex who might be retiring after this fight as he might become the next BluNet cheif. + + The satellite in which Minia and Jax is fighting on malfunctions causing Minia to fall back down to earth + 6. **Tests, Allies, Enemies**
Episodes: 9, 10, 11, 12 + + + + + - Mini falls in the backyard of Makkusu + + Makkusu asks what happend Minia tells him that she is not supposed to tell him but because he saved her that he will tell him. She insist that he does not tell anyone because if word gets out she will be in trouble + + - Makkusu tells a worried Spike what happen + + it is placed on the news Minia teleports to Makkusu enraged that he told. He is seen taking a shower and is wearing his headband/glasses Minia asks him why he wears even while in the shower. He tells her that it is a keepsake from his parents that he doesnt want to lose. + - The Cyvolters are teased as a mysterious group of Cybervators that has been capturing/stealing the satellites the house Cyber.Beast. It is revealed to be something that has been going on for a while now. + + It turns out that the reason the satellite Minia was fighting on malfunctioned causing her to fall was because the Cyvolters had tammperd with it it. This is something that may have been kown by the NRA/CyberOps for a while but hidden from the public as they did not know which Satellite was tampered with or what had been done. - Makkusu helps someone in cyberspace @@ -165,17 +183,7 @@ Episodes: 9, 10, 11, 12 Makkusu has not been seen out side of cyberspace for a while but when we see him he now has hair on his head and no longer has a fat belly. - - Minia fights Airiona in cyberspace - - Now having a Cyber.Beast Makkusu has customized his CSD to have a hologram of a bird(owl?) - - - Mini falls in the backyard of Makkusu - - Makkusu asks what happend Minia tells him that she is not supposed to tell him but because he saved her that he will tell him. She insist that he does not tell anyone because if word gets out she will be in trouble - - - Makkusu tells a worried Spike what happen - - it is placed on the news Minia teleports to Makkusu enraged that he told. He is seen taking a shower and is wearing his headband/glasses Minia asks him why he wears even while in the shower. He tells her that it is a keepsake from his parents that he doesnt want to lose. - Makkusu learns that Airiona is a cyvolter and he may have been helped them 7. **Approach To The Inmost Cave**
From 41c6123b0732782deb1c56701ae543f027314ca6 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Mon, 21 Jan 2019 15:31:09 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 058/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md | 26 ++++++++++++++++++++------ 1 file changed, 20 insertions(+), 6 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md index f3d229a..417023d 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md @@ -29,20 +29,34 @@ After the Match ## Act 3 Pages: 8, 9, 10 -12 years later Makkusu is now old enough to compete in the CNS +12 years later Makkusu feels he is now ready to compete in the CNS Makkusu is seen sleeping on a train. He is awakened by spike or his CSD 1. Spike: Hey Makkusu hey get up isn't this your stop 1. CSD: \*Beep Beep Beep\* Rise and shine Makkusu you have arrived at your destination + +Makkusu goes to intiations ceromony in which cybervator are given their first Cyber.Beast -Makkusu is teased about being delusional for trying to become a cybervator when he doesn't even have a tail +
+ +### Version 1 +Akia blocks Makkusu from entering the building is teased about being delusional for trying to become a cybervator when he doesn't even have a tail. He says that she is going to make him late + +Makkusu starts to have doubts but enters the building regardless regardless + +Makkusu is the first one their and waits in the lobby to get his first Cyber.Beast + + +### Version 2 +Makkusu is the first one their and waits in the lobby to get his first Cyber.Beast + +While waiting Makkusu is teased about being delusional for trying become a cybervator when he doesn't even have a tail -Makkusu starts to have doubts but submits his application regardless
-10 years later Makkusu is now old enough to compete in the CNS +Makkusu Name is called + +:Makkusu Light -Makkusu submits his application to become a Cybervator -Makkusu is teased about being delusional trying become a cybervator when he doesn't even have a tail From a2138ac9774fa50264998eb4bd0a14faaa9ac71c Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Mon, 21 Jan 2019 16:35:46 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 059/124] Update readme.md - Makusu teaming up with Airiona for the first time belongs in the meeting the mentor section - Expanded the refusal of the call section --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 14 ++++++++------ 1 file changed, 8 insertions(+), 6 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 2c7e658..08f72e8 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -80,11 +80,12 @@ Episodes: [1](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makk Episodes: [1](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-1) - Makkusu Applies to be a Cybervator 3. **Refusal Of The Call**
-Episodes: 2 - - Makkusu is rejected +Episodes: [2](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-2) + - Makkusu is rejected and heads back home + - Airiona is seen escaping the hub Makkusu was at 4. **Meeting The Mentor**
Episodes: 3, 4, 5 - - Airiona is found + - When Makkusu arrives home an injured Airiona is found at the foot of his door - The reader sees the inside of Makkusu’s room which has posters and cybervator Fandom items everywhere - Makkusu uses this opportunity to test his Cyber.Beast controler using Airiona's Cyber.Beast - Maybe with out her permission. In which case Airiona comes up behind him creating the poisiblty of punishment @@ -118,9 +119,6 @@ Episodes: 3, 4, 5 **Xenos:** I guess it worked out in our favor after all -### Act 2 -5. **Crossing The Threshold**
-Episodes: 6, 7, 8, 9 - Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace. He assumes that because Airiona and Minia are teammates that he is a ReNet Cybervator Airiona: It’s nice to be around someone smarter than me for a change especially when it is a citizen(minia is smart but does not enough confidence to exercise it) @@ -128,6 +126,10 @@ Episodes: 6, 7, 8, 9 Makkusu: But aren't you a cybervator Airiona: yea but my family isn’t, and your a perfect example that the distribution of money is misplaced citizen do all of the work while cybervator gets majority of revenue from your work even though they are only one percent of the population. But we’re gonna change all of that. + +### Act 2 +5. **Crossing The Threshold**
+Episodes: 6, 7, 8, 9 - Makkusu and maybe Airiona lose their first ranked/unranked fight and prepare for a second. An announcer is either surprised that he even has a fan and laughs at the fact the he only has one fan probably because ever saw his first fight in which he did terrible. Spike is that only fan - Spike wanted him to join his company which is secretly helping the cyvolter orginization. From 388357886673af738bebcad1dd178e86d4fa38df Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Mon, 21 Jan 2019 16:44:19 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 060/124] Choose version 1 Went with version 1 as it has a better story beat. --- comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md | 17 +++++++---------- 1 file changed, 7 insertions(+), 10 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md index 417023d..5242b92 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md @@ -37,22 +37,19 @@ Makkusu is seen sleeping on a train. He is awakened by spike or his CSD Makkusu goes to intiations ceromony in which cybervator are given their first Cyber.Beast -
+Akia blocks Makkusu from leaving the train station and is teased about being delusional for trying to become a cybervator when he doesn't even have a tail. -### Version 1 -Akia blocks Makkusu from entering the building is teased about being delusional for trying to become a cybervator when he doesn't even have a tail. He says that she is going to make him late +Makkusu looks down at the light on his CSD that has turned yellow. -Makkusu starts to have doubts but enters the building regardless regardless - -Makkusu is the first one their and waits in the lobby to get his first Cyber.Beast + He says that she is going to make him late. +Spike Walks in and intervenes as he treatens to stream her so that everyone can see what a bully she is -### Version 2 -Makkusu is the first one their and waits in the lobby to get his first Cyber.Beast +She lets Makkusu go -While waiting Makkusu is teased about being delusional for trying become a cybervator when he doesn't even have a tail +Makkusu starts to have doubts but enters the building regardless regardless -
+Makkusu is the first one there and waits in the lobby to get his first Cyber.Beast Makkusu Name is called From 6f1d8321c106b0ecc156a81140854c87baaf7803 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Mon, 21 Jan 2019 18:36:35 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 061/124] Update readme.md Added scene of Makkusu and Airiona's first meeting and its build up --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 18 ++++++++++++++++++ 1 file changed, 18 insertions(+) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 08f72e8..c8d4253 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -86,6 +86,24 @@ Episodes: [2](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makk 4. **Meeting The Mentor**
Episodes: 3, 4, 5 - When Makkusu arrives home an injured Airiona is found at the foot of his door + + Makkusu: Whoa what happened. Why arent you healing + + Airiona(holding her arm stub): My argh My CSD is broken/damaged + + Makkusu: I'll call for help + + #### Version 1 + Airiona: No don't... There is no time I need you to fix it + + Makkusu: But I'm not a doctor + + Airiona(she hands him her CSD): no argh my CSD + + #### Version 2 + Airiona(she hands him her CSD): It's already on the way argh my CSD I need you to fix it + + - The reader sees the inside of Makkusu’s room which has posters and cybervator Fandom items everywhere - Makkusu uses this opportunity to test his Cyber.Beast controler using Airiona's Cyber.Beast - Maybe with out her permission. In which case Airiona comes up behind him creating the poisiblty of punishment From d0e1d2a13d6b45c369f8485ca9a16934e2af5ddd Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Mon, 21 Jan 2019 18:42:33 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 062/124] Add details to act 1, 2, and 3 - Add page Estimates - Having Airiona Peeking in Act 1 helps to transition the scene from Makkusu to Airiona without being jarring - With Airiona peeking it also gives a reason as to why she would go to Makkusu for help --- comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md | 18 ++++++++++++++++++ 1 file changed, 18 insertions(+) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md index e65006e..9acb807 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md @@ -1,4 +1,22 @@ ## Episode 2 Outline ### Act 1 +Pages: 1, 2, 3, 4 + +Makkusu is rejected + +Makkusu tries to explain to them that he doesn't neen a tail to use a Cyber.Beast showing them the device he made + +He asks if they can at least let him test/demostrate it + +Airiona can be seen hidden from site grimacing and peaking at what is going on + ### Act 2 +Pages: 5, 6, 7, 8 + +After Makkusu leaves a cybervator comes rushing in yelling and tells/asks them about Aririona + +She happend to see and remembers that that Makkusu was able to customize his CSD so she decides to follow him home flying behind him and the train that he is ridding on ### Act 3 +Pages: 9, 10 + +Just as Makkusu is about to close his door he sees Airiona outside of his house at the foot of his door. From 1a72eda657e80d0666c2644b83cf78198d7b022f Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Mon, 21 Jan 2019 18:49:38 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 063/124] Create readme.md --- comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md | 4 ++++ 1 file changed, 4 insertions(+) create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..f199e05 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md @@ -0,0 +1,4 @@ +# Episode 3 Outline +## Act 1 +## Act 2 +## Act 3 From 6db8531782fba922ca4416c08d4d59670c76e6aa Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Mon, 21 Jan 2019 19:49:11 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 064/124] Foreshadowing for Airiona --- comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md | 4 ++++ 1 file changed, 4 insertions(+) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md index 9acb807..00a29b8 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md @@ -2,6 +2,10 @@ ### Act 1 Pages: 1, 2, 3, 4 +Makkusu: No one else is here am I the first person + +: No actually some was even earlier than you. She was very um... I guess you could say enthusiastic/eager + Makkusu is rejected Makkusu tries to explain to them that he doesn't neen a tail to use a Cyber.Beast showing them the device he made From f9deb409c698ef2bde76b2376b417172915aefe6 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Mon, 21 Jan 2019 19:54:32 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 065/124] Update readme.md With Airiona telling Makkusu what are you doing it makes it appear as if he got busted creating a cliff hanger for the next episode or page depending on space available. Airiona tells Makkusu that she will get him a Cyber.Beast to test his device as a follow up to him trying to use her CSD previously --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 23 ++++++++++++++++------- 1 file changed, 16 insertions(+), 7 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index c8d4253..bf5c20e 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -93,23 +93,32 @@ Episodes: 3, 4, 5 Makkusu: I'll call for help - #### Version 1 + #### (if enough space) Version 1 Airiona: No don't... There is no time I need you to fix it Makkusu: But I'm not a doctor Airiona(she hands him her CSD): no argh my CSD - #### Version 2 + #### (if not enough space) Version 2 Airiona(she hands him her CSD): It's already on the way argh my CSD I need you to fix it - The reader sees the inside of Makkusu’s room which has posters and cybervator Fandom items everywhere - Makkusu uses this opportunity to test his Cyber.Beast controler using Airiona's Cyber.Beast - - Maybe with out her permission. In which case Airiona comes up behind him creating the poisiblty of punishment - - Airiona is excited about his creation + - With out her permission. Airiona comes up behind him creating the poisiblty of punishment + + Airiona(yells): What are you doing! + + on the next page/episode Makkusu looks with dismay + + Airiona: You/We don't have time for that right now. You need to fix my CSD so that I can heal my arm + + Makkusu: Oh! Right. + + - After begining her arm regenation process Airiona talks exciting about his creation while they wait - Airiona: Wow you're smart + Airiona: (You know) You're pretty smart Airiona: you see, you were able to make the csd and controler because unilike others he doesn't rely on cyber.beast to code he does is on as society does not have the skills they once did @@ -117,11 +126,11 @@ Episodes: 3, 4, 5 Makkusu: Not really I just most are combined ideas from real scientist to put ideas together to come up with a new one - No unlike most scientist who have become singular focused and don't combined ideas from others you put ideas together to come up with a new one + Arriona: No unlike most scientist who have become singular focused and don't combined ideas from others you put ideas together to come up with a new one - S/He talks about how citizens can’t become cybervators because they dont a tail which means they can synergise. With the device he made anyone will be able to use a cyberbeast in cyberspace even though they still won’t be able to become cybervators since they still won’t be able to go into burtdrive - - Makkusu tends to the injured Airiona fixing her CSD which allows her to heal. she encourages him to try again and that she will give word to her superiours to give him a chance + - Makkusu tends to the injured Airiona fixing her CSD which allows her to heal. she encourages him to try again and that she will give word to her superiours to give him a chance and that they will send him a Cyber.Beast so that he can test his device. - Makkusu customized his CSD to have a talking Ai which he calls torrey From f4daea6577ac5c14c14541cb4ca4a7fb2ad1605d Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Mon, 21 Jan 2019 20:39:37 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 066/124] Added dialogue Makkusu asking about Minia's hair color opens exposition about color type --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 7 ++++--- 1 file changed, 4 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index bf5c20e..1871b0d 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -135,6 +135,8 @@ Episodes: 3, 4, 5 - Makkusu customized his CSD to have a talking Ai which he calls torrey - She tells him maybe with your cyber.beast controler I'll be able to see you in cyberspace one day + + Airiona: See ya/good luck maybe next time we meet it'll be in cyberspace - Makkusu is given a cyberbeast and invited to be a cybervator - Makkusu takes the cyber.beast given to him by Xenos/Airiona inviting him to join the Cyvolters which he in excitement misread as cybervators @@ -183,10 +185,9 @@ Episodes: 6, 7, 8, 9 6. **Tests, Allies, Enemies**
Episodes: 9, 10, 11, 12 - - - + - Makkusu asks why Minias her is red despite her being a green and blue type cybervator + - Mini falls in the backyard of Makkusu Makkusu asks what happend Minia tells him that she is not supposed to tell him but because he saved her that he will tell him. She insist that he does not tell anyone because if word gets out she will be in trouble From b0c30155fc08f8867235cf0d75d0d17ac7aeb391 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 22 Jan 2019 09:04:33 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 067/124] Added Scenes and Dialogue --- comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md | 67 +++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ 1 file changed, 67 insertions(+) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md index f199e05..f062637 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md @@ -1,4 +1,71 @@ # Episode 3 Outline ## Act 1 +Makkusu asks Airiona what happened + +Makkusu: Whoa what happened. Why arent you healing + +Airiona(holding her arm stub): My argh My CSD is broken/damaged + +Makkusu: I'll call for help + +#### (if enough space) Version 1 +Airiona: No don't... There is no time I need you to fix it + +Makkusu: But I'm not a doctor + +Airiona(she hands him her CSD): no argh my CSD + +#### (if not enough space) Version 2 +Airiona(she hands him her CSD): It's already on the way argh my CSD I need you to fix it + ## Act 2 +Makkusu helps Airiona into his house to fix her CSD + +- Airiona notices that Makkusu is a big CNS fan by all stuff in his home/room + + Airiona: So I see watch alot of the CNS Leuague. + + She looks around + + Airiona: You're a fan of the ___ BluNet team + + Makkusu: well I am more of a fan of what ever team Xenos + + Airiona: is he is the one that inspired you to become a Cybervator + + Makkusu: wait how did you know + + Airiona: oh um well + + Makkusu(with joking smile): have you been stalking me + + Airiona(she smiles with shifty eyes): Ha ha ha ye--a + +- Makkusu Decides to try to sneek and use Airiona Cyber.Beast/CSD to test his Cyber.Beast Controler with out her permission. Airiona comes up behind him creating the poisiblty of punishment + + Airiona(yells): What are you doing! + + on the next page/episode Makkusu looks with dismay + + Airiona: You/We don't have time for that right now. You need to fix my CSD so that I can heal my arm + + Makkusu: Oh! Right. + +- After begining her arm regenation process Airiona talks exciting about his creation while they wait + + Airiona: (You know) You're pretty smart + + Airiona: you see, you were able to make the csd and controler because unilike others he doesn't rely on cyber.beast to code he does is on as society does not have the skills they once did + + Makkusu tells her that it is some thing he made a long time ago when had dreams of becoming a cybervator + + Makkusu: Not really I just most are combined ideas from real scientist to put ideas together to come up with a new one + + Airiona: No unlike most scientist who have become singular focused and don't combined ideas from others you put ideas together to come up with a new one + +As they wait Makkusu turns on the TV on his CSD while asking if she wants to watch something while waiting ## Act 3 +Airiona has a look of shame as she knows that if puts on the TV he may see a news report of her break in +Just as she is about to decline watch televisioning on Makkusu's CSD Xenos arrives to pick up Airiona + +As Airiona leaves it can be seen in the Background on Makkusu's CSD a news report of Airiona breaking into the Hub he was at From 2d68d7d9e35db62075fab895e7720c0d41a5d329 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 22 Jan 2019 13:01:29 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 068/124] Moved dialogue into episode 3 readme --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 42 ++--------------------------------------- 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+), 40 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 1871b0d..3131837 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -86,47 +86,9 @@ Episodes: [2](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makk 4. **Meeting The Mentor**
Episodes: 3, 4, 5 - When Makkusu arrives home an injured Airiona is found at the foot of his door - - Makkusu: Whoa what happened. Why arent you healing - - Airiona(holding her arm stub): My argh My CSD is broken/damaged - - Makkusu: I'll call for help - - #### (if enough space) Version 1 - Airiona: No don't... There is no time I need you to fix it - - Makkusu: But I'm not a doctor - - Airiona(she hands him her CSD): no argh my CSD - - #### (if not enough space) Version 2 - Airiona(she hands him her CSD): It's already on the way argh my CSD I need you to fix it - - + - The reader sees the inside of Makkusu’s room which has posters and cybervator Fandom items everywhere - Makkusu uses this opportunity to test his Cyber.Beast controler using Airiona's Cyber.Beast - - With out her permission. Airiona comes up behind him creating the poisiblty of punishment - - Airiona(yells): What are you doing! - - on the next page/episode Makkusu looks with dismay - - Airiona: You/We don't have time for that right now. You need to fix my CSD so that I can heal my arm - - Makkusu: Oh! Right. - - - After begining her arm regenation process Airiona talks exciting about his creation while they wait - - Airiona: (You know) You're pretty smart - - Airiona: you see, you were able to make the csd and controler because unilike others he doesn't rely on cyber.beast to code he does is on as society does not have the skills they once did - - Makkusu tells her that it is some thing he made a long time ago when had dreams of becoming a cybervator - - Makkusu: Not really I just most are combined ideas from real scientist to put ideas together to come up with a new one - - Arriona: No unlike most scientist who have become singular focused and don't combined ideas from others you put ideas together to come up with a new one - S/He talks about how citizens can’t become cybervators because they dont a tail which means they can synergise. With the device he made anyone will be able to use a cyberbeast in cyberspace even though they still won’t be able to become cybervators since they still won’t be able to go into burtdrive @@ -148,7 +110,7 @@ Episodes: 3, 4, 5 **Xenos:** I guess it worked out in our favor after all - - Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace. He assumes that because Airiona and Minia are teammates that he is a ReNet Cybervator + - Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace. Airiona: It’s nice to be around someone smarter than me for a change especially when it is a citizen(minia is smart but does not enough confidence to exercise it) From e852d59dcde22a0d8c19af9070717d79ec87ef60 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 22 Jan 2019 16:47:34 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 069/124] Update readme.md - Moved Makkusu customizing his CSD to, later on, to serve as a lead up to him talking about his parents - Added the final line that will drive home the theme - Provide a reason for placing Makkusu rather than Airiona in the Blue position. --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 41 ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++------- 1 file changed, 34 insertions(+), 7 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 3131837..5fcedd9 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -93,13 +93,9 @@ Episodes: 3, 4, 5 - S/He talks about how citizens can’t become cybervators because they dont a tail which means they can synergise. With the device he made anyone will be able to use a cyberbeast in cyberspace even though they still won’t be able to become cybervators since they still won’t be able to go into burtdrive - Makkusu tends to the injured Airiona fixing her CSD which allows her to heal. she encourages him to try again and that she will give word to her superiours to give him a chance and that they will send him a Cyber.Beast so that he can test his device. - - - Makkusu customized his CSD to have a talking Ai which he calls torrey - + - She tells him maybe with your cyber.beast controler I'll be able to see you in cyberspace one day - Airiona: See ya/good luck maybe next time we meet it'll be in cyberspace - - Makkusu is given a cyberbeast and invited to be a cybervator - Makkusu takes the cyber.beast given to him by Xenos/Airiona inviting him to join the Cyvolters which he in excitement misread as cybervators - Airiona sends the invite to which Xenos scolds her because he wanted to trick him into joining. As he know he would never join knowing that it is the Cyvolters. @@ -150,13 +146,15 @@ Episodes: 9, 10, 11, 12 - Makkusu asks why Minias her is red despite her being a green and blue type cybervator + - Makkusu has customized his Cyber.Beast and CSD to have a talking Ai which he calls torrey + - Mini falls in the backyard of Makkusu Makkusu asks what happend Minia tells him that she is not supposed to tell him but because he saved her that he will tell him. She insist that he does not tell anyone because if word gets out she will be in trouble - Makkusu tells a worried Spike what happen - it is placed on the news Minia teleports to Makkusu enraged that he told. He is seen taking a shower and is wearing his headband/glasses Minia asks him why he wears even while in the shower. He tells her that it is a keepsake from his parents that he doesnt want to lose. + it is placed on the news Minia teleports to Makkusu enraged that he told. He is seen taking a shower and is wearing his headband/glasses Minia asks him why he wears even while in the shower. He tells her that it is a keepsake from his parents that he doesnt want to lose. He tells her their names where Torrey and Mack. - The Cyvolters are teased as a mysterious group of Cybervators that has been capturing/stealing the satellites the house Cyber.Beast. It is revealed to be something that has been going on for a while now. @@ -322,8 +320,22 @@ Episodes: 18, 19 - Xenos gets injured and gets a limb or two cut off and Avis is missing - During the match it appears that Minia is doing just what her father wanted(throwing the match) as she performs poorly during her match. It turns out that this is not the case. She has been trying her best but does she not want to hurt her opponet hampering her abilities. - Airiona tells Makkusu that Minia is sabatoging them. Makkusu(he was voted team captain despite not starting) then suggests that Minia be removed from her Blue position. Airiona is happy thinking Minia is being bench--however Makkusu benchs Airiona instead who is visibly upset. Someone asks then who will take the Blue/White position (Harmony(can't)/Xenos(injured)/Avis (missing)). + Makkusu: well then I guess Air... - Airiona/Xenos: You should Makkusu. It will be the perfect chance to show everyone what you're capable of. + + Xenos: You should Makkusu. It will be the perfect chance to show everyone what you're capable of. + + Airiona: are you crazy he doesn't have a BurstDrive he'll get his self killed + + Makkusu: Actually! He might be a genius. You see Jax is alot like Minia and the last person on that team that would kill anyone. There is no telling how much he will hold back against a Citizen like me. But what I do know is that his biggist weaskness will become are strength. + + - After Makkusu is subsitued in + + Tomasina:We have huge lead there is now way they will make a comeback. So don’t go all out although he thinks he’s a Cybervator he’s still a citizen + + Jax: ya ya ya I know one wrong move and I could kill him. Don’t worry I got this. + + - They begin to make/orchestrate a historic comeback but their efforts fall short as the deficit Minia creating was to great to overcome ### Act 3 11. **Resurrection**
@@ -342,6 +354,21 @@ Episodes: 20, 21 Episodes: 22 - Makkusu uses his trump card utilizing the energy bean he ate earlier this allows him to partially synergize with the cost of depleting all of his energy with the risk of killing him. + - In the final seconds of the match amidst a comeback + + Makkusu: + + Makkusu: Jax! Don’t hold back/Give it all you got/Stop holding back + + Jax: + + Makkusu: why did I say that I have to win + so that everyone will have the right compete + I am fighting so that all citizens will have the right to compete + + Makkusu: is it from the Cyber.Beast. No thats not it this feeling--this is what it means to truly compete/be a cybervator + + - Makkusu wins/loses(do to the unforseen random nature of Jax) championship If Makkusu wins it is because Tomasina lets him or is distracted by the fact that he looks/feels familiar From fd5ad11dabb5693f18433704b878c6ed95b18747 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 22 Jan 2019 16:50:14 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 070/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md | 9 ++++++--- 1 file changed, 6 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md index f062637..21a7221 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md @@ -65,7 +65,10 @@ Makkusu helps Airiona into his house to fix her CSD As they wait Makkusu turns on the TV on his CSD while asking if she wants to watch something while waiting ## Act 3 -Airiona has a look of shame as she knows that if puts on the TV he may see a news report of her break in -Just as she is about to decline watch televisioning on Makkusu's CSD Xenos arrives to pick up Airiona +- Airiona has a look of shame as she knows that if puts on the TV he may see a news report of her break in -As Airiona leaves it can be seen in the Background on Makkusu's CSD a news report of Airiona breaking into the Hub he was at + Just as she is about to decline watching television on Makkusu's CSD Xenos arrives to pick up Airiona + +- As Airiona leaves taking a blueprint of the controlers with her it can be seen in the Background on Makkusu's CSD a news report of Airiona breaking into the Hub he was at + + Airiona: See ya/good luck maybe next time we meet it'll be in cyberspace From b281785ab8c3c4fc3fba5c4dbaac82bcc3073900 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 22 Jan 2019 16:52:10 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 071/124] Create readme.md --- comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md | 4 ++++ 1 file changed, 4 insertions(+) create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..e0cdfdc --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md @@ -0,0 +1,4 @@ +# Episode 4 Outline +## Act 1 +## Act 2 +## Act 3 From e6423b0dc2b942cd69437ca224501797880480bc Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 22 Jan 2019 21:01:34 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 072/124] Update readme.md Decide to make Akia leave Makkusu alone so that it will raise questions for the reader as to who Spike is(He is her boss) rather than him threatening him --- comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md | 4 +++- 1 file changed, 3 insertions(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md index 5242b92..d963973 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md @@ -43,7 +43,9 @@ Makkusu looks down at the light on his CSD that has turned yellow. He says that she is going to make him late. -Spike Walks in and intervenes as he treatens to stream her so that everyone can see what a bully she is +Spike Walks in and intervenes + +Spike: what's going on here/ is their a problem She lets Makkusu go From 0f1ef558ba07389a929077bf9c9bcfb9f79e5610 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 22 Jan 2019 21:47:46 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 073/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md | 14 ++++++++++++++ 1 file changed, 14 insertions(+) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md index e0cdfdc..6d07119 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md @@ -1,4 +1,18 @@ # Episode 4 Outline ## Act 1 +While on a Cyvolter mission Airiona and Xenos is shown disscusing the possibilty of Makkusu joining the cyvolters ## Act 2 +Xenos Discovers that Airiona already sent Makkusu an invite along with a Cyber.Beast + +Airiona: I already sent the invite + + +Xenos: When their + +Airiona: Just a second ago + +Xenos: but what about the Cyber.Beast + +Airiona: I gave him the one we just got ## Act 3 +Makkusu accepts the invite From 46e8298ac44c18de026391673b470edd59c8bf67 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 23 Jan 2019 06:02:39 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 074/124] Create readme.md --- comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md | 4 ++++ 1 file changed, 4 insertions(+) create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..cfbe54e --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md @@ -0,0 +1,4 @@ +## Episode 5 Outline +## Act 1 +## Act 2 +## Act 3 From 82052b9eb9dc57c0dbe858706cc18f38adcbaa0a Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 23 Jan 2019 08:23:30 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 075/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md | 6 ++++++ 1 file changed, 6 insertions(+) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md index cfbe54e..c730ab0 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md @@ -1,4 +1,10 @@ ## Episode 5 Outline ## Act 1 +They realize that Makkusu does not know who they are. + +Xenos: I guess it worked out in our favor after all + ## Act 2 +Airiona pairs with Makkusu to mine Cyber.Beast ## Act 3 +Makkusu takes down his first Cyber.Beast From f84d99fc6390399f299613dd137c21b7572fad15 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 23 Jan 2019 08:38:35 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 076/124] Update readme.md Changed the focus to Makkusu --- comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md | 9 +++++++-- 1 file changed, 7 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md index 6d07119..62f64b7 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md @@ -1,12 +1,13 @@ # Episode 4 Outline ## Act 1 -While on a Cyvolter mission Airiona and Xenos is shown disscusing the possibilty of Makkusu joining the cyvolters +While working Makkusu is notified that Xenos is about to have a match he stops what he is doing to watch it ## Act 2 +After Airiona and Xenos is shown disscusing the possibilty of Makkusu joining the cyvolters + Xenos Discovers that Airiona already sent Makkusu an invite along with a Cyber.Beast Airiona: I already sent the invite - Xenos: When their Airiona: Just a second ago @@ -15,4 +16,8 @@ Xenos: but what about the Cyber.Beast Airiona: I gave him the one we just got ## Act 3 +Airiona sends the invite to which Xenos scolds her because he wanted to trick him into joining. As he know he would never join knowing that it is the Cyvolters. + +Airiona: so you wanted to trick him?! (right after she says this to their suprise they get a message accepting the invite.) + Makkusu accepts the invite From cbf93087fc18aa59026c598308ce0e680ad081a5 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Thu, 24 Jan 2019 22:11:25 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 077/124] Update Makkusu Story - add spike plot points - add episode 5 details for act 2 - Change Outline formating - Made so that jax is Makkusu's first and final cyberspace fight along with their championship match. This is important since Jax is Makkusu's rival along with the stories antogonist - add details on Makkusu fight which contects to the Minia rescue event --- comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md | 6 ++- comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md | 4 ++ comic/makkusu/readme.md | 87 ++++++++++++++++++++++--------- 3 files changed, 72 insertions(+), 25 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md index 62f64b7..7d2350a 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md @@ -2,7 +2,11 @@ ## Act 1 While working Makkusu is notified that Xenos is about to have a match he stops what he is doing to watch it ## Act 2 -After Airiona and Xenos is shown disscusing the possibilty of Makkusu joining the cyvolters +Makkusu watches a ranked Cyberspace CNS match with Xenos and Airiona through Spikes commentary feed + +Spike: Welcome Spike.TV i'm you're host Spike along with my color commentator Akia + +After the match Airiona and Xenos is shown disscusing the possibilty of Makkusu joining the cyvolters Xenos Discovers that Airiona already sent Makkusu an invite along with a Cyber.Beast diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md index c730ab0..bbacc4c 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md @@ -5,6 +5,10 @@ They realize that Makkusu does not know who they are. Xenos: I guess it worked out in our favor after all ## Act 2 +At first Makkusu tries to fight another cybervator but is quickly turned down by the Cybervator he tries to fight or Airiona +### Version 1 Airiona pairs with Makkusu to mine Cyber.Beast +### Version 2 +Makkusu goes into cyberspace on his own he gets into trouble and Airiona saves him ## Act 3 Makkusu takes down his first Cyber.Beast diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 5fcedd9..5def7e8 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -1,4 +1,4 @@ -# Cyber.Beast(Makkusu) outline +# Cyber.Beast(Makkusu) outline ## Brainstorm - Episodes: 22-27 - Roles @@ -8,8 +8,6 @@ - Cybervator: Minia, Jax, Airiona, Xenos, Ace, Harmony - Chief: Kyshumu, Alex - - Makkusu is laughed at by a broadcaster maybe Akia for the fact that sure he may have managed to become a highly ranked Cybervator but does not have an Tail let alone his missing arm and leg(s) so how does he expect to doing anything with out being able to go into burst drive mode. - - This is Xenos' last season before he anounces his retirement - Xenos gives a retirement speech before declaring himself the leader of the Cyvolters (maybe save this for next season) @@ -65,9 +63,8 @@ -## Arc 1 -### Act 1 -1. **Ordinary World**
+## Act 1 +### 1. Ordinary World Episodes: [1](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-1) - Makkusu watches Championships @@ -76,14 +73,14 @@ Episodes: [1](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makk After Xenos loses and Makkusu who is fan of him runs up to him(maybe a younger Makkusu) and says I don't like you any more. -2. **Call To Adventure**
+### 2. Call To Adventure Episodes: [1](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-1) - Makkusu Applies to be a Cybervator -3. **Refusal Of The Call**
+### 3. Refusal Of The Call Episodes: [2](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-2) - Makkusu is rejected and heads back home - Airiona is seen escaping the hub Makkusu was at -4. **Meeting The Mentor**
+### 4. Meeting The Mentor Episodes: 3, 4, 5 - When Makkusu arrives home an injured Airiona is found at the foot of his door @@ -114,19 +111,27 @@ Episodes: 3, 4, 5 Airiona: yea but my family isn’t, and your a perfect example that the distribution of money is misplaced citizen do all of the work while cybervator gets majority of revenue from your work even though they are only one percent of the population. But we’re gonna change all of that. -### Act 2 -5. **Crossing The Threshold**
+## Act 2 +### 5. Crossing The Threshold Episodes: 6, 7, 8, 9 - - Makkusu and maybe Airiona lose their first ranked/unranked fight and prepare for a second. An announcer is either surprised that he even has a fan and laughs at the fact the he only has one fan probably because ever saw his first fight in which he did terrible. Spike is that only fan + - Makkusu and maybe Airiona lose their first ranked/unranked fight and prepare for a second. They lose to Jax who does not let up and Jax nearly takes his only cyber.beast. Makkusu ejects just in time An announcer is either surprised that he even has a fan and laughs at the fact the he only has one fan probably because ever saw his first fight in which he did terrible. Spike is that only fan - Spike wanted him to join his company which is secretly helping the cyvolter orginization. - After constantly losing Spike offers to make Makkusu a co-owner or employee since he will be able to pursue is passion in a more realstic manner. Makkusu tells him that he is a white/green type and doesnt have the affinty to be a broadcaster? spike responds we could use a white type like you especaily one so knowledgable about... Makkusu cuts him off turning him down thinking he is on the path to becoming a cybervator(Makkusu later accepts the request after the CNS championships but maybe it is to late). He tells him that he wants to succed on his own merrit. + After constantly losing Spike offers to make Makkusu a co-owner or employee since he will be able to pursue is passion in a more realstic manner. Just because it is not what does not matter as long as it still aligns with your vision it is still your passion. He tells him that from what he has seen that he is not cut out for the CNS that not being anle to synergize is to much of a disatvantage. That he has was a henderance to Airiona as he has never seen her perform so poorly. + + Spike tells Makkusu that only the top broadcasting studio get to commentate the Championships each year + + It would do wonders for our channels ratings to have former Cybervator on our team. It might be the boost we need to get choosen to broadcast the Championship + + Makkusu tells him that he is a white/green type and doesnt have the affinty to be a broadcaster? spike responds we could use a white type like you especaily one so knowledgable about... Makkusu cuts him off turning him down thinking he is on the path to becoming a cybervator(Makkusu later accepts the request after the CNS championships but maybe it is to late). He tells him that he wants to succed on his own merrit. Spike tells him that he has tallents that should not be wasted and pasive agressivelly puts down cybervators in general pointing out the cons. he also tells him that he should not put the on a pedstal like he is worshiping them. He tells Makkusu to give it another shot but he shouldnt wait on an uncertainty forever + - Makkusu takes the critisims of Spike and improves the contoler he made + - Makkusu develops Airiona's character as he gets her to not only help other citzens in cyberspace but Cybervarors as well. They help them mostly by teaming up with ReNet, BluNet, and Cyvolter Cybervators that are being out numbered @@ -141,7 +146,7 @@ Episodes: 6, 7, 8, 9 The satellite in which Minia and Jax is fighting on malfunctions causing Minia to fall back down to earth -6. **Tests, Allies, Enemies**
+### 6. Tests, Allies, Enemies Episodes: 9, 10, 11, 12 - Makkusu asks why Minias her is red despite her being a green and blue type cybervator @@ -176,7 +181,7 @@ Episodes: 9, 10, 11, 12 - Now having a Cyber.Beast Makkusu has customized his CSD to have a hologram of a bird(owl?) - Makkusu learns that Airiona is a cyvolter and he may have been helped them -7. **Approach To The Inmost Cave**
+### 7. Approach To The Inmost Cave Episodes: 13, 14, 15 - More citizens are now competing in the CNS league thanks to the Cyvolters destrubting the tech that Makkusu made @@ -209,11 +214,15 @@ Episodes: 13, 14, 15 The person either resigns or give him the fight that he needs to be ranked high enough to joins as they don't need them (thunora?) - + - Makkusu is laughed at by a broadcaster maybe Akia for the fact that he may have managed to become a highly ranked Cybervator but does not have an Tail let alone his missing arm and leg(s) so even if he makes it to the championship how does he expect to doing anything with out being able to go into burst drive mode. + + - Makkusu loses a match and with it his cyber.beast which pretty much elimatantes any chances of making it into the championships - Alex becomes chief - Makkusu works on his new tech -8. **Ordeal**
+ + +### 8. Ordeal Episodes: 16 - The NRA are against allowing citizens to participate in the CNS using unsanctioned Cyber.Beast distributed by the Cyvolters. They hold a metting to discuss this with the CNS. The CNS tells them that is not their place to be decide rather someone should legaly be allowed to compete. @@ -224,11 +233,34 @@ Episodes: 16 - Adding insult to injury the CNS request that both ReNet and BluNet gives up one hub to the Cyvolters so they can compete. This angers Kyshumu who yells that citizens shouldn't compete he treatens to pull ReNet out of the CNS He suggest that it is too dangerous and not having armor they are more likely to be killed and that they can't regrow limbs like a real cybervator - + + -9. **Reward (Seizing The Sword)**
+### 9. Reward (Seizing The Sword) Episodes: 17 + - Makkusu is given/finds a new cyber.beast or the one he beats gives him his Cyber.Beast back as they know how much he helped others and wants to return the favor. + + The only problem is that he is almost out of time and no one would consider risking a match this late in the running. And he needs to face a top 3/5 cybervator to have any hope + + Jax however gives him that match after Minia pleads him citing him saving her. He agrees but tells her but dont expect me to let him win. She says she would never ask that of him. + + Jax and Makkusu fights which is watch by none/many as no one expect a match at this time. + + Makkusu fairs well but time is running out. At this point Jax forefits knowing that he has a huge lead as the number one ranked cybervator. + + Jax: Don't get any ideas I'm just paying back the favor. + + **Flash back of Jax shown huging Minia after Makkusu saved her** + + Jax: I thought you were dead + + Minia is surprised that he knew there was not much time left as he normal has a bad concept of time. He tells her Makkusu but he never said anything out loud + + - Someone asks if he is Upset that he was handed the spot rather than earning it on the team Makkusu tell Alex/Xenos/Minia/Jax/Akia/Airiona that it does matter that it is just a game. They reply telling him that is his problem/Thats why I can stand you/Its not just a game + + Makkusu is told that it is not just a game but that it the reason that we have no more wars and maintain peace among citizens as it gives people a place to belong satisfying the human desire for tribalism + - Alex has been newly elected as the Chief of BluNet - Alex tells the NRA that both Citizens and Cybervators has taken a liking to Makkusu and that their no telling how they might respond if they don't let him compete. They discuss the possibility of angering the citizens if they don't let him compete citing the decrease in ReNet stock as an example. @@ -280,10 +312,17 @@ Episodes: 17 - Harmony attacks Makkusu who tries to introduce his self a nearly kills him but she stops which surprises Ace -10. **The Road Back**
+### 10. The Road Back Episodes: 18, 19 - + - Makkusu is fight on Akia's favorite Cybervators team + + Makkusu runs into Akia before his championship match. + + Akia: Hey Makkusu(She looks as if she will punch/hit him) + + AKia(She has her hand/fist on his shoulder): Xenos is my favorite Cybervator/Every one is count on you so don't lose/Mess up. + - An ultimatum/wager is purposed for Makkusu With Makkusu joining ReNet Kyshumu tells the CNS/NRA that no Citizen should be allowed to compete in the CNS. @@ -337,8 +376,8 @@ Episodes: 18, 19 - They begin to make/orchestrate a historic comeback but their efforts fall short as the deficit Minia creating was to great to overcome -### Act 3 -11. **Resurrection**
+## Act 3 +### 11. Resurrection Episodes: 20, 21 - Makkusu fights Jax - Max suggests a line up change. @@ -350,7 +389,7 @@ Episodes: 20, 21 Mina is changed from the blue to the green position Harmony goes from red to blue after being calmed or Xenos take Blue -12. **Return With The Elixir**
+### 12. Return With The Elixir Episodes: 22 - Makkusu uses his trump card utilizing the energy bean he ate earlier this allows him to partially synergize with the cost of depleting all of his energy with the risk of killing him. From 52caf1b8753a13025f0049316c6e93aee7578773 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Fri, 25 Jan 2019 10:43:27 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 078/124] added theme, episodes 6, 7, 8, and expanded 5 - Moved scenes from outline to they're respective episodes - Airiona saying Jax as an opponet is bad gives an intro into what kind of person he maybe without info dumping. It shown through Jaxs action and his abilities during the fight. - Airiona tells Makkusu about Xybrids in a mini expostion. To make it more pleasent for the read it subverts previous knowledge of cybervators. - By having Makkusu nearly lose his cyber.beast it increase the stakes as it's learned a loss is not just a loss - Start the beginings of Makkusu relationship with Minia and Jax and who they are --- comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md | 2 +- comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md | 9 ++++++ comic/makkusu/episode-6/readme.md | 17 +++++++++++ comic/makkusu/episode-7/readme.md | 32 +++++++++++++++++++++ comic/makkusu/episode-8/readme.md | 48 +++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ comic/makkusu/readme.md | 38 ++++-------------------- 6 files changed, 113 insertions(+), 33 deletions(-) create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-6/readme.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-7/readme.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-8/readme.md diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md index 7d2350a..1e23b4a 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md @@ -22,6 +22,6 @@ Airiona: I gave him the one we just got ## Act 3 Airiona sends the invite to which Xenos scolds her because he wanted to trick him into joining. As he know he would never join knowing that it is the Cyvolters. -Airiona: so you wanted to trick him?! (right after she says this to their suprise they get a message accepting the invite.) +Airiona(Scowling): so you wanted to trick him?! (right after she says this to their suprise they get a message accepting the invite.) Makkusu accepts the invite diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md index bbacc4c..02e4ccd 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md @@ -10,5 +10,14 @@ At first Makkusu tries to fight another cybervator but is quickly turned down by Airiona pairs with Makkusu to mine Cyber.Beast ### Version 2 Makkusu goes into cyberspace on his own he gets into trouble and Airiona saves him + +- During or after the fight + + Airiona: It’s nice to be around someone smarter than me for a change especially when it is a citizen(minia is smart but does not enough confidence to exercise it) + + Makkusu: But aren't you a cybervator + + Airiona: yea but my family isn’t, and your a perfect example that the distribution of money is misplaced citizen do all of the work while cybervator gets majority of revenue from your work even though they are only one percent of the population. But we’re gonna change all of that. + ## Act 3 Makkusu takes down his first Cyber.Beast diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-6/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-6/readme.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..0a1f6d1 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-6/readme.md @@ -0,0 +1,17 @@ +# Episode 6 Outline +## Act 1 +Time has passed after mining cyber.beast Airiona and unranked Makkusu is ready for their first match against Jax and Minia + +Airiona tells Makkusu that Minia and Jax is probably the worst matchup they can get + +## Act 2 +Makkusu notices that Minia and Jax seems to be fused with 2 complete differnt Cyber.Beast at the same time and tells Airiona I thought that wasn't possible. + +Airiona tells Makkusu that they are Xybrids that they have two tails so they can use two cyber.beast at a time. She explain in further detail how it works. + +Makkusu and Jax continues their fight + +## Act 3 +The commentators point Jax is relentless in his fight with Jax as he is known as the type that never backs down from a fight and does not hold back no mater his opponent. + +Makkusu is on the verge of losing his cyber.beast which is pointed out by the commentaor \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-7/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-7/readme.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..fe7c4c4 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-7/readme.md @@ -0,0 +1,32 @@ +# Episode 7 Outline +## Act 1 +Just before Makkusu is defeat Airion uses her chains to pull him to safety while taking a hit from Minia and yells at him to eject as he only hass one cyber.beast she then loses her Cyber.Beast to save Makkusu + +## Act 2 +1 week later + +After losing multiple matches Spike offers to make Makkusu a co-owner or employee since he will be able to pursue is passion in a more realstic manner. Just because it is not what does not matter as long as it still aligns with your vision it is still your passion. He tells him that from what he has seen that he is not cut out for the CNS that not being anle to synergize is to much of a disatvantage. That he has was a henderance to Airiona as he has never seen her perform so poorly. She gave up her chance at the championships just to help him. + +Spike tells Makkusu that only the top broadcasting studio get to commentate the Championships each year + +It would do wonders for our channels ratings to have former Cybervator on our team. It might be the boost we need to get choosen to broadcast the Championship + +Makkusu tells him that he is a white/green type and doesnt have the affinty to be a broadcaster? spike responds we could use a white type like you especaily one so knowledgable about... Makkusu cuts him off turning him down thinking he is on the path to becoming a cybervator(Makkusu later accepts the request after the CNS championships but maybe it is to late). He tells him that he wants to succed on his own merrit. + +Spike tells him that he has tallents that should not be wasted and pasive agressivelly puts down cybervators in general pointing out the cons. he also tells him that he should not put the on a pedstal like he is worshiping them. + +He tells Makkusu to give it another shot but he shouldnt wait on an uncertainty forever +Airiona contacts Makkusu asking if he is ready for a match against her someone else or to mine cyber.beast. + +Makkusu: but the first Championship match is about to start. + +Airiona: You have yet to win a single match you dont have that luxury. If you're serious about being a cybervator now you need to take ever opportunity you can get. If you are not all in then I guess you're on your own.You need practice everyone else is watching this is the best time to mine cyber.beast thier will be no one else to compete with. + +## Act 3 +Airiona and Makkusu are in cyberspace while the 22?.3 championships is going on + +The announcer talks about how team Miniajax has not won a championship match since becoming a Cybervator and that she is a disappointment as a Xybrid Cybervator and will likely lose against Ace and Alex who might be retiring after this fight as he might become the next BluNet cheif. + +The satellite in which Minia and Jax is fighting on malfunctions causing Minia to fall back down to earth + + diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-8/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-8/readme.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..23a5c58 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-8/readme.md @@ -0,0 +1,48 @@ +# Episode 8 Outline +## Act 1 +While Makkusu and Airiona is in cyberspace + +Makkusu: what was that + +Airiona: are you watching the Championships + +Makkusu: no of course not + +*he hears another sound maybe a yell* + +Makkusu: what the heck sorry have to go + +Airiona: you are. Makkusu! if you leave now... +## Act 2 +Makkusu goes outside and finds a crater with an injured Minia + +Torrey Makkusu's CSD makes witty comment about him bring Minia in. + +Minia: My name is... + +Makkusu: My Nia + +Makkusu asks what happend Minia tells him. She insist that he does not tell anyone because if word gets out she will be in trouble + +Makkusu asks why Minias her is red despite her being a green and blue type cybervator + +Minia asks about his talking Cyber.Beast + +## Act 3 +Jax comes to get Minia + +Jax(hugging Minia and maybe crying): I thought you were dead + +Makkusu has a look of suprise that Jax is not as tuff as he thought + +Makkusu is uncomfortable by thr sight of Jax crying. He intentionally disrubtes the mood. + +Makkusu: Hey Jax + +Makkusu tells Jax that he will get get stronger and next time they meet rather in cyberspace or the championships to not expect the same result as last time + +Jax holds back wipes his tears. scowls with confusion and Says dont make laugh or laughs. + +Jax: Lets go Minia + +After Minia leaves something is seen in the hole Minia left in the ground. \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 5def7e8..02cb0e9 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -1,4 +1,8 @@ # Cyber.Beast(Makkusu) outline +## Theme +**The role sports play in society** +*subtheme: competition vs cooperation* + ## Brainstorm - Episodes: 22-27 - Roles @@ -96,39 +100,15 @@ Episodes: 3, 4, 5 - Makkusu is given a cyberbeast and invited to be a cybervator - Makkusu takes the cyber.beast given to him by Xenos/Airiona inviting him to join the Cyvolters which he in excitement misread as cybervators - Airiona sends the invite to which Xenos scolds her because he wanted to trick him into joining. As he know he would never join knowing that it is the Cyvolters. - - **Airiona(Scowling):** so you wanted to trick him?! right after she says this to their suprise they get a message accepting the invite. - - They immediately or eventually realize that he does not know who they are. - - **Xenos:** I guess it worked out in our favor after all - Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace. - - Airiona: It’s nice to be around someone smarter than me for a change especially when it is a citizen(minia is smart but does not enough confidence to exercise it) - - Makkusu: But aren't you a cybervator - - Airiona: yea but my family isn’t, and your a perfect example that the distribution of money is misplaced citizen do all of the work while cybervator gets majority of revenue from your work even though they are only one percent of the population. But we’re gonna change all of that. ## Act 2 ### 5. Crossing The Threshold -Episodes: 6, 7, 8, 9 +Episodes: 6, 7 - Makkusu and maybe Airiona lose their first ranked/unranked fight and prepare for a second. They lose to Jax who does not let up and Jax nearly takes his only cyber.beast. Makkusu ejects just in time An announcer is either surprised that he even has a fan and laughs at the fact the he only has one fan probably because ever saw his first fight in which he did terrible. Spike is that only fan - Spike wanted him to join his company which is secretly helping the cyvolter orginization. - - After constantly losing Spike offers to make Makkusu a co-owner or employee since he will be able to pursue is passion in a more realstic manner. Just because it is not what does not matter as long as it still aligns with your vision it is still your passion. He tells him that from what he has seen that he is not cut out for the CNS that not being anle to synergize is to much of a disatvantage. That he has was a henderance to Airiona as he has never seen her perform so poorly. - - Spike tells Makkusu that only the top broadcasting studio get to commentate the Championships each year - - It would do wonders for our channels ratings to have former Cybervator on our team. It might be the boost we need to get choosen to broadcast the Championship - - Makkusu tells him that he is a white/green type and doesnt have the affinty to be a broadcaster? spike responds we could use a white type like you especaily one so knowledgable about... Makkusu cuts him off turning him down thinking he is on the path to becoming a cybervator(Makkusu later accepts the request after the CNS championships but maybe it is to late). He tells him that he wants to succed on his own merrit. - - Spike tells him that he has tallents that should not be wasted and pasive agressivelly puts down cybervators in general pointing out the cons. he also tells him that he should not put the on a pedstal like he is worshiping them. - - He tells Makkusu to give it another shot but he shouldnt wait on an uncertainty forever - Makkusu takes the critisims of Spike and improves the contoler he made @@ -147,16 +127,12 @@ Episodes: 6, 7, 8, 9 The satellite in which Minia and Jax is fighting on malfunctions causing Minia to fall back down to earth ### 6. Tests, Allies, Enemies -Episodes: 9, 10, 11, 12 +Episodes: 8, 9, 10, 11, 12 - - Makkusu asks why Minias her is red despite her being a green and blue type cybervator - - Makkusu has customized his Cyber.Beast and CSD to have a talking Ai which he calls torrey - Mini falls in the backyard of Makkusu - Makkusu asks what happend Minia tells him that she is not supposed to tell him but because he saved her that he will tell him. She insist that he does not tell anyone because if word gets out she will be in trouble - - Makkusu tells a worried Spike what happen it is placed on the news Minia teleports to Makkusu enraged that he told. He is seen taking a shower and is wearing his headband/glasses Minia asks him why he wears even while in the shower. He tells her that it is a keepsake from his parents that he doesnt want to lose. He tells her their names where Torrey and Mack. @@ -253,8 +229,6 @@ Episodes: 17 **Flash back of Jax shown huging Minia after Makkusu saved her** - Jax: I thought you were dead - Minia is surprised that he knew there was not much time left as he normal has a bad concept of time. He tells her Makkusu but he never said anything out loud - Someone asks if he is Upset that he was handed the spot rather than earning it on the team Makkusu tell Alex/Xenos/Minia/Jax/Akia/Airiona that it does matter that it is just a game. They reply telling him that is his problem/Thats why I can stand you/Its not just a game From 39a479daf93c8773dea21877f0236f4dd94e3c57 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sat, 26 Jan 2019 09:04:24 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 079/124] create episode 9, 10, 11 readme Makkusu begins to find his sucess as he rises in rankings though aiding others. This allegory of how athletes contribute to society though charitey and encouraging other to donate to their cause. --- comic/makkusu/episode-10/readme.md | 8 ++++++++ comic/makkusu/episode-11/readme.md | 5 +++++ comic/makkusu/episode-9/readme.md | 7 +++++++ 3 files changed, 20 insertions(+) create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-10/readme.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-11/readme.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-9/readme.md diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-10/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-10/readme.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..2731ae0 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-10/readme.md @@ -0,0 +1,8 @@ +# Episode 10 Outline +## Act 1 +Makkusu is in cyberspace he sees another cybervator maybe a cyvolter getting double/triple team team Makkusu and maybe Airiona joins in to even things up + +## Act 2 + +## Act 3 +Makkusu helps them win while also increasing his ranking match \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-11/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-11/readme.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..43d4bb9 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-11/readme.md @@ -0,0 +1,5 @@ +# Episode 11 Outline +## Act 1 +A montage is shown of the reputation that Makkusu has made help other cybervators and giving 70% of his earnings and how it has earned him many fans. +## Act 2 +## Act 3 diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-9/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-9/readme.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..4f80ca6 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-9/readme.md @@ -0,0 +1,7 @@ +# Episode 9 Outline +## Act 1 +Makkusu has another match in cyberspace +## Act 2 +Makkusu wins his first match +## Act 3 +Makkusu gives upwards of 70% his earnings for ubi which Airiona/Akia/Spike is confused by \ No newline at end of file From 89a65f6a4c0bde6c4b2c077bd07e9a36fb25d670 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sun, 27 Jan 2019 08:59:16 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 080/124] Fixed formating and grammar --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 270 ++++++++++++++++++++-------------------- 1 file changed, 135 insertions(+), 135 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 02cb0e9..683ac5b 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -70,9 +70,9 @@ ## Act 1 ### 1. Ordinary World Episodes: [1](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-1) - - Makkusu watches Championships +- Makkusu watches Championships - - **Xenos loses the Championships** + - **Xenos loses the Championships** **Shown as an early flash back:** After Xenos loses and Makkusu who is fan of him runs up to him(maybe a younger Makkusu) and says I don't like you any more. @@ -86,236 +86,236 @@ Episodes: [2](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makk - Airiona is seen escaping the hub Makkusu was at ### 4. Meeting The Mentor Episodes: 3, 4, 5 - - When Makkusu arrives home an injured Airiona is found at the foot of his door +- When Makkusu arrives home an injured Airiona is found at the foot of his door - - The reader sees the inside of Makkusu’s room which has posters and cybervator Fandom items everywhere - - Makkusu uses this opportunity to test his Cyber.Beast controler using Airiona's Cyber.Beast +- The reader sees the inside of Makkusu’s room which has posters and cybervator Fandom items everywhere +- Makkusu uses this opportunity to test his Cyber.Beast controler using Airiona's Cyber.Beast - - S/He talks about how citizens can’t become cybervators because they dont a tail which means they can synergise. With the device he made anyone will be able to use a cyberbeast in cyberspace even though they still won’t be able to become cybervators since they still won’t be able to go into burtdrive +- S/He talks about how citizens can’t become cybervators because they dont a tail which means they can synergise. With the device he made anyone will be able to use a cyberbeast in cyberspace even though they still won’t be able to become cybervators since they still won’t be able to go into burtdrive - - Makkusu tends to the injured Airiona fixing her CSD which allows her to heal. she encourages him to try again and that she will give word to her superiours to give him a chance and that they will send him a Cyber.Beast so that he can test his device. +- Makkusu tends to the injured Airiona fixing her CSD which allows her to heal. she encourages him to try again and that she will give word to her superiours to give him a chance and that they will send him a Cyber.Beast so that he can test his device. - - She tells him maybe with your cyber.beast controler I'll be able to see you in cyberspace one day - - Makkusu is given a cyberbeast and invited to be a cybervator - - Makkusu takes the cyber.beast given to him by Xenos/Airiona inviting him to join the Cyvolters which he in excitement misread as cybervators - - Airiona sends the invite to which Xenos scolds her because he wanted to trick him into joining. As he know he would never join knowing that it is the Cyvolters. +- Makkusu is given a cyberbeast and invited to be a cybervator + - Makkusu takes the cyber.beast given to him by Xenos/Airiona inviting him to join the Cyvolters which he in excitement misread as cybervators + - Airiona sends the invite to which Xenos scolds her because he wanted to trick him into joining. As he know he would never join knowing that it is the Cyvolters. - - Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace. +- Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace. ## Act 2 ### 5. Crossing The Threshold Episodes: 6, 7 - - Makkusu and maybe Airiona lose their first ranked/unranked fight and prepare for a second. They lose to Jax who does not let up and Jax nearly takes his only cyber.beast. Makkusu ejects just in time An announcer is either surprised that he even has a fan and laughs at the fact the he only has one fan probably because ever saw his first fight in which he did terrible. Spike is that only fan - - Spike wanted him to join his company which is secretly helping the cyvolter orginization. +- Makkusu and maybe Airiona lose their first ranked/unranked fight and prepare for a second. They lose to Jax who does not let up and Jax nearly takes his only cyber.beast. Makkusu ejects just in time An announcer is either surprised that he even has a fan and laughs at the fact the he only has one fan probably because ever saw his first fight in which he did terrible. Spike is that only fan +- Spike wanted him to join his company which is secretly helping the Cyvolter organization. - - Makkusu takes the critisims of Spike and improves the contoler he made +- Makkusu takes the criticisms of Spike and improves the controller he made - - Makkusu develops Airiona's character as he gets her to not only help other citzens in cyberspace but Cybervarors as well. - They help them mostly by teaming up with ReNet, BluNet, and Cyvolter Cybervators that are being out numbered +- Makkusu develops Airiona's character as he gets her to not only help other citizens in cyberspace but Cybervators as well. + + They help them mostly by teaming up with ReNet, BluNet, and Cyvolter Cybervators that are being out numbered - - Makkusu trained his body +- Makkusu trained his body - Expecting to be in the tournament he trained his body and ignores his doubters + Expecting to be in the tournament he trained his body and ignores his doubters - - The 22?.3 championships is going on +- The 22?.3 championships is going on - The announcer talks about how team Miniajax has not won a championship match since becoming a Cybervator and that she is a disappointment as a Xybrid Cybervator and will likely lose against Ace and Alex who might be retiring after this fight as he might become the next BluNet cheif. + The announcer talks about how team Miniajax has not won a championship match since becoming a Cybervator and that she is a disappointment as a Xybrid Cybervator and will likely lose against Ace and Alex who might be retiring after this fight as he might become the next BluNet chief. - The satellite in which Minia and Jax is fighting on malfunctions causing Minia to fall back down to earth + The satellite in which Minia and Jax is fighting on malfunctions causing Minia to fall back down to earth ### 6. Tests, Allies, Enemies Episodes: 8, 9, 10, 11, 12 - - Makkusu has customized his Cyber.Beast and CSD to have a talking Ai which he calls torrey +- Makkusu has customized his Cyber.Beast and CSD to have a talking Ai which he calls torrey - - Mini falls in the backyard of Makkusu +- Mini falls in the backyard of Makkusu - - Makkusu tells a worried Spike what happen +- Makkusu tells a worried Spike what happen - it is placed on the news Minia teleports to Makkusu enraged that he told. He is seen taking a shower and is wearing his headband/glasses Minia asks him why he wears even while in the shower. He tells her that it is a keepsake from his parents that he doesnt want to lose. He tells her their names where Torrey and Mack. + it is placed on the news Minia teleports to Makkusu enraged that he told. He is seen taking a shower and is wearing his headband/glasses Minia asks him why he wears even while in the shower. He tells her that it is a keepsake from his parents that he doesnt want to lose. He tells her their names where Torrey and Mack. - - The Cyvolters are teased as a mysterious group of Cybervators that has been capturing/stealing the satellites the house Cyber.Beast. It is revealed to be something that has been going on for a while now. +- The Cyvolters are teased as a mysterious group of Cybervators that has been capturing/stealing the satellites the house Cyber.Beast. It is revealed to be something that has been going on for a while now. - It turns out that the reason the satellite Minia was fighting on malfunctioned causing her to fall was because the Cyvolters had tammperd with it it. This is something that may have been kown by the NRA/CyberOps for a while but hidden from the public as they did not know which Satellite was tampered with or what had been done. + It turns out that the reason the satellite Minia was fighting on malfunctioned causing her to fall was because the Cyvolters had tampered with it it. This is something that may have been known by the NRA/CyberOps for a while but hidden from the public as they did not know which Satellite was tampered with or what had been done. - - Makkusu helps someone in cyberspace +- Makkusu helps someone in cyberspace - he has develop a reputation for being an alturistic cybervator not just help others but in terms of giving money unlike other cybervators he gives 70% or more of his earnings to fans - - Makkusu looks ahead to see who his team may be if he earns a spot + he has develop a reputation for being an altruistic cybervator not just help others but in terms of giving money unlike other cybervators he gives 70% or more of his earnings to fans +- Makkusu looks ahead to see who his team may be if he earns a spot - - Makkusu loses to jax +- Makkusu loses to Jax - This team consists of Minia and Jax + This team consists of Minia and Jax - - Makkusu is seen outside of cyberspace +- Makkusu is seen outside of cyberspace - Makkusu has not been seen out side of cyberspace for a while but when we see him he now has hair on his head and no longer has a fat belly. + Makkusu has not been seen out side of cyberspace for a while but when we see him he now has hair on his head and no longer has a fat belly. - - Now having a Cyber.Beast Makkusu has customized his CSD to have a hologram of a bird(owl?) +- Now having a Cyber.Beast Makkusu has customized his CSD to have a hologram of a bird(owl?) - - Makkusu learns that Airiona is a cyvolter and he may have been helped them +- Makkusu learns that Airiona is a cyvolter and he may have been helped them ### 7. Approach To The Inmost Cave Episodes: 13, 14, 15 - - More citizens are now competing in the CNS league thanks to the Cyvolters destrubting the tech that Makkusu made +- More citizens are now competing in the CNS league thanks to the Cyvolters distributing the tech that Makkusu made - - Makkusu finds old cyber.tech +- Makkusu finds old cyber.tech - Makkusu realizes that even if he makes it into the tournament he won't be of much help since he can't go into a BurstDrive mode. + Makkusu realizes that even if he makes it into the tournament he won't be of much help since he can't go into a BurstDrive mode. - He finds a hole in the ground left by Minia in it is old cyber.tech this is just what he needs to compete on even grounds (exposition opportunity): + He finds a hole in the ground left by Minia in it is old cyber.tech this is just what he needs to compete on even grounds (exposition opportunity): - Earlier in the Cyber world history they used robots and somewhat bulky exosuits they even had space ships. this technology was lost after cybervators took over. Many would say that it halted their growth as Cybervator instead relied on cyber tech + Earlier in the Cyber world history they used robots and somewhat bulky exosuits they even had space ships. this technology was lost after cybervators took over. Many would say that it halted their growth as Cybervator instead relied on cyber tech - What he learns contradicts common knowledge as history has be rewritten + What he learns contradicts common knowledge as history has be rewritten - - History is written by the losers as they write the history they are able to shape the perceived realty of their victors the future generation that sees this history will judge their current leaders based on the past villain like winners and the reasons the current system is place by this and will rise and over throw them or even an outside party may take them down based on this history much like the Mongols (http://scholars-stage.blogspot.com/2016/11/history-is-written-by-losers.html) + - History is written by the losers as they write the history they are able to shape the perceived realty of their victors the future generation that sees this history will judge their current leaders based on the past villain like winners and the reasons the current system is place by this and will rise and over throw them or even an outside party may take them down based on this history much like the Mongols (http://scholars-stage.blogspot.com/2016/11/history-is-written-by-losers.html) - - Minia helps Makkusu who is bullied +- Minia helps Makkusu who is bullied Makkusu is watching a CNS broadcast while at the gym and is wearing headphones maybe visor headphones - Makkusu uses his UBI credit to become the sponser of the cheapest cybervator he could find. Akia/Spike tells him he spent more money than he can make in a year as he buys majority of her stock shares in credit. He does not know how much money he has made as a cybervator an maybe doesnt even know he is a cybervator. + Makkusu uses his UBI credit to become the sponsor of the cheapest cybervator he could find. Akia/Spike tells him he spent more money than he can make in a year as he buys majority of her stock shares in credit. He does not know how much money he has made as a cybervator an maybe doesn't even know he is a cybervator. - Makkusu is getting bullied first they verbally abuse him. Akia tells haha look at Makkusu trying to get buff you think that just because you are geting in shape you will become a cybervator. lets see what you got. They then begin pushing him at this point the alert system on his CSD turns yellow or orange at which point the CSD says the threat level and ask Makkusu if he would like assistance he says no. one of the bullies Akia his it turned orange/yellow the leader then says don't worry the Cybervators will only come if it turns red or Makkusu asks for help which he says would never happen. + Makkusu is getting bullied first they verbally abuse him. Akia tells haha look at Makkusu trying to get buff you think that just because you are getting in shape you will become a cybervator. lets see what you got. They then begin pushing him at this point the alert system on his CSD turns yellow or orange at which point the CSD says the threat level and ask Makkusu if he would like assistance he says no. one of the bullies Akia his it turned orange/yellow the leader then says don't worry the Cybervators will only come if it turns red or Makkusu asks for help which he says would never happen. - It appears like he might stand up for his self but he doesn't. Just as Makkusu is pushed or about to be pushed to the ground Minia appears the bullies run away. After they run away Makkusu ask what are you doing here and shes say i'm your Nia remember. Minia asks Makkusu if he is alright to which he replies that he is fine and that they are just bullies and tells her thanks but that he didn't need her help and that it never reached level red and she says she just happened to notice it rising and decided to intervene on her own “and besides I was bored anyway” + It appears like he might stand up for his self but he doesn't. Just as Makkusu is pushed or about to be pushed to the ground Minia appears the bullies run away. After they run away Makkusu ask what are you doing here and she's say I'm your Nia remember. Minia asks Makkusu if he is alright to which he replies that he is fine and that they are just bullies and tells her thanks but that he didn't need her help and that it never reached level red and she says she just happened to notice it rising and decided to intervene on her own “and besides I was bored anyway” - - Makkusu might not have enough points - - Someone he helped before allows him to compete +- Makkusu might not have enough points +- Someone he helped before allows him to compete - The person either resigns or give him the fight that he needs to be ranked high enough to joins as they don't need them (thunora?) + The person either resigns or give him the fight that he needs to be ranked high enough to joins as they don't need them (thunora?) - - Makkusu is laughed at by a broadcaster maybe Akia for the fact that he may have managed to become a highly ranked Cybervator but does not have an Tail let alone his missing arm and leg(s) so even if he makes it to the championship how does he expect to doing anything with out being able to go into burst drive mode. +- Makkusu is laughed at by a broadcaster maybe Akia for the fact that he may have managed to become a highly ranked Cybervator but does not have an Tail let alone his missing arm and leg(s) so even if he makes it to the championship how does he expect to doing anything with out being able to go into burst drive mode. - - Makkusu loses a match and with it his cyber.beast which pretty much elimatantes any chances of making it into the championships +- Makkusu loses a match and with it his cyber.beast which pretty much eliminates any chances of making it into the championships - - Alex becomes chief - - Makkusu works on his new tech +- Alex becomes chief +- Makkusu works on his new tech ### 8. Ordeal Episodes: 16 - - The NRA are against allowing citizens to participate in the CNS using unsanctioned Cyber.Beast distributed by the Cyvolters. They hold a metting to discuss this with the CNS. The CNS tells them that is not their place to be decide rather someone should legaly be allowed to compete. +- The NRA are against allowing citizens to participate in the CNS using unsanctioned Cyber.Beast distributed by the Cyvolters. They hold a meeting to discuss this with the CNS. The CNS tells them that is not their place to be decide rather someone should legally be allowed to compete. - - Not only does the CNS ignore their complaints offically recgonize the Cyvolters allowing citizens to compete in the league. But beacuse they don't have a hub the can't compete in the championships. Their reasoning is that the primary mission of the CNS is to distribute wealth amoung the citzens and this furthers that agenda. +- Not only does the CNS ignore their complaints officially recognize the Cyvolters allowing citizens to compete in the league. But because they don't have a hub the can't compete in the championships. Their reasoning is that the primary mission of the CNS is to distribute wealth among the citizens and this furthers that agenda. - All of the citzen who has become cybervators up until now to prevent this citizens will be allowed to join the CNS. this is done to prevent them from joining the cybervators just so that they can join the CNS. + All of the citizen who has become cybervators up until now to prevent this citizens will be allowed to join the CNS. this is done to prevent them from joining the cybervators just so that they can join the CNS. - - Adding insult to injury the CNS request that both ReNet and BluNet gives up one hub to the Cyvolters so they can compete. This angers Kyshumu who yells that citizens shouldn't compete he treatens to pull ReNet out of the CNS +- Adding insult to injury the CNS request that both ReNet and BluNet gives up one hub to the Cyvolters so they can compete. This angers Kyshumu who yells that citizens shouldn't compete he threatens to pull ReNet out of the CNS - He suggest that it is too dangerous and not having armor they are more likely to be killed and that they can't regrow limbs like a real cybervator + He suggest that it is too dangerous and not having armor they are more likely to be killed and that they can't regrow limbs like a real cybervator ### 9. Reward (Seizing The Sword) Episodes: 17 - - Makkusu is given/finds a new cyber.beast or the one he beats gives him his Cyber.Beast back as they know how much he helped others and wants to return the favor. +- Makkusu is given/finds a new cyber.beast or the one he beats gives him his Cyber.Beast back as they know how much he helped others and wants to return the favor. - The only problem is that he is almost out of time and no one would consider risking a match this late in the running. And he needs to face a top 3/5 cybervator to have any hope + The only problem is that he is almost out of time and no one would consider risking a match this late in the running. And he needs to face a top 3/5 cybervator to have any hope - Jax however gives him that match after Minia pleads him citing him saving her. He agrees but tells her but dont expect me to let him win. She says she would never ask that of him. + Jax however gives him that match after Minia pleads him citing him saving her. He agrees but tells her but dont expect me to let him win. She says she would never ask that of him. - Jax and Makkusu fights which is watch by none/many as no one expect a match at this time. + Jax and Makkusu fights which is watch by none/many as no one expect a match at this time. - Makkusu fairs well but time is running out. At this point Jax forefits knowing that he has a huge lead as the number one ranked cybervator. + Makkusu fairs well but time is running out. At this point Jax forefits knowing that he has a huge lead as the number one ranked cybervator. - Jax: Don't get any ideas I'm just paying back the favor. + Jax: Don't get any ideas I'm just paying back the favor. - **Flash back of Jax shown huging Minia after Makkusu saved her** + *Flash back of Jax shown huging Minia after Makkusu saved her* - Minia is surprised that he knew there was not much time left as he normal has a bad concept of time. He tells her Makkusu but he never said anything out loud + Minia is surprised that he knew there was not much time left as he normal has a bad concept of time. He tells her Makkusu but he never said anything out loud - - Someone asks if he is Upset that he was handed the spot rather than earning it on the team Makkusu tell Alex/Xenos/Minia/Jax/Akia/Airiona that it does matter that it is just a game. They reply telling him that is his problem/Thats why I can stand you/Its not just a game +- Someone asks if he is Upset that he was handed the spot rather than earning it on the team Makkusu tell Alex/Xenos/Minia/Jax/Akia/Airiona that it does matter that it is just a game. They reply telling him that is his problem/Thats why I can stand you/Its not just a game - Makkusu is told that it is not just a game but that it the reason that we have no more wars and maintain peace among citizens as it gives people a place to belong satisfying the human desire for tribalism + Makkusu is told that it is not just a game but that it the reason that we have no more wars and maintain peace among citizens as it gives people a place to belong satisfying the human desire for tribalism - - Alex has been newly elected as the Chief of BluNet +- Alex has been newly elected as the Chief of BluNet - - Alex tells the NRA that both Citizens and Cybervators has taken a liking to Makkusu and that their no telling how they might respond if they don't let him compete. They discuss the possibility of angering the citizens if they don't let him compete citing the decrease in ReNet stock as an example. +- Alex tells the NRA that both Citizens and Cybervators has taken a liking to Makkusu and that their no telling how they might respond if they don't let him compete. They discuss the possibility of angering the citizens if they don't let him compete citing the decrease in ReNet stock as an example. - - Alex allows Makkusu to compete with BluNet or offers up Kassiea/Xenos' hub allowing Makkusu to compete +- Alex allows Makkusu to compete with BluNet or offers up Kassiea/Xenos' hub allowing Makkusu to compete - Minia is traded to BluNet by Leona which is all over the news. - Minia would've been starting over Leona had she not been traded. - - Kyshumu is enraged as this is right before the hub she is traded to becomes a Cyvolter hub. He then realizes this is the perfect opportuity to ensure Makkusu loses -- he tells her to throw the match. This leaves Minia conflicted because she does not want to see Makkusu fail. + - Kyshumu is enraged as this is right before the hub she is traded to becomes a Cyvolter hub. He then realizes this is the perfect opportunity to ensure Makkusu loses -- he tells her to throw the match. This leaves Minia conflicted because she does not want to see Makkusu fail. - - Makkusu uses his tech to compete in the CNS championships +- Makkusu uses his tech to compete in the CNS championships - Arionona: Wow I thought what you made before was incredble how did you create this stuff + Arionona: Wow I thought what you made before was incredible how did you create this stuff - Makkusu: I didn't make it. Its I made from tech that I found under my house(the hole Minia/Airiona created). A lot of it was unfinished All I did was make a few modifications + Makkusu: I didn't make it. Its I made from tech that I found under my house(the hole Minia/Airiona created). A lot of it was unfinished All I did was make a few modifications - Makkusu: I call it an Elimter. Normally a cyber.beast would be able to synergize with a cybervator thanks to thier tail. Since everbody including cybervators evovled from plants I used a plant to act as the cyber.beast[1](https://www.engadget.com/2018/12/05/mit-researchers-create-a-robot-houseplant-that-moves-on-its-own/),[2]( https://www.theverge.com/2018/7/12/17563688/robot-plant-hybrid-hexa-vincross-succulent ). + Makkusu: I call it an Elimiter. Normally a cyber.beast would be able to synergize with a cybervator thanks to thier tail. Since everybody including cybervators evolved from plants I used a plant to act as the cyber.beast[1](https://www.engadget.com/2018/12/05/mit-researchers-create-a-robot-houseplant-that-moves-on-its-own/),[2]( https://www.theverge.com/2018/7/12/17563688/robot-plant-hybrid-hexa-vincross-succulent ). - :so you are basicly sending commands to a beserk cyber.beast a green/black cybervator. So it basicly makes you like a Xybrid. + :so you are basicly sending commands to a beserk cyber.beast a green/black cybervator. So it basicly makes you like a Xybrid. other.person: what how. - Max: < Well you see I can also hyperlink with other cybervator see what they are thinking and send comands as well. > + Max: < Well you see I can also hyperlink with other cybervator see what they are thinking and send comands as well. > - other.person: you just hyperlinked to me with out a fist bump. + other.person: you just hyperlinked to me with out a fist bump. - Max: no I did, during the fight(geting blood) / I did it using the right vibration frequency + Max: no I did, during the fight(geting blood) / I did it using the right vibration frequency - Airiona: This must be the(tech lost to time) lost technology from thousands of years ago Xenos was telling. Haha who Cybervators realy are a ~~cancer~~(find new word) to the world + Airiona: This must be the(tech lost to time) lost technology from thousands of years ago Xenos was telling. Haha who Cybervators realy are a ~~cancer~~(find new word) to the world - - Makkusu's team is formed +- Makkusu's team is formed - | Position | First | Second | Third | Fourth | - |----------|---------|--------------|-------|--------| - | Red | Harmony | Aarock | | | - | Green | Airiona | Makkusu | | | - | Blue | Minia | Xenos | | | - | Black | Knilla | Avis?/Echo | | | - | White | Ace | Avis/Makkusu | | | + | Position | First | Second | Third | Fourth | + |----------|---------|--------------|-------|--------| + | Red | Harmony | Aarock | | | + | Green | Airiona | Makkusu | | | + | Blue | Minia | Xenos | | | + | Black | Knilla | Avis?/Echo | | | + | White | Ace | Avis/Makkusu | | | - - Jax's team +- Jax's team - | Position | First | Second | Third | Fourth | - |----------|---------|--------------|-------|--------| - | Red | Jax | | | | - | Green | Leona | Tomasina | | | - | Blue | Leona? | | | | - | Black | Jax | | | | - | White | Thunora | | | | + | Position | First | Second | Third | Fourth | + |----------|---------|--------------|-------|--------| + | Red | Jax | | | | + | Green | Leona | Tomasina | | | + | Blue | Leona? | | | | + | Black | Jax | | | | + | White | Thunora | | | | - - Harmony attacks Makkusu who tries to introduce his self a nearly kills him but she stops which surprises Ace +- Harmony attacks Makkusu who tries to introduce his self a nearly kills him but she stops which surprises Ace ### 10. The Road Back Episodes: 18, 19 - - Makkusu is fight on Akia's favorite Cybervators team +- Makkusu is fight on Akia's favorite Cybervators team - Makkusu runs into Akia before his championship match. + Makkusu runs into Akia before his championship match. - Akia: Hey Makkusu(She looks as if she will punch/hit him) + Akia: Hey Makkusu(She looks as if she will punch/hit him) - AKia(She has her hand/fist on his shoulder): Xenos is my favorite Cybervator/Every one is count on you so don't lose/Mess up. + AKia(She has her hand/fist on his shoulder): Xenos is my favorite Cybervator/Every one is count on you so don't lose/Mess up. - - An ultimatum/wager is purposed for Makkusu +- An ultimatum/wager is purposed for Makkusu - With Makkusu joining ReNet Kyshumu tells the CNS/NRA that no Citizen should be allowed to compete in the CNS. + With Makkusu joining ReNet Kyshumu tells the CNS/NRA that no Citizen should be allowed to compete in the CNS. - Alex makes a ultimatum suggesting that a citizen is unlikely to win the championships--If Makkusu loses no Citizen will be allowed to compete in the CNS again. + Alex makes a ultimatum suggesting that a citizen is unlikely to win the championships--If Makkusu loses no Citizen will be allowed to compete in the CNS again. - Kyshumu(angry):Fine! + Kyshumu(angry):Fine! - :and if he wins + :and if he wins - Alex is about to say something + Alex is about to say something - Kyshumu(interrupts): He won't. I'll make sure of it. + Kyshumu(interrupts): He won't. I'll make sure of it. - : With all due respect sir you can't compete in the championships any more you're the chief. + : With all due respect sir you can't compete in the championships any more you're the chief. - Kyhsumu: I know that I can't but my wife can + Kyhsumu: I know that I can't but my wife can - :She's been retired for years!? + :She's been retired for years!? - Championship commentary **Panel 1:** @@ -331,8 +331,8 @@ Episodes: 18, 19 others grew into their greatness(Xenos). - Xenos gets injured and gets a limb or two cut off and Avis is missing - - During the match it appears that Minia is doing just what her father wanted(throwing the match) as she performs poorly during her match. It turns out that this is not the case. She has been trying her best but does she not want to hurt her opponet hampering her abilities. - - Airiona tells Makkusu that Minia is sabatoging them. Makkusu(he was voted team captain despite not starting) then suggests that Minia be removed from her Blue position. Airiona is happy thinking Minia is being bench--however Makkusu benchs Airiona instead who is visibly upset. Someone asks then who will take the Blue/White position (Harmony(can't)/Xenos(injured)/Avis (missing)). + - During the match it appears that Minia is doing just what her father wanted(throwing the match) as she performs poorly during her match. It turns out that this is not the case. She has been trying her best but does she not want to hurt her opponent hampering her abilities. + - Airiona tells Makkusu that Minia is sabotaging them. Makkusu(he was voted team captain despite not starting) then suggests that Minia be removed from her Blue position. Airiona is happy thinking Minia is being bench--however Makkusu bench's Airiona instead who is visibly upset. Someone asks then who will take the Blue/White position (Harmony(can't)/Xenos(injured)/Avis (missing)). Makkusu: well then I guess Air... @@ -340,9 +340,9 @@ Episodes: 18, 19 Airiona: are you crazy he doesn't have a BurstDrive he'll get his self killed - Makkusu: Actually! He might be a genius. You see Jax is alot like Minia and the last person on that team that would kill anyone. There is no telling how much he will hold back against a Citizen like me. But what I do know is that his biggist weaskness will become are strength. + Makkusu: Actually! He might be a genius. You see Jax is a lot like Minia and the last person on that team that would kill anyone. There is no telling how much he will hold back against a Citizen like me. But what I do know is that his biggest weakness will become our strength. - - After Makkusu is subsitued in + - After Makkusu is substituted in Tomasina:We have huge lead there is now way they will make a comeback. So don’t go all out although he thinks he’s a Cybervator he’s still a citizen @@ -353,40 +353,40 @@ Episodes: 18, 19 ## Act 3 ### 11. Resurrection Episodes: 20, 21 - - Makkusu fights Jax - - Max suggests a line up change. +- Makkusu fights Jax + - Max suggests a line up change. - When Minia subs for Xenos max is at to read her mind. He learns that the reason she doesn't do well as a blue style fighter is not lack of skill and imagination but rather a matter of mind set. + When Minia subs for Xenos max is at to read her mind. He learns that the reason she doesn't do well as a blue style fighter is not lack of skill and imagination but rather a matter of mind set. - Minia thinks to much particularly the well being of her opponent and is too passive when fighting + Minia thinks to much particularly the well being of her opponent and is too passive when fighting Mina is changed from the blue to the green position - Harmony goes from red to blue after being calmed or Xenos take Blue + Harmony goes from red to blue after being calmed or Xenos take Blue ### 12. Return With The Elixir Episodes: 22 - - Makkusu uses his trump card utilizing the energy bean he ate earlier this allows him to partially synergize with the cost of depleting all of his energy with the risk of killing him. +- Makkusu uses his trump card utilizing the energy bean he ate earlier this allows him to partially synergize with the cost of depleting all of his energy with the risk of killing him. - - In the final seconds of the match amidst a comeback +- In the final seconds of the match amidst a comeback - Makkusu: + Makkusu: - Makkusu: Jax! Don’t hold back/Give it all you got/Stop holding back + Makkusu: Jax! Don’t hold back/Give it all you got/Stop holding back - Jax: + Jax: < he's right if I lose now Makkusu won't be the only citizen who’s life will be at risk > - Makkusu: why did I say that I have to win + Makkusu: why did I say that I have to win so that everyone will have the right compete I am fighting so that all citizens will have the right to compete - Makkusu: is it from the Cyber.Beast. No thats not it this feeling--this is what it means to truly compete/be a cybervator + Makkusu: is it from the Cyber.Beast. No that's not it this feeling--this is what it means to truly compete/be a cybervator - - Makkusu wins/loses(do to the unforseen random nature of Jax) championship +- Makkusu wins/loses(do to the unforeseen random nature of Jax) championship - If Makkusu wins it is because Tomasina lets him or is distracted by the fact that he looks/feels familiar + If Makkusu wins it is because Tomasina lets him or is distracted by the fact that he looks/feels familiar - - Xenos retires from the CNS league +- Xenos retires from the CNS league - - Cyvolters intentions are revealed - - The CNS is shut down? +- Cyvolters intentions are revealed +- The CNS is shut down? From 32353e6373734006698559ce08e8980f47f25a22 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sun, 27 Jan 2019 10:27:04 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 081/124] Fixed typos --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 36 ++++++++++++++++++------------------ 1 file changed, 18 insertions(+), 18 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 683ac5b..3be62de 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -12,11 +12,11 @@ - Cybervator: Minia, Jax, Airiona, Xenos, Ace, Harmony - Chief: Kyshumu, Alex -- This is Xenos' last season before he anounces his retirement +- This is Xenos' last season before he announces his retirement - Xenos gives a retirement speech before declaring himself the leader of the Cyvolters (maybe save this for next season) - Xenos: I want the future to be a world were there are no distincions between citzen and cybervator one in which everyone is a cybervator in their on right. + Xenos: I want the future to be a world were there are no distinctions between citizen and cybervator one in which everyone is a cybervator in their on right. Xenos: Up to this point Cyvolters has not had a leader. Because of this they have done some things I am not proud. many if which goes against the vision/values of the Cyvolter. Without a leader the Cyvolters will become nothing more than an organization resembling a chicken without a head. @@ -24,7 +24,7 @@ Xenos: - Right now There are 4 types of cyvolters + Right now There are 4 types of Cyvolters The malicious type that just like finding people to take down the worst of them all. @@ -35,21 +35,21 @@ Then there ones that follows(majority) the crowd doing what seems to be what's cool. This type is easily embarrassed and just wants others to fit in } - if(they win) Xenos: even though we lost today I wont give up on helping the Cyvolters mission of creating a world with equal opportunity for all. We have technolgy but sometime socity needs that final push + if(they win) Xenos: even though we lost today I wont give up on helping the Cyvolters mission of creating a world with equal opportunity for all. We have technology but sometime society needs that final push Xenos: From this moment forward I will the lead the Cyvolters. Change can happen, has happened and, will happen. -- In the second season years later the cyvolters is now considered the Citizens league begin to do a type of initiation or point system in which Cybervators(not citizens) must attack "bad" cybervators inorder to become a Cyvolter -- it is a rule created by Citizens. +- In the second season years later the Cyvolters is now considered the Citizens league begin to do a type of initiation or point system in which Cybervators(not citizens) must attack "bad" cybervators in order to become a Cyvolter -- it is a rule created by Citizens. - The cyvolters increase in sizes has become a detriment to their initial values - Since anyone can be a Cyvolter they are doing whatever they want and claim to be apart of the Cyvolters, because of this the Cyvolters realize they need a leader to lay a framework and places that duty upon Xenos. - Airiona is upset by the way the other cyvolter are acting she realizes that citizens can be just as bad as cybervator - This changes Airiona strengthens belief that the majority of of Cybervators are stupid instead all humans are. Xenos tells her that it actually mob mentality and selfish preservation that cause people to act this way. people don't want to be alone so they follow what they may think is the masses no matter how wrong it maybe to protect their self -- Makkusu's alturism becomes contagious and eventually becomes the basis for the Cyvolters identity at this point Makkusu either accepts or realize that he is a Cyvolter or she is shown helping another cyvolter +- Makkusu's altruism becomes contagious and eventually becomes the basis for the Cyvolters identity at this point Makkusu either accepts or realize that he is a Cyvolter or she is shown helping another cyvolter - Max or someone that max helps someone or max saying its is solely for the purpose making him a stronger opponent strong enough to be a challenge for him in the future - - Someone joins forces with Makusu because they want the chance to fight someone even stronger than that protagonist in hopes of climbing up in ranking + - Someone joins forces with Makkusu because they want the chance to fight someone even stronger than that protagonist in hopes of climbing up in ranking - Makkusu is about to mine cyber.beast or fight another cybervator alone He spots a girl that waves at him but he doesn't know who she is so he he casually ignores her @@ -89,9 +89,9 @@ Episodes: 3, 4, 5 - When Makkusu arrives home an injured Airiona is found at the foot of his door - The reader sees the inside of Makkusu’s room which has posters and cybervator Fandom items everywhere -- Makkusu uses this opportunity to test his Cyber.Beast controler using Airiona's Cyber.Beast +- Makkusu uses this opportunity to test his Cyber.Beast controller using Airiona's Cyber.Beast -- S/He talks about how citizens can’t become cybervators because they dont a tail which means they can synergise. With the device he made anyone will be able to use a cyberbeast in cyberspace even though they still won’t be able to become cybervators since they still won’t be able to go into burtdrive +- S/He talks about how citizens can’t become cybervators because they don't a tail which means they can synergize. With the device he made anyone will be able to use a Cyber.Beast in cyberspace even though they still won’t be able to become cybervators since they still won’t be able to go into BurstDrive - Makkusu tends to the injured Airiona fixing her CSD which allows her to heal. she encourages him to try again and that she will give word to her superiours to give him a chance and that they will send him a Cyber.Beast so that he can test his device. @@ -129,13 +129,13 @@ Episodes: 6, 7 ### 6. Tests, Allies, Enemies Episodes: 8, 9, 10, 11, 12 -- Makkusu has customized his Cyber.Beast and CSD to have a talking Ai which he calls torrey +- Makkusu has customized his Cyber.Beast and CSD to have a talking Ai which he calls Torrey - Mini falls in the backyard of Makkusu - Makkusu tells a worried Spike what happen - it is placed on the news Minia teleports to Makkusu enraged that he told. He is seen taking a shower and is wearing his headband/glasses Minia asks him why he wears even while in the shower. He tells her that it is a keepsake from his parents that he doesnt want to lose. He tells her their names where Torrey and Mack. + it is placed on the news Minia teleports to Makkusu enraged that he told. He is seen taking a shower and is wearing his headband/glasses Minia asks him why he wears even while in the shower. He tells her that it is a keepsake from his parents that he doesn't want to lose. He tells her their names where Torrey and Mack. - The Cyvolters are teased as a mysterious group of Cybervators that has been capturing/stealing the satellites the house Cyber.Beast. It is revealed to be something that has been going on for a while now. @@ -223,11 +223,11 @@ Episodes: 17 Jax and Makkusu fights which is watch by none/many as no one expect a match at this time. - Makkusu fairs well but time is running out. At this point Jax forefits knowing that he has a huge lead as the number one ranked cybervator. + Makkusu fairs well but time is running out. At this point Jax forfeits knowing that he has a huge lead as the number one ranked cybervator. Jax: Don't get any ideas I'm just paying back the favor. - *Flash back of Jax shown huging Minia after Makkusu saved her* + *Flash back of Jax shown hugging Minia after Makkusu saved her* Minia is surprised that he knew there was not much time left as he normal has a bad concept of time. He tells her Makkusu but he never said anything out loud @@ -247,22 +247,22 @@ Episodes: 17 - Makkusu uses his tech to compete in the CNS championships - Arionona: Wow I thought what you made before was incredible how did you create this stuff + Airiona: Wow I thought what you made before was incredible how did you create this stuff Makkusu: I didn't make it. Its I made from tech that I found under my house(the hole Minia/Airiona created). A lot of it was unfinished All I did was make a few modifications Makkusu: I call it an Elimiter. Normally a cyber.beast would be able to synergize with a cybervator thanks to thier tail. Since everybody including cybervators evolved from plants I used a plant to act as the cyber.beast[1](https://www.engadget.com/2018/12/05/mit-researchers-create-a-robot-houseplant-that-moves-on-its-own/),[2]( https://www.theverge.com/2018/7/12/17563688/robot-plant-hybrid-hexa-vincross-succulent ). - :so you are basicly sending commands to a beserk cyber.beast a green/black cybervator. So it basicly makes you like a Xybrid. + :so you are basically sending commands to a berserk cyber.beast a green/black cybervator. So it basically makes you like a Xybrid. other.person: what how. - Max: < Well you see I can also hyperlink with other cybervator see what they are thinking and send comands as well. > + Max: < Well you see I can also hyperlink with other cybervator see what they are thinking and send commands as well. > other.person: you just hyperlinked to me with out a fist bump. - Max: no I did, during the fight(geting blood) / I did it using the right vibration frequency + Max: no I did, during the fight(getting blood) / I did it using the right vibration frequency - Airiona: This must be the(tech lost to time) lost technology from thousands of years ago Xenos was telling. Haha who Cybervators realy are a ~~cancer~~(find new word) to the world + Airiona: This must be the(tech lost to time) lost technology from thousands of years ago Xenos was telling. Haha who Cybervators really are a ~~cancer~~(find new word) to the world - Makkusu's team is formed From 3947fd92145dd94396c1fa8e4e7e02970c7c4d14 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Mon, 28 Jan 2019 06:50:34 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 082/124] Create script pages for episode 1 - Moved scenes and dialouge from the outline to their respective episodes - Page 1 Panel 1 serves as the establishing shot and panel 2 introduce the main character Makkusu. Panel 3 serves as the page turing suspense - Page 2-4 provides the reader with a hook to show what the story is about - Page 6 and 7 sets up the characters goal - Page 6 and 8 sets the tone - The scene in page 9 will make readers question why Akia will stand down for Akia --- comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-1-script.md | 23 ++++++++++++++++ comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-10-script.md | 14 ++++++++++ comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-2-script.md | 3 +++ comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-3-script.md | 5 ++++ comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-4-script.md | 15 +++++++++++ comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-5-script.md | 17 ++++++++++++ comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-6-script.md | 14 ++++++++++ comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-7-script.md | 13 +++++++++ comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-8-script.md | 25 +++++++++++++++++ comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-9-script.md | 16 +++++++++++ comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md | 33 +++-------------------- 11 files changed, 148 insertions(+), 30 deletions(-) create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-1-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-10-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-2-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-3-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-4-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-5-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-6-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-7-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-8-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-9-script.md diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-1-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-1-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..8f35c78 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-1-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,23 @@ +# Page 1 +## Panel 1 (full page width 2/3rd height) +*The stadium/hub in which the match is being fought in is shown from above* + ++Commentator: ReNet/BluNet is in the lead but Even with only seconds left in this match it is still to close to call + +## Panel 2 (1/3rd height and width) + +*The focus is on Makkusu as he cups his hands to his mouth cheering for Xenos as he sits on his fathers shoulders* + +Mack: Come on Makkusu lets cheer him on + +[Makkusu(yelling)](#makkusu): Come on Xenos! + +Mack: Come on Xenos! + + +## Panel 3 (1/3rd height 2/3rd width) +*A half body shot of the front of Xenos and the back of his opponent is shown* + ++ Commentator: Can Xenos complete what would be a historic comeback to lead his team to victory + + diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-10-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-10-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..f70b398 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-10-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,14 @@ +# Page 10 + +## Panel 1 (wide panel shot 1/3rd vertical full width) +A full front shot of Makkusu is shown standing in the empty lobby looking to the right + +Makkusu is the first one there and waits in the lobby to get his first Cyber.Beast + +## Panel 2 (wide panel shot 1/3rd vertical full width) +Makkusu is shown sitting down looking to the left + +## Panel 2 (wide panel shot 1/3rd vertical full width) +Makkusu is shown sitting down looking to the right and up + +Receptionist:Makkusu Light \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-2-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-2-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..0eadf49 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-2-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,3 @@ +# Page 2 + +*Xenos continues the fight* \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-3-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-3-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..39c2070 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-3-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,5 @@ +# Page 3 + +*Xenos continues the fight* + +*a zoom out shoot of the match and the score board, which shows 1 second left* \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-4-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-4-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..3dc7bbc --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-4-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,15 @@ +# Page 4 + +*Xenos loses the fight* + +Commentator: And there you have it folks ReNet/BluNet is the world champions + +*The audience can be heard cheering while Makkusu's head is down in disappointment* + +Mack: It's ok Makkusu we'll get em' next time. + +*Mack looks to find Makkusu missing* + +Mack(bewildered look): Makkusu? + +Mack(look of fear): Oh no!-use normal speech balloon don't use exclamation as he has an idea of were he went- \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-5-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-5-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..c604efc --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-5-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,17 @@ +# Page 5 + +## Pane l +Xenos is giving an interview with a crowd surrounding them. Makkusu is seen squeezing through + +Xenos: well we gave it our best effort but it just wasn't enough + +## Panel 2 overlay top right side +**Makkusu:** Hey mister + +Makkusu tugs on his tail and xenos grabs it + +## Panel 3 over bottom right side +\* tug tug \* + +**Makkusu:** Hey mister + diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-6-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-6-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..74c1728 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-6-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,14 @@ +# Page 6 +Transitioning from the fist panel of the last page + +Xenos turns around with the same crowd surrounding them. Mack is seen squeezing through them. + + +*Xenos Turns around with a smile preparing to give him an autograph* + +Xenos: Hey there little guy + +**Makkusu:** I don't like you anymore + +Xenos has a look of surprised disappointment + diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-7-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-7-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..177345e --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-7-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,13 @@ +# Page 7 +**Mack**(*pulling Makkusu away*): I'm sorry he's upset because you lost + +Xenos: That's ok. What's your name. I'll give you an autograph + +**Makkusu(yells):** I don't want your autograph. My name is Makkusu. Just you wait when I'm old enough I'm gonna be a better Cybervator than even you. I'll never lose! + +**Xenos** (*rubs the top of his head*): Ha ha ha. Okay Superstar. I'll be waiting. + +## Last Panel +*The panel is black* +1. Spike: Hey Makkusu hey +1. CSD: \*Beep Beep Beep\* \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-8-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-8-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..28b5418 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-8-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,25 @@ +# Page 8 + +## Panel 1 +12 years later + +Makkusu is seen sleeping on a train. He is awakened by spike or his CSD + 1. Spike: Hey Makkusu hey get up isn't this your stop + 1. CSD: \*Beep Beep Beep\* Rise and shine Makkusu you have arrived at your destination + +## Panel 2 +Makkusu gets off the train into the corridor of the train station + +Akia is smirking leaned up against the door entrance into the hub. + +Akia: are you here for + +## Panel 3 +Head shot of Makkusu as he gets closer + +Makkusu (scowls): come on I don't have time for this I'm gonna be late. can you let me trough please + +## Panel 4 +Akia slaps the back of Makkusu's head and his CSD turns yellow + +Akia: No! you don't even have a tail hoe the hack do you think you can become a cybervator with out one. You'll just embarrass your self \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-9-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-9-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..f4f0e9c --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-9-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,16 @@ +# Page 9 + +## Panel 1 +Spike Walks in and intervenes + +Spike: what's going on here/ is there a problem + +## Panel 2 +Akia: I was just telling Makkusu good luck. + +She lets Makkusu go + +## Panel 3 +Makkusu Face has a look of doubt but he enters the building regardless. + +Makkusu: \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md index d963973..542f4d7 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md @@ -7,24 +7,7 @@ The ending of CNS Championships is shown. An 8 year old Makkusu is shown watchin ## Act 2 Pages: 4, 5, 6, 7 -After the Match -*The back of Xenos is shown a losing the reader to see their tail* - -**Makkusu:** Hey mister hey mister - -*Xenos Turns around with a smile preparing to give him an autograph* - -**Makkusu:** I don't like you anymore - -**Xenos:** What did I do - -**Makkusu's Gurdian**(*pulling Makkusu away*): Makkusu's upset because you lost - -**Makkusu:** Just you wait when I'm old enough I'm gonna be a better Cybervator than even you - -**Xenos** (*rubs the top of his head*): Ha ha ha. Okay. I'll be waiting. - - +After the Match which Xenos loses Xenos has an interview but is interrupted by Makkusu ## Act 3 Pages: 8, 9, 10 @@ -32,22 +15,14 @@ Pages: 8, 9, 10 12 years later Makkusu feels he is now ready to compete in the CNS Makkusu is seen sleeping on a train. He is awakened by spike or his CSD - 1. Spike: Hey Makkusu hey get up isn't this your stop - 1. CSD: \*Beep Beep Beep\* Rise and shine Makkusu you have arrived at your destination -Makkusu goes to intiations ceromony in which cybervator are given their first Cyber.Beast +Makkusu goes to initiations ceremony in which cybervator are given their first Cyber.Beast Akia blocks Makkusu from leaving the train station and is teased about being delusional for trying to become a cybervator when he doesn't even have a tail. -Makkusu looks down at the light on his CSD that has turned yellow. - - He says that she is going to make him late. - Spike Walks in and intervenes -Spike: what's going on here/ is their a problem - -She lets Makkusu go +Akia lets Makkusu go Makkusu starts to have doubts but enters the building regardless regardless @@ -55,7 +30,5 @@ Makkusu is the first one there and waits in the lobby to get his first Cyber.Bea Makkusu Name is called -:Makkusu Light - From aecdec96f38ad7d0b911d475b007cbab77ee2dac Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Mon, 28 Jan 2019 07:56:54 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 083/124] Combined episode 1 and 2 Episode one alone did not do enough to establish to story and does not provide a proper hook --- comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md | 33 +++++++++--- comic/makkusu/episode-10/readme.md | 5 +- comic/makkusu/episode-11/readme.md | 5 -- comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md | 86 +++++++++++++++++++++++------- comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md | 83 +++++++--------------------- comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md | 36 ++++++------- comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md | 24 ++++----- comic/makkusu/episode-6/readme.md | 31 ++++++++--- comic/makkusu/episode-7/readme.md | 54 ++++++++++++------- comic/makkusu/episode-8/readme.md | 47 ++-------------- comic/makkusu/episode-9/readme.md | 7 +-- 11 files changed, 203 insertions(+), 208 deletions(-) delete mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-11/readme.md diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md index 542f4d7..7e630ca 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md @@ -1,16 +1,13 @@ # Episode 1 Outline ## Act 1 -Pages: 1, 2, 3 +Pages: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7 The ending of CNS Championships is shown. An 8 year old Makkusu is shown watching as a fan -## Act 2 -Pages: 4, 5, 6, 7 - After the Match which Xenos loses Xenos has an interview but is interrupted by Makkusu -## Act 3 -Pages: 8, 9, 10 +## Act 2 +Pages: 8, 9, 10, 11, 12, 13, 14, 15 12 years later Makkusu feels he is now ready to compete in the CNS @@ -30,5 +27,29 @@ Makkusu is the first one there and waits in the lobby to get his first Cyber.Bea Makkusu Name is called +-------------- + +Makkusu: No one else is here am I the first person + +: No actually some was even earlier than you. She was very um... I guess you could say enthusiastic/eager + +Makkusu is rejected + +Makkusu tries to explain to them that he doesn't need a tail to use a Cyber.Beast showing them the device he made + +He asks if they can at least let him test/demonstrate it + +Airiona can be seen hidden from site grimacing and peaking at what is going on + +After Makkusu leaves a cybervator comes rushing in yelling and tells/asks them about Airiona + +### Act 3 +Pages: 16, 17, 18, 19, 20 + + +She happened to see and remembers that that Makkusu was able to customize his CSD so she decides to follow him home flying behind him and the train that he is ridding on + +Just as Makkusu is about to close his door he sees Airiona outside of his house at the foot of his door. + diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-10/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-10/readme.md index 2731ae0..71a5594 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-10/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-10/readme.md @@ -1,8 +1,5 @@ # Episode 10 Outline ## Act 1 -Makkusu is in cyberspace he sees another cybervator maybe a cyvolter getting double/triple team team Makkusu and maybe Airiona joins in to even things up - +A montage is shown of the reputation that Makkusu has made help other cybervators and giving 70% of his earnings and how it has earned him many fans. ## Act 2 - ## Act 3 -Makkusu helps them win while also increasing his ranking match \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-11/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-11/readme.md deleted file mode 100644 index 43d4bb9..0000000 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-11/readme.md +++ /dev/null @@ -1,5 +0,0 @@ -# Episode 11 Outline -## Act 1 -A montage is shown of the reputation that Makkusu has made help other cybervators and giving 70% of his earnings and how it has earned him many fans. -## Act 2 -## Act 3 diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md index 00a29b8..0cbb447 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md @@ -1,26 +1,74 @@ -## Episode 2 Outline -### Act 1 -Pages: 1, 2, 3, 4 +# Episode 2 Outline +## Act 1 +Makkusu asks Airiona what happened -Makkusu: No one else is here am I the first person +Makkusu: Whoa what happened. Why arent you healing + +Airiona(holding her arm stub): My argh My CSD is broken/damaged + +Makkusu: I'll call for help + +#### (if enough space) Version 1 +Airiona: No don't... There is no time I need you to fix it + +Makkusu: But I'm not a doctor + +Airiona(she hands him her CSD): no argh my CSD + +#### (if not enough space) Version 2 +Airiona(she hands him her CSD): It's already on the way argh my CSD I need you to fix it -: No actually some was even earlier than you. She was very um... I guess you could say enthusiastic/eager +## Act 2 +Makkusu helps Airiona into his house to fix her CSD -Makkusu is rejected +- Airiona notices that Makkusu is a big CNS fan by all stuff in his home/room + + Airiona: So I see watch alot of the CNS Leuague. + + She looks around + + Airiona: You're a fan of the ___ BluNet team + + Makkusu: well I am more of a fan of what ever team Xenos + + Airiona: is he is the one that inspired you to become a Cybervator + + Makkusu: wait how did you know + + Airiona: oh um well + + Makkusu(with joking smile): have you been stalking me + + Airiona(she smiles with shifty eyes): Ha ha ha ye--a -Makkusu tries to explain to them that he doesn't neen a tail to use a Cyber.Beast showing them the device he made +- Makkusu Decides to try to sneek and use Airiona Cyber.Beast/CSD to test his Cyber.Beast Controler with out her permission. Airiona comes up behind him creating the poisiblty of punishment + + Airiona(yells): What are you doing! + + on the next page/episode Makkusu looks with dismay + + Airiona: You/We don't have time for that right now. You need to fix my CSD so that I can heal my arm + + Makkusu: Oh! Right. + +- After begining her arm regenation process Airiona talks exciting about his creation while they wait + + Airiona: (You know) You're pretty smart + + Airiona: you see, you were able to make the csd and controler because unilike others he doesn't rely on cyber.beast to code he does is on as society does not have the skills they once did + + Makkusu tells her that it is some thing he made a long time ago when had dreams of becoming a cybervator + + Makkusu: Not really I just most are combined ideas from real scientist to put ideas together to come up with a new one + + Airiona: No unlike most scientist who have become singular focused and don't combined ideas from others you put ideas together to come up with a new one + +As they wait Makkusu turns on the TV on his CSD while asking if she wants to watch something while waiting +## Act 3 +- Airiona has a look of shame as she knows that if puts on the TV he may see a news report of her break in -He asks if they can at least let him test/demostrate it + Just as she is about to decline watching television on Makkusu's CSD Xenos arrives to pick up Airiona -Airiona can be seen hidden from site grimacing and peaking at what is going on +- As Airiona leaves taking a blueprint of the controlers with her it can be seen in the Background on Makkusu's CSD a news report of Airiona breaking into the Hub he was at -### Act 2 -Pages: 5, 6, 7, 8 - -After Makkusu leaves a cybervator comes rushing in yelling and tells/asks them about Aririona - -She happend to see and remembers that that Makkusu was able to customize his CSD so she decides to follow him home flying behind him and the train that he is ridding on -### Act 3 -Pages: 9, 10 - -Just as Makkusu is about to close his door he sees Airiona outside of his house at the foot of his door. + Airiona: See ya/good luck maybe next time we meet it'll be in cyberspace diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md index 21a7221..519dba6 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md @@ -1,74 +1,27 @@ # Episode 3 Outline ## Act 1 -Makkusu asks Airiona what happened +While working Makkusu is notified that Xenos is about to have a match he stops what he is doing to watch it +## Act 2 +Makkusu watches a ranked Cyberspace CNS match with Xenos and Airiona through Spikes commentary feed -Makkusu: Whoa what happened. Why arent you healing - -Airiona(holding her arm stub): My argh My CSD is broken/damaged - -Makkusu: I'll call for help - -#### (if enough space) Version 1 -Airiona: No don't... There is no time I need you to fix it - -Makkusu: But I'm not a doctor - -Airiona(she hands him her CSD): no argh my CSD - -#### (if not enough space) Version 2 -Airiona(she hands him her CSD): It's already on the way argh my CSD I need you to fix it +Spike: Welcome Spike.TV i'm you're host Spike along with my color commentator Akia -## Act 2 -Makkusu helps Airiona into his house to fix her CSD +After the match Airiona and Xenos is shown disscusing the possibilty of Makkusu joining the cyvolters -- Airiona notices that Makkusu is a big CNS fan by all stuff in his home/room - - Airiona: So I see watch alot of the CNS Leuague. - - She looks around - - Airiona: You're a fan of the ___ BluNet team - - Makkusu: well I am more of a fan of what ever team Xenos - - Airiona: is he is the one that inspired you to become a Cybervator - - Makkusu: wait how did you know - - Airiona: oh um well - - Makkusu(with joking smile): have you been stalking me - - Airiona(she smiles with shifty eyes): Ha ha ha ye--a +Xenos Discovers that Airiona already sent Makkusu an invite along with a Cyber.Beast -- Makkusu Decides to try to sneek and use Airiona Cyber.Beast/CSD to test his Cyber.Beast Controler with out her permission. Airiona comes up behind him creating the poisiblty of punishment - - Airiona(yells): What are you doing! - - on the next page/episode Makkusu looks with dismay - - Airiona: You/We don't have time for that right now. You need to fix my CSD so that I can heal my arm - - Makkusu: Oh! Right. - -- After begining her arm regenation process Airiona talks exciting about his creation while they wait - - Airiona: (You know) You're pretty smart - - Airiona: you see, you were able to make the csd and controler because unilike others he doesn't rely on cyber.beast to code he does is on as society does not have the skills they once did - - Makkusu tells her that it is some thing he made a long time ago when had dreams of becoming a cybervator - - Makkusu: Not really I just most are combined ideas from real scientist to put ideas together to come up with a new one - - Airiona: No unlike most scientist who have become singular focused and don't combined ideas from others you put ideas together to come up with a new one - -As they wait Makkusu turns on the TV on his CSD while asking if she wants to watch something while waiting -## Act 3 -- Airiona has a look of shame as she knows that if puts on the TV he may see a news report of her break in +Airiona: I already sent the invite + +Xenos: When their - Just as she is about to decline watching television on Makkusu's CSD Xenos arrives to pick up Airiona +Airiona: Just a second ago + +Xenos: but what about the Cyber.Beast + +Airiona: I gave him the one we just got +## Act 3 +Airiona sends the invite to which Xenos scolds her because he wanted to trick him into joining. As he know he would never join knowing that it is the Cyvolters. -- As Airiona leaves taking a blueprint of the controlers with her it can be seen in the Background on Makkusu's CSD a news report of Airiona breaking into the Hub he was at +Airiona(Scowling): so you wanted to trick him?! (right after she says this to their suprise they get a message accepting the invite.) - Airiona: See ya/good luck maybe next time we meet it'll be in cyberspace +Makkusu accepts the invite diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md index 1e23b4a..0dbcd61 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md @@ -1,27 +1,23 @@ -# Episode 4 Outline +## Episode 4 Outline ## Act 1 -While working Makkusu is notified that Xenos is about to have a match he stops what he is doing to watch it -## Act 2 -Makkusu watches a ranked Cyberspace CNS match with Xenos and Airiona through Spikes commentary feed - -Spike: Welcome Spike.TV i'm you're host Spike along with my color commentator Akia - -After the match Airiona and Xenos is shown disscusing the possibilty of Makkusu joining the cyvolters - -Xenos Discovers that Airiona already sent Makkusu an invite along with a Cyber.Beast +They realize that Makkusu does not know who they are. -Airiona: I already sent the invite +Xenos: I guess it worked out in our favor after all -Xenos: When their +## Act 2 +At first Makkusu tries to fight another cybervator but is quickly turned down by the Cybervator he tries to fight or Airiona +### Version 1 +Airiona pairs with Makkusu to mine Cyber.Beast +### Version 2 +Makkusu goes into cyberspace on his own he gets into trouble and Airiona saves him -Airiona: Just a second ago +- During or after the fight -Xenos: but what about the Cyber.Beast + Airiona: It’s nice to be around someone smarter than me for a change especially when it is a citizen(minia is smart but does not enough confidence to exercise it) + + Makkusu: But aren't you a cybervator -Airiona: I gave him the one we just got + Airiona: yea but my family isn’t, and your a perfect example that the distribution of money is misplaced citizen do all of the work while cybervator gets majority of revenue from your work even though they are only one percent of the population. But we’re gonna change all of that. + ## Act 3 -Airiona sends the invite to which Xenos scolds her because he wanted to trick him into joining. As he know he would never join knowing that it is the Cyvolters. - -Airiona(Scowling): so you wanted to trick him?! (right after she says this to their suprise they get a message accepting the invite.) - -Makkusu accepts the invite +Makkusu takes down his first Cyber.Beast diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md index 02e4ccd..5e74f27 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md @@ -1,23 +1,17 @@ -## Episode 5 Outline +# Episode 5 Outline ## Act 1 -They realize that Makkusu does not know who they are. +Time has passed after mining cyber.beast Airiona and unranked Makkusu is ready for their first match against Jax and Minia -Xenos: I guess it worked out in our favor after all +Airiona tells Makkusu that Minia and Jax is probably the worst matchup they can get ## Act 2 -At first Makkusu tries to fight another cybervator but is quickly turned down by the Cybervator he tries to fight or Airiona -### Version 1 -Airiona pairs with Makkusu to mine Cyber.Beast -### Version 2 -Makkusu goes into cyberspace on his own he gets into trouble and Airiona saves him +Makkusu notices that Minia and Jax seems to be fused with 2 complete differnt Cyber.Beast at the same time and tells Airiona I thought that wasn't possible. -- During or after the fight +Airiona tells Makkusu that they are Xybrids that they have two tails so they can use two cyber.beast at a time. She explain in further detail how it works. - Airiona: It’s nice to be around someone smarter than me for a change especially when it is a citizen(minia is smart but does not enough confidence to exercise it) - - Makkusu: But aren't you a cybervator +Makkusu and Jax continues their fight - Airiona: yea but my family isn’t, and your a perfect example that the distribution of money is misplaced citizen do all of the work while cybervator gets majority of revenue from your work even though they are only one percent of the population. But we’re gonna change all of that. - ## Act 3 -Makkusu takes down his first Cyber.Beast +The commentators point Jax is relentless in his fight with Jax as he is known as the type that never backs down from a fight and does not hold back no mater his opponent. + +Makkusu is on the verge of losing his cyber.beast which is pointed out by the commentaor \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-6/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-6/readme.md index 0a1f6d1..b5cc633 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-6/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-6/readme.md @@ -1,17 +1,32 @@ # Episode 6 Outline ## Act 1 -Time has passed after mining cyber.beast Airiona and unranked Makkusu is ready for their first match against Jax and Minia - -Airiona tells Makkusu that Minia and Jax is probably the worst matchup they can get +Just before Makkusu is defeat Airiona uses her chains to pull him to safety while taking a hit from Minia and yells at him to eject as he only has one cyber.beast she then loses her Cyber.Beast to save Makkusu ## Act 2 -Makkusu notices that Minia and Jax seems to be fused with 2 complete differnt Cyber.Beast at the same time and tells Airiona I thought that wasn't possible. +1 week later + +After losing multiple matches Spike offers to make Makkusu a co-owner or employee since he will be able to pursue is passion in a more realistic manner. Just because it is not what does not matter as long as it still aligns with your vision it is still your passion. He tells him that from what he has seen that he is not cut out for the CNS that not being angle to synergize is to much of a disadvantage. That he has was a hinderance to Airiona as he has never seen her perform so poorly. She gave up her chance at the championships just to help him. + +Spike tells Makkusu that only the top broadcasting studio get to commentate the Championships each year + +It would do wonders for our channels ratings to have former Cybervator on our team. It might be the boost we need to get chosen to broadcast the Championship -Airiona tells Makkusu that they are Xybrids that they have two tails so they can use two cyber.beast at a time. She explain in further detail how it works. +Makkusu tells him that he is a white/green type and doesn't have the affinity to be a broadcaster? spike responds we could use a white type like you especially one so knowledgeable about... Makkusu cuts him off turning him down thinking he is on the path to becoming a cybervator(Makkusu later accepts the request after the CNS championships but maybe it is to late). He tells him that he wants to succeed on his own merit. + +Spike tells him that he has tallents that should not be wasted and pasive agressivelly puts down cybervators in general pointing out the cons. he also tells him that he should not put the on a pedstal like he is worshiping them. + +He tells Makkusu to give it another shot but he shouldnt wait on an uncertainty forever +Airiona contacts Makkusu asking if he is ready for a match against her someone else or to mine cyber.beast. -Makkusu and Jax continues their fight +Makkusu: but the first Championship match is about to start. + +Airiona: You have yet to win a single match you dont have that luxury. If you're serious about being a cybervator now you need to take ever opportunity you can get. If you are not all in then I guess you're on your own.You need practice everyone else is watching this is the best time to mine cyber.beast thier will be no one else to compete with. ## Act 3 -The commentators point Jax is relentless in his fight with Jax as he is known as the type that never backs down from a fight and does not hold back no mater his opponent. +Airiona and Makkusu are in cyberspace while the 22?.3 championships is going on + +The announcer talks about how team Miniajax has not won a championship match since becoming a Cybervator and that she is a disappointment as a Xybrid Cybervator and will likely lose against Ace and Alex who might be retiring after this fight as he might become the next BluNet cheif. + +The satellite in which Minia and Jax is fighting on malfunctions causing Minia to fall back down to earth + -Makkusu is on the verge of losing his cyber.beast which is pointed out by the commentaor \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-7/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-7/readme.md index fe7c4c4..3a33576 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-7/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-7/readme.md @@ -1,32 +1,48 @@ # Episode 7 Outline ## Act 1 -Just before Makkusu is defeat Airion uses her chains to pull him to safety while taking a hit from Minia and yells at him to eject as he only hass one cyber.beast she then loses her Cyber.Beast to save Makkusu +While Makkusu and Airiona is in cyberspace -## Act 2 -1 week later +Makkusu: what was that -After losing multiple matches Spike offers to make Makkusu a co-owner or employee since he will be able to pursue is passion in a more realstic manner. Just because it is not what does not matter as long as it still aligns with your vision it is still your passion. He tells him that from what he has seen that he is not cut out for the CNS that not being anle to synergize is to much of a disatvantage. That he has was a henderance to Airiona as he has never seen her perform so poorly. She gave up her chance at the championships just to help him. +Airiona: are you watching the Championships -Spike tells Makkusu that only the top broadcasting studio get to commentate the Championships each year - -It would do wonders for our channels ratings to have former Cybervator on our team. It might be the boost we need to get choosen to broadcast the Championship +Makkusu: no of course not -Makkusu tells him that he is a white/green type and doesnt have the affinty to be a broadcaster? spike responds we could use a white type like you especaily one so knowledgable about... Makkusu cuts him off turning him down thinking he is on the path to becoming a cybervator(Makkusu later accepts the request after the CNS championships but maybe it is to late). He tells him that he wants to succed on his own merrit. - -Spike tells him that he has tallents that should not be wasted and pasive agressivelly puts down cybervators in general pointing out the cons. he also tells him that he should not put the on a pedstal like he is worshiping them. +*he hears another sound maybe a yell* + +Makkusu: what the heck sorry have to go + +Airiona: you are. Makkusu! if you leave now... +## Act 2 +Makkusu goes outside and finds a crater with an injured Minia + +Torrey Makkusu's CSD makes witty comment about him bring Minia in. -He tells Makkusu to give it another shot but he shouldnt wait on an uncertainty forever -Airiona contacts Makkusu asking if he is ready for a match against her someone else or to mine cyber.beast. +Minia: My name is... + +Makkusu: My Nia + +Makkusu asks what happend Minia tells him. She insist that he does not tell anyone because if word gets out she will be in trouble -Makkusu: but the first Championship match is about to start. +Makkusu asks why Minias her is red despite her being a green and blue type cybervator -Airiona: You have yet to win a single match you dont have that luxury. If you're serious about being a cybervator now you need to take ever opportunity you can get. If you are not all in then I guess you're on your own.You need practice everyone else is watching this is the best time to mine cyber.beast thier will be no one else to compete with. +Minia asks about his talking Cyber.Beast ## Act 3 -Airiona and Makkusu are in cyberspace while the 22?.3 championships is going on +Jax comes to get Minia -The announcer talks about how team Miniajax has not won a championship match since becoming a Cybervator and that she is a disappointment as a Xybrid Cybervator and will likely lose against Ace and Alex who might be retiring after this fight as he might become the next BluNet cheif. - -The satellite in which Minia and Jax is fighting on malfunctions causing Minia to fall back down to earth - +Jax(hugging Minia and maybe crying): I thought you were dead + +Makkusu has a look of suprise that Jax is not as tuff as he thought + +Makkusu is uncomfortable by thr sight of Jax crying. He intentionally disrubtes the mood. + +Makkusu: Hey Jax + +Makkusu tells Jax that he will get get stronger and next time they meet rather in cyberspace or the championships to not expect the same result as last time + +Jax holds back wipes his tears. scowls with confusion and Says dont make laugh or laughs. + +Jax: Lets go Minia +After Minia leaves something is seen in the hole Minia left in the ground. \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-8/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-8/readme.md index 23a5c58..8f4660d 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-8/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-8/readme.md @@ -1,48 +1,7 @@ # Episode 8 Outline ## Act 1 -While Makkusu and Airiona is in cyberspace - -Makkusu: what was that - -Airiona: are you watching the Championships - -Makkusu: no of course not - -*he hears another sound maybe a yell* - -Makkusu: what the heck sorry have to go - -Airiona: you are. Makkusu! if you leave now... +Makkusu has another match in cyberspace ## Act 2 -Makkusu goes outside and finds a crater with an injured Minia - -Torrey Makkusu's CSD makes witty comment about him bring Minia in. - -Minia: My name is... - -Makkusu: My Nia - -Makkusu asks what happend Minia tells him. She insist that he does not tell anyone because if word gets out she will be in trouble - -Makkusu asks why Minias her is red despite her being a green and blue type cybervator - -Minia asks about his talking Cyber.Beast - +Makkusu wins his first match ## Act 3 -Jax comes to get Minia - -Jax(hugging Minia and maybe crying): I thought you were dead - -Makkusu has a look of suprise that Jax is not as tuff as he thought - -Makkusu is uncomfortable by thr sight of Jax crying. He intentionally disrubtes the mood. - -Makkusu: Hey Jax - -Makkusu tells Jax that he will get get stronger and next time they meet rather in cyberspace or the championships to not expect the same result as last time - -Jax holds back wipes his tears. scowls with confusion and Says dont make laugh or laughs. - -Jax: Lets go Minia - -After Minia leaves something is seen in the hole Minia left in the ground. \ No newline at end of file +Makkusu gives upwards of 70% his earnings for ubi which Airiona/Akia/Spike is confused by \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-9/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-9/readme.md index 4f80ca6..52e238b 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-9/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-9/readme.md @@ -1,7 +1,8 @@ # Episode 9 Outline ## Act 1 -Makkusu has another match in cyberspace +Makkusu is in cyberspace he sees another cybervator maybe a cyvolter getting double/triple team team Makkusu and maybe Airiona joins in to even things up + ## Act 2 -Makkusu wins his first match + ## Act 3 -Makkusu gives upwards of 70% his earnings for ubi which Airiona/Akia/Spike is confused by \ No newline at end of file +Makkusu helps them win while also increasing his ranking match \ No newline at end of file From 2efff684271572c3132f4fb0f7904b0662ae7e14 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Thu, 31 Jan 2019 08:46:03 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 084/124] update page 8 and 10 Fixed typo in page 10 On page 8 add the line its first come first serve leting the reader no this fact --- comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-10-script.md | 2 +- comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-8-script.md | 2 +- 2 files changed, 2 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-10-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-10-script.md index f70b398..dc94b6a 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-10-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-10-script.md @@ -8,7 +8,7 @@ Makkusu is the first one there and waits in the lobby to get his first Cyber.Bea ## Panel 2 (wide panel shot 1/3rd vertical full width) Makkusu is shown sitting down looking to the left -## Panel 2 (wide panel shot 1/3rd vertical full width) +## Panel 3 (wide panel shot 1/3rd vertical full width) Makkusu is shown sitting down looking to the right and up Receptionist:Makkusu Light \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-8-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-8-script.md index 28b5418..39788f6 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-8-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-8-script.md @@ -17,7 +17,7 @@ Akia: are you here for ## Panel 3 Head shot of Makkusu as he gets closer -Makkusu (scowls): come on I don't have time for this I'm gonna be late. can you let me trough please +Makkusu (scowls): come on I don't have time for this I'm gonna be late. It's first come first serve, can you let me trough please ## Panel 4 Akia slaps the back of Makkusu's head and his CSD turns yellow From fc0ae08b252b0a823c605f3b579ca35e26651dc3 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Thu, 31 Jan 2019 08:49:31 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 085/124] Added page 11-13 --- comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-11-script.md | 13 +++++++++++++ comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-12-script.md | 14 ++++++++++++++ comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-13-script.md | 12 ++++++++++++ comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md | 4 ---- 4 files changed, 39 insertions(+), 4 deletions(-) create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-11-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-12-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-13-script.md diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-11-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-11-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..a3f1d03 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-11-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,13 @@ +# Page 11 + +## Panel 1 +Makkusu: No one else is here am I the first person + +Receptionist: No actually someone was even earlier than you she probably getting tested as we speak. Here is your key card the testing area I right behind doors and to the right. you cant miss it. + +## Panel 2 +Makkusu walks in the room and sees Airiona who is being unpluged and they announce her energy capacity.Makkusu notices that she looks like Airiona. + +Tester: 8027 + +Makkusu(thinks): wow not only does she look like Airiona but she has the same energy capacity as well. \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-12-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-12-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..cd011dc --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-12-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,14 @@ +# Page 12 + +## Panel 1 +Tester: You look pretty young to be a father so I'm guessing you are here to register a younger sibling. + +Makkusu: actually I'm here for myself + +## Panel 2 +Tester: Wow really. I'm mean know you didn't have a kid with you but I just assumed they were in the bathroom or something. + +Makkusu looks distressed + +## Panel 3 +Airiona takes notice of the conversion as she is putting her hood over her head diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-13-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-13-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..3af5ba1 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-13-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,12 @@ +# Page 13 + +## Panel 1 +Tester: Sorry I'm not trying to be mean, it's just that you can't really become a cybervator without a tail. + +Tester: in order to be eligible for a Cyber.Beast you need to show that you can synergize with it which is impossible without a tail. + +Makkusu explains his controller to the receptionist + +Test: I understand there is no rule against who can be a cybervator but Since you don't have a tail I cant properly test your energy capacity so I'll have write your energy capacity as zero. We only are only taking the top 10(0) this year. We usually get 100(0) applicants every year so unless we get less than 10(0) applicants with and energy capacity greater or equal to yours the chance of you being accepted is basically zero. + +Airiona is leaving out of a different door than what Makkusu came through and is still looking back listening to the conversation \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md index 7e630ca..91d3aef 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/readme.md @@ -29,10 +29,6 @@ Makkusu Name is called -------------- -Makkusu: No one else is here am I the first person - -: No actually some was even earlier than you. She was very um... I guess you could say enthusiastic/eager - Makkusu is rejected Makkusu tries to explain to them that he doesn't need a tail to use a Cyber.Beast showing them the device he made From 573f175c56551af3fdd9a4b63c864e663abb80de Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Thu, 31 Jan 2019 08:54:33 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 086/124] Update readme.md - changed episode estimations - moved the fight between makkusu and Jax into the ordel plot point --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 71 +++++++++++++++++++++-------------------- 1 file changed, 37 insertions(+), 34 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 3be62de..a3b1709 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -40,7 +40,7 @@ Xenos: From this moment forward I will the lead the Cyvolters. Change can happen, has happened and, will happen. - In the second season years later the Cyvolters is now considered the Citizens league begin to do a type of initiation or point system in which Cybervators(not citizens) must attack "bad" cybervators in order to become a Cyvolter -- it is a rule created by Citizens. - - The cyvolters increase in sizes has become a detriment to their initial values + - The Cyvolters increase in sizes has become a detriment to their initial values - Since anyone can be a Cyvolter they are doing whatever they want and claim to be apart of the Cyvolters, because of this the Cyvolters realize they need a leader to lay a framework and places that duty upon Xenos. - Airiona is upset by the way the other cyvolter are acting she realizes that citizens can be just as bad as cybervator - This changes Airiona strengthens belief that the majority of of Cybervators are stupid instead all humans are. Xenos tells her that it actually mob mentality and selfish preservation that cause people to act this way. people don't want to be alone so they follow what they may think is the masses no matter how wrong it maybe to protect their self @@ -51,19 +51,7 @@ - Someone joins forces with Makkusu because they want the chance to fight someone even stronger than that protagonist in hopes of climbing up in ranking - - Makkusu is about to mine cyber.beast or fight another cybervator alone He spots a girl that waves at him but he doesn't know who she is so he he casually ignores her - - Later he gets into some trouble and is saved by her. As she pick him up and carries him out of harm's way - - Girl: She says hi again - Makkusu: wait aren't you(showing image of her waving) - - Girl: Yep I knew you were a cyvolter the moment I saw you. It would be a disgrace if I didn't -- my cyber.beast is a bear/shark after all. Us cyvolter have to stick together ya know - - Makkusu: wait so you know who each AND EVERY cyvolter is - - Girl: Don’t woorry I won't tell @@ -81,11 +69,11 @@ Episodes: [1](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makk Episodes: [1](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-1) - Makkusu Applies to be a Cybervator ### 3. Refusal Of The Call -Episodes: [2](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-2) +Episodes: [1](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-1) - Makkusu is rejected and heads back home - Airiona is seen escaping the hub Makkusu was at ### 4. Meeting The Mentor -Episodes: 3, 4, 5 +Episodes: 2, 3, 4 - When Makkusu arrives home an injured Airiona is found at the foot of his door - The reader sees the inside of Makkusu’s room which has posters and cybervator Fandom items everywhere @@ -93,18 +81,32 @@ Episodes: 3, 4, 5 - S/He talks about how citizens can’t become cybervators because they don't a tail which means they can synergize. With the device he made anyone will be able to use a Cyber.Beast in cyberspace even though they still won’t be able to become cybervators since they still won’t be able to go into BurstDrive -- Makkusu tends to the injured Airiona fixing her CSD which allows her to heal. she encourages him to try again and that she will give word to her superiours to give him a chance and that they will send him a Cyber.Beast so that he can test his device. +- Makkusu tends to the injured Airiona fixing her CSD which allows her to heal. she encourages him to try again and that she will give word to her superiors to give him a chance and that they will send him a Cyber.Beast so that he can test his device. -- Makkusu is given a cyberbeast and invited to be a cybervator +- Makkusu is given a Cyber.Beast and invited to be a cybervator - Makkusu takes the cyber.beast given to him by Xenos/Airiona inviting him to join the Cyvolters which he in excitement misread as cybervators - Airiona sends the invite to which Xenos scolds her because he wanted to trick him into joining. As he know he would never join knowing that it is the Cyvolters. - Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace. + - When Makkusu logs into cyberspace it is recommended that + - Makkusu is about to mine cyber.beast or fight another cybervator alone He spots a girl that waves at him but he doesn't know who she is so he he casually ignores her + + Later he gets into some trouble and is saved by her. As she pick him up and carries him out of harm's way + + Girl: She says hi again + + Makkusu: wait aren't you(showing image of her waving) + + Girl: Yep I knew you were a cyvolter the moment I saw you. It would be a disgrace if I didn't -- my cyber.beast is a bear/shark after all. Us cyvolter have to stick together ya know + + Makkusu: wait so you know who each AND EVERY cyvolter is + + Girl: Don’t woorry I won't tell ## Act 2 ### 5. Crossing The Threshold -Episodes: 6, 7 +Episodes: 5, 6 - Makkusu and maybe Airiona lose their first ranked/unranked fight and prepare for a second. They lose to Jax who does not let up and Jax nearly takes his only cyber.beast. Makkusu ejects just in time An announcer is either surprised that he even has a fan and laughs at the fact the he only has one fan probably because ever saw his first fight in which he did terrible. Spike is that only fan - Spike wanted him to join his company which is secretly helping the Cyvolter organization. @@ -127,7 +129,7 @@ Episodes: 6, 7 The satellite in which Minia and Jax is fighting on malfunctions causing Minia to fall back down to earth ### 6. Tests, Allies, Enemies -Episodes: 8, 9, 10, 11, 12 +Episodes: 7, 8, 9, 10, 11, 12 - Makkusu has customized his Cyber.Beast and CSD to have a talking Ai which he calls Torrey @@ -200,21 +202,6 @@ Episodes: 13, 14, 15 ### 8. Ordeal Episodes: 16 -- The NRA are against allowing citizens to participate in the CNS using unsanctioned Cyber.Beast distributed by the Cyvolters. They hold a meeting to discuss this with the CNS. The CNS tells them that is not their place to be decide rather someone should legally be allowed to compete. - -- Not only does the CNS ignore their complaints officially recognize the Cyvolters allowing citizens to compete in the league. But because they don't have a hub the can't compete in the championships. Their reasoning is that the primary mission of the CNS is to distribute wealth among the citizens and this furthers that agenda. - - All of the citizen who has become cybervators up until now to prevent this citizens will be allowed to join the CNS. this is done to prevent them from joining the cybervators just so that they can join the CNS. - -- Adding insult to injury the CNS request that both ReNet and BluNet gives up one hub to the Cyvolters so they can compete. This angers Kyshumu who yells that citizens shouldn't compete he threatens to pull ReNet out of the CNS - - He suggest that it is too dangerous and not having armor they are more likely to be killed and that they can't regrow limbs like a real cybervator - - - -### 9. Reward (Seizing The Sword) -Episodes: 17 - - Makkusu is given/finds a new cyber.beast or the one he beats gives him his Cyber.Beast back as they know how much he helped others and wants to return the favor. The only problem is that he is almost out of time and no one would consider risking a match this late in the running. And he needs to face a top 3/5 cybervator to have any hope @@ -234,6 +221,22 @@ Episodes: 17 - Someone asks if he is Upset that he was handed the spot rather than earning it on the team Makkusu tell Alex/Xenos/Minia/Jax/Akia/Airiona that it does matter that it is just a game. They reply telling him that is his problem/Thats why I can stand you/Its not just a game Makkusu is told that it is not just a game but that it the reason that we have no more wars and maintain peace among citizens as it gives people a place to belong satisfying the human desire for tribalism + + +- The NRA are against allowing citizens to participate in the CNS using unsanctioned Cyber.Beast distributed by the Cyvolters. They hold a meeting to discuss this with the CNS. The CNS tells them that is not their place to be decide rather someone should legally be allowed to compete. + +- Not only does the CNS ignore their complaints officially recognize the Cyvolters allowing citizens to compete in the league. But because they don't have a hub the can't compete in the championships. Their reasoning is that the primary mission of the CNS is to distribute wealth among the citizens and this furthers that agenda. + + All of the citizen who has become cybervators up until now to prevent this citizens will be allowed to join the CNS. this is done to prevent them from joining the cybervators just so that they can join the CNS. + +- Adding insult to injury the CNS request that both ReNet and BluNet gives up one hub to the Cyvolters so they can compete. This angers Kyshumu who yells that citizens shouldn't compete he threatens to pull ReNet out of the CNS + + He suggest that it is too dangerous and not having armor they are more likely to be killed and that they can't regrow limbs like a real cybervator + + + +### 9. Reward (Seizing The Sword) +Episodes: 17 - Alex has been newly elected as the Chief of BluNet From 21f780c884680f074dc0dabdc19562e165ec2ccd Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Fri, 1 Feb 2019 08:44:12 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 087/124] Added pages 14-20 --- comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-11-script.md | 2 +- comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-13-script.md | 15 +++++++++++++-- comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-14-script.md | 9 +++++++++ comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-15-script.md | 5 +++++ comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-16-script.md | 8 ++++++++ comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-17-script.md | 6 ++++++ comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-18-script.md | 8 ++++++++ comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-19-script.md | 6 ++++++ comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-20-script.md | 2 ++ 9 files changed, 58 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-) create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-14-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-15-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-16-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-17-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-18-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-19-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-20-script.md diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-11-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-11-script.md index a3f1d03..4423de9 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-11-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-11-script.md @@ -6,7 +6,7 @@ Makkusu: No one else is here am I the first person Receptionist: No actually someone was even earlier than you she probably getting tested as we speak. Here is your key card the testing area I right behind doors and to the right. you cant miss it. ## Panel 2 -Makkusu walks in the room and sees Airiona who is being unpluged and they announce her energy capacity.Makkusu notices that she looks like Airiona. +Makkusu walks in the room and sees Airiona who is being unplugged and they announce her energy capacity. Makkusu notices that she looks like Airiona. Tester: 8027 diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-13-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-13-script.md index 3af5ba1..89e0f92 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-13-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-13-script.md @@ -7,6 +7,17 @@ Tester: in order to be eligible for a Cyber.Beast you need to show that you can Makkusu explains his controller to the receptionist -Test: I understand there is no rule against who can be a cybervator but Since you don't have a tail I cant properly test your energy capacity so I'll have write your energy capacity as zero. We only are only taking the top 10(0) this year. We usually get 100(0) applicants every year so unless we get less than 10(0) applicants with and energy capacity greater or equal to yours the chance of you being accepted is basically zero. +Test: I understand there is no rule against who can be a cybervator but Since you don't have a tail I cant properly test your energy capacity so I'll have write your energy capacity as zero. We are only taking the top 10(0) this year. We usually get 100(0) applicants every year so unless we get less than 10(0) applicants with and energy capacity greater or equal to yours the chance of you being accepted is basically zero. + +Tester: look at her she has a tail and still has not been accept + + +## Last Panel +Airiona seen is leaving out of a different door than what Makkusu came through and is still looking back listening to the conversation + +Tester: If all goes well we will pair you with your first Cyber.Beast. + +Do you know how long it will take + +Test It depends on how many applications we get -Airiona is leaving out of a different door than what Makkusu came through and is still looking back listening to the conversation \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-14-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-14-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..3bae4b5 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-14-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,9 @@ +# Page 14 + +Makkusu is excited to see that the train is outside already and that he will not need to wait, but the train takes off before he can get on. + +Makkusu: Oh come one. ~~Torrey~~ What when does the next train arrive. + +CSD: The next train is estimated to arrive in 5 minutes + +Makkusu oh man I have to wait that long. \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-15-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-15-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..5501ebf --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-15-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,5 @@ +# Page 15 +Airiona is seen escaping + +A cybervator runs out yelling about Airiona being a Cyvolter + diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-16-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-16-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..f83dd35 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-16-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,8 @@ +# Page 16 +## Panel 1 +Airiona is seen flying + +She spots Makkusu getting on the train an decides to follow it + +## Panel 2 +In the last panel it is seen that her arm is missing \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-17-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-17-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..dfa8664 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-17-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,6 @@ +# Page 17 +Airiona keeps pace with the fast moving train + +Airiona: I'm so low on energy I can barely keep up + +Airiona: I'm not sure I can hold on much longer \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-18-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-18-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..9a6b743 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-18-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,8 @@ +# Page 18 +The train stops + +Airiona: please let this be his stop + +Makkusu gets of the train + +Airiona there he is \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-19-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-19-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..9b90aa4 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-19-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,6 @@ +# Page 19 +# Panel 1 (full height 2/3 width) +The focus is on Makkusu with a worms eye view of Airiona following him + +# Panel 2 (full height 1/3 width) +Airiona falls in front of the house of Makkusu \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-20-script.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-20-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..f4c79ff --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-1/page-20-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,2 @@ +# Page 20 +Airiona is seen on the door step of Makkusu's house \ No newline at end of file From 3929314ba8e0e629800831cc8841287ca53e74f3 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Fri, 1 Feb 2019 08:45:06 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 088/124] Fixed Typos --- comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md | 12 ++++++------ comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md | 8 ++++---- comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md | 2 +- 3 files changed, 11 insertions(+), 11 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md index 0cbb447..1f06537 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-2/readme.md @@ -2,7 +2,7 @@ ## Act 1 Makkusu asks Airiona what happened -Makkusu: Whoa what happened. Why arent you healing +Makkusu: Whoa what happened. Why aren't you healing Airiona(holding her arm stub): My argh My CSD is broken/damaged @@ -23,7 +23,7 @@ Makkusu helps Airiona into his house to fix her CSD - Airiona notices that Makkusu is a big CNS fan by all stuff in his home/room - Airiona: So I see watch alot of the CNS Leuague. + Airiona: So I see watch a lot of the CNS League. She looks around @@ -41,7 +41,7 @@ Makkusu helps Airiona into his house to fix her CSD Airiona(she smiles with shifty eyes): Ha ha ha ye--a -- Makkusu Decides to try to sneek and use Airiona Cyber.Beast/CSD to test his Cyber.Beast Controler with out her permission. Airiona comes up behind him creating the poisiblty of punishment +- Makkusu Decides to try to sneak and use Airiona Cyber.Beast/CSD to test his Cyber.Beast Controller with out her permission. Airiona comes up behind him creating the possibility of punishment Airiona(yells): What are you doing! @@ -51,11 +51,11 @@ Makkusu helps Airiona into his house to fix her CSD Makkusu: Oh! Right. -- After begining her arm regenation process Airiona talks exciting about his creation while they wait +- After beginning her arm regeneration process Airiona talks exciting about his creation while they wait Airiona: (You know) You're pretty smart - Airiona: you see, you were able to make the csd and controler because unilike others he doesn't rely on cyber.beast to code he does is on as society does not have the skills they once did + Airiona: you see, you were able to make the CSD and controller because unlike others you doesn't rely on cyber.beast to code he does is on as society does not have the skills they once did Makkusu tells her that it is some thing he made a long time ago when had dreams of becoming a cybervator @@ -69,6 +69,6 @@ As they wait Makkusu turns on the TV on his CSD while asking if she wants to wat Just as she is about to decline watching television on Makkusu's CSD Xenos arrives to pick up Airiona -- As Airiona leaves taking a blueprint of the controlers with her it can be seen in the Background on Makkusu's CSD a news report of Airiona breaking into the Hub he was at +- As Airiona leaves taking a blueprint of the controllers with her it can be seen in the Background on Makkusu's CSD a news report of Airiona breaking into the Hub he was at Airiona: See ya/good luck maybe next time we meet it'll be in cyberspace diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md index 519dba6..b5a0e8b 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-3/readme.md @@ -4,9 +4,9 @@ While working Makkusu is notified that Xenos is about to have a match he stops w ## Act 2 Makkusu watches a ranked Cyberspace CNS match with Xenos and Airiona through Spikes commentary feed -Spike: Welcome Spike.TV i'm you're host Spike along with my color commentator Akia +Spike: Welcome Spike.TV I'm you're host Spike along with my color commentator Akia -After the match Airiona and Xenos is shown disscusing the possibilty of Makkusu joining the cyvolters +After the match Airiona and Xenos is shown discussing the possibility of Makkusu joining the Cyvolters Xenos Discovers that Airiona already sent Makkusu an invite along with a Cyber.Beast @@ -18,10 +18,10 @@ Airiona: Just a second ago Xenos: but what about the Cyber.Beast -Airiona: I gave him the one we just got +Airiona: I gave him the one we just stole ## Act 3 Airiona sends the invite to which Xenos scolds her because he wanted to trick him into joining. As he know he would never join knowing that it is the Cyvolters. -Airiona(Scowling): so you wanted to trick him?! (right after she says this to their suprise they get a message accepting the invite.) +Airiona(Scowling): so you wanted to trick him?! (right after she says this to their surprise they get a message accepting the invite.) Makkusu accepts the invite diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md index 0dbcd61..1fb86d0 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-4/readme.md @@ -1,6 +1,6 @@ ## Episode 4 Outline ## Act 1 -They realize that Makkusu does not know who they are. +They realize that Makkusu might not not know who they are. Xenos: I guess it worked out in our favor after all From 404f8f7a9124e64d48bcee587ffe539eb17c3171 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Fri, 1 Feb 2019 09:00:17 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 089/124] Changed story beat structure Move episodes 2 and 3 to the Call to adventure beat Move episode 4 to refusal of the call Create a new episode for the meeting the mentor beat --- comic/makkusu/episode-10/readme.md | 5 ++- comic/makkusu/episode-11/readme.md | 5 +++ comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md | 16 +++------ comic/makkusu/episode-6/readme.md | 31 +++++------------ comic/makkusu/episode-7/readme.md | 54 +++++++++++------------------- comic/makkusu/episode-8/readme.md | 47 ++++++++++++++++++++++++-- comic/makkusu/episode-9/readme.md | 7 ++-- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 25 ++++++++------ 8 files changed, 102 insertions(+), 88 deletions(-) create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/episode-11/readme.md diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-10/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-10/readme.md index 71a5594..2731ae0 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-10/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-10/readme.md @@ -1,5 +1,8 @@ # Episode 10 Outline ## Act 1 -A montage is shown of the reputation that Makkusu has made help other cybervators and giving 70% of his earnings and how it has earned him many fans. +Makkusu is in cyberspace he sees another cybervator maybe a cyvolter getting double/triple team team Makkusu and maybe Airiona joins in to even things up + ## Act 2 + ## Act 3 +Makkusu helps them win while also increasing his ranking match \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-11/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-11/readme.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..43d4bb9 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-11/readme.md @@ -0,0 +1,5 @@ +# Episode 11 Outline +## Act 1 +A montage is shown of the reputation that Makkusu has made help other cybervators and giving 70% of his earnings and how it has earned him many fans. +## Act 2 +## Act 3 diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md index 5e74f27..7bcd611 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-5/readme.md @@ -1,17 +1,9 @@ -# Episode 5 Outline -## Act 1 -Time has passed after mining cyber.beast Airiona and unranked Makkusu is ready for their first match against Jax and Minia +## Episode 5 Outline +Airiona gets back in contact with Makkusu and explains what they are about. Makkusu decides to join as he does not want to tell Spike the truth knowing that he will try to capitalize on this info by broadcasting it. -Airiona tells Makkusu that Minia and Jax is probably the worst matchup they can get +## Act 1 ## Act 2 -Makkusu notices that Minia and Jax seems to be fused with 2 complete differnt Cyber.Beast at the same time and tells Airiona I thought that wasn't possible. - -Airiona tells Makkusu that they are Xybrids that they have two tails so they can use two cyber.beast at a time. She explain in further detail how it works. - -Makkusu and Jax continues their fight - + ## Act 3 -The commentators point Jax is relentless in his fight with Jax as he is known as the type that never backs down from a fight and does not hold back no mater his opponent. -Makkusu is on the verge of losing his cyber.beast which is pointed out by the commentaor \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-6/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-6/readme.md index b5cc633..ee82faf 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-6/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-6/readme.md @@ -1,32 +1,17 @@ # Episode 6 Outline ## Act 1 -Just before Makkusu is defeat Airiona uses her chains to pull him to safety while taking a hit from Minia and yells at him to eject as he only has one cyber.beast she then loses her Cyber.Beast to save Makkusu +Time has passed after mining cyber.beast Airiona and unranked Makkusu is ready for their first match against Jax and Minia -## Act 2 -1 week later - -After losing multiple matches Spike offers to make Makkusu a co-owner or employee since he will be able to pursue is passion in a more realistic manner. Just because it is not what does not matter as long as it still aligns with your vision it is still your passion. He tells him that from what he has seen that he is not cut out for the CNS that not being angle to synergize is to much of a disadvantage. That he has was a hinderance to Airiona as he has never seen her perform so poorly. She gave up her chance at the championships just to help him. - -Spike tells Makkusu that only the top broadcasting studio get to commentate the Championships each year - -It would do wonders for our channels ratings to have former Cybervator on our team. It might be the boost we need to get chosen to broadcast the Championship +Airiona tells Makkusu that Minia and Jax is probably the worst matchup they can get -Makkusu tells him that he is a white/green type and doesn't have the affinity to be a broadcaster? spike responds we could use a white type like you especially one so knowledgeable about... Makkusu cuts him off turning him down thinking he is on the path to becoming a cybervator(Makkusu later accepts the request after the CNS championships but maybe it is to late). He tells him that he wants to succeed on his own merit. - -Spike tells him that he has tallents that should not be wasted and pasive agressivelly puts down cybervators in general pointing out the cons. he also tells him that he should not put the on a pedstal like he is worshiping them. - -He tells Makkusu to give it another shot but he shouldnt wait on an uncertainty forever -Airiona contacts Makkusu asking if he is ready for a match against her someone else or to mine cyber.beast. +## Act 2 +Makkusu notices that Minia and Jax seems to be fused with 2 complete different Cyber.Beast at the same time and tells Airiona I thought that wasn't possible. -Makkusu: but the first Championship match is about to start. +Airiona tells Makkusu that they are Xybrids that they have two tails so they can use two cyber.beast at a time. She explain in further detail how it works. -Airiona: You have yet to win a single match you dont have that luxury. If you're serious about being a cybervator now you need to take ever opportunity you can get. If you are not all in then I guess you're on your own.You need practice everyone else is watching this is the best time to mine cyber.beast thier will be no one else to compete with. +Makkusu and Jax continues their fight ## Act 3 -Airiona and Makkusu are in cyberspace while the 22?.3 championships is going on - -The announcer talks about how team Miniajax has not won a championship match since becoming a Cybervator and that she is a disappointment as a Xybrid Cybervator and will likely lose against Ace and Alex who might be retiring after this fight as he might become the next BluNet cheif. - -The satellite in which Minia and Jax is fighting on malfunctions causing Minia to fall back down to earth - +The commentators point Jax is relentless in his fight with Jax as he is known as the type that never backs down from a fight and does not hold back no mater his opponent. +Makkusu is on the verge of losing his cyber.beast which is pointed out by the commentator \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-7/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-7/readme.md index 3a33576..fad6ae3 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-7/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-7/readme.md @@ -1,48 +1,32 @@ # Episode 7 Outline ## Act 1 -While Makkusu and Airiona is in cyberspace +Just before Makkusu is defeat Airiona uses her chains to pull him to safety while taking a hit from Minia and yells at him to eject as he only has one cyber.beast she then loses her Cyber.Beast to save Makkusu -Makkusu: what was that - -Airiona: are you watching the Championships - -Makkusu: no of course not - -*he hears another sound maybe a yell* - -Makkusu: what the heck sorry have to go - -Airiona: you are. Makkusu! if you leave now... ## Act 2 -Makkusu goes outside and finds a crater with an injured Minia +1 week later -Torrey Makkusu's CSD makes witty comment about him bring Minia in. - -Minia: My name is... +After losing multiple matches Spike offers to make Makkusu a co-owner or employee since he will be able to pursue is passion in a more realistic manner. Just because it is not what does not matter as long as it still aligns with your vision it is still your passion. He tells him that from what he has seen that he is not cut out for the CNS that not being angle to synergize is to much of a disadvantage. That he has was a hinderance to Airiona as he has never seen her perform so poorly. She gave up her chance at the championships just to help him. -Makkusu: My Nia +Spike tells Makkusu that only the top broadcasting studio get to commentate the Championships each year + +It would do wonders for our channels ratings to have former Cybervator on our team. It might be the boost we need to get chosen to broadcast the Championship -Makkusu asks what happend Minia tells him. She insist that he does not tell anyone because if word gets out she will be in trouble +Makkusu tells him that he is a white/green type and doesn't have the affinity to be a broadcaster? spike responds we could use a white type like you especially one so knowledgeable about... Makkusu cuts him off turning him down thinking he is on the path to becoming a cybervator(Makkusu later accepts the request after the CNS championships but maybe it is to late). He tells him that he wants to succeed on his own merit. + +Spike tells him that he has tallents that should not be wasted and pasive agressivelly puts down cybervators in general pointing out the cons. he also tells him that he should not put the on a pedstal like he is worshiping them. + +He tells Makkusu to give it another shot but he shouldnt wait on an uncertainty forever +Airiona contacts Makkusu asking if he is ready for a match against her someone else or to mine cyber.beast. -Makkusu asks why Minias her is red despite her being a green and blue type cybervator +Makkusu: but the first Championship match is about to start. -Minia asks about his talking Cyber.Beast +Airiona: You have yet to win a single match you dont have that luxury. If you're serious about being a cybervator now you need to take ever opportunity you can get. If you are not all in then I guess you're on your own.You need practice everyone else is watching this is the best time to mine cyber.beast thier will be no one else to compete with. ## Act 3 -Jax comes to get Minia +Airiona and Makkusu are in cyberspace while the 22?.3 championships is going on -Jax(hugging Minia and maybe crying): I thought you were dead - -Makkusu has a look of suprise that Jax is not as tuff as he thought - -Makkusu is uncomfortable by thr sight of Jax crying. He intentionally disrubtes the mood. - -Makkusu: Hey Jax - -Makkusu tells Jax that he will get get stronger and next time they meet rather in cyberspace or the championships to not expect the same result as last time - -Jax holds back wipes his tears. scowls with confusion and Says dont make laugh or laughs. - -Jax: Lets go Minia +The announcer talks about how team Miniajax has not won a championship match since becoming a Cybervator and that she is a disappointment as a Xybrid Cybervator and will likely lose against Ace and Alex who might be retiring after this fight as he might become the next BluNet cheif. + +The satellite in which Minia and Jax is fighting on malfunctions causing Minia to fall back down to earth + -After Minia leaves something is seen in the hole Minia left in the ground. \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-8/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-8/readme.md index 8f4660d..23a5c58 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-8/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-8/readme.md @@ -1,7 +1,48 @@ # Episode 8 Outline ## Act 1 -Makkusu has another match in cyberspace +While Makkusu and Airiona is in cyberspace + +Makkusu: what was that + +Airiona: are you watching the Championships + +Makkusu: no of course not + +*he hears another sound maybe a yell* + +Makkusu: what the heck sorry have to go + +Airiona: you are. Makkusu! if you leave now... ## Act 2 -Makkusu wins his first match +Makkusu goes outside and finds a crater with an injured Minia + +Torrey Makkusu's CSD makes witty comment about him bring Minia in. + +Minia: My name is... + +Makkusu: My Nia + +Makkusu asks what happend Minia tells him. She insist that he does not tell anyone because if word gets out she will be in trouble + +Makkusu asks why Minias her is red despite her being a green and blue type cybervator + +Minia asks about his talking Cyber.Beast + ## Act 3 -Makkusu gives upwards of 70% his earnings for ubi which Airiona/Akia/Spike is confused by \ No newline at end of file +Jax comes to get Minia + +Jax(hugging Minia and maybe crying): I thought you were dead + +Makkusu has a look of suprise that Jax is not as tuff as he thought + +Makkusu is uncomfortable by thr sight of Jax crying. He intentionally disrubtes the mood. + +Makkusu: Hey Jax + +Makkusu tells Jax that he will get get stronger and next time they meet rather in cyberspace or the championships to not expect the same result as last time + +Jax holds back wipes his tears. scowls with confusion and Says dont make laugh or laughs. + +Jax: Lets go Minia + +After Minia leaves something is seen in the hole Minia left in the ground. \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/episode-9/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/episode-9/readme.md index 52e238b..4f80ca6 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/episode-9/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/episode-9/readme.md @@ -1,8 +1,7 @@ # Episode 9 Outline ## Act 1 -Makkusu is in cyberspace he sees another cybervator maybe a cyvolter getting double/triple team team Makkusu and maybe Airiona joins in to even things up - +Makkusu has another match in cyberspace ## Act 2 - +Makkusu wins his first match ## Act 3 -Makkusu helps them win while also increasing his ranking match \ No newline at end of file +Makkusu gives upwards of 70% his earnings for ubi which Airiona/Akia/Spike is confused by \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index a3b1709..6906fcf 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -66,30 +66,30 @@ Episodes: [1](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makk ### 2. Call To Adventure -Episodes: [1](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-1) +Episodes: [2](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-2), [3](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-3) - Makkusu Applies to be a Cybervator -### 3. Refusal Of The Call -Episodes: [1](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-1) - - Makkusu is rejected and heads back home + - Makkusu heads back home - Airiona is seen escaping the hub Makkusu was at -### 4. Meeting The Mentor -Episodes: 2, 3, 4 -- When Makkusu arrives home an injured Airiona is found at the foot of his door - + - When Makkusu arrives home an injured Airiona is found at the foot of his door + - The reader sees the inside of Makkusu’s room which has posters and cybervator Fandom items everywhere - Makkusu uses this opportunity to test his Cyber.Beast controller using Airiona's Cyber.Beast - S/He talks about how citizens can’t become cybervators because they don't a tail which means they can synergize. With the device he made anyone will be able to use a Cyber.Beast in cyberspace even though they still won’t be able to become cybervators since they still won’t be able to go into BurstDrive - Makkusu tends to the injured Airiona fixing her CSD which allows her to heal. she encourages him to try again and that she will give word to her superiors to give him a chance and that they will send him a Cyber.Beast so that he can test his device. + +### 3. Refusal Of The Call +Episodes: [4](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-4) - Makkusu is given a Cyber.Beast and invited to be a cybervator - Makkusu takes the cyber.beast given to him by Xenos/Airiona inviting him to join the Cyvolters which he in excitement misread as cybervators - Airiona sends the invite to which Xenos scolds her because he wanted to trick him into joining. As he know he would never join knowing that it is the Cyvolters. + - The first person he tells is Spike - Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace. - - When Makkusu logs into cyberspace it is recommended that + - When Makkusu logs into cyberspace it is recommended that he choose an alias in which he chooses Max - Makkusu is about to mine cyber.beast or fight another cybervator alone He spots a girl that waves at him but he doesn't know who she is so he he casually ignores her Later he gets into some trouble and is saved by her. As she pick him up and carries him out of harm's way @@ -104,9 +104,14 @@ Episodes: 2, 3, 4 Girl: Don’t woorry I won't tell +### 4. Meeting The Mentor +Episodes: 5 + +Airiona gets back in contact with Makkusu and explains what they are about. Makkusu decides to join as he does not want to tell Spike the truth knowing that he will try to capitalize on this info by broadcasting it. + ## Act 2 ### 5. Crossing The Threshold -Episodes: 5, 6 +Episodes: 6, 7 - Makkusu and maybe Airiona lose their first ranked/unranked fight and prepare for a second. They lose to Jax who does not let up and Jax nearly takes his only cyber.beast. Makkusu ejects just in time An announcer is either surprised that he even has a fan and laughs at the fact the he only has one fan probably because ever saw his first fight in which he did terrible. Spike is that only fan - Spike wanted him to join his company which is secretly helping the Cyvolter organization. From befb3df98874557bbcca60e3745829c6106344cc Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sat, 2 Feb 2019 22:55:52 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 090/124] Add action scenes for Jax Makkusu match --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 7 +++++++ 1 file changed, 7 insertions(+) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 6906fcf..56743e7 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -374,6 +374,13 @@ Episodes: 20, 21 ### 12. Return With The Elixir Episodes: 22 - Makkusu uses his trump card utilizing the energy bean he ate earlier this allows him to partially synergize with the cost of depleting all of his energy with the risk of killing him. + +- Knilla allow Makkusu to ride after Ace cites what she said earlier + Makkusu ride knilla then jumps off hope the momentum from jax giving chase would create an opening. + +Makkusu acts as if he will slide under Jax who punches the ground breaking it sending debris upwards which makkusu rides the debris allowing him to dos an aerial attack. + +running circles around Makkusu does a spend being slower this gives him more mobility allowing ace to shot and score. he tries a second time thinking he has the upper hand but Jax is ready for it - In the final seconds of the match amidst a comeback From b397a2cac04abbf9b951e805e767e3cc0a0d7f01 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sun, 3 Feb 2019 08:25:58 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 091/124] changed folder names I 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| 21 +++++++++++++++++---- 1 file changed, 17 insertions(+), 4 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 56743e7..f7dc7a7 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -373,14 +373,27 @@ Episodes: 20, 21 Harmony goes from red to blue after being calmed or Xenos take Blue ### 12. Return With The Elixir Episodes: 22 -- Makkusu uses his trump card utilizing the energy bean he ate earlier this allows him to partially synergize with the cost of depleting all of his energy with the risk of killing him. +running circles around Makkusu does a spend being slower this gives him more mobility allowing ace to shot and score. he tries a second time thinking he has the upper hand but Jax is ready for it + +Makkusu acts as if he will slide under Jax who punches the ground breaking it sending debris upwards which makkusu rides the debris allowing him to dos an aerial attack. - Knilla allow Makkusu to ride after Ace cites what she said earlier - Makkusu ride knilla then jumps off hope the momentum from jax giving chase would create an opening. + Knilla start runing and says Makkusu(who turns around)! jump on. + + Makkusu takes he lance as she runs through Jax Makkusu opens the barrier and they are able to collect points + + Makkusu ride Knilla again this time he jumps with her lance off hoping the momentum from Jax giving chase would create an opening. However he is shot at instead. The cybervator shots only at his feet but this enough to send a citizen like him flying backwards. + + Makkusu starts to question why everyone is afraid to hit him. he then questions why he himself is upset by this as it was the plan after all. He states he can once again take advantage of the debris created by the blast. + + using the cover from the debris he closes while typing telling Ace/Minia when and where to fire/attack at in creating an opening allowing Minia/Ace to get points + +- Makkusu uses his trump card utilizing the energy bean he ate earlier this allows him to partially synergize with the cost of depleting all of his energy with the risk of killing him. + + + -Makkusu acts as if he will slide under Jax who punches the ground breaking it sending debris upwards which makkusu rides the debris allowing him to dos an aerial attack. -running circles around Makkusu does a spend being slower this gives him more mobility allowing ace to shot and score. he tries a second time thinking he has the upper hand but Jax is ready for it - In the final seconds of the match amidst a comeback From 19bd901544d7935fb1e8bce8e6fa660ce68607cd Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Mon, 4 Feb 2019 20:51:46 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 093/124] Added pages 1-10 script for episode 2 --- comic/makkusu/2/page-1-script.md | 10 +++++++++ comic/makkusu/2/page-10-script.md | 25 +++++++++++++++++++++ comic/makkusu/2/page-2-script.md | 11 +++++++++ comic/makkusu/2/page-3-script.md | 8 +++++++ comic/makkusu/2/page-4-script.md | 3 +++ comic/makkusu/2/page-5-script.md | 9 ++++++++ comic/makkusu/2/page-6-script.md | 12 ++++++++++ comic/makkusu/2/page-7-script.md | 19 ++++++++++++++++ comic/makkusu/2/page-8-script.md | 24 ++++++++++++++++++++ comic/makkusu/2/page-9-script.md | 12 ++++++++++ comic/makkusu/2/readme.md | 37 +++---------------------------- 11 files changed, 136 insertions(+), 34 deletions(-) create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/2/page-1-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/2/page-10-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/2/page-2-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/2/page-3-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/2/page-4-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/2/page-5-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/2/page-6-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/2/page-7-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/2/page-8-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/2/page-9-script.md diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-1-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-1-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..427010d --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-1-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,10 @@ +# Page 1 +## Panel 1 (full page width 2/3rd height) +Makkusu:Airiona? Whoa what happened, why aren't you healing!? + +Airiona(holding her arm stub): My argh My CSD is broken/damaged + +## Panel 2 +Makkusu turns to run for help or call for help with his CSD + +Makkusu: I'll call for help \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-10-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-10-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..1bf7513 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-10-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,25 @@ +# Page 10 + As Airiona leaves taking a blueprint of the controllers with her it can be seen in the Background on Makkusu's CSD a news report of Airiona breaking into the Hub he was at + +## Panel 1 +Xenos is seen By Makkusu who appears star struck + +Makkusu: You're Xenos + +Xenos: Yep in the flesh/Long time no see + +Airiona: hey do you mind if I take a copy of the blue prints for your controller + +Makkusu still appears star struck as he is looking at xenos while hand type the commands to send the blue prints + +Makkusu: yeah sure thing I'll email it to you. + +Airiona: Thanks + +Makkusu: You still remember me + +Xenos (smirks): lets go Airiona + +Airiona: See ya/good luck maybe next time we meet it'll be in cyberspace + +As Airiona leaves taking a blueprint of the controllers with her it can be seen in the Background on Makkusu's CSD a news report of Airiona breaking into the Hub he was at diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-2-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-2-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..3475804 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-2-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,11 @@ +# Page 2 +## Panel 1 (transition from panel 1 page 1) +Airiona is extended her hand giving Makkusu he CSD +Airiona: No don't... There is no time I need you to fix it + +Makkusu: But I'm not a doctor + +## Panel 2 +A zoom in shot of her damaged CSD + +Airiona(extended speech balloon from panel 1 were she hands him her CSD): no argh my CSD \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-3-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-3-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..93fc558 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-3-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,8 @@ +# Page 3 +## Panel 1 + +The camera is in the house pointed towards the door +Makkusu is shown helping Airiona into his house while the door slides shut behind them + +## Panel 2 +Makkusu sits her on his couch \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-4-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-4-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..892a55c --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-4-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,3 @@ +# Page 4 +## Panel 1 +Makkusu is seen fixing her CSD while she is sitting on his couch \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-5-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-5-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..30cd8f8 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-5-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,9 @@ +# Page 5 +## Panel 1 (transition from page 4) +Makkusu is seen fixing her CSD while she is sitting on his couch with her eyes closed head tilted back Makkusu head is turned around looking at her. + +Makkusu: Are you sleep + +Airiona: zzzzzzzzzz. + +Makkusu: This my chance she already has a Cyber.Beast I'll just use her CSD to test my Cyber.Beast controller. \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-6-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-6-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..1423613 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-6-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,12 @@ +# Page 6 +## Panel 1 (transition from page 5) +Airiona is standing behind him or shown awake while he tinkers with her CSD + +Makkusu: This should only take a second/one more...It works + +## Panel 2 (overlay) +Airiona(yells): What are you doing! + +## Panel 3 (overlay) +Makkusu has a look of dismay +Makkusu: This my chance she already has a Cyber.Beast I'll just use her CSD to test my Cyber.Beast controller. \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-7-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-7-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..77fe621 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-7-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,19 @@ +# Page 7 +## Panel 1 + + Airiona: You/We don't have time for that right now. You need to fix my CSD so that I can heal my arm. +## panel 2 + Makkusu(look of relief): Oh! Right. + + ## Panel 3 + + Makkusu: wait. umm. Actually I'm already finished + +## Panel 4 +Airiona inspects her CSD + + Airiona: Already/Really. It usually takes hours to fix these things + +## Panel 5 +Airiona's arm begins to regenerate +Airiona's CSD(red alert): \*ding ding\* distress signal sent help is on the way \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-8-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-8-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..cd416f7 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-8-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,24 @@ +# Page 8 +## Panel 1 +Airiona's arm is regenerating + + Airiona: (You know) You're pretty smart + +## Panel 2 +Airiona's arm is regeneration is complete + + Airiona: And not just because you were able to fix my CSD so quickly + + Airiona: you see, you were able to make the CSD and controller because unlike others you doesn't rely on cyber.beast to code he does is on as society does not have the skills they once did + + Airiona: You deserve to be a cybervator all citizens do actually + + Makkusu: you're starting to sound like one of those... + + Airiona: Cyvolter o No I would never. + + Makkusu tells her that it is some thing he made a long time ago when had dreams of becoming a cybervator + + Makkusu: Not really I just most are combined ideas from real scientist to put ideas together to come up with a new one + + Airiona: No unlike most scientist who have become singular focused and don't combined ideas from others you put ideas together to come up with a new one \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-9-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-9-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..466d781 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-9-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,12 @@ +# Page 9 +## Panel 1 +Makkusu: Nobody is here yet maybe I didn't fix it right. + + turns on his CSD's TV + + Makkusu: you wanna watch something while we/you wait + +Airiona: oh no + +## Panel 2 +\*Knock Knock\* \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/2/readme.md index 1f06537..2f44ac9 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/2/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/readme.md @@ -2,22 +2,6 @@ ## Act 1 Makkusu asks Airiona what happened -Makkusu: Whoa what happened. Why aren't you healing - -Airiona(holding her arm stub): My argh My CSD is broken/damaged - -Makkusu: I'll call for help - -#### (if enough space) Version 1 -Airiona: No don't... There is no time I need you to fix it - -Makkusu: But I'm not a doctor - -Airiona(she hands him her CSD): no argh my CSD - -#### (if not enough space) Version 2 -Airiona(she hands him her CSD): It's already on the way argh my CSD I need you to fix it - ## Act 2 Makkusu helps Airiona into his house to fix her CSD @@ -43,25 +27,12 @@ Makkusu helps Airiona into his house to fix her CSD - Makkusu Decides to try to sneak and use Airiona Cyber.Beast/CSD to test his Cyber.Beast Controller with out her permission. Airiona comes up behind him creating the possibility of punishment - Airiona(yells): What are you doing! - - on the next page/episode Makkusu looks with dismay - - Airiona: You/We don't have time for that right now. You need to fix my CSD so that I can heal my arm - Makkusu: Oh! Right. + on the next page Makkusu looks with dismay + - After beginning her arm regeneration process Airiona talks exciting about his creation while they wait - - Airiona: (You know) You're pretty smart - - Airiona: you see, you were able to make the CSD and controller because unlike others you doesn't rely on cyber.beast to code he does is on as society does not have the skills they once did - - Makkusu tells her that it is some thing he made a long time ago when had dreams of becoming a cybervator - - Makkusu: Not really I just most are combined ideas from real scientist to put ideas together to come up with a new one - - Airiona: No unlike most scientist who have become singular focused and don't combined ideas from others you put ideas together to come up with a new one + As they wait Makkusu turns on the TV on his CSD while asking if she wants to watch something while waiting ## Act 3 @@ -70,5 +41,3 @@ As they wait Makkusu turns on the TV on his CSD while asking if she wants to wat Just as she is about to decline watching television on Makkusu's CSD Xenos arrives to pick up Airiona - As Airiona leaves taking a blueprint of the controllers with her it can be seen in the Background on Makkusu's CSD a news report of Airiona breaking into the Hub he was at - - Airiona: See ya/good luck maybe next time we meet it'll be in cyberspace From 9c96853708817f549831ae0f232e411a16cb7850 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Mon, 4 Feb 2019 21:03:24 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 094/124] Fixed logic Makkusu did not have a logical reason for not calling for help when he finds Minia so one was added --- comic/makkusu/5/readme.md | 2 +- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 6 +++++- 2 files changed, 6 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/5/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/5/readme.md index 7bcd611..75121f2 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/5/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/5/readme.md @@ -1,5 +1,5 @@ ## Episode 5 Outline -Airiona gets back in contact with Makkusu and explains what they are about. Makkusu decides to join as he does not want to tell Spike the truth knowing that he will try to capitalize on this info by broadcasting it. +Airiona gets back in contact with Makkusu and explains what they are about. Makkusu decides to join as he does not want to tell Spike that he quit being a cybervator because he is a cyvolter knowing that he will try to capitalize on this info by broadcasting it. ## Act 1 diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index f7dc7a7..77a88fe 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -139,6 +139,10 @@ Episodes: 7, 8, 9, 10, 11, 12 - Makkusu has customized his Cyber.Beast and CSD to have a talking Ai which he calls Torrey - Mini falls in the backyard of Makkusu + + Makkusu goes to call for help but remembers that Airiona says that it takes hours to fix CSDs. And that if he does not fix it soon she might never recover or worse dies. + + After Minia wakes up she ask why he did not call for help. He says that once help arrived that there is no way they will let him repair it. Tells him that being a Xybrid she has two CSDs - Makkusu tells a worried Spike what happen @@ -378,7 +382,7 @@ running circles around Makkusu does a spend being slower this gives him more mob Makkusu acts as if he will slide under Jax who punches the ground breaking it sending debris upwards which makkusu rides the debris allowing him to dos an aerial attack. - Knilla allow Makkusu to ride after Ace cites what she said earlier - Knilla start runing and says Makkusu(who turns around)! jump on. + Knilla start running and says Makkusu(who turns around)! jump on. Makkusu takes he lance as she runs through Jax Makkusu opens the barrier and they are able to collect points From 3caeff15565b0ccbd2d696f6342923eb754031e9 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 5 Feb 2019 23:01:25 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 095/124] Update Page 7 and 8 script A cybervator only regenerates while Synergized so I had to change the panel so that she synergizes first --- comic/makkusu/2/page-7-script.md | 3 ++- comic/makkusu/2/page-8-script.md | 4 ++-- 2 files changed, 4 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-7-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-7-script.md index 77fe621..8879068 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/2/page-7-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-7-script.md @@ -15,5 +15,6 @@ Airiona inspects her CSD Airiona: Already/Really. It usually takes hours to fix these things ## Panel 5 -Airiona's arm begins to regenerate +Airiona Synergizes with her Cyber.Beast + Airiona's CSD(red alert): \*ding ding\* distress signal sent help is on the way \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-8-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-8-script.md index cd416f7..6412bc6 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/2/page-8-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-8-script.md @@ -1,11 +1,11 @@ # Page 8 ## Panel 1 -Airiona's arm is regenerating +Airiona's arm begins to regenerate Airiona: (You know) You're pretty smart ## Panel 2 -Airiona's arm is regeneration is complete +Airiona's arm is regeneration is complete and she test and moves her new hand Airiona: And not just because you were able to fix my CSD so quickly From 8e10fed152dbdf9429957a7085fca9d621fef0a6 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 5 Feb 2019 23:06:20 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 096/124] Added dialouge between makkusu and Airiona to page 3 --- comic/makkusu/2/page-3-script.md | 20 +++++++++++++++++++- comic/makkusu/2/readme.md | 18 ------------------ 2 files changed, 19 insertions(+), 19 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-3-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-3-script.md index 93fc558..b414abd 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/2/page-3-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-3-script.md @@ -5,4 +5,22 @@ The camera is in the house pointed towards the door Makkusu is shown helping Airiona into his house while the door slides shut behind them ## Panel 2 -Makkusu sits her on his couch \ No newline at end of file +Makkusu sits her on his couch + +## Panel 3 + She looks around + + Airiona: So I see watch a lot of the CNS League. You're a fan of the ___ BluNet team + + Makkusu: well I am more of a fan of what ever team Xenos + + Airiona: is he is the one that inspired you to become a Cybervator + + ## Panel 4 + Makkusu: wait how did you know + + Airiona: oh um well + + Makkusu(with joking smile): have you been stalking me + + Airiona(she smiles with shifty eyes): Ha ha ha ye--a \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/2/readme.md index 2f44ac9..6fdf492 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/2/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/readme.md @@ -6,24 +6,6 @@ Makkusu asks Airiona what happened Makkusu helps Airiona into his house to fix her CSD - Airiona notices that Makkusu is a big CNS fan by all stuff in his home/room - - Airiona: So I see watch a lot of the CNS League. - - She looks around - - Airiona: You're a fan of the ___ BluNet team - - Makkusu: well I am more of a fan of what ever team Xenos - - Airiona: is he is the one that inspired you to become a Cybervator - - Makkusu: wait how did you know - - Airiona: oh um well - - Makkusu(with joking smile): have you been stalking me - - Airiona(she smiles with shifty eyes): Ha ha ha ye--a - Makkusu Decides to try to sneak and use Airiona Cyber.Beast/CSD to test his Cyber.Beast Controller with out her permission. Airiona comes up behind him creating the possibility of punishment From d4ca29ebc602ec4d093ffee6241c6e0001c8f88d Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 5 Feb 2019 23:09:19 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 097/124] Expanded on episode 8 --- comic/makkusu/7/readme.md | 6 ++-- comic/makkusu/8/readme.md | 63 ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++----- comic/makkusu/9/readme.md | 2 +- 3 files changed, 59 insertions(+), 12 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/7/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/7/readme.md index fad6ae3..6297d09 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/7/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/7/readme.md @@ -13,9 +13,9 @@ It would do wonders for our channels ratings to have former Cybervator on our te Makkusu tells him that he is a white/green type and doesn't have the affinity to be a broadcaster? spike responds we could use a white type like you especially one so knowledgeable about... Makkusu cuts him off turning him down thinking he is on the path to becoming a cybervator(Makkusu later accepts the request after the CNS championships but maybe it is to late). He tells him that he wants to succeed on his own merit. -Spike tells him that he has tallents that should not be wasted and pasive agressivelly puts down cybervators in general pointing out the cons. he also tells him that he should not put the on a pedstal like he is worshiping them. +Spike tells him that he has talents that should not be wasted and passive aggressively puts down cybervators in general pointing out the cons. he also tells him that he should not put the on a pedestal like he is worshiping them. -He tells Makkusu to give it another shot but he shouldnt wait on an uncertainty forever +He tells Makkusu to give it another shot but he shouldn't wait on an uncertainty forever Airiona contacts Makkusu asking if he is ready for a match against her someone else or to mine cyber.beast. Makkusu: but the first Championship match is about to start. @@ -25,7 +25,7 @@ Airiona: You have yet to win a single match you dont have that luxury. If you're ## Act 3 Airiona and Makkusu are in cyberspace while the 22?.3 championships is going on -The announcer talks about how team Miniajax has not won a championship match since becoming a Cybervator and that she is a disappointment as a Xybrid Cybervator and will likely lose against Ace and Alex who might be retiring after this fight as he might become the next BluNet cheif. +The announcer talks about how team Miniajax has not won a championship match since becoming a Cybervator and that she is a disappointment as a Xybrid Cybervator and will likely lose against Ace and Alex who might be retiring after this fight as he might become the next BluNet chief. The satellite in which Minia and Jax is fighting on malfunctions causing Minia to fall back down to earth diff --git a/comic/makkusu/8/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/8/readme.md index 23a5c58..7b1fd16 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/8/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/8/readme.md @@ -13,18 +13,63 @@ Makkusu: no of course not Makkusu: what the heck sorry have to go Airiona: you are. Makkusu! if you leave now... -## Act 2 + Makkusu goes outside and finds a crater with an injured Minia +Makkusu: hey are you ok + +## Act 2 +Makkusu: oh no she needs help she'll be dead in a matter of minutes if she cant regenerate + + +### Panel +Airiona inspects her CSD + + Airiona: Already/Really. It usually takes hours to fix these things + +Makkusu: They won't be able to fix it fast enough + +Minia is sleep and bandaged with nothing on but her sleeves and pants over her black tights which is slightly torn +Makkusu is repairing her CSD when she wakes up + +Minia:(she feels her back and head) Where am I Where, Where is my Cyber.Beast + +Makkusu: I found you outside of my house and your Cyber.Beast was broken so I'm fixing it + +Makkusu: So your My Nia? + +Minia:(smiling) it’s Minia + +Makkusu: Myy Nia + +Minia:(scowling with head tilted to the right)Nooo, Mih nee ah. + +Makkusu: nope I found you so know your My Nia + +Minia:(she laughs/giggles loudly and rolls eyes with head up transitioning from scowling) ok fine + Torrey Makkusu's CSD makes witty comment about him bring Minia in. + +Torrey: You know you're the second girl he has brought this month -Minia: My name is... +Minia: Really?... wait a minute did it just talk on it's own. CSD/Cyber.Beast normally don't talk without prompt, let alone hold a conversation. + +Makkusu: I customized Her name is Torrey -Makkusu: My Nia -Makkusu asks what happend Minia tells him. She insist that he does not tell anyone because if word gets out she will be in trouble +Makkusu asks why Minia's her is red despite her being a green and blue type cybervator -Makkusu asks why Minias her is red despite her being a green and blue type cybervator +Makkusu: You are a blue and green cybervator but your hair is red how is that possible + +Minia: oh this that well I was a born a green and blue type but when I got older they tried to edit my green genes(CRISPR) to be red mostly so that I could be a a red blue Xybrid and maybe even red green and blue. unfortunately it didn't work out and instead I just ended up with the red hair that would turn Green when ever I go into BurstDrive + +Makkusu: Why not make you red and blue from beginning + +Minia: They tried that with harmony she became Insane from the emotional instability the red and green genes created they figured the added red genes on top of the green types ability to tame Cyber.Beast would prevent me from from being berserk I end up quite the opposite + +Minia: I Know you probably think it's weird + +Makkusu: No I actually thought it was pretty cool. Minia asks about his talking Cyber.Beast @@ -33,15 +78,17 @@ Jax comes to get Minia Jax(hugging Minia and maybe crying): I thought you were dead -Makkusu has a look of suprise that Jax is not as tuff as he thought +Minia/Jax insist that he does not tell anyone because if word gets out she will be in trouble + +Makkusu has a look of surprise that Jax is not as tuff as he thought -Makkusu is uncomfortable by thr sight of Jax crying. He intentionally disrubtes the mood. +Makkusu is uncomfortable by the sight of Jax crying. He intentionally disrupts the mood. Makkusu: Hey Jax Makkusu tells Jax that he will get get stronger and next time they meet rather in cyberspace or the championships to not expect the same result as last time -Jax holds back wipes his tears. scowls with confusion and Says dont make laugh or laughs. +Jax holds back wipes his tears. scowls with confusion and laughs. Jax: Lets go Minia diff --git a/comic/makkusu/9/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/9/readme.md index 4f80ca6..0c3db6e 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/9/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/9/readme.md @@ -4,4 +4,4 @@ Makkusu has another match in cyberspace ## Act 2 Makkusu wins his first match ## Act 3 -Makkusu gives upwards of 70% his earnings for ubi which Airiona/Akia/Spike is confused by \ No newline at end of file +Makkusu gives upwards of 70% his earnings for UBI which Airiona/Akia/Spike is confused by \ No newline at end of file From cba71bc5f4252e6679caf6c3e133e2c37d41e3a6 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 5 Feb 2019 23:17:44 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 098/124] Update episode 4 and 5 Moved the Dialouge in which Airiona berates Cybervators from episode 4 to 5 as it fits the theme of episode 5 better --- comic/makkusu/4/readme.md | 10 +--------- comic/makkusu/5/readme.md | 7 +++++++ 2 files changed, 8 insertions(+), 9 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/4/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/4/readme.md index 1fb86d0..91feffe 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/4/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/4/readme.md @@ -10,14 +10,6 @@ At first Makkusu tries to fight another cybervator but is quickly turned down by Airiona pairs with Makkusu to mine Cyber.Beast ### Version 2 Makkusu goes into cyberspace on his own he gets into trouble and Airiona saves him - -- During or after the fight - - Airiona: It’s nice to be around someone smarter than me for a change especially when it is a citizen(minia is smart but does not enough confidence to exercise it) - - Makkusu: But aren't you a cybervator - - Airiona: yea but my family isn’t, and your a perfect example that the distribution of money is misplaced citizen do all of the work while cybervator gets majority of revenue from your work even though they are only one percent of the population. But we’re gonna change all of that. ## Act 3 -Makkusu takes down his first Cyber.Beast +Makkusu takes down his first Cyber.Beast with the help of Airiona diff --git a/comic/makkusu/5/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/5/readme.md index 75121f2..39a3330 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/5/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/5/readme.md @@ -1,6 +1,13 @@ ## Episode 5 Outline Airiona gets back in contact with Makkusu and explains what they are about. Makkusu decides to join as he does not want to tell Spike that he quit being a cybervator because he is a cyvolter knowing that he will try to capitalize on this info by broadcasting it. + + Airiona: It’s nice to be around someone smarter than me for a change especially when it is a citizen(minia is smart but does not enough confidence to exercise it) + + Makkusu: But aren't you a cybervator + + Airiona: yea but my family isn’t, and your a perfect example that the distribution of money is misplaced citizen do all of the work while cybervator gets majority of revenue from your work even though they are only one percent of the population. But we’re gonna change all of that. + ## Act 1 ## Act 2 From a8f3f76d65da60e2ba6c70b45b0c29b2054b7db2 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 6 Feb 2019 08:57:05 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 099/124] Update readme.md Changed the person who makes the ultimatum to Yahria as the CNS has been the primary backer of Makkusu up to this point. --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 77a88fe..03cb18c 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -313,7 +313,7 @@ Episodes: 18, 19 With Makkusu joining ReNet Kyshumu tells the CNS/NRA that no Citizen should be allowed to compete in the CNS. - Alex makes a ultimatum suggesting that a citizen is unlikely to win the championships--If Makkusu loses no Citizen will be allowed to compete in the CNS again. + The CNS' Yaharia makes a ultimatum suggesting that a citizen is unlikely to win the championships--If Makkusu loses no Citizen will be allowed to compete in the CNS again. Kyshumu(angry):Fine! From 99901f51cca8c463c00a4c0baadf82e24580a80b Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Fri, 8 Feb 2019 00:21:11 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 100/124] added airiona backstory --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 12 ++++++++++-- 1 file changed, 10 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 03cb18c..60b1fe0 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -265,7 +265,7 @@ Episodes: 17 Makkusu: I call it an Elimiter. Normally a cyber.beast would be able to synergize with a cybervator thanks to thier tail. Since everybody including cybervators evolved from plants I used a plant to act as the cyber.beast[1](https://www.engadget.com/2018/12/05/mit-researchers-create-a-robot-houseplant-that-moves-on-its-own/),[2]( https://www.theverge.com/2018/7/12/17563688/robot-plant-hybrid-hexa-vincross-succulent ). - :so you are basically sending commands to a berserk cyber.beast a green/black cybervator. So it basically makes you like a Xybrid. + :so you are basically sending commands to a berserk cyber.beast like a green/black cybervator. So it basically makes you like a Xybrid. other.person: what how. Max: < Well you see I can also hyperlink with other cybervator see what they are thinking and send commands as well. > @@ -298,10 +298,18 @@ Episodes: 17 - Harmony attacks Makkusu who tries to introduce his self a nearly kills him but she stops which surprises Ace +When Airiona and Minia take off their cloaks leaving their one piece backless outfit their scar can be compared by the reader + +Airiona has had multiple wounds to her body most gained through her training to become a Cybervator fighting until all of her energy has been depleted in order to climb the ranks as quickly as possible, unlike the pristine MiNia who had everything handed to her who will quit at the halfway mark of her energy level. + +After seeing both the backs of seeing the backs of both Airiona and Minia Makkusu looks confused Xenos sees him looking maybe makes a quip then proceeds to explain the reason that Aironia has so many scars compared to Everyone else and why Minia has none + +Airiona's flashback shows parents yell at the kids encouraging to beat up the other kids “Get him, come on!" + ### 10. The Road Back Episodes: 18, 19 -- Makkusu is fight on Akia's favorite Cybervators team +- Makkusu is fighting on Akia's favorite Cybervators team Makkusu runs into Akia before his championship match. From b99e214503251528efa1ae0a6996f25dddea5e42 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Fri, 8 Feb 2019 14:08:28 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 101/124] Added pages 1-5 for episode 3 --- comic/makkusu/2/page-10-script.md | 2 +- comic/makkusu/3/page-1-script.md | 4 ++++ comic/makkusu/3/page-2-script.md | 4 ++++ comic/makkusu/3/page-3-script.md | 8 ++++++++ comic/makkusu/3/page-4-script.md | 4 ++++ comic/makkusu/3/page-5-script.md | 3 +++ comic/makkusu/3/readme.md | 4 ++-- comic/makkusu/8/readme.md | 2 +- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 2 +- 9 files changed, 28 insertions(+), 5 deletions(-) create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/3/page-1-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/3/page-2-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/3/page-3-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/3/page-4-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/3/page-5-script.md diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-10-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-10-script.md index 1bf7513..c8c61c4 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/2/page-10-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-10-script.md @@ -16,7 +16,7 @@ Makkusu: yeah sure thing I'll email it to you. Airiona: Thanks -Makkusu: You still remember me +Makkusu: You still remember me!? Xenos (smirks): lets go Airiona diff --git a/comic/makkusu/3/page-1-script.md b/comic/makkusu/3/page-1-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..96e8bca --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/3/page-1-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,4 @@ +# Page 1 +Makkusu is worrying about that fact that Airiona is a Cyvolter and that he aided her wondering if he will get in trouble. + +He tells his self he does not have time to worry about it and that he has work to do/submit. \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/3/page-2-script.md b/comic/makkusu/3/page-2-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..9593526 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/3/page-2-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,4 @@ +# Page 2 +Makkusu is writing code for his job + +his CSD alerts him that Xenos is about to have a match \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/3/page-3-script.md b/comic/makkusu/3/page-3-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..7d06645 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/3/page-3-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,8 @@ +# Page 3 +Makkusu says that it can wait or he finished just in time + +Makkusu precedes to watch Xenos' match + +Spike: Welcome Spike.TV I'm you're host Spike along with my color commentator Akia + +Spike and Akia talk about Airiona being under investigation for being a Cyvolter and the potential ramifications. \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/3/page-4-script.md b/comic/makkusu/3/page-4-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..b77bde4 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/3/page-4-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,4 @@ +# Page 4 +Spike talks about their opponents + +They begin their fight \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/3/page-5-script.md b/comic/makkusu/3/page-5-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..971b81a --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/3/page-5-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,3 @@ +# Page 5 + +They continue their fight \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/3/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/3/readme.md index b5a0e8b..3c2e51d 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/3/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/3/readme.md @@ -1,10 +1,10 @@ # Episode 3 Outline ## Act 1 While working Makkusu is notified that Xenos is about to have a match he stops what he is doing to watch it -## Act 2 Makkusu watches a ranked Cyberspace CNS match with Xenos and Airiona through Spikes commentary feed -Spike: Welcome Spike.TV I'm you're host Spike along with my color commentator Akia +## Act 2 +Xenos and Airiona completes their match After the match Airiona and Xenos is shown discussing the possibility of Makkusu joining the Cyvolters diff --git a/comic/makkusu/8/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/8/readme.md index 7b1fd16..9561ae9 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/8/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/8/readme.md @@ -12,7 +12,7 @@ Makkusu: no of course not Makkusu: what the heck sorry have to go -Airiona: you are. Makkusu! if you leave now... +Airiona: you are. You're only cheating your self Makkusu! if you leave now... Makkusu goes outside and finds a crater with an injured Minia diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 60b1fe0..f0cdfff 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -302,7 +302,7 @@ When Airiona and Minia take off their cloaks leaving their one piece backless ou Airiona has had multiple wounds to her body most gained through her training to become a Cybervator fighting until all of her energy has been depleted in order to climb the ranks as quickly as possible, unlike the pristine MiNia who had everything handed to her who will quit at the halfway mark of her energy level. -After seeing both the backs of seeing the backs of both Airiona and Minia Makkusu looks confused Xenos sees him looking maybe makes a quip then proceeds to explain the reason that Aironia has so many scars compared to Everyone else and why Minia has none +After seeing both seeing the backs of both Airiona and Minia Makkusu looks confused Xenos sees him looking maybe makes a quip then proceeds to explain the reason that Aironia has so many scars compared to Everyone else and why Minia has none Airiona's flashback shows parents yell at the kids encouraging to beat up the other kids “Get him, come on!" From 29998b9946b83fb59dd4ed2a0f706629d12f25d2 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sun, 10 Feb 2019 08:54:12 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 102/124] Switched the Cybervator being interviewed to Kyshumu - This still allow this event to foreshadow the CNS being rigid. - Using Kyshumu rather than Xenos for this scene provides even more leeway for potential future story developments. - Also made a younger Spike as the possible Interviewer --- comic/makkusu/1/page-1-script.md | 4 ++-- comic/makkusu/1/page-4-script.md | 2 +- comic/makkusu/1/page-5-script.md | 4 +--- comic/makkusu/1/page-6-script.md | 8 ++++---- comic/makkusu/1/page-7-script.md | 8 ++++---- comic/makkusu/1/readme.md | 2 +- 6 files changed, 13 insertions(+), 15 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/page-1-script.md b/comic/makkusu/1/page-1-script.md index 8f35c78..6d5d939 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/page-1-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/page-1-script.md @@ -1,8 +1,8 @@ # Page 1 ## Panel 1 (full page width 2/3rd height) -*The stadium/hub in which the match is being fought in is shown from above* +*The stadium/hub in which a match between Xenos and Kyshumu is being fought in is shown from above* -+Commentator: ReNet/BluNet is in the lead but Even with only seconds left in this match it is still to close to call ++Commentator: ReNet is in the lead but Even with only seconds left in this match it is still to close to call ## Panel 2 (1/3rd height and width) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/page-4-script.md b/comic/makkusu/1/page-4-script.md index 3dc7bbc..ee38fb6 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/page-4-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/page-4-script.md @@ -2,7 +2,7 @@ *Xenos loses the fight* -Commentator: And there you have it folks ReNet/BluNet is the world champions +Commentator: And there you have it folks ReNet is the world champions *The audience can be heard cheering while Makkusu's head is down in disappointment* diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/page-5-script.md b/comic/makkusu/1/page-5-script.md index c604efc..23821d4 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/page-5-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/page-5-script.md @@ -1,9 +1,7 @@ # Page 5 ## Pane l -Xenos is giving an interview with a crowd surrounding them. Makkusu is seen squeezing through - -Xenos: well we gave it our best effort but it just wasn't enough +Kyshumu is giving an interview with a crowd surrounding them. Makkusu is seen squeezing through ## Panel 2 overlay top right side **Makkusu:** Hey mister diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/page-6-script.md b/comic/makkusu/1/page-6-script.md index 74c1728..75e92a9 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/page-6-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/page-6-script.md @@ -1,14 +1,14 @@ # Page 6 Transitioning from the fist panel of the last page -Xenos turns around with the same crowd surrounding them. Mack is seen squeezing through them. +Kyshumu turns around with the same crowd surrounding them. Mack is seen squeezing through them. -*Xenos Turns around with a smile preparing to give him an autograph* +*Kyshumu Turns around with a smile preparing to give him an autograph* -Xenos: Hey there little guy +**Kyshumu:** Hey there little guy **Makkusu:** I don't like you anymore -Xenos has a look of surprised disappointment +Kyshumu has a look of surprised disappointment diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/page-7-script.md b/comic/makkusu/1/page-7-script.md index 177345e..a8caf10 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/page-7-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/page-7-script.md @@ -1,11 +1,11 @@ # Page 7 -**Mack**(*pulling Makkusu away*): I'm sorry he's upset because you lost +**Mack**(*pulling Makkusu away*): I'm sorry he's upset because you beat his favorite Cybervator -Xenos: That's ok. What's your name. I'll give you an autograph +**Kyshumu:** Ha Ha Ha. That's ok. What's your name. I'll give you an autograph -**Makkusu(yells):** I don't want your autograph. My name is Makkusu. Just you wait when I'm old enough I'm gonna be a better Cybervator than even you. I'll never lose! +**Makkusu(yells):** I don't want your autograph. My name is Makkusu. Just you wait when I'm old enough I'm gonna be a better Cybervator than even you. Just you wait I'll destroy you -**Xenos** (*rubs the top of his head*): Ha ha ha. Okay Superstar. I'll be waiting. +**Kyshumu** (*rubs the top of his head*): Ha ha ha. Okay, I'll be waiting. ## Last Panel *The panel is black* diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/1/readme.md index 91d3aef..e09c1e3 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/readme.md @@ -4,7 +4,7 @@ Pages: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7 The ending of CNS Championships is shown. An 8 year old Makkusu is shown watching as a fan -After the Match which Xenos loses Xenos has an interview but is interrupted by Makkusu +After the Match between Xenos and Kyshumu which Xenos loses Kyshumu has an interview with maybe a young Spike but is interrupted by Makkusu. ## Act 2 Pages: 8, 9, 10, 11, 12, 13, 14, 15 From 6ed22b48ea31e5e9cc4598267a554a8b19936f5b Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Mon, 11 Feb 2019 15:32:34 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 103/124] Added dialouge to create more drama --- comic/makkusu/2/page-9-script.md | 6 +++++- 1 file changed, 5 insertions(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-9-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-9-script.md index 466d781..854e69c 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/2/page-9-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-9-script.md @@ -2,9 +2,13 @@ ## Panel 1 Makkusu: Nobody is here yet maybe I didn't fix it right. + Makkusu: you wanna watch something while we/you wait + turns on his CSD's TV + + TV: this just in the hub in sector 1.27.323 has been attack by the Cyvolters - Makkusu: you wanna watch something while we/you wait +Makkusu: Oh wow I was just there. And you won't believe this but there was some that looked just like you there Airiona: oh no From caf78561e2b4ad70e9fc699481352dfa73c69eac Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 12 Feb 2019 23:43:40 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 104/124] Added Harmony and Avis as the opponents Having an opponent set makes thing far more easier in terms of visualizing the fight scene. This is because I know how each character will act and react in the scenerio. --- comic/makkusu/3/page-4-script.md | 5 ++++- comic/makkusu/3/page-5-script.md | 3 ++- comic/makkusu/3/page-6-script.md | 12 ++++++++++++ comic/makkusu/3/page-7-script.md | 5 +++++ comic/makkusu/3/page-8-script.md | 6 ++++++ comic/makkusu/3/page-9-script.md | 6 ++++++ 6 files changed, 35 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-) create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/3/page-6-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/3/page-7-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/3/page-8-script.md create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/3/page-9-script.md diff --git a/comic/makkusu/3/page-4-script.md b/comic/makkusu/3/page-4-script.md index b77bde4..136a1ba 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/3/page-4-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/3/page-4-script.md @@ -1,4 +1,7 @@ # Page 4 Spike talks about their opponents -They begin their fight \ No newline at end of file +Harmony and Avis is introduces nicknamed as echo and boom + +They begin their fight + diff --git a/comic/makkusu/3/page-5-script.md b/comic/makkusu/3/page-5-script.md index 971b81a..2b28791 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/3/page-5-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/3/page-5-script.md @@ -1,3 +1,4 @@ # Page 5 +They continue their fight -They continue their fight \ No newline at end of file +Harmony does not want to participate leaving Avis to fend for his self diff --git a/comic/makkusu/3/page-6-script.md b/comic/makkusu/3/page-6-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..5f3fb44 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/3/page-6-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,12 @@ +# Page 6 +They continue their fight + +Airiona decides to provide Xenos with support since harmony is not fighting her + +Airiona uses this opportunity to take down Avis + +Xenos: I though I told you to handle harmony + +Airiona: But she's just standing there + +Harmony unexpectedly jumps in taking down both Airiona and Xenos in one attack diff --git a/comic/makkusu/3/page-7-script.md b/comic/makkusu/3/page-7-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..acfc2fe --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/3/page-7-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,5 @@ +# Page 7 +They continue their fight + +Airiona tries to chain Harmony but she breaks it easily while taking down Xenos + diff --git a/comic/makkusu/3/page-8-script.md b/comic/makkusu/3/page-8-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..ee9b8b3 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/3/page-8-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,6 @@ +# Page 8 +They continue their fight + +Xenos is not given any time to log out and is almost deleted by Airiona but Harmony jumps in front to defend him + +Harmony unpredictably stops \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/3/page-9-script.md b/comic/makkusu/3/page-9-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..236272d --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/3/page-9-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,6 @@ +# Page 9 +Harmony sits down and logs out or time expires, making Xenos and harmony the victors or the match as a draw. Makkusu has a look of astonished disbelief and Spike laughs or vice versa. Akia starts to yell in a fit of rage saying that the match was completely unsatisfying. + +Makkusu: What?! + +While yelling he is interrupted by a notification on his CSD \ No newline at end of file From 65df8af9a9ccc25349cf828243df957343de33d5 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 12 Feb 2019 23:47:23 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 105/124] Update readme.md - Avis and Echo is now them same person.. - Added Foreshadowing as Yaharia recgonizes what should be hidden acient technolgy --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 4 +++- 1 file changed, 3 insertions(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index f0cdfff..639f143 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -283,7 +283,7 @@ Episodes: 17 | Red | Harmony | Aarock | | | | Green | Airiona | Makkusu | | | | Blue | Minia | Xenos | | | - | Black | Knilla | Avis?/Echo | | | + | Black | Knilla | Avis | | | | White | Ace | Avis/Makkusu | | | - Jax's team @@ -370,6 +370,8 @@ Episodes: 18, 19 - They begin to make/orchestrate a historic comeback but their efforts fall short as the deficit Minia creating was to great to overcome + + - Yaharia takes notice of Makkusu as she realizes that he is using ancient tech that was locked up and hidden centuries ago ## Act 3 ### 11. Resurrection Episodes: 20, 21 From bdaddc2d896684a23347c2b377f8bcfd355355fe Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 12 Feb 2019 23:54:05 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 106/124] Shift scence forward to accommodate space Moved the scenes in which Makkusu accepts the invite and Airiona and Xenos discussing it from episode 3 to 4 --- comic/makkusu/3/readme.md | 19 +++-------------- comic/makkusu/4/readme.md | 43 +++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++------ 2 files changed, 40 insertions(+), 22 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/3/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/3/readme.md index 3c2e51d..719e2ea 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/3/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/3/readme.md @@ -4,24 +4,11 @@ While working Makkusu is notified that Xenos is about to have a match he stops w Makkusu watches a ranked Cyberspace CNS match with Xenos and Airiona through Spikes commentary feed ## Act 2 -Xenos and Airiona completes their match - -After the match Airiona and Xenos is shown discussing the possibility of Makkusu joining the Cyvolters - -Xenos Discovers that Airiona already sent Makkusu an invite along with a Cyber.Beast - -Airiona: I already sent the invite +Harmony decides to start acting difficult in the middle of the match. -Xenos: When their -Airiona: Just a second ago - -Xenos: but what about the Cyber.Beast - -Airiona: I gave him the one we just stole ## Act 3 -Airiona sends the invite to which Xenos scolds her because he wanted to trick him into joining. As he know he would never join knowing that it is the Cyvolters. +Xenos and Airiona completes their match -Airiona(Scowling): so you wanted to trick him?! (right after she says this to their surprise they get a message accepting the invite.) -Makkusu accepts the invite +Makkusu gets an invite diff --git a/comic/makkusu/4/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/4/readme.md index 91feffe..6e22307 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/4/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/4/readme.md @@ -1,15 +1,46 @@ ## Episode 4 Outline ## Act 1 -They realize that Makkusu might not not know who they are. + +Xenos learns Airiona sent the invite to which Xenos scolds her because he wanted to trick him into joining. As he know he would never join knowing that it is the Cyvolters. + +Airiona(Scowling): so you wanted to trick him?! (right after she says this to their surprise they get a message accepting the invite.) + +After the match Airiona and Xenos is shown discussing the possibility of Makkusu joining the Cyvolters + +Xenos Discovers that Airiona already sent Makkusu an invite along with a Cyber.Beast + +Airiona: I already sent the invite + +Xenos: When thier + +Airiona: Just a second ago + +Xenos: but what about the Cyber.Beast + +Airiona: I gave him the one we just stole + +Airiona gets a message informing her that the invitation has ben accepted Xenos: I guess it worked out in our favor after all +Makkusu is on the phone with Spike + +The words of the message can be seen on the screen + +Dear Makkusu Light, we are would like to inform you that you have been selected to become a Cyvolter. Once you accept this offer you will be granted the right to use the Cyber.Beast sent along with this letter. + + +Makkusu: can you believe it I'm actually going to become a Cybervator + +After hanging up Makkusu pumps his fist in celebratory fashion + +Makkusu: Yeees!/Oh yeah! + ## Act 2 -At first Makkusu tries to fight another cybervator but is quickly turned down by the Cybervator he tries to fight or Airiona -### Version 1 -Airiona pairs with Makkusu to mine Cyber.Beast -### Version 2 -Makkusu goes into cyberspace on his own he gets into trouble and Airiona saves him +At first Makkusu tries to fight another cybervator but is quickly turned down by the Cybervator he tries to fight + +Makkusu goes into cyberspace on his own to mine Cyber.Beast he gets into trouble and Airiona saves him ## Act 3 Makkusu takes down his first Cyber.Beast with the help of Airiona + From 3d670e3258cd9e687721df45c4b433aa16c7fb96 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 12 Feb 2019 23:59:02 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 107/124] Expanded the effects of Airion breaking and entering A major effect it has is that she must mask her identity becoming know as eclipse The founding of a "new network" --- comic/makkusu/3/page-3-script.md | 4 +++- comic/makkusu/5/readme.md | 19 ++++++++++++------- comic/makkusu/6/readme.md | 9 +++++++++ 3 files changed, 24 insertions(+), 8 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/3/page-3-script.md b/comic/makkusu/3/page-3-script.md index 7d06645..11f9c81 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/3/page-3-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/3/page-3-script.md @@ -5,4 +5,6 @@ Makkusu precedes to watch Xenos' match Spike: Welcome Spike.TV I'm you're host Spike along with my color commentator Akia -Spike and Akia talk about Airiona being under investigation for being a Cyvolter and the potential ramifications. \ No newline at end of file +Spike and Akia talk about Airiona being under investigation for being a Cyvolter and the potential ramifications which includes being released and her cyber.beast taken from her. + +They wonder how Xenos feels being paired with a criminal \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/5/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/5/readme.md index 39a3330..1511807 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/5/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/5/readme.md @@ -1,16 +1,21 @@ ## Episode 5 Outline -Airiona gets back in contact with Makkusu and explains what they are about. Makkusu decides to join as he does not want to tell Spike that he quit being a cybervator because he is a cyvolter knowing that he will try to capitalize on this info by broadcasting it. - Airiona: It’s nice to be around someone smarter than me for a change especially when it is a citizen(minia is smart but does not enough confidence to exercise it) - - Makkusu: But aren't you a cybervator +## Act 1 +They realize that Makkusu did not not know who they are Cyvolters. - Airiona: yea but my family isn’t, and your a perfect example that the distribution of money is misplaced citizen do all of the work while cybervator gets majority of revenue from your work even though they are only one percent of the population. But we’re gonna change all of that. +Makkusu realize that he had join the Cyvolters -## Act 1 +Makkusu what am I gonna do I can't tell Spike who knows what will happen to me if he tells everyone ## Act 2 - +Airiona gets back in contact with Makkusu and explains what they are about. + + Airiona: It’s nice to be around someone smarter than me for a change especially when it is a citizen(minia is smart but does not enough confidence to exercise it) + + Makkusu: But aren't you a cybervator + + Airiona: yea but my family isn’t, and your a perfect example that the distribution of money is misplaced citizen do all of the work while cybervator gets majority of revenue from your work even though they are only one percent of the population. But we’re gonna change all of that. ## Act 3 + Makkusu decides to join as he does not want to tell Spike that he quit being a cybervator because he is a cyvolter knowing that he will try to capitalize on this info by broadcasting it. \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/6/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/6/readme.md index ee82faf..3935b30 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/6/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/6/readme.md @@ -1,10 +1,19 @@ # Episode 6 Outline ## Act 1 +The Cyvolter has established a new network within the CNS called CyTek/CyNet although they don't have a hub they still distribute cyber.beast to it's members any one that is apart of the company is given a Cyber.Beast. They declare their self a citizens league The public may or might know at this point that is a Cyvolter organization. + +Eclipse and Makkusu are the first members. + +Airiona is now going by the name Eclipse to mask her identity + Time has passed after mining cyber.beast Airiona and unranked Makkusu is ready for their first match against Jax and Minia Airiona tells Makkusu that Minia and Jax is probably the worst matchup they can get +Makkusu: It's been a week/month since joining the Cyvolters. Well actually a lot has changed since. The Cyvolter created what everyone is calling a citizens league. So officially I'm a member of CyNet/CyTek(named after the tech I created). + ## Act 2 +Spike Talks about the New "Citizens league" Makkusu notices that Minia and Jax seems to be fused with 2 complete different Cyber.Beast at the same time and tells Airiona I thought that wasn't possible. Airiona tells Makkusu that they are Xybrids that they have two tails so they can use two cyber.beast at a time. She explain in further detail how it works. From 66dad45d3735362ab9d01df78866278d74f7a45c Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 12 Feb 2019 23:59:18 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 108/124] Create page-10-script.md --- comic/makkusu/3/page-10-script.md | 8 ++++++++ 1 file changed, 8 insertions(+) create mode 100644 comic/makkusu/3/page-10-script.md diff --git a/comic/makkusu/3/page-10-script.md b/comic/makkusu/3/page-10-script.md new file mode 100644 index 0000000..faf4859 --- /dev/null +++ b/comic/makkusu/3/page-10-script.md @@ -0,0 +1,8 @@ +# Page 10 +Makkusu: I just got a letter. + +Makkusu is seen sweating and has a look of anticipation + +Makkusu reads the Message out loud. + +Makkusu: Dear Makkusu Light, we are would like to inform you that... \ No newline at end of file From fbdcf8947c81e598a652052d9ae537255d382441 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Thu, 14 Feb 2019 13:52:54 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 109/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu/4/readme.md | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/4/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/4/readme.md index 6e22307..d8ad944 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/4/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/4/readme.md @@ -34,7 +34,7 @@ Makkusu: can you believe it I'm actually going to become a Cybervator After hanging up Makkusu pumps his fist in celebratory fashion -Makkusu: Yeees!/Oh yeah! +Makkusu: Yeesss!/Oh yeah! ## Act 2 At first Makkusu tries to fight another cybervator but is quickly turned down by the Cybervator he tries to fight From 7fa4f0220bde6c78f8b15245e0f319c03b45bd10 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sat, 23 Feb 2019 20:06:00 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 110/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 1 - 1 file changed, 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 639f143..b4bb7ec 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -7,7 +7,6 @@ - Episodes: 22-27 - Roles - Broadcaster/Commentator: Spike, Makkusu? - - Handlers/Cornerman/crew: Makkusu? - Fan: Makkusu - Cybervator: Minia, Jax, Airiona, Xenos, Ace, Harmony - Chief: Kyshumu, Alex From de8ee9216b0651685ca15b9e6464b85d31730ed8 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sat, 23 Feb 2019 20:30:46 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 111/124] change airiona's alias to speeding bullet - This will serve as comic relief --- comic/makkusu/6/readme.md | 6 ++++-- 1 file changed, 4 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/6/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/6/readme.md index 3935b30..b34c18b 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/6/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/6/readme.md @@ -2,9 +2,11 @@ ## Act 1 The Cyvolter has established a new network within the CNS called CyTek/CyNet although they don't have a hub they still distribute cyber.beast to it's members any one that is apart of the company is given a Cyber.Beast. They declare their self a citizens league The public may or might know at this point that is a Cyvolter organization. -Eclipse and Makkusu are the first members. +Speeding Bullet and Makkusu are the first members. -Airiona is now going by the name Eclipse to mask her identity +Airiona is now going by the name Speeding Bullet to mask her identity + +Airiona: call me Speeding Bullet Time has passed after mining cyber.beast Airiona and unranked Makkusu is ready for their first match against Jax and Minia From c7a52495fc4d09f7369e5a5724183f83bc8ec6fa Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sat, 23 Feb 2019 20:31:47 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 112/124] Added potential fight scene leading to Airiona's capture --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 6 ++++++ 1 file changed, 6 insertions(+) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 639f143..87a674b 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -11,6 +11,12 @@ - Fan: Makkusu - Cybervator: Minia, Jax, Airiona, Xenos, Ace, Harmony - Chief: Kyshumu, Alex + + - Speeding Bullet is discovered to be Airiona during the tournament a fight ensues between Airiona and Kyshumu. Airiona is defeated Kyshumu. + + Harmony is enraged by this and charges in to attack Kyshumu. Kyshumu thinks she is trying to help him and tells her to stand down that he has everything in control Avis realizes that she is not going after Airiona but rather Kyshumu he tells her to stop and jumps in front with his arms open. She barely moves her hand out of the way but it is not enough as the energy from the hand is enough to obliterate the left side of his head. She apologizes saying that she tried to stop or avoid him but could not. + + This makes things worst as she goes berserk and Kyshumu and Xenos must work together Harmony to stop her. - This is Xenos' last season before he announces his retirement From 93a0c4d02a3b8f016348f90da6040514054c78a3 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Sat, 2 Mar 2019 10:49:56 -0500 Subject: [PATCH 113/124] Update page-3-script.md --- comic/makkusu/2/page-3-script.md | 10 +++++----- 1 file changed, 5 insertions(+), 5 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-3-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-3-script.md index b414abd..194c021 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/2/page-3-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-3-script.md @@ -5,22 +5,22 @@ The camera is in the house pointed towards the door Makkusu is shown helping Airiona into his house while the door slides shut behind them ## Panel 2 -Makkusu sits her on his couch +Makkusu sits Airiona on his couch ## Panel 3 - She looks around + She looks around and sees that his room is decorated with a ton of Cybervtaor Memorabilia Airiona: So I see watch a lot of the CNS League. You're a fan of the ___ BluNet team Makkusu: well I am more of a fan of what ever team Xenos - Airiona: is he is the one that inspired you to become a Cybervator + Airiona: is he the one that inspired you to become a Cybervator ## Panel 4 Makkusu: wait how did you know Airiona: oh um well - Makkusu(with joking smile): have you been stalking me + Makkusu(with joking smile): have you been stalking me? - Airiona(she smiles with shifty eyes): Ha ha ha ye--a \ No newline at end of file + Airiona(she smiles with shifty eyes): Ha ha ha ye--a From d035620f3773c6e05568b283bb3bb5542cbb4462 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 13 Mar 2019 21:51:07 -0400 Subject: [PATCH 114/124] Added Torrey foreshadowing --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 2 ++ 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 9e16506..5e56622 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -11,6 +11,8 @@ - Cybervator: Minia, Jax, Airiona, Xenos, Ace, Harmony - Chief: Kyshumu, Alex + - Minia learns that her mother is Torrey around the same time Makkusu tells her his mother is torrey or learns that his mother is torrey or vice versa + - Speeding Bullet is discovered to be Airiona during the tournament a fight ensues between Airiona and Kyshumu. Airiona is defeated Kyshumu. Harmony is enraged by this and charges in to attack Kyshumu. Kyshumu thinks she is trying to help him and tells her to stand down that he has everything in control Avis realizes that she is not going after Airiona but rather Kyshumu he tells her to stop and jumps in front with his arms open. She barely moves her hand out of the way but it is not enough as the energy from the hand is enough to obliterate the left side of his head. She apologizes saying that she tried to stop or avoid him but could not. From e241dfb20f82efe76daad38a688261c23039bcc0 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Thu, 14 Mar 2019 07:12:35 -0400 Subject: [PATCH 115/124] Added Knilla lineup placement scene This scene serves as exposition for the rules of the league and establishes the relationship between Ace and Knilla --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 5 +++-- 1 file changed, 3 insertions(+), 2 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 5e56622..f9840dc 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -385,8 +385,9 @@ Episodes: 20, 21 - Makkusu fights Jax - Max suggests a line up change. - When Minia subs for Xenos max is at to read her mind. He learns that the reason she doesn't do well as a blue style fighter is not lack of skill and imagination but rather a matter of mind set. - + When Minia subs for Xenos max is able to read her mind. He learns that the reason she doesn't do well as a blue style fighter is not lack of skill and imagination but rather a matter of mind set. + + To keep up with traditions started by the war blue Cybervators fight along with white cybervator on offense and Red along with black as this was the best way at the time to get these 4 nations to work together on the same team. This eventually becomes an unwritten rule that is mistaken as a rule. Makkusu, however, knows this and employs Knilla to be his support fighter rather than Ace this way they can do the move ace and knilla is known for. When max tells them his plan the reject it at first citing the unwritten rule. Max convince them otherwise. Ace tries to convince knilla to do it while max takes his clothes off to fight. She reiterated that she will only let ma... Ace ride her. Ace says forget it I will be your support we will just have come up with another plan. Max tells him that it is too late he has already submitted the lineup for the round. Max particularly needs her to be his shield since he does not have one Minia thinks to much particularly the well being of her opponent and is too passive when fighting Mina is changed from the blue to the green position From 51dde9f79342b88dd4e1e604e7fa3f030c5c3b51 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Fri, 15 Mar 2019 20:29:35 -0400 Subject: [PATCH 116/124] Changed Makkusu's name to Max --- comic/makkusu/1/page-1-script.md | 6 +- comic/makkusu/1/page-10-script.md | 10 +- comic/makkusu/1/page-11-script.md | 6 +- comic/makkusu/1/page-12-script.md | 4 +- comic/makkusu/1/page-13-script.md | 4 +- comic/makkusu/1/page-14-script.md | 6 +- comic/makkusu/1/page-16-script.md | 2 +- comic/makkusu/1/page-18-script.md | 2 +- comic/makkusu/1/page-19-script.md | 4 +- comic/makkusu/1/page-20-script.md | 2 +- comic/makkusu/1/page-4-script.md | 8 +- comic/makkusu/1/page-5-script.md | 8 +- comic/makkusu/1/page-6-script.md | 2 +- comic/makkusu/1/page-7-script.md | 6 +- comic/makkusu/1/page-8-script.md | 14 +- comic/makkusu/1/page-9-script.md | 8 +- comic/makkusu/1/readme.md | 30 ++--- comic/makkusu/10/readme.md | 4 +- comic/makkusu/11/readme.md | 2 +- comic/makkusu/2/page-1-script.md | 6 +- comic/makkusu/2/page-10-script.md | 14 +- comic/makkusu/2/page-2-script.md | 4 +- comic/makkusu/2/page-3-script.md | 10 +- comic/makkusu/2/page-4-script.md | 2 +- comic/makkusu/2/page-5-script.md | 6 +- comic/makkusu/2/page-6-script.md | 6 +- comic/makkusu/2/page-7-script.md | 4 +- comic/makkusu/2/page-8-script.md | 6 +- comic/makkusu/2/page-9-script.md | 6 +- comic/makkusu/2/readme.md | 16 +-- comic/makkusu/3/page-1-script.md | 2 +- comic/makkusu/3/page-10-script.md | 8 +- comic/makkusu/3/page-2-script.md | 2 +- comic/makkusu/3/page-3-script.md | 4 +- comic/makkusu/3/page-9-script.md | 4 +- comic/makkusu/3/readme.md | 6 +- comic/makkusu/4/readme.md | 20 +-- comic/makkusu/5/readme.md | 12 +- comic/makkusu/6/readme.md | 16 +-- comic/makkusu/7/readme.md | 16 +-- comic/makkusu/8/readme.md | 48 +++---- comic/makkusu/9/readme.md | 6 +- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 204 +++++++++++++++--------------- 43 files changed, 278 insertions(+), 278 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/page-1-script.md b/comic/makkusu/1/page-1-script.md index 6d5d939..e79be45 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/page-1-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/page-1-script.md @@ -6,11 +6,11 @@ ## Panel 2 (1/3rd height and width) -*The focus is on Makkusu as he cups his hands to his mouth cheering for Xenos as he sits on his fathers shoulders* +*The focus is on Max as he cups his hands to his mouth cheering for Xenos as he sits on his fathers shoulders* -Mack: Come on Makkusu lets cheer him on +Mack: Come on Max lets cheer him on -[Makkusu(yelling)](#makkusu): Come on Xenos! +[Max(yelling)](#Max): Come on Xenos! Mack: Come on Xenos! diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/page-10-script.md b/comic/makkusu/1/page-10-script.md index dc94b6a..96d6b39 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/page-10-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/page-10-script.md @@ -1,14 +1,14 @@ # Page 10 ## Panel 1 (wide panel shot 1/3rd vertical full width) -A full front shot of Makkusu is shown standing in the empty lobby looking to the right +A full front shot of Max is shown standing in the empty lobby looking to the right -Makkusu is the first one there and waits in the lobby to get his first Cyber.Beast +Max is the first one there and waits in the lobby to get his first Cyber.Beast ## Panel 2 (wide panel shot 1/3rd vertical full width) -Makkusu is shown sitting down looking to the left +Max is shown sitting down looking to the left ## Panel 3 (wide panel shot 1/3rd vertical full width) -Makkusu is shown sitting down looking to the right and up +Max is shown sitting down looking to the right and up -Receptionist:Makkusu Light \ No newline at end of file +Receptionist:Max Light \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/page-11-script.md b/comic/makkusu/1/page-11-script.md index 4423de9..2f6a0ea 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/page-11-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/page-11-script.md @@ -1,13 +1,13 @@ # Page 11 ## Panel 1 -Makkusu: No one else is here am I the first person +Max: No one else is here am I the first person Receptionist: No actually someone was even earlier than you she probably getting tested as we speak. Here is your key card the testing area I right behind doors and to the right. you cant miss it. ## Panel 2 -Makkusu walks in the room and sees Airiona who is being unplugged and they announce her energy capacity. Makkusu notices that she looks like Airiona. +Max walks in the room and sees Airiona who is being unplugged and they announce her energy capacity. Max notices that she looks like Airiona. Tester: 8027 -Makkusu(thinks): wow not only does she look like Airiona but she has the same energy capacity as well. \ No newline at end of file +Max(thinks): wow not only does she look like Airiona but she has the same energy capacity as well. \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/page-12-script.md b/comic/makkusu/1/page-12-script.md index cd011dc..8de5a6d 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/page-12-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/page-12-script.md @@ -3,12 +3,12 @@ ## Panel 1 Tester: You look pretty young to be a father so I'm guessing you are here to register a younger sibling. -Makkusu: actually I'm here for myself +Max: actually I'm here for myself ## Panel 2 Tester: Wow really. I'm mean know you didn't have a kid with you but I just assumed they were in the bathroom or something. -Makkusu looks distressed +Max looks distressed ## Panel 3 Airiona takes notice of the conversion as she is putting her hood over her head diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/page-13-script.md b/comic/makkusu/1/page-13-script.md index 89e0f92..e29d92f 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/page-13-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/page-13-script.md @@ -5,7 +5,7 @@ Tester: Sorry I'm not trying to be mean, it's just that you can't really become Tester: in order to be eligible for a Cyber.Beast you need to show that you can synergize with it which is impossible without a tail. -Makkusu explains his controller to the receptionist +Max explains his controller to the receptionist Test: I understand there is no rule against who can be a cybervator but Since you don't have a tail I cant properly test your energy capacity so I'll have write your energy capacity as zero. We are only taking the top 10(0) this year. We usually get 100(0) applicants every year so unless we get less than 10(0) applicants with and energy capacity greater or equal to yours the chance of you being accepted is basically zero. @@ -13,7 +13,7 @@ Tester: look at her she has a tail and still has not been accept ## Last Panel -Airiona seen is leaving out of a different door than what Makkusu came through and is still looking back listening to the conversation +Airiona seen is leaving out of a different door than what Max came through and is still looking back listening to the conversation Tester: If all goes well we will pair you with your first Cyber.Beast. diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/page-14-script.md b/comic/makkusu/1/page-14-script.md index 3bae4b5..f9eca24 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/page-14-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/page-14-script.md @@ -1,9 +1,9 @@ # Page 14 -Makkusu is excited to see that the train is outside already and that he will not need to wait, but the train takes off before he can get on. +Max is excited to see that the train is outside already and that he will not need to wait, but the train takes off before he can get on. -Makkusu: Oh come one. ~~Torrey~~ What when does the next train arrive. +Max: Oh come one. ~~Torrey~~ What when does the next train arrive. CSD: The next train is estimated to arrive in 5 minutes -Makkusu oh man I have to wait that long. \ No newline at end of file +Max oh man I have to wait that long. \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/page-16-script.md b/comic/makkusu/1/page-16-script.md index f83dd35..b2e9314 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/page-16-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/page-16-script.md @@ -2,7 +2,7 @@ ## Panel 1 Airiona is seen flying -She spots Makkusu getting on the train an decides to follow it +She spots Max getting on the train an decides to follow it ## Panel 2 In the last panel it is seen that her arm is missing \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/page-18-script.md b/comic/makkusu/1/page-18-script.md index 9a6b743..2f90f79 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/page-18-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/page-18-script.md @@ -3,6 +3,6 @@ The train stops Airiona: please let this be his stop -Makkusu gets of the train +Max gets of the train Airiona there he is \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/page-19-script.md b/comic/makkusu/1/page-19-script.md index 9b90aa4..e22357f 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/page-19-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/page-19-script.md @@ -1,6 +1,6 @@ # Page 19 # Panel 1 (full height 2/3 width) -The focus is on Makkusu with a worms eye view of Airiona following him +The focus is on Max with a worms eye view of Airiona following him # Panel 2 (full height 1/3 width) -Airiona falls in front of the house of Makkusu \ No newline at end of file +Airiona falls in front of the house of Max \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/page-20-script.md b/comic/makkusu/1/page-20-script.md index f4c79ff..8536502 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/page-20-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/page-20-script.md @@ -1,2 +1,2 @@ # Page 20 -Airiona is seen on the door step of Makkusu's house \ No newline at end of file +Airiona is seen on the door step of Max's house \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/page-4-script.md b/comic/makkusu/1/page-4-script.md index ee38fb6..6ccf4f4 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/page-4-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/page-4-script.md @@ -4,12 +4,12 @@ Commentator: And there you have it folks ReNet is the world champions -*The audience can be heard cheering while Makkusu's head is down in disappointment* +*The audience can be heard cheering while Max's head is down in disappointment* -Mack: It's ok Makkusu we'll get em' next time. +Mack: It's ok Max we'll get em' next time. -*Mack looks to find Makkusu missing* +*Mack looks to find Max missing* -Mack(bewildered look): Makkusu? +Mack(bewildered look): Max? Mack(look of fear): Oh no!-use normal speech balloon don't use exclamation as he has an idea of were he went- \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/page-5-script.md b/comic/makkusu/1/page-5-script.md index 23821d4..48629db 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/page-5-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/page-5-script.md @@ -1,15 +1,15 @@ # Page 5 ## Pane l -Kyshumu is giving an interview with a crowd surrounding them. Makkusu is seen squeezing through +Kyshumu is giving an interview with a crowd surrounding them. Max is seen squeezing through ## Panel 2 overlay top right side -**Makkusu:** Hey mister +**Max:** Hey mister -Makkusu tugs on his tail and xenos grabs it +Max tugs on his tail and xenos grabs it ## Panel 3 over bottom right side \* tug tug \* -**Makkusu:** Hey mister +**Max:** Hey mister diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/page-6-script.md b/comic/makkusu/1/page-6-script.md index 75e92a9..523740b 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/page-6-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/page-6-script.md @@ -8,7 +8,7 @@ Kyshumu turns around with the same crowd surrounding them. Mack is seen squeezin **Kyshumu:** Hey there little guy -**Makkusu:** I don't like you anymore +**Max:** I don't like you anymore Kyshumu has a look of surprised disappointment diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/page-7-script.md b/comic/makkusu/1/page-7-script.md index a8caf10..e293fa0 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/page-7-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/page-7-script.md @@ -1,13 +1,13 @@ # Page 7 -**Mack**(*pulling Makkusu away*): I'm sorry he's upset because you beat his favorite Cybervator +**Mack**(*pulling Max away*): I'm sorry he's upset because you beat his favorite Cybervator **Kyshumu:** Ha Ha Ha. That's ok. What's your name. I'll give you an autograph -**Makkusu(yells):** I don't want your autograph. My name is Makkusu. Just you wait when I'm old enough I'm gonna be a better Cybervator than even you. Just you wait I'll destroy you +**Max(yells):** I don't want your autograph. My name is Max. Just you wait when I'm old enough I'm gonna be a better Cybervator than even you. Just you wait I'll destroy you **Kyshumu** (*rubs the top of his head*): Ha ha ha. Okay, I'll be waiting. ## Last Panel *The panel is black* -1. Spike: Hey Makkusu hey +1. Spike: Hey Max hey 1. CSD: \*Beep Beep Beep\* \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/page-8-script.md b/comic/makkusu/1/page-8-script.md index 39788f6..314da9c 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/page-8-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/page-8-script.md @@ -3,23 +3,23 @@ ## Panel 1 12 years later -Makkusu is seen sleeping on a train. He is awakened by spike or his CSD - 1. Spike: Hey Makkusu hey get up isn't this your stop - 1. CSD: \*Beep Beep Beep\* Rise and shine Makkusu you have arrived at your destination +Max is seen sleeping on a train. He is awakened by spike or his CSD + 1. Spike: Hey Max hey get up isn't this your stop + 1. CSD: \*Beep Beep Beep\* Rise and shine Max you have arrived at your destination ## Panel 2 -Makkusu gets off the train into the corridor of the train station +Max gets off the train into the corridor of the train station Akia is smirking leaned up against the door entrance into the hub. Akia: are you here for ## Panel 3 -Head shot of Makkusu as he gets closer +Head shot of Max as he gets closer -Makkusu (scowls): come on I don't have time for this I'm gonna be late. It's first come first serve, can you let me trough please +Max (scowls): come on I don't have time for this I'm gonna be late. It's first come first serve, can you let me trough please ## Panel 4 -Akia slaps the back of Makkusu's head and his CSD turns yellow +Akia slaps the back of Max's head and his CSD turns yellow Akia: No! you don't even have a tail hoe the hack do you think you can become a cybervator with out one. You'll just embarrass your self \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/page-9-script.md b/comic/makkusu/1/page-9-script.md index f4f0e9c..fac3a3a 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/page-9-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/page-9-script.md @@ -6,11 +6,11 @@ Spike Walks in and intervenes Spike: what's going on here/ is there a problem ## Panel 2 -Akia: I was just telling Makkusu good luck. +Akia: I was just telling Max good luck. -She lets Makkusu go +She lets Max go ## Panel 3 -Makkusu Face has a look of doubt but he enters the building regardless. +Max Face has a look of doubt but he enters the building regardless. -Makkusu: \ No newline at end of file +Max: \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/1/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/1/readme.md index e09c1e3..4a84c49 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/1/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/1/readme.md @@ -2,50 +2,50 @@ ## Act 1 Pages: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7 -The ending of CNS Championships is shown. An 8 year old Makkusu is shown watching as a fan +The ending of CNS Championships is shown. An 8 year old Max is shown watching as a fan -After the Match between Xenos and Kyshumu which Xenos loses Kyshumu has an interview with maybe a young Spike but is interrupted by Makkusu. +After the Match between Xenos and Kyshumu which Xenos loses Kyshumu has an interview with maybe a young Spike but is interrupted by Max. ## Act 2 Pages: 8, 9, 10, 11, 12, 13, 14, 15 -12 years later Makkusu feels he is now ready to compete in the CNS +12 years later Max feels he is now ready to compete in the CNS -Makkusu is seen sleeping on a train. He is awakened by spike or his CSD +Max is seen sleeping on a train. He is awakened by spike or his CSD -Makkusu goes to initiations ceremony in which cybervator are given their first Cyber.Beast +Max goes to initiations ceremony in which cybervator are given their first Cyber.Beast -Akia blocks Makkusu from leaving the train station and is teased about being delusional for trying to become a cybervator when he doesn't even have a tail. +Akia blocks Max from leaving the train station and is teased about being delusional for trying to become a cybervator when he doesn't even have a tail. Spike Walks in and intervenes -Akia lets Makkusu go +Akia lets Max go -Makkusu starts to have doubts but enters the building regardless regardless +Max starts to have doubts but enters the building regardless regardless -Makkusu is the first one there and waits in the lobby to get his first Cyber.Beast +Max is the first one there and waits in the lobby to get his first Cyber.Beast -Makkusu Name is called +Max Name is called -------------- -Makkusu is rejected +Max is rejected -Makkusu tries to explain to them that he doesn't need a tail to use a Cyber.Beast showing them the device he made +Max tries to explain to them that he doesn't need a tail to use a Cyber.Beast showing them the device he made He asks if they can at least let him test/demonstrate it Airiona can be seen hidden from site grimacing and peaking at what is going on -After Makkusu leaves a cybervator comes rushing in yelling and tells/asks them about Airiona +After Max leaves a cybervator comes rushing in yelling and tells/asks them about Airiona ### Act 3 Pages: 16, 17, 18, 19, 20 -She happened to see and remembers that that Makkusu was able to customize his CSD so she decides to follow him home flying behind him and the train that he is ridding on +She happened to see and remembers that that Max was able to customize his CSD so she decides to follow him home flying behind him and the train that he is ridding on -Just as Makkusu is about to close his door he sees Airiona outside of his house at the foot of his door. +Just as Max is about to close his door he sees Airiona outside of his house at the foot of his door. diff --git a/comic/makkusu/10/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/10/readme.md index 2731ae0..0101726 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/10/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/10/readme.md @@ -1,8 +1,8 @@ # Episode 10 Outline ## Act 1 -Makkusu is in cyberspace he sees another cybervator maybe a cyvolter getting double/triple team team Makkusu and maybe Airiona joins in to even things up +Max is in cyberspace he sees another cybervator maybe a cyvolter getting double/triple team team Max and maybe Airiona joins in to even things up ## Act 2 ## Act 3 -Makkusu helps them win while also increasing his ranking match \ No newline at end of file +Max helps them win while also increasing his ranking match \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/11/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/11/readme.md index 43d4bb9..6d2a780 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/11/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/11/readme.md @@ -1,5 +1,5 @@ # Episode 11 Outline ## Act 1 -A montage is shown of the reputation that Makkusu has made help other cybervators and giving 70% of his earnings and how it has earned him many fans. +A montage is shown of the reputation that Max has made help other cybervators and giving 70% of his earnings and how it has earned him many fans. ## Act 2 ## Act 3 diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-1-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-1-script.md index 427010d..6549dde 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/2/page-1-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-1-script.md @@ -1,10 +1,10 @@ # Page 1 ## Panel 1 (full page width 2/3rd height) -Makkusu:Airiona? Whoa what happened, why aren't you healing!? +Max:Airiona? Whoa what happened, why aren't you healing!? Airiona(holding her arm stub): My argh My CSD is broken/damaged ## Panel 2 -Makkusu turns to run for help or call for help with his CSD +Max turns to run for help or call for help with his CSD -Makkusu: I'll call for help \ No newline at end of file +Max: I'll call for help \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-10-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-10-script.md index c8c61c4..5c5f542 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/2/page-10-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-10-script.md @@ -1,25 +1,25 @@ # Page 10 - As Airiona leaves taking a blueprint of the controllers with her it can be seen in the Background on Makkusu's CSD a news report of Airiona breaking into the Hub he was at + As Airiona leaves taking a blueprint of the controllers with her it can be seen in the Background on Max's CSD a news report of Airiona breaking into the Hub he was at ## Panel 1 -Xenos is seen By Makkusu who appears star struck +Xenos is seen By Max who appears star struck -Makkusu: You're Xenos +Max: You're Xenos Xenos: Yep in the flesh/Long time no see Airiona: hey do you mind if I take a copy of the blue prints for your controller -Makkusu still appears star struck as he is looking at xenos while hand type the commands to send the blue prints +Max still appears star struck as he is looking at xenos while hand type the commands to send the blue prints -Makkusu: yeah sure thing I'll email it to you. +Max: yeah sure thing I'll email it to you. Airiona: Thanks -Makkusu: You still remember me!? +Max: You still remember me!? Xenos (smirks): lets go Airiona Airiona: See ya/good luck maybe next time we meet it'll be in cyberspace -As Airiona leaves taking a blueprint of the controllers with her it can be seen in the Background on Makkusu's CSD a news report of Airiona breaking into the Hub he was at +As Airiona leaves taking a blueprint of the controllers with her it can be seen in the Background on Max's CSD a news report of Airiona breaking into the Hub he was at diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-2-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-2-script.md index 3475804..9fdeb7b 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/2/page-2-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-2-script.md @@ -1,9 +1,9 @@ # Page 2 ## Panel 1 (transition from panel 1 page 1) -Airiona is extended her hand giving Makkusu he CSD +Airiona is extended her hand giving Max he CSD Airiona: No don't... There is no time I need you to fix it -Makkusu: But I'm not a doctor +Max: But I'm not a doctor ## Panel 2 A zoom in shot of her damaged CSD diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-3-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-3-script.md index 194c021..c839bcc 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/2/page-3-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-3-script.md @@ -2,25 +2,25 @@ ## Panel 1 The camera is in the house pointed towards the door -Makkusu is shown helping Airiona into his house while the door slides shut behind them +Max is shown helping Airiona into his house while the door slides shut behind them ## Panel 2 -Makkusu sits Airiona on his couch +Max sits Airiona on his couch ## Panel 3 She looks around and sees that his room is decorated with a ton of Cybervtaor Memorabilia Airiona: So I see watch a lot of the CNS League. You're a fan of the ___ BluNet team - Makkusu: well I am more of a fan of what ever team Xenos + Max: well I am more of a fan of what ever team Xenos Airiona: is he the one that inspired you to become a Cybervator ## Panel 4 - Makkusu: wait how did you know + Max: wait how did you know Airiona: oh um well - Makkusu(with joking smile): have you been stalking me? + Max(with joking smile): have you been stalking me? Airiona(she smiles with shifty eyes): Ha ha ha ye--a diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-4-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-4-script.md index 892a55c..f7236c2 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/2/page-4-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-4-script.md @@ -1,3 +1,3 @@ # Page 4 ## Panel 1 -Makkusu is seen fixing her CSD while she is sitting on his couch \ No newline at end of file +Max is seen fixing her CSD while she is sitting on his couch \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-5-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-5-script.md index 30cd8f8..9731bd9 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/2/page-5-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-5-script.md @@ -1,9 +1,9 @@ # Page 5 ## Panel 1 (transition from page 4) -Makkusu is seen fixing her CSD while she is sitting on his couch with her eyes closed head tilted back Makkusu head is turned around looking at her. +Max is seen fixing her CSD while she is sitting on his couch with her eyes closed head tilted back Max head is turned around looking at her. -Makkusu: Are you sleep +Max: Are you sleep Airiona: zzzzzzzzzz. -Makkusu: This my chance she already has a Cyber.Beast I'll just use her CSD to test my Cyber.Beast controller. \ No newline at end of file +Max: This my chance she already has a Cyber.Beast I'll just use her CSD to test my Cyber.Beast controller. \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-6-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-6-script.md index 1423613..8bfe9fe 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/2/page-6-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-6-script.md @@ -2,11 +2,11 @@ ## Panel 1 (transition from page 5) Airiona is standing behind him or shown awake while he tinkers with her CSD -Makkusu: This should only take a second/one more...It works +Max: This should only take a second/one more...It works ## Panel 2 (overlay) Airiona(yells): What are you doing! ## Panel 3 (overlay) -Makkusu has a look of dismay -Makkusu: This my chance she already has a Cyber.Beast I'll just use her CSD to test my Cyber.Beast controller. \ No newline at end of file +Max has a look of dismay +Max: This my chance she already has a Cyber.Beast I'll just use her CSD to test my Cyber.Beast controller. \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-7-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-7-script.md index 8879068..f96ce65 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/2/page-7-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-7-script.md @@ -3,11 +3,11 @@ Airiona: You/We don't have time for that right now. You need to fix my CSD so that I can heal my arm. ## panel 2 - Makkusu(look of relief): Oh! Right. + Max(look of relief): Oh! Right. ## Panel 3 - Makkusu: wait. umm. Actually I'm already finished + Max: wait. umm. Actually I'm already finished ## Panel 4 Airiona inspects her CSD diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-8-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-8-script.md index 6412bc6..d47300f 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/2/page-8-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-8-script.md @@ -13,12 +13,12 @@ Airiona's arm is regeneration is complete and she test and moves her new hand Airiona: You deserve to be a cybervator all citizens do actually - Makkusu: you're starting to sound like one of those... + Max: you're starting to sound like one of those... Airiona: Cyvolter o No I would never. - Makkusu tells her that it is some thing he made a long time ago when had dreams of becoming a cybervator + Max tells her that it is some thing he made a long time ago when had dreams of becoming a cybervator - Makkusu: Not really I just most are combined ideas from real scientist to put ideas together to come up with a new one + Max: Not really I just most are combined ideas from real scientist to put ideas together to come up with a new one Airiona: No unlike most scientist who have become singular focused and don't combined ideas from others you put ideas together to come up with a new one \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/page-9-script.md b/comic/makkusu/2/page-9-script.md index 854e69c..ef7e95f 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/2/page-9-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/page-9-script.md @@ -1,14 +1,14 @@ # Page 9 ## Panel 1 -Makkusu: Nobody is here yet maybe I didn't fix it right. +Max: Nobody is here yet maybe I didn't fix it right. - Makkusu: you wanna watch something while we/you wait + Max: you wanna watch something while we/you wait turns on his CSD's TV TV: this just in the hub in sector 1.27.323 has been attack by the Cyvolters -Makkusu: Oh wow I was just there. And you won't believe this but there was some that looked just like you there +Max: Oh wow I was just there. And you won't believe this but there was some that looked just like you there Airiona: oh no diff --git a/comic/makkusu/2/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/2/readme.md index 6fdf492..6ba6ef3 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/2/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/2/readme.md @@ -1,25 +1,25 @@ # Episode 2 Outline ## Act 1 -Makkusu asks Airiona what happened +Max asks Airiona what happened ## Act 2 -Makkusu helps Airiona into his house to fix her CSD +Max helps Airiona into his house to fix her CSD -- Airiona notices that Makkusu is a big CNS fan by all stuff in his home/room +- Airiona notices that Max is a big CNS fan by all stuff in his home/room -- Makkusu Decides to try to sneak and use Airiona Cyber.Beast/CSD to test his Cyber.Beast Controller with out her permission. Airiona comes up behind him creating the possibility of punishment +- Max Decides to try to sneak and use Airiona Cyber.Beast/CSD to test his Cyber.Beast Controller with out her permission. Airiona comes up behind him creating the possibility of punishment - on the next page Makkusu looks with dismay + on the next page Max looks with dismay - After beginning her arm regeneration process Airiona talks exciting about his creation while they wait -As they wait Makkusu turns on the TV on his CSD while asking if she wants to watch something while waiting +As they wait Max turns on the TV on his CSD while asking if she wants to watch something while waiting ## Act 3 - Airiona has a look of shame as she knows that if puts on the TV he may see a news report of her break in - Just as she is about to decline watching television on Makkusu's CSD Xenos arrives to pick up Airiona + Just as she is about to decline watching television on Max's CSD Xenos arrives to pick up Airiona -- As Airiona leaves taking a blueprint of the controllers with her it can be seen in the Background on Makkusu's CSD a news report of Airiona breaking into the Hub he was at +- As Airiona leaves taking a blueprint of the controllers with her it can be seen in the Background on Max's CSD a news report of Airiona breaking into the Hub he was at diff --git a/comic/makkusu/3/page-1-script.md b/comic/makkusu/3/page-1-script.md index 96e8bca..aaf6a32 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/3/page-1-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/3/page-1-script.md @@ -1,4 +1,4 @@ # Page 1 -Makkusu is worrying about that fact that Airiona is a Cyvolter and that he aided her wondering if he will get in trouble. +Max is worrying about that fact that Airiona is a Cyvolter and that he aided her wondering if he will get in trouble. He tells his self he does not have time to worry about it and that he has work to do/submit. \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/3/page-10-script.md b/comic/makkusu/3/page-10-script.md index faf4859..b38119b 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/3/page-10-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/3/page-10-script.md @@ -1,8 +1,8 @@ # Page 10 -Makkusu: I just got a letter. +Max: I just got a letter. -Makkusu is seen sweating and has a look of anticipation +Max is seen sweating and has a look of anticipation -Makkusu reads the Message out loud. +Max reads the Message out loud. -Makkusu: Dear Makkusu Light, we are would like to inform you that... \ No newline at end of file +Max: Dear Max Light, we are would like to inform you that... \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/3/page-2-script.md b/comic/makkusu/3/page-2-script.md index 9593526..10111d9 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/3/page-2-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/3/page-2-script.md @@ -1,4 +1,4 @@ # Page 2 -Makkusu is writing code for his job +Max is writing code for his job his CSD alerts him that Xenos is about to have a match \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/3/page-3-script.md b/comic/makkusu/3/page-3-script.md index 11f9c81..4cf2da3 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/3/page-3-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/3/page-3-script.md @@ -1,7 +1,7 @@ # Page 3 -Makkusu says that it can wait or he finished just in time +Max says that it can wait or he finished just in time -Makkusu precedes to watch Xenos' match +Max precedes to watch Xenos' match Spike: Welcome Spike.TV I'm you're host Spike along with my color commentator Akia diff --git a/comic/makkusu/3/page-9-script.md b/comic/makkusu/3/page-9-script.md index 236272d..fdf337e 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/3/page-9-script.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/3/page-9-script.md @@ -1,6 +1,6 @@ # Page 9 -Harmony sits down and logs out or time expires, making Xenos and harmony the victors or the match as a draw. Makkusu has a look of astonished disbelief and Spike laughs or vice versa. Akia starts to yell in a fit of rage saying that the match was completely unsatisfying. +Harmony sits down and logs out or time expires, making Xenos and harmony the victors or the match as a draw. Max has a look of astonished disbelief and Spike laughs or vice versa. Akia starts to yell in a fit of rage saying that the match was completely unsatisfying. -Makkusu: What?! +Max: What?! While yelling he is interrupted by a notification on his CSD \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/3/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/3/readme.md index 719e2ea..9dc9a6a 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/3/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/3/readme.md @@ -1,7 +1,7 @@ # Episode 3 Outline ## Act 1 -While working Makkusu is notified that Xenos is about to have a match he stops what he is doing to watch it -Makkusu watches a ranked Cyberspace CNS match with Xenos and Airiona through Spikes commentary feed +While working Max is notified that Xenos is about to have a match he stops what he is doing to watch it +Max watches a ranked Cyberspace CNS match with Xenos and Airiona through Spikes commentary feed ## Act 2 Harmony decides to start acting difficult in the middle of the match. @@ -11,4 +11,4 @@ Harmony decides to start acting difficult in the middle of the match. Xenos and Airiona completes their match -Makkusu gets an invite +Max gets an invite diff --git a/comic/makkusu/4/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/4/readme.md index d8ad944..3680343 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/4/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/4/readme.md @@ -5,9 +5,9 @@ Xenos learns Airiona sent the invite to which Xenos scolds her because he wanted Airiona(Scowling): so you wanted to trick him?! (right after she says this to their surprise they get a message accepting the invite.) -After the match Airiona and Xenos is shown discussing the possibility of Makkusu joining the Cyvolters +After the match Airiona and Xenos is shown discussing the possibility of Max joining the Cyvolters -Xenos Discovers that Airiona already sent Makkusu an invite along with a Cyber.Beast +Xenos Discovers that Airiona already sent Max an invite along with a Cyber.Beast Airiona: I already sent the invite @@ -23,24 +23,24 @@ Airiona gets a message informing her that the invitation has ben accepted Xenos: I guess it worked out in our favor after all -Makkusu is on the phone with Spike +Max is on the phone with Spike The words of the message can be seen on the screen -Dear Makkusu Light, we are would like to inform you that you have been selected to become a Cyvolter. Once you accept this offer you will be granted the right to use the Cyber.Beast sent along with this letter. +Dear Max Light, we are would like to inform you that you have been selected to become a Cyvolter. Once you accept this offer you will be granted the right to use the Cyber.Beast sent along with this letter. -Makkusu: can you believe it I'm actually going to become a Cybervator +Max: can you believe it I'm actually going to become a Cybervator -After hanging up Makkusu pumps his fist in celebratory fashion +After hanging up Max pumps his fist in celebratory fashion -Makkusu: Yeesss!/Oh yeah! +Max: Yeesss!/Oh yeah! ## Act 2 -At first Makkusu tries to fight another cybervator but is quickly turned down by the Cybervator he tries to fight +At first Max tries to fight another cybervator but is quickly turned down by the Cybervator he tries to fight -Makkusu goes into cyberspace on his own to mine Cyber.Beast he gets into trouble and Airiona saves him +Max goes into cyberspace on his own to mine Cyber.Beast he gets into trouble and Airiona saves him ## Act 3 -Makkusu takes down his first Cyber.Beast with the help of Airiona +Max takes down his first Cyber.Beast with the help of Airiona diff --git a/comic/makkusu/5/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/5/readme.md index 1511807..b904dae 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/5/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/5/readme.md @@ -2,20 +2,20 @@ ## Act 1 -They realize that Makkusu did not not know who they are Cyvolters. +They realize that Max did not not know who they are Cyvolters. -Makkusu realize that he had join the Cyvolters +Max realize that he had join the Cyvolters -Makkusu what am I gonna do I can't tell Spike who knows what will happen to me if he tells everyone +Max what am I gonna do I can't tell Spike who knows what will happen to me if he tells everyone ## Act 2 -Airiona gets back in contact with Makkusu and explains what they are about. +Airiona gets back in contact with Max and explains what they are about. Airiona: It’s nice to be around someone smarter than me for a change especially when it is a citizen(minia is smart but does not enough confidence to exercise it) - Makkusu: But aren't you a cybervator + Max: But aren't you a cybervator Airiona: yea but my family isn’t, and your a perfect example that the distribution of money is misplaced citizen do all of the work while cybervator gets majority of revenue from your work even though they are only one percent of the population. But we’re gonna change all of that. ## Act 3 - Makkusu decides to join as he does not want to tell Spike that he quit being a cybervator because he is a cyvolter knowing that he will try to capitalize on this info by broadcasting it. \ No newline at end of file + Max decides to join as he does not want to tell Spike that he quit being a cybervator because he is a cyvolter knowing that he will try to capitalize on this info by broadcasting it. \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/6/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/6/readme.md index b34c18b..8a943fd 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/6/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/6/readme.md @@ -2,27 +2,27 @@ ## Act 1 The Cyvolter has established a new network within the CNS called CyTek/CyNet although they don't have a hub they still distribute cyber.beast to it's members any one that is apart of the company is given a Cyber.Beast. They declare their self a citizens league The public may or might know at this point that is a Cyvolter organization. -Speeding Bullet and Makkusu are the first members. +Speeding Bullet and Max are the first members. Airiona is now going by the name Speeding Bullet to mask her identity Airiona: call me Speeding Bullet -Time has passed after mining cyber.beast Airiona and unranked Makkusu is ready for their first match against Jax and Minia +Time has passed after mining cyber.beast Airiona and unranked Max is ready for their first match against Jax and Minia -Airiona tells Makkusu that Minia and Jax is probably the worst matchup they can get +Airiona tells Max that Minia and Jax is probably the worst matchup they can get -Makkusu: It's been a week/month since joining the Cyvolters. Well actually a lot has changed since. The Cyvolter created what everyone is calling a citizens league. So officially I'm a member of CyNet/CyTek(named after the tech I created). +Max: It's been a week/month since joining the Cyvolters. Well actually a lot has changed since. The Cyvolter created what everyone is calling a citizens league. So officially I'm a member of CyNet/CyTek(named after the tech I created). ## Act 2 Spike Talks about the New "Citizens league" -Makkusu notices that Minia and Jax seems to be fused with 2 complete different Cyber.Beast at the same time and tells Airiona I thought that wasn't possible. +Max notices that Minia and Jax seems to be fused with 2 complete different Cyber.Beast at the same time and tells Airiona I thought that wasn't possible. -Airiona tells Makkusu that they are Xybrids that they have two tails so they can use two cyber.beast at a time. She explain in further detail how it works. +Airiona tells Max that they are Xybrids that they have two tails so they can use two cyber.beast at a time. She explain in further detail how it works. -Makkusu and Jax continues their fight +Max and Jax continues their fight ## Act 3 The commentators point Jax is relentless in his fight with Jax as he is known as the type that never backs down from a fight and does not hold back no mater his opponent. -Makkusu is on the verge of losing his cyber.beast which is pointed out by the commentator \ No newline at end of file +Max is on the verge of losing his cyber.beast which is pointed out by the commentator \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/7/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/7/readme.md index 6297d09..69c1f1d 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/7/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/7/readme.md @@ -1,29 +1,29 @@ # Episode 7 Outline ## Act 1 -Just before Makkusu is defeat Airiona uses her chains to pull him to safety while taking a hit from Minia and yells at him to eject as he only has one cyber.beast she then loses her Cyber.Beast to save Makkusu +Just before Max is defeat Airiona uses her chains to pull him to safety while taking a hit from Minia and yells at him to eject as he only has one cyber.beast she then loses her Cyber.Beast to save Max ## Act 2 1 week later -After losing multiple matches Spike offers to make Makkusu a co-owner or employee since he will be able to pursue is passion in a more realistic manner. Just because it is not what does not matter as long as it still aligns with your vision it is still your passion. He tells him that from what he has seen that he is not cut out for the CNS that not being angle to synergize is to much of a disadvantage. That he has was a hinderance to Airiona as he has never seen her perform so poorly. She gave up her chance at the championships just to help him. +After losing multiple matches Spike offers to make Max a co-owner or employee since he will be able to pursue is passion in a more realistic manner. Just because it is not what does not matter as long as it still aligns with your vision it is still your passion. He tells him that from what he has seen that he is not cut out for the CNS that not being angle to synergize is to much of a disadvantage. That he has was a hinderance to Airiona as he has never seen her perform so poorly. She gave up her chance at the championships just to help him. -Spike tells Makkusu that only the top broadcasting studio get to commentate the Championships each year +Spike tells Max that only the top broadcasting studio get to commentate the Championships each year It would do wonders for our channels ratings to have former Cybervator on our team. It might be the boost we need to get chosen to broadcast the Championship -Makkusu tells him that he is a white/green type and doesn't have the affinity to be a broadcaster? spike responds we could use a white type like you especially one so knowledgeable about... Makkusu cuts him off turning him down thinking he is on the path to becoming a cybervator(Makkusu later accepts the request after the CNS championships but maybe it is to late). He tells him that he wants to succeed on his own merit. +Max tells him that he is a white/green type and doesn't have the affinity to be a broadcaster? spike responds we could use a white type like you especially one so knowledgeable about... Max cuts him off turning him down thinking he is on the path to becoming a cybervator(Max later accepts the request after the CNS championships but maybe it is to late). He tells him that he wants to succeed on his own merit. Spike tells him that he has talents that should not be wasted and passive aggressively puts down cybervators in general pointing out the cons. he also tells him that he should not put the on a pedestal like he is worshiping them. -He tells Makkusu to give it another shot but he shouldn't wait on an uncertainty forever -Airiona contacts Makkusu asking if he is ready for a match against her someone else or to mine cyber.beast. +He tells Max to give it another shot but he shouldn't wait on an uncertainty forever +Airiona contacts Max asking if he is ready for a match against her someone else or to mine cyber.beast. -Makkusu: but the first Championship match is about to start. +Max: but the first Championship match is about to start. Airiona: You have yet to win a single match you dont have that luxury. If you're serious about being a cybervator now you need to take ever opportunity you can get. If you are not all in then I guess you're on your own.You need practice everyone else is watching this is the best time to mine cyber.beast thier will be no one else to compete with. ## Act 3 -Airiona and Makkusu are in cyberspace while the 22?.3 championships is going on +Airiona and Max are in cyberspace while the 22?.3 championships is going on The announcer talks about how team Miniajax has not won a championship match since becoming a Cybervator and that she is a disappointment as a Xybrid Cybervator and will likely lose against Ace and Alex who might be retiring after this fight as he might become the next BluNet chief. diff --git a/comic/makkusu/8/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/8/readme.md index 9561ae9..195975f 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/8/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/8/readme.md @@ -1,25 +1,25 @@ # Episode 8 Outline ## Act 1 -While Makkusu and Airiona is in cyberspace +While Max and Airiona is in cyberspace -Makkusu: what was that +Max: what was that Airiona: are you watching the Championships -Makkusu: no of course not +Max: no of course not *he hears another sound maybe a yell* -Makkusu: what the heck sorry have to go +Max: what the heck sorry have to go -Airiona: you are. You're only cheating your self Makkusu! if you leave now... +Airiona: you are. You're only cheating your self Max! if you leave now... -Makkusu goes outside and finds a crater with an injured Minia +Max goes outside and finds a crater with an injured Minia -Makkusu: hey are you ok +Max: hey are you ok ## Act 2 -Makkusu: oh no she needs help she'll be dead in a matter of minutes if she cant regenerate +Max: oh no she needs help she'll be dead in a matter of minutes if she cant regenerate ### Panel @@ -27,49 +27,49 @@ Airiona inspects her CSD Airiona: Already/Really. It usually takes hours to fix these things -Makkusu: They won't be able to fix it fast enough +Max: They won't be able to fix it fast enough Minia is sleep and bandaged with nothing on but her sleeves and pants over her black tights which is slightly torn -Makkusu is repairing her CSD when she wakes up +Max is repairing her CSD when she wakes up Minia:(she feels her back and head) Where am I Where, Where is my Cyber.Beast -Makkusu: I found you outside of my house and your Cyber.Beast was broken so I'm fixing it +Max: I found you outside of my house and your Cyber.Beast was broken so I'm fixing it -Makkusu: So your My Nia? +Max: So your My Nia? Minia:(smiling) it’s Minia -Makkusu: Myy Nia +Max: Myy Nia Minia:(scowling with head tilted to the right)Nooo, Mih nee ah. -Makkusu: nope I found you so know your My Nia +Max: nope I found you so know your My Nia Minia:(she laughs/giggles loudly and rolls eyes with head up transitioning from scowling) ok fine -Torrey Makkusu's CSD makes witty comment about him bring Minia in. +Torrey Max's CSD makes witty comment about him bring Minia in. Torrey: You know you're the second girl he has brought this month Minia: Really?... wait a minute did it just talk on it's own. CSD/Cyber.Beast normally don't talk without prompt, let alone hold a conversation. -Makkusu: I customized Her name is Torrey +Max: I customized Her name is Torrey -Makkusu asks why Minia's her is red despite her being a green and blue type cybervator +Max asks why Minia's her is red despite her being a green and blue type cybervator -Makkusu: You are a blue and green cybervator but your hair is red how is that possible +Max: You are a blue and green cybervator but your hair is red how is that possible Minia: oh this that well I was a born a green and blue type but when I got older they tried to edit my green genes(CRISPR) to be red mostly so that I could be a a red blue Xybrid and maybe even red green and blue. unfortunately it didn't work out and instead I just ended up with the red hair that would turn Green when ever I go into BurstDrive -Makkusu: Why not make you red and blue from beginning +Max: Why not make you red and blue from beginning Minia: They tried that with harmony she became Insane from the emotional instability the red and green genes created they figured the added red genes on top of the green types ability to tame Cyber.Beast would prevent me from from being berserk I end up quite the opposite Minia: I Know you probably think it's weird -Makkusu: No I actually thought it was pretty cool. +Max: No I actually thought it was pretty cool. Minia asks about his talking Cyber.Beast @@ -80,13 +80,13 @@ Jax(hugging Minia and maybe crying): I thought you were dead Minia/Jax insist that he does not tell anyone because if word gets out she will be in trouble -Makkusu has a look of surprise that Jax is not as tuff as he thought +Max has a look of surprise that Jax is not as tuff as he thought -Makkusu is uncomfortable by the sight of Jax crying. He intentionally disrupts the mood. +Max is uncomfortable by the sight of Jax crying. He intentionally disrupts the mood. -Makkusu: Hey Jax +Max: Hey Jax -Makkusu tells Jax that he will get get stronger and next time they meet rather in cyberspace or the championships to not expect the same result as last time +Max tells Jax that he will get get stronger and next time they meet rather in cyberspace or the championships to not expect the same result as last time Jax holds back wipes his tears. scowls with confusion and laughs. diff --git a/comic/makkusu/9/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/9/readme.md index 0c3db6e..63a8dfd 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/9/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/9/readme.md @@ -1,7 +1,7 @@ # Episode 9 Outline ## Act 1 -Makkusu has another match in cyberspace +Max has another match in cyberspace ## Act 2 -Makkusu wins his first match +Max wins his first match ## Act 3 -Makkusu gives upwards of 70% his earnings for UBI which Airiona/Akia/Spike is confused by \ No newline at end of file +Max gives upwards of 70% his earnings for UBI which Airiona/Akia/Spike is confused by \ No newline at end of file diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index f9840dc..d2526c8 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -1,4 +1,4 @@ -# Cyber.Beast(Makkusu) outline +# Cyber.Beast(Max) outline ## Theme **The role sports play in society** *subtheme: competition vs cooperation* @@ -6,12 +6,12 @@ ## Brainstorm - Episodes: 22-27 - Roles - - Broadcaster/Commentator: Spike, Makkusu? - - Fan: Makkusu + - Broadcaster/Commentator: Spike, Max? + - Fan: Max - Cybervator: Minia, Jax, Airiona, Xenos, Ace, Harmony - Chief: Kyshumu, Alex - - Minia learns that her mother is Torrey around the same time Makkusu tells her his mother is torrey or learns that his mother is torrey or vice versa + - Minia learns that her mother is Torrey around the same time Max tells her his mother is torrey or learns that his mother is torrey or vice versa - Speeding Bullet is discovered to be Airiona during the tournament a fight ensues between Airiona and Kyshumu. Airiona is defeated Kyshumu. @@ -52,11 +52,11 @@ - Airiona is upset by the way the other cyvolter are acting she realizes that citizens can be just as bad as cybervator - This changes Airiona strengthens belief that the majority of of Cybervators are stupid instead all humans are. Xenos tells her that it actually mob mentality and selfish preservation that cause people to act this way. people don't want to be alone so they follow what they may think is the masses no matter how wrong it maybe to protect their self -- Makkusu's altruism becomes contagious and eventually becomes the basis for the Cyvolters identity at this point Makkusu either accepts or realize that he is a Cyvolter or she is shown helping another cyvolter +- Max's altruism becomes contagious and eventually becomes the basis for the Cyvolters identity at this point Max either accepts or realize that he is a Cyvolter or she is shown helping another cyvolter - Max or someone that max helps someone or max saying its is solely for the purpose making him a stronger opponent strong enough to be a challenge for him in the future - - Someone joins forces with Makkusu because they want the chance to fight someone even stronger than that protagonist in hopes of climbing up in ranking + - Someone joins forces with Max because they want the chance to fight someone even stronger than that protagonist in hopes of climbing up in ranking @@ -64,73 +64,73 @@ ## Act 1 ### 1. Ordinary World -Episodes: [1](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-1) -- Makkusu watches Championships +Episodes: [1](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Max)/comic/Max/episode-1) +- Max watches Championships - **Xenos loses the Championships** **Shown as an early flash back:** - After Xenos loses and Makkusu who is fan of him runs up to him(maybe a younger Makkusu) and says I don't like you any more. + After Xenos loses and Max who is fan of him runs up to him(maybe a younger Max) and says I don't like you any more. ### 2. Call To Adventure -Episodes: [2](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-2), [3](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-3) - - Makkusu Applies to be a Cybervator - - Makkusu heads back home - - Airiona is seen escaping the hub Makkusu was at - - When Makkusu arrives home an injured Airiona is found at the foot of his door - -- The reader sees the inside of Makkusu’s room which has posters and cybervator Fandom items everywhere -- Makkusu uses this opportunity to test his Cyber.Beast controller using Airiona's Cyber.Beast +Episodes: [2](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Max)/comic/Max/episode-2), [3](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Max)/comic/Max/episode-3) + - Max Applies to be a Cybervator + - Max heads back home + - Airiona is seen escaping the hub Max was at + - When Max arrives home an injured Airiona is found at the foot of his door + +- The reader sees the inside of Max’s room which has posters and cybervator Fandom items everywhere +- Max uses this opportunity to test his Cyber.Beast controller using Airiona's Cyber.Beast - S/He talks about how citizens can’t become cybervators because they don't a tail which means they can synergize. With the device he made anyone will be able to use a Cyber.Beast in cyberspace even though they still won’t be able to become cybervators since they still won’t be able to go into BurstDrive -- Makkusu tends to the injured Airiona fixing her CSD which allows her to heal. she encourages him to try again and that she will give word to her superiors to give him a chance and that they will send him a Cyber.Beast so that he can test his device. +- Max tends to the injured Airiona fixing her CSD which allows her to heal. she encourages him to try again and that she will give word to her superiors to give him a chance and that they will send him a Cyber.Beast so that he can test his device. ### 3. Refusal Of The Call -Episodes: [4](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Makkusu)/comic/makkusu/episode-4) +Episodes: [4](https://github.com/Sheldon-Lloyd/Cyber.Beast/tree/Cyber.Beast(Max)/comic/Max/episode-4) -- Makkusu is given a Cyber.Beast and invited to be a cybervator - - Makkusu takes the cyber.beast given to him by Xenos/Airiona inviting him to join the Cyvolters which he in excitement misread as cybervators +- Max is given a Cyber.Beast and invited to be a cybervator + - Max takes the cyber.beast given to him by Xenos/Airiona inviting him to join the Cyvolters which he in excitement misread as cybervators - Airiona sends the invite to which Xenos scolds her because he wanted to trick him into joining. As he know he would never join knowing that it is the Cyvolters. - The first person he tells is Spike -- Makkusu teams up with Airiona in cyberspace. - - When Makkusu logs into cyberspace it is recommended that he choose an alias in which he chooses Max - - Makkusu is about to mine cyber.beast or fight another cybervator alone He spots a girl that waves at him but he doesn't know who she is so he he casually ignores her +- Max teams up with Airiona in cyberspace. + - When Max logs into cyberspace it is recommended that he choose an alias in which he chooses Max + - Max is about to mine cyber.beast or fight another cybervator alone He spots a girl that waves at him but he doesn't know who she is so he he casually ignores her Later he gets into some trouble and is saved by her. As she pick him up and carries him out of harm's way Girl: She says hi again - Makkusu: wait aren't you(showing image of her waving) + Max: wait aren't you(showing image of her waving) Girl: Yep I knew you were a cyvolter the moment I saw you. It would be a disgrace if I didn't -- my cyber.beast is a bear/shark after all. Us cyvolter have to stick together ya know - Makkusu: wait so you know who each AND EVERY cyvolter is + Max: wait so you know who each AND EVERY cyvolter is Girl: Don’t woorry I won't tell ### 4. Meeting The Mentor Episodes: 5 -Airiona gets back in contact with Makkusu and explains what they are about. Makkusu decides to join as he does not want to tell Spike the truth knowing that he will try to capitalize on this info by broadcasting it. +Airiona gets back in contact with Max and explains what they are about. Max decides to join as he does not want to tell Spike the truth knowing that he will try to capitalize on this info by broadcasting it. ## Act 2 ### 5. Crossing The Threshold Episodes: 6, 7 -- Makkusu and maybe Airiona lose their first ranked/unranked fight and prepare for a second. They lose to Jax who does not let up and Jax nearly takes his only cyber.beast. Makkusu ejects just in time An announcer is either surprised that he even has a fan and laughs at the fact the he only has one fan probably because ever saw his first fight in which he did terrible. Spike is that only fan +- Max and maybe Airiona lose their first ranked/unranked fight and prepare for a second. They lose to Jax who does not let up and Jax nearly takes his only cyber.beast. Max ejects just in time An announcer is either surprised that he even has a fan and laughs at the fact the he only has one fan probably because ever saw his first fight in which he did terrible. Spike is that only fan - Spike wanted him to join his company which is secretly helping the Cyvolter organization. -- Makkusu takes the criticisms of Spike and improves the controller he made +- Max takes the criticisms of Spike and improves the controller he made -- Makkusu develops Airiona's character as he gets her to not only help other citizens in cyberspace but Cybervators as well. +- Max develops Airiona's character as he gets her to not only help other citizens in cyberspace but Cybervators as well. They help them mostly by teaming up with ReNet, BluNet, and Cyvolter Cybervators that are being out numbered -- Makkusu trained his body +- Max trained his body Expecting to be in the tournament he trained his body and ignores his doubters @@ -143,46 +143,46 @@ Episodes: 6, 7 ### 6. Tests, Allies, Enemies Episodes: 7, 8, 9, 10, 11, 12 -- Makkusu has customized his Cyber.Beast and CSD to have a talking Ai which he calls Torrey +- Max has customized his Cyber.Beast and CSD to have a talking Ai which he calls Torrey -- Mini falls in the backyard of Makkusu +- Mini falls in the backyard of Max - Makkusu goes to call for help but remembers that Airiona says that it takes hours to fix CSDs. And that if he does not fix it soon she might never recover or worse dies. + Max goes to call for help but remembers that Airiona says that it takes hours to fix CSDs. And that if he does not fix it soon she might never recover or worse dies. After Minia wakes up she ask why he did not call for help. He says that once help arrived that there is no way they will let him repair it. Tells him that being a Xybrid she has two CSDs -- Makkusu tells a worried Spike what happen +- Max tells a worried Spike what happen - it is placed on the news Minia teleports to Makkusu enraged that he told. He is seen taking a shower and is wearing his headband/glasses Minia asks him why he wears even while in the shower. He tells her that it is a keepsake from his parents that he doesn't want to lose. He tells her their names where Torrey and Mack. + it is placed on the news Minia teleports to Max enraged that he told. He is seen taking a shower and is wearing his headband/glasses Minia asks him why he wears even while in the shower. He tells her that it is a keepsake from his parents that he doesn't want to lose. He tells her their names where Torrey and Mack. - The Cyvolters are teased as a mysterious group of Cybervators that has been capturing/stealing the satellites the house Cyber.Beast. It is revealed to be something that has been going on for a while now. It turns out that the reason the satellite Minia was fighting on malfunctioned causing her to fall was because the Cyvolters had tampered with it it. This is something that may have been known by the NRA/CyberOps for a while but hidden from the public as they did not know which Satellite was tampered with or what had been done. -- Makkusu helps someone in cyberspace +- Max helps someone in cyberspace he has develop a reputation for being an altruistic cybervator not just help others but in terms of giving money unlike other cybervators he gives 70% or more of his earnings to fans -- Makkusu looks ahead to see who his team may be if he earns a spot +- Max looks ahead to see who his team may be if he earns a spot -- Makkusu loses to Jax +- Max loses to Jax This team consists of Minia and Jax -- Makkusu is seen outside of cyberspace +- Max is seen outside of cyberspace - Makkusu has not been seen out side of cyberspace for a while but when we see him he now has hair on his head and no longer has a fat belly. + Max has not been seen out side of cyberspace for a while but when we see him he now has hair on his head and no longer has a fat belly. -- Now having a Cyber.Beast Makkusu has customized his CSD to have a hologram of a bird(owl?) +- Now having a Cyber.Beast Max has customized his CSD to have a hologram of a bird(owl?) -- Makkusu learns that Airiona is a cyvolter and he may have been helped them +- Max learns that Airiona is a cyvolter and he may have been helped them ### 7. Approach To The Inmost Cave Episodes: 13, 14, 15 -- More citizens are now competing in the CNS league thanks to the Cyvolters distributing the tech that Makkusu made +- More citizens are now competing in the CNS league thanks to the Cyvolters distributing the tech that Max made -- Makkusu finds old cyber.tech +- Max finds old cyber.tech - Makkusu realizes that even if he makes it into the tournament he won't be of much help since he can't go into a BurstDrive mode. + Max realizes that even if he makes it into the tournament he won't be of much help since he can't go into a BurstDrive mode. He finds a hole in the ground left by Minia in it is old cyber.tech this is just what he needs to compete on even grounds (exposition opportunity): @@ -192,51 +192,51 @@ Episodes: 13, 14, 15 - History is written by the losers as they write the history they are able to shape the perceived realty of their victors the future generation that sees this history will judge their current leaders based on the past villain like winners and the reasons the current system is place by this and will rise and over throw them or even an outside party may take them down based on this history much like the Mongols (http://scholars-stage.blogspot.com/2016/11/history-is-written-by-losers.html) -- Minia helps Makkusu who is bullied - Makkusu is watching a CNS broadcast while at the gym and is wearing headphones maybe visor headphones +- Minia helps Max who is bullied + Max is watching a CNS broadcast while at the gym and is wearing headphones maybe visor headphones - Makkusu uses his UBI credit to become the sponsor of the cheapest cybervator he could find. Akia/Spike tells him he spent more money than he can make in a year as he buys majority of her stock shares in credit. He does not know how much money he has made as a cybervator an maybe doesn't even know he is a cybervator. + Max uses his UBI credit to become the sponsor of the cheapest cybervator he could find. Akia/Spike tells him he spent more money than he can make in a year as he buys majority of her stock shares in credit. He does not know how much money he has made as a cybervator an maybe doesn't even know he is a cybervator. - Makkusu is getting bullied first they verbally abuse him. Akia tells haha look at Makkusu trying to get buff you think that just because you are getting in shape you will become a cybervator. lets see what you got. They then begin pushing him at this point the alert system on his CSD turns yellow or orange at which point the CSD says the threat level and ask Makkusu if he would like assistance he says no. one of the bullies Akia his it turned orange/yellow the leader then says don't worry the Cybervators will only come if it turns red or Makkusu asks for help which he says would never happen. + Max is getting bullied first they verbally abuse him. Akia tells haha look at Max trying to get buff you think that just because you are getting in shape you will become a cybervator. lets see what you got. They then begin pushing him at this point the alert system on his CSD turns yellow or orange at which point the CSD says the threat level and ask Max if he would like assistance he says no. one of the bullies Akia his it turned orange/yellow the leader then says don't worry the Cybervators will only come if it turns red or Max asks for help which he says would never happen. - It appears like he might stand up for his self but he doesn't. Just as Makkusu is pushed or about to be pushed to the ground Minia appears the bullies run away. After they run away Makkusu ask what are you doing here and she's say I'm your Nia remember. Minia asks Makkusu if he is alright to which he replies that he is fine and that they are just bullies and tells her thanks but that he didn't need her help and that it never reached level red and she says she just happened to notice it rising and decided to intervene on her own “and besides I was bored anyway” + It appears like he might stand up for his self but he doesn't. Just as Max is pushed or about to be pushed to the ground Minia appears the bullies run away. After they run away Max ask what are you doing here and she's say I'm your Nia remember. Minia asks Max if he is alright to which he replies that he is fine and that they are just bullies and tells her thanks but that he didn't need her help and that it never reached level red and she says she just happened to notice it rising and decided to intervene on her own “and besides I was bored anyway” -- Makkusu might not have enough points +- Max might not have enough points - Someone he helped before allows him to compete The person either resigns or give him the fight that he needs to be ranked high enough to joins as they don't need them (thunora?) -- Makkusu is laughed at by a broadcaster maybe Akia for the fact that he may have managed to become a highly ranked Cybervator but does not have an Tail let alone his missing arm and leg(s) so even if he makes it to the championship how does he expect to doing anything with out being able to go into burst drive mode. +- Max is laughed at by a broadcaster maybe Akia for the fact that he may have managed to become a highly ranked Cybervator but does not have an Tail let alone his missing arm and leg(s) so even if he makes it to the championship how does he expect to doing anything with out being able to go into burst drive mode. -- Makkusu loses a match and with it his cyber.beast which pretty much eliminates any chances of making it into the championships +- Max loses a match and with it his cyber.beast which pretty much eliminates any chances of making it into the championships - Alex becomes chief -- Makkusu works on his new tech +- Max works on his new tech ### 8. Ordeal Episodes: 16 -- Makkusu is given/finds a new cyber.beast or the one he beats gives him his Cyber.Beast back as they know how much he helped others and wants to return the favor. +- Max is given/finds a new cyber.beast or the one he beats gives him his Cyber.Beast back as they know how much he helped others and wants to return the favor. The only problem is that he is almost out of time and no one would consider risking a match this late in the running. And he needs to face a top 3/5 cybervator to have any hope Jax however gives him that match after Minia pleads him citing him saving her. He agrees but tells her but dont expect me to let him win. She says she would never ask that of him. - Jax and Makkusu fights which is watch by none/many as no one expect a match at this time. + Jax and Max fights which is watch by none/many as no one expect a match at this time. - Makkusu fairs well but time is running out. At this point Jax forfeits knowing that he has a huge lead as the number one ranked cybervator. + Max fairs well but time is running out. At this point Jax forfeits knowing that he has a huge lead as the number one ranked cybervator. Jax: Don't get any ideas I'm just paying back the favor. - *Flash back of Jax shown hugging Minia after Makkusu saved her* + *Flash back of Jax shown hugging Minia after Max saved her* - Minia is surprised that he knew there was not much time left as he normal has a bad concept of time. He tells her Makkusu but he never said anything out loud + Minia is surprised that he knew there was not much time left as he normal has a bad concept of time. He tells her Max but he never said anything out loud -- Someone asks if he is Upset that he was handed the spot rather than earning it on the team Makkusu tell Alex/Xenos/Minia/Jax/Akia/Airiona that it does matter that it is just a game. They reply telling him that is his problem/Thats why I can stand you/Its not just a game +- Someone asks if he is Upset that he was handed the spot rather than earning it on the team Max tell Alex/Xenos/Minia/Jax/Akia/Airiona that it does matter that it is just a game. They reply telling him that is his problem/Thats why I can stand you/Its not just a game - Makkusu is told that it is not just a game but that it the reason that we have no more wars and maintain peace among citizens as it gives people a place to belong satisfying the human desire for tribalism + Max is told that it is not just a game but that it the reason that we have no more wars and maintain peace among citizens as it gives people a place to belong satisfying the human desire for tribalism - The NRA are against allowing citizens to participate in the CNS using unsanctioned Cyber.Beast distributed by the Cyvolters. They hold a meeting to discuss this with the CNS. The CNS tells them that is not their place to be decide rather someone should legally be allowed to compete. @@ -256,21 +256,21 @@ Episodes: 17 - Alex has been newly elected as the Chief of BluNet -- Alex tells the NRA that both Citizens and Cybervators has taken a liking to Makkusu and that their no telling how they might respond if they don't let him compete. They discuss the possibility of angering the citizens if they don't let him compete citing the decrease in ReNet stock as an example. +- Alex tells the NRA that both Citizens and Cybervators has taken a liking to Max and that their no telling how they might respond if they don't let him compete. They discuss the possibility of angering the citizens if they don't let him compete citing the decrease in ReNet stock as an example. -- Alex allows Makkusu to compete with BluNet or offers up Kassiea/Xenos' hub allowing Makkusu to compete +- Alex allows Max to compete with BluNet or offers up Kassiea/Xenos' hub allowing Max to compete - Minia is traded to BluNet by Leona which is all over the news. - Minia would've been starting over Leona had she not been traded. - - Kyshumu is enraged as this is right before the hub she is traded to becomes a Cyvolter hub. He then realizes this is the perfect opportunity to ensure Makkusu loses -- he tells her to throw the match. This leaves Minia conflicted because she does not want to see Makkusu fail. + - Kyshumu is enraged as this is right before the hub she is traded to becomes a Cyvolter hub. He then realizes this is the perfect opportunity to ensure Max loses -- he tells her to throw the match. This leaves Minia conflicted because she does not want to see Max fail. -- Makkusu uses his tech to compete in the CNS championships +- Max uses his tech to compete in the CNS championships Airiona: Wow I thought what you made before was incredible how did you create this stuff - Makkusu: I didn't make it. Its I made from tech that I found under my house(the hole Minia/Airiona created). A lot of it was unfinished All I did was make a few modifications + Max: I didn't make it. Its I made from tech that I found under my house(the hole Minia/Airiona created). A lot of it was unfinished All I did was make a few modifications - Makkusu: I call it an Elimiter. Normally a cyber.beast would be able to synergize with a cybervator thanks to thier tail. Since everybody including cybervators evolved from plants I used a plant to act as the cyber.beast[1](https://www.engadget.com/2018/12/05/mit-researchers-create-a-robot-houseplant-that-moves-on-its-own/),[2]( https://www.theverge.com/2018/7/12/17563688/robot-plant-hybrid-hexa-vincross-succulent ). + Max: I call it an Elimiter. Normally a cyber.beast would be able to synergize with a cybervator thanks to thier tail. Since everybody including cybervators evolved from plants I used a plant to act as the cyber.beast[1](https://www.engadget.com/2018/12/05/mit-researchers-create-a-robot-houseplant-that-moves-on-its-own/),[2]( https://www.theverge.com/2018/7/12/17563688/robot-plant-hybrid-hexa-vincross-succulent ). :so you are basically sending commands to a berserk cyber.beast like a green/black cybervator. So it basically makes you like a Xybrid. other.person: what how. @@ -283,15 +283,15 @@ Episodes: 17 Airiona: This must be the(tech lost to time) lost technology from thousands of years ago Xenos was telling. Haha who Cybervators really are a ~~cancer~~(find new word) to the world -- Makkusu's team is formed +- Max's team is formed | Position | First | Second | Third | Fourth | |----------|---------|--------------|-------|--------| | Red | Harmony | Aarock | | | - | Green | Airiona | Makkusu | | | + | Green | Airiona | Max | | | | Blue | Minia | Xenos | | | | Black | Knilla | Avis | | | - | White | Ace | Avis/Makkusu | | | + | White | Ace | Avis/Max | | | - Jax's team @@ -303,32 +303,32 @@ Episodes: 17 | Black | Jax | | | | | White | Thunora | | | | -- Harmony attacks Makkusu who tries to introduce his self a nearly kills him but she stops which surprises Ace +- Harmony attacks Max who tries to introduce his self a nearly kills him but she stops which surprises Ace When Airiona and Minia take off their cloaks leaving their one piece backless outfit their scar can be compared by the reader Airiona has had multiple wounds to her body most gained through her training to become a Cybervator fighting until all of her energy has been depleted in order to climb the ranks as quickly as possible, unlike the pristine MiNia who had everything handed to her who will quit at the halfway mark of her energy level. -After seeing both seeing the backs of both Airiona and Minia Makkusu looks confused Xenos sees him looking maybe makes a quip then proceeds to explain the reason that Aironia has so many scars compared to Everyone else and why Minia has none +After seeing both seeing the backs of both Airiona and Minia Max looks confused Xenos sees him looking maybe makes a quip then proceeds to explain the reason that Aironia has so many scars compared to Everyone else and why Minia has none Airiona's flashback shows parents yell at the kids encouraging to beat up the other kids “Get him, come on!" ### 10. The Road Back Episodes: 18, 19 -- Makkusu is fighting on Akia's favorite Cybervators team +- Max is fighting on Akia's favorite Cybervators team - Makkusu runs into Akia before his championship match. + Max runs into Akia before his championship match. - Akia: Hey Makkusu(She looks as if she will punch/hit him) + Akia: Hey Max(She looks as if she will punch/hit him) AKia(She has her hand/fist on his shoulder): Xenos is my favorite Cybervator/Every one is count on you so don't lose/Mess up. -- An ultimatum/wager is purposed for Makkusu +- An ultimatum/wager is purposed for Max - With Makkusu joining ReNet Kyshumu tells the CNS/NRA that no Citizen should be allowed to compete in the CNS. + With Max joining ReNet Kyshumu tells the CNS/NRA that no Citizen should be allowed to compete in the CNS. - The CNS' Yaharia makes a ultimatum suggesting that a citizen is unlikely to win the championships--If Makkusu loses no Citizen will be allowed to compete in the CNS again. + The CNS' Yaharia makes a ultimatum suggesting that a citizen is unlikely to win the championships--If Max loses no Citizen will be allowed to compete in the CNS again. Kyshumu(angry):Fine! @@ -359,17 +359,17 @@ Episodes: 18, 19 - Xenos gets injured and gets a limb or two cut off and Avis is missing - During the match it appears that Minia is doing just what her father wanted(throwing the match) as she performs poorly during her match. It turns out that this is not the case. She has been trying her best but does she not want to hurt her opponent hampering her abilities. - - Airiona tells Makkusu that Minia is sabotaging them. Makkusu(he was voted team captain despite not starting) then suggests that Minia be removed from her Blue position. Airiona is happy thinking Minia is being bench--however Makkusu bench's Airiona instead who is visibly upset. Someone asks then who will take the Blue/White position (Harmony(can't)/Xenos(injured)/Avis (missing)). + - Airiona tells Max that Minia is sabotaging them. Max(he was voted team captain despite not starting) then suggests that Minia be removed from her Blue position. Airiona is happy thinking Minia is being bench--however Max bench's Airiona instead who is visibly upset. Someone asks then who will take the Blue/White position (Harmony(can't)/Xenos(injured)/Avis (missing)). - Makkusu: well then I guess Air... + Max: well then I guess Air... - Xenos: You should Makkusu. It will be the perfect chance to show everyone what you're capable of. + Xenos: You should Max. It will be the perfect chance to show everyone what you're capable of. Airiona: are you crazy he doesn't have a BurstDrive he'll get his self killed - Makkusu: Actually! He might be a genius. You see Jax is a lot like Minia and the last person on that team that would kill anyone. There is no telling how much he will hold back against a Citizen like me. But what I do know is that his biggest weakness will become our strength. + Max: Actually! He might be a genius. You see Jax is a lot like Minia and the last person on that team that would kill anyone. There is no telling how much he will hold back against a Citizen like me. But what I do know is that his biggest weakness will become our strength. - - After Makkusu is substituted in + - After Max is substituted in Tomasina:We have huge lead there is now way they will make a comeback. So don’t go all out although he thinks he’s a Cybervator he’s still a citizen @@ -378,16 +378,16 @@ Episodes: 18, 19 - They begin to make/orchestrate a historic comeback but their efforts fall short as the deficit Minia creating was to great to overcome - - Yaharia takes notice of Makkusu as she realizes that he is using ancient tech that was locked up and hidden centuries ago + - Yaharia takes notice of Max as she realizes that he is using ancient tech that was locked up and hidden centuries ago ## Act 3 ### 11. Resurrection Episodes: 20, 21 -- Makkusu fights Jax +- Max fights Jax - Max suggests a line up change. When Minia subs for Xenos max is able to read her mind. He learns that the reason she doesn't do well as a blue style fighter is not lack of skill and imagination but rather a matter of mind set. - To keep up with traditions started by the war blue Cybervators fight along with white cybervator on offense and Red along with black as this was the best way at the time to get these 4 nations to work together on the same team. This eventually becomes an unwritten rule that is mistaken as a rule. Makkusu, however, knows this and employs Knilla to be his support fighter rather than Ace this way they can do the move ace and knilla is known for. When max tells them his plan the reject it at first citing the unwritten rule. Max convince them otherwise. Ace tries to convince knilla to do it while max takes his clothes off to fight. She reiterated that she will only let ma... Ace ride her. Ace says forget it I will be your support we will just have come up with another plan. Max tells him that it is too late he has already submitted the lineup for the round. Max particularly needs her to be his shield since he does not have one + To keep up with traditions started by the war blue Cybervators fight along with white cybervator on offense and Red along with black as this was the best way at the time to get these 4 nations to work together on the same team. This eventually becomes an unwritten rule that is mistaken as a rule. Max, however, knows this and employs Knilla to be his support fighter rather than Ace this way they can do the move ace and knilla is known for. When max tells them his plan the reject it at first citing the unwritten rule. Max convince them otherwise. Ace tries to convince knilla to do it while max takes his clothes off to fight. She reiterated that she will only let ma... Ace ride her. Ace says forget it I will be your support we will just have come up with another plan. Max tells him that it is too late he has already submitted the lineup for the round. Max particularly needs her to be his shield since he does not have one Minia thinks to much particularly the well being of her opponent and is too passive when fighting Mina is changed from the blue to the green position @@ -395,22 +395,22 @@ Episodes: 20, 21 Harmony goes from red to blue after being calmed or Xenos take Blue ### 12. Return With The Elixir Episodes: 22 -running circles around Makkusu does a spend being slower this gives him more mobility allowing ace to shot and score. he tries a second time thinking he has the upper hand but Jax is ready for it +running circles around Max does a spend being slower this gives him more mobility allowing ace to shot and score. he tries a second time thinking he has the upper hand but Jax is ready for it -Makkusu acts as if he will slide under Jax who punches the ground breaking it sending debris upwards which makkusu rides the debris allowing him to dos an aerial attack. +Max acts as if he will slide under Jax who punches the ground breaking it sending debris upwards which Max rides the debris allowing him to dos an aerial attack. -- Knilla allow Makkusu to ride after Ace cites what she said earlier - Knilla start running and says Makkusu(who turns around)! jump on. +- Knilla allow Max to ride after Ace cites what she said earlier + Knilla start running and says Max(who turns around)! jump on. - Makkusu takes he lance as she runs through Jax Makkusu opens the barrier and they are able to collect points + Max takes he lance as she runs through Jax Max opens the barrier and they are able to collect points - Makkusu ride Knilla again this time he jumps with her lance off hoping the momentum from Jax giving chase would create an opening. However he is shot at instead. The cybervator shots only at his feet but this enough to send a citizen like him flying backwards. + Max ride Knilla again this time he jumps with her lance off hoping the momentum from Jax giving chase would create an opening. However he is shot at instead. The cybervator shots only at his feet but this enough to send a citizen like him flying backwards. - Makkusu starts to question why everyone is afraid to hit him. he then questions why he himself is upset by this as it was the plan after all. He states he can once again take advantage of the debris created by the blast. + Max starts to question why everyone is afraid to hit him. he then questions why he himself is upset by this as it was the plan after all. He states he can once again take advantage of the debris created by the blast. using the cover from the debris he closes while typing telling Ace/Minia when and where to fire/attack at in creating an opening allowing Minia/Ace to get points -- Makkusu uses his trump card utilizing the energy bean he ate earlier this allows him to partially synergize with the cost of depleting all of his energy with the risk of killing him. +- Max uses his trump card utilizing the energy bean he ate earlier this allows him to partially synergize with the cost of depleting all of his energy with the risk of killing him. @@ -419,22 +419,22 @@ Makkusu acts as if he will slide under Jax who punches the ground breaking it se - In the final seconds of the match amidst a comeback - Makkusu: + Max: - Makkusu: Jax! Don’t hold back/Give it all you got/Stop holding back + Max: Jax! Don’t hold back/Give it all you got/Stop holding back - Jax: < he's right if I lose now Makkusu won't be the only citizen who’s life will be at risk > + Jax: < he's right if I lose now Max won't be the only citizen who’s life will be at risk > - Makkusu: why did I say that I have to win + Max: why did I say that I have to win so that everyone will have the right compete I am fighting so that all citizens will have the right to compete - Makkusu: is it from the Cyber.Beast. No that's not it this feeling--this is what it means to truly compete/be a cybervator + Max: is it from the Cyber.Beast. No that's not it this feeling--this is what it means to truly compete/be a cybervator -- Makkusu wins/loses(do to the unforeseen random nature of Jax) championship +- Max wins/loses(do to the unforeseen random nature of Jax) championship - If Makkusu wins it is because Tomasina lets him or is distracted by the fact that he looks/feels familiar + If Max wins it is because Tomasina lets him or is distracted by the fact that he looks/feels familiar - Xenos retires from the CNS league From 7f18a0239fad6c01cb293c4a627a5079548de138 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Fri, 15 Mar 2019 21:04:19 -0400 Subject: [PATCH 117/124] Let Spike talk about the details of CyNet/Cytek instead of Max This prevents Max from having to do a monologue --- comic/makkusu/6/readme.md | 7 ++++--- 1 file changed, 4 insertions(+), 3 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/6/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/6/readme.md index 8a943fd..97c39e2 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/6/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/6/readme.md @@ -12,11 +12,12 @@ Time has passed after mining cyber.beast Airiona and unranked Max is ready for t Airiona tells Max that Minia and Jax is probably the worst matchup they can get -Max: It's been a week/month since joining the Cyvolters. Well actually a lot has changed since. The Cyvolter created what everyone is calling a citizens league. So officially I'm a member of CyNet/CyTek(named after the tech I created). - ## Act 2 Spike Talks about the New "Citizens league" -Max notices that Minia and Jax seems to be fused with 2 complete different Cyber.Beast at the same time and tells Airiona I thought that wasn't possible. + +Spike: It's been a week/month since The Cyvolter officially created CyNet/CyTek(named after the tech Max created) everyone is calling it the citizens league. + +Max notices that Minia and Jax seems to be fused with 2 completely different Cyber.Beast at the same time and tells Airiona I thought that wasn't possible. Airiona tells Max that they are Xybrids that they have two tails so they can use two cyber.beast at a time. She explain in further detail how it works. From aea6a4010c3e447a7d913717b096d5ec9932c5ad Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Thu, 4 Apr 2019 08:36:49 -0400 Subject: [PATCH 118/124] Notes describing how and what sparks the civil war --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 2 ++ 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index d2526c8..033998e 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -18,6 +18,8 @@ Harmony is enraged by this and charges in to attack Kyshumu. Kyshumu thinks she is trying to help him and tells her to stand down that he has everything in control Avis realizes that she is not going after Airiona but rather Kyshumu he tells her to stop and jumps in front with his arms open. She barely moves her hand out of the way but it is not enough as the energy from the hand is enough to obliterate the left side of his head. She apologizes saying that she tried to stop or avoid him but could not. This makes things worst as she goes berserk and Kyshumu and Xenos must work together Harmony to stop her. + +- Kyshumu's daugther killed he blames Xenos and the Cyvolters and declares war against CyTek after Airiona is arrested to make and example of her for the rest of the Cyvolters who has been chaotic to this point - This is Xenos' last season before he announces his retirement From ac4f6c6ddaee1cb6c3599cf96b3d92e0404a2c35 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Thu, 4 Apr 2019 16:30:25 -0400 Subject: [PATCH 119/124] Note events leading to Renet Citizens losing trust Kyshumu's inability to cut the tails of other Cybervators and preferring to kill them actually foreshadows events from his past that ultimatlly caused and effect the current events in the story Write what you know: Kyhsumu revoking protection relates to real world event in which countries threatened to not protect smaller countries if they comply in voting. But in the Cyber.Universe this applies to each individuals sense each Citizen serves as there own country --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 6 ++++++ 1 file changed, 6 insertions(+) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 033998e..edacf89 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -21,6 +21,10 @@ - Kyshumu's daugther killed he blames Xenos and the Cyvolters and declares war against CyTek after Airiona is arrested to make and example of her for the rest of the Cyvolters who has been chaotic to this point +- Kyshumu is unable to cut off the tails of Cyvolters he asks the NRA for permission to kill members of as the fact that the Cyvolters are able and willing to kill has givin them an advantage + +- Kyshumu revokes ReNet protection from Citizens that is assumed to be aiding or supporting the Cyvolters in anyway. This backfires instead further angering the citizens. + - This is Xenos' last season before he announces his retirement - Xenos gives a retirement speech before declaring himself the leader of the Cyvolters (maybe save this for next season) @@ -46,6 +50,8 @@ } if(they win) Xenos: even though we lost today I wont give up on helping the Cyvolters mission of creating a world with equal opportunity for all. We have technology but sometime society needs that final push + Xenos: Cyvolters have become large in number but needs to become unified in voice + Xenos: From this moment forward I will the lead the Cyvolters. Change can happen, has happened and, will happen. - In the second season years later the Cyvolters is now considered the Citizens league begin to do a type of initiation or point system in which Cybervators(not citizens) must attack "bad" cybervators in order to become a Cyvolter -- it is a rule created by Citizens. From 8443a3a7f0d0dd142a8fe47c41eb3e4405bdc865 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Mon, 8 Apr 2019 10:37:17 -0400 Subject: [PATCH 120/124] Write what you know Added events that take place leading to the revolution which is base on the homestead strike --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 25 ++++++++++++++++++------- 1 file changed, 18 insertions(+), 7 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index edacf89..02d3212 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -11,6 +11,13 @@ - Cybervator: Minia, Jax, Airiona, Xenos, Ace, Harmony - Chief: Kyshumu, Alex + +- Max's altruism becomes contagious and eventually becomes the basis for the Cyvolters identity at this point Max either accepts or realize that he is a Cyvolter or she is shown helping another cyvolter + + - Max or someone that max helps someone or max saying its is solely for the purpose making him a stronger opponent strong enough to be a challenge for him in the future + + - Someone joins forces with Max because they want the chance to fight someone even stronger than that protagonist in hopes of climbing up in ranking + - Minia learns that her mother is Torrey around the same time Max tells her his mother is torrey or learns that his mother is torrey or vice versa - Speeding Bullet is discovered to be Airiona during the tournament a fight ensues between Airiona and Kyshumu. Airiona is defeated Kyshumu. @@ -19,6 +26,10 @@ This makes things worst as she goes berserk and Kyshumu and Xenos must work together Harmony to stop her. +### Part 2 +Based on The Battle of Homestead: https://battleofhomestead.org/bhf/the-battle-of-homestead/ +- Despite the fact that the NRA and CNS has now made it legal for citizens to compete in the between ReNet has denied them this furthurs tensions between ReNet and its members + - Kyshumu's daugther killed he blames Xenos and the Cyvolters and declares war against CyTek after Airiona is arrested to make and example of her for the rest of the Cyvolters who has been chaotic to this point - Kyshumu is unable to cut off the tails of Cyvolters he asks the NRA for permission to kill members of as the fact that the Cyvolters are able and willing to kill has givin them an advantage @@ -55,19 +66,19 @@ Xenos: From this moment forward I will the lead the Cyvolters. Change can happen, has happened and, will happen. - In the second season years later the Cyvolters is now considered the Citizens league begin to do a type of initiation or point system in which Cybervators(not citizens) must attack "bad" cybervators in order to become a Cyvolter -- it is a rule created by Citizens. - - The Cyvolters increase in sizes has become a detriment to their initial values + - Every accept Kyshumu(think it was Xenos) thinks it was Airiona a Cybervator that killed Leona who they think did it in order to join + - The Cyvolters increase in size has become a detriment to their initial values - Since anyone can be a Cyvolter they are doing whatever they want and claim to be apart of the Cyvolters, because of this the Cyvolters realize they need a leader to lay a framework and places that duty upon Xenos. - Airiona is upset by the way the other cyvolter are acting she realizes that citizens can be just as bad as cybervator - This changes Airiona strengthens belief that the majority of of Cybervators are stupid instead all humans are. Xenos tells her that it actually mob mentality and selfish preservation that cause people to act this way. people don't want to be alone so they follow what they may think is the masses no matter how wrong it maybe to protect their self - -- Max's altruism becomes contagious and eventually becomes the basis for the Cyvolters identity at this point Max either accepts or realize that he is a Cyvolter or she is shown helping another cyvolter - - - Max or someone that max helps someone or max saying its is solely for the purpose making him a stronger opponent strong enough to be a challenge for him in the future - - - Someone joins forces with Max because they want the chance to fight someone even stronger than that protagonist in hopes of climbing up in ranking + - After this incident the Cyvolter are seen as a massive threat and suspends the CNS in order to turn focus on bringing down the Cyvolters. This leaves many citizens with out a source if income which causes more citizens to join + - This prompts Xenos to delare himself the leader of the Cyvolters in order to set it ground rules(not killing). Cybervator who mentored under Xenos begens to join the Cyvolters bring their friends along with them +- Citizens think Airiona hides her identity in order to disguise her self as a citizen and that by killing a cybervator she was allowed to join +- Maybe after Xenos dies Citizens and cyvolters decides that any Subnets that are not with them are against them which leads most of BluNet to side with the Cyvolters +- Kyshumu is "assainated" allowing Tomasina to become Interim Chief who is also a Cyvolters who works to end the conflict with the Cyvolters pining the blame Eclipse alone. She also promises to allow citizens to join the CNS under ReNet ## Act 1 From e767f9f0ad143e0e860da5becd8029fced92b4b4 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 9 Apr 2019 08:12:24 -0400 Subject: [PATCH 121/124] Update readme.md --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 02d3212..f1ede25 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -27,7 +27,7 @@ This makes things worst as she goes berserk and Kyshumu and Xenos must work together Harmony to stop her. ### Part 2 -Based on The Battle of Homestead: https://battleofhomestead.org/bhf/the-battle-of-homestead/ +Based on The Battle of Homestead: https://battleofhomestead.org/bhf/the-battle-of-homestead/, https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Homestead_strike - Despite the fact that the NRA and CNS has now made it legal for citizens to compete in the between ReNet has denied them this furthurs tensions between ReNet and its members - Kyshumu's daugther killed he blames Xenos and the Cyvolters and declares war against CyTek after Airiona is arrested to make and example of her for the rest of the Cyvolters who has been chaotic to this point From 1b922933110a3fd27893aa3d0db645da316391d4 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Fri, 12 Apr 2019 15:56:03 -0400 Subject: [PATCH 122/124] added football war as reference --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index f1ede25..cd6eac6 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -27,7 +27,7 @@ This makes things worst as she goes berserk and Kyshumu and Xenos must work together Harmony to stop her. ### Part 2 -Based on The Battle of Homestead: https://battleofhomestead.org/bhf/the-battle-of-homestead/, https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Homestead_strike +Based on The Battle of Homestead [[1](https://battleofhomestead.org/bhf/the-battle-of-homestead/)], [[2](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Homestead_strike)] and the the Football war by which the war is triggered by a sporting match[[1](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Football_War)] - Despite the fact that the NRA and CNS has now made it legal for citizens to compete in the between ReNet has denied them this furthurs tensions between ReNet and its members - Kyshumu's daugther killed he blames Xenos and the Cyvolters and declares war against CyTek after Airiona is arrested to make and example of her for the rest of the Cyvolters who has been chaotic to this point From c6c7fa45f6dc12c4a8164097171f56e2e24ef07e Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Wed, 8 May 2019 17:20:35 -0400 Subject: [PATCH 123/124] Added thematic quote about leadership --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 2 ++ 1 file changed, 2 insertions(+) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index cd6eac6..7610cfa 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -43,6 +43,8 @@ Based on The Battle of Homestead [[1](https://battleofhomestead.org/bhf/the-batt Xenos: I want the future to be a world were there are no distinctions between citizen and cybervator one in which everyone is a cybervator in their on right. Xenos: Up to this point Cyvolters has not had a leader. Because of this they have done some things I am not proud. many if which goes against the vision/values of the Cyvolter. Without a leader the Cyvolters will become nothing more than an organization resembling a chicken without a head. + + A group who is not beholden to a leader will fall into chaos and a leader not beholden to their people will fall into evil It may be better if this show by using each person as an example rather than told { From 079c8ddf8294c33efb2037b454f7852414099fe1 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Sheldon Lloyd Date: Tue, 25 Jun 2019 22:53:32 -0400 Subject: [PATCH 124/124] moved part 2 to Cyber.Beast(CC) Branch --- comic/makkusu/readme.md | 56 ----------------------------------------- 1 file changed, 56 deletions(-) diff --git a/comic/makkusu/readme.md b/comic/makkusu/readme.md index 7610cfa..e6ace97 100644 --- a/comic/makkusu/readme.md +++ b/comic/makkusu/readme.md @@ -26,62 +26,6 @@ This makes things worst as she goes berserk and Kyshumu and Xenos must work together Harmony to stop her. -### Part 2 -Based on The Battle of Homestead [[1](https://battleofhomestead.org/bhf/the-battle-of-homestead/)], [[2](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Homestead_strike)] and the the Football war by which the war is triggered by a sporting match[[1](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Football_War)] -- Despite the fact that the NRA and CNS has now made it legal for citizens to compete in the between ReNet has denied them this furthurs tensions between ReNet and its members - -- Kyshumu's daugther killed he blames Xenos and the Cyvolters and declares war against CyTek after Airiona is arrested to make and example of her for the rest of the Cyvolters who has been chaotic to this point - -- Kyshumu is unable to cut off the tails of Cyvolters he asks the NRA for permission to kill members of as the fact that the Cyvolters are able and willing to kill has givin them an advantage - -- Kyshumu revokes ReNet protection from Citizens that is assumed to be aiding or supporting the Cyvolters in anyway. This backfires instead further angering the citizens. - -- This is Xenos' last season before he announces his retirement - - - Xenos gives a retirement speech before declaring himself the leader of the Cyvolters (maybe save this for next season) - - Xenos: I want the future to be a world were there are no distinctions between citizen and cybervator one in which everyone is a cybervator in their on right. - - Xenos: Up to this point Cyvolters has not had a leader. Because of this they have done some things I am not proud. many if which goes against the vision/values of the Cyvolter. Without a leader the Cyvolters will become nothing more than an organization resembling a chicken without a head. - - A group who is not beholden to a leader will fall into chaos and a leader not beholden to their people will fall into evil - - It may be better if this show by using each person as an example rather than told { - - Xenos: - - Right now There are 4 types of Cyvolters - - The malicious type that just like finding people to take down the worst of them all. - - The type that doesn't want to look like the bad guy so they attack others to prove that they are not bad - - The one that has reformed and feels it is their duty to fix/save others. This type that does not want others to attack you so they prefer to warn you of repercussions - - Then there ones that follows(majority) the crowd doing what seems to be what's cool. This type is easily embarrassed and just wants others to fit in - - } - if(they win) Xenos: even though we lost today I wont give up on helping the Cyvolters mission of creating a world with equal opportunity for all. We have technology but sometime society needs that final push - - Xenos: Cyvolters have become large in number but needs to become unified in voice - - Xenos: From this moment forward I will the lead the Cyvolters. Change can happen, has happened and, will happen. - -- In the second season years later the Cyvolters is now considered the Citizens league begin to do a type of initiation or point system in which Cybervators(not citizens) must attack "bad" cybervators in order to become a Cyvolter -- it is a rule created by Citizens. - - Every accept Kyshumu(think it was Xenos) thinks it was Airiona a Cybervator that killed Leona who they think did it in order to join - - The Cyvolters increase in size has become a detriment to their initial values - - Since anyone can be a Cyvolter they are doing whatever they want and claim to be apart of the Cyvolters, because of this the Cyvolters realize they need a leader to lay a framework and places that duty upon Xenos. - - Airiona is upset by the way the other cyvolter are acting she realizes that citizens can be just as bad as cybervator - - This changes Airiona strengthens belief that the majority of of Cybervators are stupid instead all humans are. Xenos tells her that it actually mob mentality and selfish preservation that cause people to act this way. people don't want to be alone so they follow what they may think is the masses no matter how wrong it maybe to protect their self - - After this incident the Cyvolter are seen as a massive threat and suspends the CNS in order to turn focus on bringing down the Cyvolters. This leaves many citizens with out a source if income which causes more citizens to join - - This prompts Xenos to delare himself the leader of the Cyvolters in order to set it ground rules(not killing). Cybervator who mentored under Xenos begens to join the Cyvolters bring their friends along with them - -- Citizens think Airiona hides her identity in order to disguise her self as a citizen and that by killing a cybervator she was allowed to join - -- Maybe after Xenos dies Citizens and cyvolters decides that any Subnets that are not with them are against them which leads most of BluNet to side with the Cyvolters - -- Kyshumu is "assainated" allowing Tomasina to become Interim Chief who is also a Cyvolters who works to end the conflict with the Cyvolters pining the blame Eclipse alone. She also promises to allow citizens to join the CNS under ReNet - ## Act 1 ### 1. Ordinary World